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* PronouncingMyNameForYou: A Bolian warrant officer mispronounces Captain Kanril Eleya's surname as "kan-rile", and she corrects him that it's "kan-rill".
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* {{Epigraph}}: A line from Creator/IsaacAsimov's ''Literature/{{Foundation}}'' that apparently appears on the ''Bajor'''s dedication plaque.
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* DreamIntro: This story and the original story''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}'' both open in Captain Kanril Eleya's recurring FlashbackNightmare of her being near-fatally stabbed defending her ship against a boarding action ten years earlier.
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[[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10805834/1/Shakedown-Shenanigans "Shakedown Shenanigans"]] is a ''VideoGame/StarTrekOnline'' fanfic by Tropers/StarSword, written for [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?t=1267581 Unofficial LC #4: "The Return of the Revenge of the Unofficial LC of DOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!"]] on the ''STO'' forums.
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[[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10805834/1/Shakedown-Shenanigans "Shakedown Shenanigans"]] is a ''VideoGame/StarTrekOnline'' fanfic by Tropers/StarSword, written for [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?t=1267581 [[http://www.arcgames.com/en/forums/startrekonline/#/discussion/1169516/unofficial-lc-4-the-return-of-the-revenge-of-the-unofficial-lc-of-dooooommmmmm Unofficial LC #4: "The Return of the Revenge of the Unofficial LC of DOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!"]] on the ''STO'' forums.
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->''"I'm not a scientist, and I'm not a diplomat either. I'm a soldier, plain and simple. You point me at a battlefield, I will give you a victory. This is what I do, Admiral. This is what I do."''
-->-- '''Captain Kanril Eleya'''
-->-- '''Captain Kanril Eleya'''
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* TaughtByExperience: Eleya openly compares her situation to the ActionPrologue of ''Film/StarTrekGenerations'', where the ''Enterprise''-B is launched incomplete with catastrophic results, and takes steps to ensure that doesn't happen.
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[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10805834/1/Shakedown-Shenanigans "Shakedown Shenanigans"]] is a ''VideoGame/StarTrekOnline'' fanfic by Tropers/StarSword, written for [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?t=1267581 Unofficial LC #4: "The Return of the Revenge of the Unofficial LC of DOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!"]] on the ''STO'' forums.
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* CourtMartialed: Captain Kanril mentions in passing that she was court-martialed for the loss of her previous command the USS ''George Hammond'', but she was cleared.
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* RealAwardFictionalCharacter: Eleya cites Vice Admiral Harnett from Starfleet Science as a 2392 Nobel Prize in Physics recipient, but considers him ArmchairMilitary.
-->"Congratulations. Have you ever fired your service weapon outside the range?"
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* SpaceIsCold: Averted. The bottle of Bajoran springwine used in the christening ceremony for the ''Bajor'' is said to flash-boil upon shattering against the hull.
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* NamedAfterSomebodyFamous: The shuttle ''Al-Birjandi'' is named after [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Al-Birjandi a 16th-century Persian astronomer]].
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* {{Epigraph}}: A line from Creator/IsaacAsimov's ''Literature/{{Foundation}}'' that apparently appears on the ''Bajor'''s dedication plaque.
-->"To succeed, planning alone is insufficient. One must improvise as well."
-->"To succeed, planning alone is insufficient. One must improvise as well."
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* ArchaicWeaponForAnAdvancedAge[=/=]RetroUpgrade: At this point the ''Galaxy''-class is fifty years old. The ''Bajor'''s construction series is mentioned to be a limited run of upgraded hulls to replace combat losses from the ongoing Federation-Klingon War. Ablative armor has been added, the superstructure has been {{technobabble}}-reinforced, the firepower, range, and speed have been increased, and the ship carries quantum torpedoes instead of photons.
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* ArchaicWeaponForAnAdvancedAge[=/=]RetroUpgrade: ArchaicWeaponForAnAdvancedAge[=/=]EnhancedArchaicWeapon: At this point the ''Galaxy''-class is fifty years old. The ''Bajor'''s construction series is mentioned to be a limited run of upgraded hulls to replace combat losses from the ongoing Federation-Klingon War. Ablative armor has been added, the superstructure has been {{technobabble}}-reinforced, the firepower, range, and speed have been increased, and the ship carries quantum torpedoes instead of photons.
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In August 2409, a freshly promoted Captain Kanril Eleya travels to the Vulcan system to collect her new command, the ''Galaxy''-class starship USS ''Bajor''. HilarityEnsues as she settles in.
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!!Tropes:
* AlliterativeName: Dr. Warragul Wirrpanda's middle name is "William".
* ArchaicWeaponForAnAdvancedAge[=/=]RetroUpgrade: At this point the ''Galaxy''-class is fifty years old. The ''Bajor'''s construction series is mentioned to be a limited run of upgraded hulls to replace combat losses from the ongoing Federation-Klingon War. Ablative armor has been added, the superstructure has been {{technobabble}}-reinforced, the firepower, range, and speed have been increased, and the ship carries quantum torpedoes instead of photons.
* ArmchairMilitary: When a Starfleet Science admiral observing the launch complains about [[spoiler:Eleya going gallivanting off to rescue a freighter instead of letting somebody who isn't on a shakedown cruise handle it]], Eleya notes his academic record (quite impressive, actually, author of 32 papers and winner of a Nobel Prize), then pointedly asks him if he's ever had to fire his service weapon outside the range.
-->'''Eleya:''' I’m not a scientist, Admiral, and I’m not a diplomat, either. I’m a soldier, plain and simple. You point me at a battlefield, I will give you a victory. This is what I do, Admiral. This is what I do.
* BroadStrokes: [[spoiler:The end of the fic incorporates a truncated version of the early Fed mission [[http://sto.gamepedia.com/Mission:_Stranded_in_Space "Stranded in Space"]].]]
* CallBack:
** Rear Admiral Taurik, the commandant of 40 Eridani A Starfleet Construction Yards, is the same Vulcan who appeared in [[Series/StarTrekTheNextGeneration TNG]]: "[[Recap/StarTrekTheNextGenerationS7E14LowerDecks Lower Decks]]".
** The fic references the launch of the ''Enterprise''-B in ''Film/StarTrekGenerations'' about halfway through, in the context of [[TakeThat how stupid it was to launch the ship before it was fully finished]]. Eleya sarcastically asks Rear Admiral Taurik if the remaining quantum torpedoes are [[MemeticMutation going to be delivered Tuesday]], and then tells him get her a full load by launch or she's not leaving port. Taurik thinks she's paranoid but she points out that over 350 people died in that incident because San Francisco Fleet Yards was dragging its feet. [[spoiler:When the inevitable happens, the ship is fully armed, and fully fueled thanks to Eleya bribing the shipyard's fueling manager with booze offscreen.]]
* CallForward: T'Var mentions to Eleya that she's scheduled to take the promotion exam next month and that she's finished some command-level courses. This refers back to her leaving the ship in ''Bait and Switch'' to take her first command.
* ChekhovsGun: Eleya's customs declaration when she arrives at Vulcan includes three cases of springwine. One bottle is used in the launch ceremony, [[spoiler:and one case was used to bribe the shipyard fueling manager into giving the ''Bajor'' a full tank before launch]].
* DontCallMeSir: A RunningGag in the ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}''-{{verse}} at this point. Eleya has to correct people to call her "ma'am" or "Captain" three times on-screen.
* FantasticRacism: The old ElvesVersusDwarves rivalry between Vulcans and Andorians rears its head when a Vulcan customs agent decides to be {{obstructive|Bureaucrat}}.
-->'''Tess:''' Damn pointy-ear’s probably jealous we’re headed for the front lines.\\
'''Eleya:''' Vulcans don’t get jealous, Tess.\\
'''Tess:''' Pfft. Oh, yes, they do. [[NoodleIncident Don’t ask me how I know, though.]]
* FlashbackNightmare: Eleya's {{recurring dream|s}} about being stabbed fending off an Orion BoardingParty makes a reappearance.
* GreatOffscreenWar: The current 40 Eri shipyard is built on the same site as a Vulcan yard that was destroyed by the Romulans during the Earth-Romulan War 250 years earlier. The ongoing Federation-Klingon War also gets mentioned as the reason for the ''Bajor'''s construction but doesn't play a role in the plot.
* IHaveManyNames: The fact that Tess's name is different in her native language as opposed to Imperial Andorii causes some problems with a Vulcan customs officer when the name she gives him doesn't match the name on her travel papers.
* {{Interquel}}: Set between ''Fanfic/FromBajorToTheBlack''/"Fanfic/TheUniverseDoesntCheat" and ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}''.
* LocationThemeNaming: The ''Bajor'' is part of a lot of 28 ''Galaxy''-class starships, all of which are named after Federation homeworlds. Andoria, Cait, Earth, Vulcan, Trill, Coridan, Benzar, and Zakdorn are also mentioned.
* PatronSaint: Before piloting the ''Bajor'' out of drydock for the shakedown cruise, Lieutenant Park Jin-Soo kisses a medallion of [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joseph_of_Cupertino Saint Joseph of Cupertino]], the patron saint of pilots and astronauts in real life.
* ProperlyParanoid: {{Downplayed}}. Taurik thinks Eleya's being paranoid by insisting that the ''Bajor'' be 100% operational before leaving dock, calling the fiasco at the start of ''Film/StarTrekGenerations'' a very-large-number-to-one occurrence. [[spoiler:Eleya's sort of right, but the ''Bajor'' technically didn't need to be the ship that responded to the distress call from the SS ''Azura''. Eleya was just stressed and wanted to shoot something.]]
* ScrewTheRulesIHaveMoney: Offscreen, Eleya bribed Taurik's fueling manager with a case of springwine to get a full tank of fuel.
* ShoutOut:
** When Bynam test-fires one of the impulse engines it lets off a high-pitched squeal that he calls the "baby's cry", saying it'll go away by the end of the shakedown cruise. This is borrowed from ''The Literature/BlackFleetCrisis: Before the Storm''.
** At the end of the fic, pleased with the ''Bajor'''s performance, Eleya strokes the wall and whispers, "That's my girl. That's my good girl." Borrowed from the end of the ''Series/{{Firefly}}'' pilot, where Kaylee did that after [[spoiler:the dramatic escape from the Reavers]].
* SnipeHunt: A couple of classic US military snipe hunts are borrowed. Somebody got Crewman Apprentice Miq’doh Drohhl to do an "echo check"[[note]]The schmuck is told that if he yells at the engine just right, it'll resonate.[[/note]] on the impulse engine when Bynam was test-firing it, and Eleya refers to a NoodleIncident from when she was in the Militia where a corporal tried to get her to "blow the DCA".[[note]]The schmuck is told that the DCA is a kind of air horn that you're supposed to blow before the ship leaves port. The DCA, or Damage Control Assistant, is a junior officer.[[/note]]
-->"They had some trouble finding his front teeth after the next sparring session."
* TakeThat: Directed at ''Film/StarTrekGenerations'' about how stupid it was to launch an unfinished ship.
* TemptingFate: {{Lampshaded}} with a NeverTellMeTheOdds statement from Eleya. [[spoiler:She's right.]]
--> '''Eleya''': Would ''you'' like to explain another ''Enterprise''-B fiasco to Starfleet Command? Over 350 people ''died'' because the San Fran yard dragged its feet on the final touches.\\
'''Taurik:''' That was a series of freak coincidences. The odds of all the required conditions—\\
'''Eleya:''' Let me explain the Prophets’ sense of humor to you, sir. The higher anyone says the odds are ''against'' something happening, the greater the likelihood it is ''going'' to happen.\\
'''Taurik:''' ''({{beat}})'' That is most illogical, Captain.\\
'''T'Var:''' Illogical, but true.
* TokenReligiousTeammate: ''Bajor'' conn officer Park Jin-Soo is apparently a Roman Catholic (he kisses a medallion of Joseph of Cupertino before taking the ship out of drydock for the first time) and asks if Eleya has a problem with that. Eleya basically says that'd be hypocritical of her.
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In August 2409, a freshly promoted Captain Kanril Eleya travels to the Vulcan system to collect her new command, the ''Galaxy''-class starship USS ''Bajor''. HilarityEnsues as she settles in.
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!!Tropes:
* AlliterativeName: Dr. Warragul Wirrpanda's middle name is "William".
* ArchaicWeaponForAnAdvancedAge[=/=]RetroUpgrade: At this point the ''Galaxy''-class is fifty years old. The ''Bajor'''s construction series is mentioned to be a limited run of upgraded hulls to replace combat losses from the ongoing Federation-Klingon War. Ablative armor has been added, the superstructure has been {{technobabble}}-reinforced, the firepower, range, and speed have been increased, and the ship carries quantum torpedoes instead of photons.
* ArmchairMilitary: When a Starfleet Science admiral observing the launch complains about [[spoiler:Eleya going gallivanting off to rescue a freighter instead of letting somebody who isn't on a shakedown cruise handle it]], Eleya notes his academic record (quite impressive, actually, author of 32 papers and winner of a Nobel Prize), then pointedly asks him if he's ever had to fire his service weapon outside the range.
-->'''Eleya:''' I’m not a scientist, Admiral, and I’m not a diplomat, either. I’m a soldier, plain and simple. You point me at a battlefield, I will give you a victory. This is what I do, Admiral. This is what I do.
* BroadStrokes: [[spoiler:The end of the fic incorporates a truncated version of the early Fed mission [[http://sto.gamepedia.com/Mission:_Stranded_in_Space "Stranded in Space"]].]]
* CallBack:
** Rear Admiral Taurik, the commandant of 40 Eridani A Starfleet Construction Yards, is the same Vulcan who appeared in [[Series/StarTrekTheNextGeneration TNG]]: "[[Recap/StarTrekTheNextGenerationS7E14LowerDecks Lower Decks]]".
** The fic references the launch of the ''Enterprise''-B in ''Film/StarTrekGenerations'' about halfway through, in the context of [[TakeThat how stupid it was to launch the ship before it was fully finished]]. Eleya sarcastically asks Rear Admiral Taurik if the remaining quantum torpedoes are [[MemeticMutation going to be delivered Tuesday]], and then tells him get her a full load by launch or she's not leaving port. Taurik thinks she's paranoid but she points out that over 350 people died in that incident because San Francisco Fleet Yards was dragging its feet. [[spoiler:When the inevitable happens, the ship is fully armed, and fully fueled thanks to Eleya bribing the shipyard's fueling manager with booze offscreen.]]
* CallForward: T'Var mentions to Eleya that she's scheduled to take the promotion exam next month and that she's finished some command-level courses. This refers back to her leaving the ship in ''Bait and Switch'' to take her first command.
* ChekhovsGun: Eleya's customs declaration when she arrives at Vulcan includes three cases of springwine. One bottle is used in the launch ceremony, [[spoiler:and one case was used to bribe the shipyard fueling manager into giving the ''Bajor'' a full tank before launch]].
* DontCallMeSir: A RunningGag in the ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}''-{{verse}} at this point. Eleya has to correct people to call her "ma'am" or "Captain" three times on-screen.
* FantasticRacism: The old ElvesVersusDwarves rivalry between Vulcans and Andorians rears its head when a Vulcan customs agent decides to be {{obstructive|Bureaucrat}}.
-->'''Tess:''' Damn pointy-ear’s probably jealous we’re headed for the front lines.\\
'''Eleya:''' Vulcans don’t get jealous, Tess.\\
'''Tess:''' Pfft. Oh, yes, they do. [[NoodleIncident Don’t ask me how I know, though.]]
* FlashbackNightmare: Eleya's {{recurring dream|s}} about being stabbed fending off an Orion BoardingParty makes a reappearance.
* GreatOffscreenWar: The current 40 Eri shipyard is built on the same site as a Vulcan yard that was destroyed by the Romulans during the Earth-Romulan War 250 years earlier. The ongoing Federation-Klingon War also gets mentioned as the reason for the ''Bajor'''s construction but doesn't play a role in the plot.
* IHaveManyNames: The fact that Tess's name is different in her native language as opposed to Imperial Andorii causes some problems with a Vulcan customs officer when the name she gives him doesn't match the name on her travel papers.
* {{Interquel}}: Set between ''Fanfic/FromBajorToTheBlack''/"Fanfic/TheUniverseDoesntCheat" and ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}''.
* LocationThemeNaming: The ''Bajor'' is part of a lot of 28 ''Galaxy''-class starships, all of which are named after Federation homeworlds. Andoria, Cait, Earth, Vulcan, Trill, Coridan, Benzar, and Zakdorn are also mentioned.
* PatronSaint: Before piloting the ''Bajor'' out of drydock for the shakedown cruise, Lieutenant Park Jin-Soo kisses a medallion of [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joseph_of_Cupertino Saint Joseph of Cupertino]], the patron saint of pilots and astronauts in real life.
* ProperlyParanoid: {{Downplayed}}. Taurik thinks Eleya's being paranoid by insisting that the ''Bajor'' be 100% operational before leaving dock, calling the fiasco at the start of ''Film/StarTrekGenerations'' a very-large-number-to-one occurrence. [[spoiler:Eleya's sort of right, but the ''Bajor'' technically didn't need to be the ship that responded to the distress call from the SS ''Azura''. Eleya was just stressed and wanted to shoot something.]]
* ScrewTheRulesIHaveMoney: Offscreen, Eleya bribed Taurik's fueling manager with a case of springwine to get a full tank of fuel.
* ShoutOut:
** When Bynam test-fires one of the impulse engines it lets off a high-pitched squeal that he calls the "baby's cry", saying it'll go away by the end of the shakedown cruise. This is borrowed from ''The Literature/BlackFleetCrisis: Before the Storm''.
** At the end of the fic, pleased with the ''Bajor'''s performance, Eleya strokes the wall and whispers, "That's my girl. That's my good girl." Borrowed from the end of the ''Series/{{Firefly}}'' pilot, where Kaylee did that after [[spoiler:the dramatic escape from the Reavers]].
* SnipeHunt: A couple of classic US military snipe hunts are borrowed. Somebody got Crewman Apprentice Miq’doh Drohhl to do an "echo check"[[note]]The schmuck is told that if he yells at the engine just right, it'll resonate.[[/note]] on the impulse engine when Bynam was test-firing it, and Eleya refers to a NoodleIncident from when she was in the Militia where a corporal tried to get her to "blow the DCA".[[note]]The schmuck is told that the DCA is a kind of air horn that you're supposed to blow before the ship leaves port. The DCA, or Damage Control Assistant, is a junior officer.[[/note]]
-->"They had some trouble finding his front teeth after the next sparring session."
* TakeThat: Directed at ''Film/StarTrekGenerations'' about how stupid it was to launch an unfinished ship.
* TemptingFate: {{Lampshaded}} with a NeverTellMeTheOdds statement from Eleya. [[spoiler:She's right.]]
--> '''Eleya''': Would ''you'' like to explain another ''Enterprise''-B fiasco to Starfleet Command? Over 350 people ''died'' because the San Fran yard dragged its feet on the final touches.\\
'''Taurik:''' That was a series of freak coincidences. The odds of all the required conditions—\\
'''Eleya:''' Let me explain the Prophets’ sense of humor to you, sir. The higher anyone says the odds are ''against'' something happening, the greater the likelihood it is ''going'' to happen.\\
'''Taurik:''' ''({{beat}})'' That is most illogical, Captain.\\
'''T'Var:''' Illogical, but true.
* TokenReligiousTeammate: ''Bajor'' conn officer Park Jin-Soo is apparently a Roman Catholic (he kisses a medallion of Joseph of Cupertino before taking the ship out of drydock for the first time) and asks if Eleya has a problem with that. Eleya basically says that'd be hypocritical of her.
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