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-->'''Zorian:''' Well, Zorian, you wanted a normal life, now you’re having money problems. What could be more normal than that?
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'''Zorian''': *''innocently''* Didn't you know? A flawlessly cast force spell is effectively invisible. It took me quite a while to achieve this, but I'm sure a master combat mage like yourself mastered this years ago.
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'''Zorian''': *''innocently''* ''[innocently]'' Didn't you know? A flawlessly cast force spell is effectively invisible. It took me quite a while to achieve this, but I'm sure a master combat mage like yourself mastered this years ago.
* The Imperial Orb is guarded by a divinely-empowered hydra, and it takes a great deal of effort for Zach and Zorian to kill it the first time. Eventually, they discover that they can use a divine dagger in the orb to bind the hydra's loyalty to one of them. Zach wins the bet and gains the right... at which point the house-sized hydra starts following him around like a puppy. Zach names her "Princess."
* Once they're back in the real world, Zorian barely manages to wake Zach up a minute or two early, saving him from Red Robe's assassination attempt. There's still a lot of damage to the Noveda mansion, though, and that causes questions. Zach insists that Zorian tell people he wasn't home at the time because he was out drinking and dancing.
* In Zach's sole point of view chapter, he despairs that Zorian can't die because "[[CluelessChickMagnet there are so many girls trying to get into his pants!]]"
* Zorian had to give up the Imperial Orb in the final battle, which means he has no convenient dimensional storage space to hide Princess. She's starting to attract quite a bit of attention just from wandering around in the forests outside Cyoria. Worse, the flock of ironbeaks that Zorian managed to subvert have taken to following her around scavenging on her scraps, which of course just makes her ''more'' conspicuous.
* Zorian got a little too used to having unlimited money in the time loop, and grouses that he has to actually cut back on his spending now that he's finally escaped.
* The Imperial Orb is guarded by a divinely-empowered hydra, and it takes a great deal of effort for Zach and Zorian to kill it the first time. Eventually, they discover that they can use a divine dagger in the orb to bind the hydra's loyalty to one of them. Zach wins the bet and gains the right... at which point the house-sized hydra starts following him around like a puppy. Zach names her "Princess."
* Once they're back in the real world, Zorian barely manages to wake Zach up a minute or two early, saving him from Red Robe's assassination attempt. There's still a lot of damage to the Noveda mansion, though, and that causes questions. Zach insists that Zorian tell people he wasn't home at the time because he was out drinking and dancing.
* In Zach's sole point of view chapter, he despairs that Zorian can't die because "[[CluelessChickMagnet there are so many girls trying to get into his pants!]]"
* Zorian had to give up the Imperial Orb in the final battle, which means he has no convenient dimensional storage space to hide Princess. She's starting to attract quite a bit of attention just from wandering around in the forests outside Cyoria. Worse, the flock of ironbeaks that Zorian managed to subvert have taken to following her around scavenging on her scraps, which of course just makes her ''more'' conspicuous.
* Zorian got a little too used to having unlimited money in the time loop, and grouses that he has to actually cut back on his spending now that he's finally escaped.
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* In [[https://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/56/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 56]], Zach is training Zorian on various forms of combat magic when Zorian says he could perhaps teach Zach something in turn. The older boy is suitably skeptical that Zorian would know any form of combat magic that Zach, who has been looping for decades, is unaware of. Zorian responds by casting [[ChekhovsGun the most basic of combat spells]] and a rock seemingly explodes by itself.
-->'''Zorian''': I cast an invisible magic missile at it.\\
'''Zach''': Invisible magic missile?\\
'''Zorian''': *''innocently''* Didn't you know? A flawlessly cast force spell is effectively invisible. It took me quite a while to achieve this, but I'm sure a master combat mage like yourself mastered this years ago.
-->'''Zorian''': I cast an invisible magic missile at it.\\
'''Zach''': Invisible magic missile?\\
'''Zorian''': *''innocently''* Didn't you know? A flawlessly cast force spell is effectively invisible. It took me quite a while to achieve this, but I'm sure a master combat mage like yourself mastered this years ago.
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* In [[http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/5/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 5]], during Zorian's second loop, he is sitting in class trying to figure out how to send an anonymous warning about [[spoiler:the coming invasion]] when [[KidAnova Benisek]] looks over his shoulder and reads what he is writing. Two days later, after Benisek has convinced the entire class Zorian has a secret crush on someone, Neolu (another classmate) gives him a list of books to look for. Books on how to send messages and gifts that couldn't be identified to their sender.
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* In [[http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/8/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 8]], when [[spoiler:Zach Noveda]] Zach Noveda comes up with a theory to explain why [[spoiler:Zorian]] Zorian is behaving differently than he did in [[spoiler:prior reverts]], prior reverts, the latter's reaction is ''priceless.''
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* In [[http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/17/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 17]], after being told he is [[spoiler:an empath]], Zorian tries to get a second opinion from Imaya Kuroshka. She asks him a series of questions about [[spoiler:his ability to detect moods]], which culminates in him alluding to [[spoiler:the 'pressure']] that makes him so uncomfortable in crowds.
-->'''Imaya:''' That's... an interesting problem. Tell me, is [[spoiler:the pressure]] constant or does it varies according to some criteria?\\
* In [[http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/17/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 17]], after being told he is [[spoiler:an empath]], Zorian tries to get a second opinion from Imaya Kuroshka. She asks him a series of questions about [[spoiler:his ability to detect moods]], which culminates in him alluding to [[spoiler:the 'pressure']] that makes him so uncomfortable in crowds.
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* In [[http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/17/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 17]], after being told he is[[spoiler:an empath]], an empath, Zorian tries to get a second opinion from Imaya Kuroshka. She asks him a series of questions about [[spoiler:his his ability to detect moods]], moods, which culminates in him alluding to [[spoiler:the 'pressure']] the 'pressure' that makes him so uncomfortable in crowds.
-->'''Imaya:''' That's... an interesting problem. Tell me, is[[spoiler:the pressure]] the pressure constant or does it varies according to some criteria?\\
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* In [[https://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/51/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 51]], Zorian attempts to submit an anonymous report of Sudomir's activities through the church. Unfortunately, bureaucracy being what it is, he's told the report will likely take several months to go anywhere, which of course is too long to fit in the time loop. While he's there, he takes the opportunity to ask the priest about necromancy; specifically, why someone might want to imprison thousands of souls in a necromantic artefact.
--> Batak gave him a blank look, glanced to the side of the table where Zorian's sealed letter was innocently resting, then gave Zorian another blank look. Then he placed the letter in front of him again and wrote 'URGENT' on top of the envelope in big, blocky letters before setting it aside again.
--> Batak gave him a blank look, glanced to the side of the table where Zorian's sealed letter was innocently resting, then gave Zorian another blank look. Then he placed the letter in front of him again and wrote 'URGENT' on top of the envelope in big, blocky letters before setting it aside again.
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* In [[https://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/6/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 6]], Byrn tries to help [[LeaveMeAlone Zorian]] with his research question.
-->"The academy library-"\\
"First thing I tried," Zorian sighed. "I'm not stupid, you know?"\\
The boy rolled his eyes at him. "Did you search for the books yourself or did you ask the librarian to help you? Mother works as a librarian, and they have these special divination spells that let them find things in minutes that would take you decades if you search by title and skimming alone."\\
[[DumbStruck Zorian opened his mouth before closing it.]] Ask the librarian for help, huh? Okay, maybe he ''is'' stupid.
-->"The academy library-"\\
"First thing I tried," Zorian sighed. "I'm not stupid, you know?"\\
The boy rolled his eyes at him. "Did you search for the books yourself or did you ask the librarian to help you? Mother works as a librarian, and they have these special divination spells that let them find things in minutes that would take you decades if you search by title and skimming alone."\\
[[DumbStruck Zorian opened his mouth before closing it.]] Ask the librarian for help, huh? Okay, maybe he ''is'' stupid.
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* After one too many repetitions of [[GoodMorningCrono "Good Morning, Zorian!"]] from his sister, [[https://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/13/Mother-of-Learning Zorian lies very still, just long enough for her to start getting worried]] -- [[spoiler:then he screams as loud as he can into her face.]]
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* In [[http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/11/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 11]], Zorian (remembering what he was told about his being standoffish and unapproachable) decides to be nicer to his classmates, starting by answering Akoja's question about where he was yesterday instead of blowing her off. He then calls her arrogant almost immediately afterwards.
-->Well, so much for being nice to Akoja! She stomped off soon after that, shooting him a nasty glare.\\
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Resolving to be more understanding towards people was hard.
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* In [[http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/8/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 8]], when [[spoiler:Zach Noveda]] comes up with a theory to explain why [[spoiler:Zorian is behaving differently than he did in prior reverts]].
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* In [[http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2961893/17/Mother-of-Learning Chapter 17]], after being told he is [[spoiler:an empath]], Zorian tries to get a second opinion from Imaya Kuroshka. She asks him a series of questions about [[spoiler:his ability to detect moods]], which culminates in him [[spoiler:mentioning the 'pressure' that seems to paralyze him when he is in crowds]].
-->'''Imaya:''' That's... an interesting problem. Tell me, is [[spoiler:the pressure]] constant or does it varies according to some criteria?\\
'''Zorian:''' It varies. [[spoiler:The more people there are in a crowd and the more densely they're packed]] the stronger it is. It's also stronger if [[spoiler:the crowd]] is...\\
[''[[{{Beat}} Zorian pauses]] as [[FridgeLogic realization dawns]]'']\\
'''Imaya:''' Yes? If [[spoiler:the crowd]] is what?\\
'''Zorian:''' ...[[spoiler:emotionally charged]] for some reason.
-->'''Imaya:''' That's... an interesting problem. Tell me, is [[spoiler:the pressure]] constant or does it varies according to some criteria?\\
'''Zorian:''' It varies. [[spoiler:The more people there are in a crowd and the more densely they're packed]] the stronger it is. It's also stronger if [[spoiler:the crowd]] is...\\
[''[[{{Beat}} Zorian pauses]] as [[FridgeLogic realization dawns]]'']\\
'''Imaya:''' Yes? If [[spoiler:the crowd]] is what?\\
'''Zorian:''' ...[[spoiler:emotionally charged]] for some reason.
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-->Apparently if you call such advice ''Forbidden Love: Mysteries of Scarlet Letters Revealed'' and phrase it as relationship advice you can get straight past the usual censorship such topics would normally be subjected to.
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