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* MythologyGag: A popular one in English-language ''Fates'' fic - Corrin's Hoshidian name is given as Kamui, the character's name in the Japanese version of ''Fates''.
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* CannonFodder: Several characters show up to be killed without much reason. Most notably, [[spoiler:Kaze and Rinkah]] appear in Chapter 3 and are killed within five hundred words of their arrival.
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** [[spoiler: As for the other royal siblings: Camilla and Leo would've helped Xander administer his rule while Elise moved to Hoshido and became LovedByAll Norhians and Hoshidans alike. Hinoka and Takumi would've been permanently scared after being mind controlled by Gunter and be left as [[EmptyShell Empty Shells]]. Sakura would visit them regularly but the two would never fully recover.]]

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** [[spoiler: As for the other royal siblings: Camilla and Leo would've helped Xander administer his rule while Elise moved to Hoshido and became LovedByAll Norhians and Hoshidans alike. Hinoka and Takumi would've been permanently scared scarred after being mind controlled by Gunter and be left as [[EmptyShell Empty Shells]]. Sakura would visit them regularly but the two would never fully recover.]]

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* AntiHero: Pretty much anyone [[GreyAndGrayMorality on both sides of the conflict]] can count. The majority of the cast has purely altruistic intentions, yet the majority of them also have a lot of unflattering characteristics that they have to deal with.
* AnyoneCanDie: Would it be ''Fire Emblem'' otherwise? By the time the story was declared dead, not counting people who died in the original game up to this point, [[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead Rinkah, Kaze]], [[InTheBack Lilith]], [[{{Patricide}} Kilma]], [[DyingDeclarationOfHate Flora]], [[BolivianArmyEnding Hana, Subaki]], [[KilledOffscreen Hinoka]] (although it was intended for her to turn out to be NotQuiteDead), [[SlashedThroat Selena]], [[KillItWithFire Hans]], and [[MysticalPlague Oboro]]]] all kicked the bucket. The Chapter 45 notes state that [[spoiler:Garon, Ryoma, Gunter, Nyx, and even Corrin]] would've died during the story.



* AntiHero: Pretty much anyone [[GreyAndGrayMorality on both sides of the conflict]] can count. The majority of the cast has purely altruistic intentions, yet the majority of them also have a lot of unflattering characteristics that they have to deal with.
* AnyoneCanDie: Would it be ''Fire Emblem'' otherwise? By the time the story was declared dead, not counting people who died in the original game up to this point, [[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead Rinkah, Kaze]], [[InTheBack Lilith]], [[{{Patricide}} Kilma]], [[DyingDeclarationOfHate Flora]], [[BolivianArmyEnding Hana, Subaki]], [[KilledOffscreen Hinoka]] (although it was intended for her to turn out to be NotQuiteDead), [[SlashedThroat Selena]], [[KillItWithFire Hans]], and [[MysticalPlague Oboro]]]] all kicked the bucket. The Chapter 45 notes state that [[spoiler:Garon, Ryoma, Gunter, Nyx, and even Corrin]] would've died during the story.

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** Kagero is described as having an outfit like this, working in combination with her more than [[BuxomIsBetter generous bust size]] [[DistractedByTheSexy deliberately to get a one-up on male opponents.]]

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** Kagero is described as having an outfit like this, working in combination with her more than [[BuxomIsBetter generous bust size]] [[DistractedByTheSexy generous bust size deliberately to get a one-up on male opponents.]]
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** [[spoiler: As for the other royal siblings: Camilla and Leo would've helped Xander administer his rule while Elise moved to Hoshido and gained a OneHundredPercentAdorationRating among Norhians and Hoshidans alike. Hinoka and Takumi would've been permanently scared after being mind controlled by Gunter and be left as [[EmptyShell Empty Shells]]. Sakura would visit them regularly but the two would never fully recover.]]

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** [[spoiler: As for the other royal siblings: Camilla and Leo would've helped Xander administer his rule while Elise moved to Hoshido and gained a OneHundredPercentAdorationRating among became LovedByAll Norhians and Hoshidans alike. Hinoka and Takumi would've been permanently scared after being mind controlled by Gunter and be left as [[EmptyShell Empty Shells]]. Sakura would visit them regularly but the two would never fully recover.]]
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* DidntThinkThisThrough: Garon's [[spoiler: scheme to get rid of Queen Mikoto relies entirely on a guy who hates Corrin and who is a known criminal not going rogue and murdering her instead of handing her over to the Hoshidans]]. Goes about as poorly as expected.
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* AdaptationalJerkass: Corrin goes from an AllLovingHero to a NinetiesAntiHero.
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* ArtisticLicenseGeography: Up to about Chapter 30, the author had failed to look up a single map of the entire game, going entirely off of their own memory. This led to several locations being way off from where they actually were. After a minor major breakdown due to the discovery of this, the author has declared that there is no longer a map and it does not exist.

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* ArtisticLicenseGeography: In-universe. Up to about Chapter 30, the author had failed to look up a single map of the entire game, going entirely off of their own memory. This led to several locations being way off from where they actually were. After a minor major breakdown due to the discovery of this, the author has declared that there is no longer a map and it does not exist.
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* ArtisticLicenseGeography: Up to about Chapter 30, the author had failed to look up a single map of the entire game, going entirely off of their own memory. This led to several locations being way off from where they actually were. After a minor major breakdown due to the discovery of this, the author has declared that there is no longer a map and it does not exist.
** The Ice Tribe was placed in the far north, rather than just south of Castle Krakenburg.
** Cyrkensia is placed on the Hoshido side of the continent, rather than the peninsula on the Nohrian side.
** Cheve is in the location that Port Town of Dia was.
** Hoshido is much larger than it probably should be, being divided up among 12 Shoguns to govern.
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* NinetiesAntiHero: Corrin is portrayed as a brash and crude woman motivated solely by violence, sex, and alcohol.
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** When Corrin asks Beruka why she didn't bring her Wyvern after the battle with the Ice Tribe, she explains that it wouldn't have actually done much good in that situation.
** Kagero describes assassinations as such. It can take weeks for an assassin to gather all the information they need to come up with a plan. And it can all be ruined by the slightest change in the target's behavior. Kagero prefers to have at least one month to prepare, and even then it's still quite risky.

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** When Corrin asks Beruka why leaves her Wyvern behind for Corrin's mission to quell the Ice Tribe's rebellion, since she didn't bring her Wyvern after the battle with the Ice Tribe, she explains think it'd be all that it wouldn't have actually done much good useful in that situation.
** Kagero describes assassinations as such. It can take takes weeks for an assassin to gather all the information they need of observation and intelligence gathering to come up with a plan. And decent plan, and all of it can all be ruined by the slightest just a single change in the target's behavior. Kagero herself prefers to have at least one month to prepare, and even then it's still quite risky.
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* DontMakeMeDestroyYou: Corrin begs for the Chevois to surrender peacefully, having learned the hard way [[KillEmAll what the alternative is]].

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* DontMakeMeDestroyYou: Corrin begs for the Chevois to surrender peacefully, having learned the hard way [[KillEmAll what the alternative is]].is.
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* WeaponOfChoice: Unlike the original game, where Ganglari was supposed to kill [[spoiler:Mikoto]] by exploding in her face, this story has it simply stab her in the gut. Corrin chooses to keep it out of sentiment, as a gift from her father, and Yato, if it exists, never makes its way into her hands.
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** Garon describes being the king of a barren, poverty-ridden nation as an endless line of these.

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** Garon describes being the king of a barren, poverty-ridden nation as an endless line of these.these, wherein he constantly has to choose between committing some morally dubious/outright evil action to help his people, or stick to his morals but allow his people to suffer. For example, the entire conflict of the story, the Hoshido-Nohr war, arose because it was either invade Hoshido or let the Nohrians starve. The end result is that [[ItGetsEasier he has learned to stop caring about whoever he harms]] and just does what he feels is necessary for the kingdom.
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These examples of Surprisingly Realistic Outcome seem to violate at least one of these rules, which disqualifies them: No character reactions (characters get angry, don't forgive, don't change their personality instantly, etc.); Too fantastical (depends on the properties of magic, powers, sci-fi tech, monsters, etc.); Not surprising (a character was warned about the outcome, it's used to provide Karma or An Aesop, or it simply follows normal conventions for this genre or medium); Plot happens (the example only describes an event, but not why audiences would expect a different, unrealistic outcome); Not an outcome (a character just explains why something wouldn't work as expected); More of a Deconstruction (the event has major, lasting effects on the plot, make something more realistic, but not completely realistic, or a parody/fanwork applies realistic consequences to the events of a different work); or fits better under a different trope. See the trope'


* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome: Getting a TapOnTheHead is ''far'' from harmless. Azura not only vomits and has trouble standing after being knocked out, but also suffers episodes of delirium and disorientation afterwards.

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These examples of Surprisingly Realistic Outcome seem to violate at least one of these rules, which disqualifies them: No character reactions (characters get angry, don't forgive, don't change their personality instantly, etc.); Too fantastical (depends on the properties of magic, powers, sci-fi tech, monsters, etc.); Not surprising (a character was warned about the outcome, it's used to provide Karma or An Aesop, or it simply follows normal conventions for this genre or medium); Plot happens (the example only describes an event, but not why audiences would expect a different, unrealistic outcome); Not an outcome (a character just explains why something wouldn't work as expected); More of a Deconstruction (the event has major, lasting effects on the plot, make something more realistic, but not completely realistic, or a parody/fanwork applies realistic consequences to the events of a different work); or fits better under a different trope. See the trope's definition for more details.


* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome: The author is particularly fond of this brand of drama/comedy (mostly drama).
** Everyone in Silas' original squad thought he was pretty silly for wearing heavy plate armor all the time. Except for when they were ambushed by archers. That armor became pretty useful right then, and the rest of them probably spent their last moments wishing they had the same foresight.
** On the other hand, while armor is great, it won't protect you when you turn your back to a guy with a tome that shoots out fire. As Corrin found out the hard way.
** Subaki, Hana, you get an A for effort. But it doesn't really matter how skilled you are, you are not skilled enough to take on 20+ bandits and expect to get out of that okay.
** Tearing through the local bureaucracy and racial prejudices of the lords is a great way to curry favor with the audience as a ReasonableAuthorityFigure, but as Yukimura later points out, Ryoma's strategy wasn't exactly good for long term war, as proven when [[spoiler:those lords that he dismissed or outright threatened proved that he needed them far more than they needed him]].
** In the April Fool's Day chapter, Corrin dies of alcohol poisoning or an STD before the story can begin due to her... ''[[HardDrinkingPartyGirl vicarious]]'' lifestyle.
** In the same chapter, when Xander murders Garon, Iago appears and points out that nobody will accept a man who just committed regicide as their king, and since the other "claimants" to the throne are all {{Heroic Bastard}}s and [[HappilyAdopted Corrin]], a succession crisis is almost certain.
** [[spoiler:Hinoka]] is killed anti-climatically and completely off screen, showing that anyone can end up dying with little fanfare.
** [[spoiler:Hans]] gets hit with this ''twice'' in the same incident.
*** He finds out the hard way that while UnstoppableRage can give you a power boost, it also causes you to make sloppy tactical decisions that can cost you the fight.
*** He also learns that being a traitor to his country who deserted one of its princesses to be captured by forces of their sworn enemy and overall scumbag won't endear you to its royalty, [[spoiler: as shown when after Leo gets Sakura in his clutches he burns the criminal to death. [[ILied And this is after telling Sakura he'd spare her companions if she surrendered to him]].]]
** Scarlet's force is largely formed from the likes of fishermen with no real experience in battle, and only a small portion of remotely professional Hoshidan troops. Furthermore, the same land was just hit by the plague courtesy of Corrin's army. Naturally, the Nohrian regular army delivers a brutal CurbStompBattle.
** {{Chainmail Bikini}}s are not appropriate attire for military settings. Silas takes one look at Charlotte and orders her to PleasePutSomeClothesOn.
** Shapechangers such as Keaton destroy their clothes when they transform. After a sparring session with Benny, Keaton returns to human form completely naked.
** Getting a TapOnTheHead is ''far'' from harmless. Azura not only vomits and has trouble standing after being knocked out, but also suffers episodes of delirium and disorientation afterwards.

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* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome: The author is particularly fond of this brand of drama/comedy (mostly drama).
** Everyone in Silas' original squad thought he was pretty silly for wearing heavy plate armor all the time. Except for when they were ambushed by archers. That armor became pretty useful right then, and the rest of them probably spent their last moments wishing they had the same foresight.
** On the other hand, while armor is great, it won't protect you when you turn your back to a guy with a tome that shoots out fire. As Corrin found out the hard way.
** Subaki, Hana, you get an A for effort. But it doesn't really matter how skilled you are, you are not skilled enough to take on 20+ bandits and expect to get out of that okay.
** Tearing through the local bureaucracy and racial prejudices of the lords is a great way to curry favor with the audience as a ReasonableAuthorityFigure, but as Yukimura later points out, Ryoma's strategy wasn't exactly good for long term war, as proven when [[spoiler:those lords that he dismissed or outright threatened proved that he needed them far more than they needed him]].
** In the April Fool's Day chapter, Corrin dies of alcohol poisoning or an STD before the story can begin due to her... ''[[HardDrinkingPartyGirl vicarious]]'' lifestyle.
** In the same chapter, when Xander murders Garon, Iago appears and points out that nobody will accept a man who just committed regicide as their king, and since the other "claimants" to the throne are all {{Heroic Bastard}}s and [[HappilyAdopted Corrin]], a succession crisis is almost certain.
** [[spoiler:Hinoka]] is killed anti-climatically and completely off screen, showing that anyone can end up dying with little fanfare.
** [[spoiler:Hans]] gets hit with this ''twice'' in the same incident.
*** He finds out the hard way that while UnstoppableRage can give you a power boost, it also causes you to make sloppy tactical decisions that can cost you the fight.
*** He also learns that being a traitor to his country who deserted one of its princesses to be captured by forces of their sworn enemy and overall scumbag won't endear you to its royalty, [[spoiler: as shown when after Leo gets Sakura in his clutches he burns the criminal to death. [[ILied And this is after telling Sakura he'd spare her companions if she surrendered to him]].]]
** Scarlet's force is largely formed from the likes of fishermen with no real experience in battle, and only a small portion of remotely professional Hoshidan troops. Furthermore, the same land was just hit by the plague courtesy of Corrin's army. Naturally, the Nohrian regular army delivers a brutal CurbStompBattle.
** {{Chainmail Bikini}}s are not appropriate attire for military settings. Silas takes one look at Charlotte and orders her to PleasePutSomeClothesOn.
** Shapechangers such as Keaton destroy their clothes when they transform. After a sparring session with Benny, Keaton returns to human form completely naked.
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Getting a TapOnTheHead is ''far'' from harmless. Azura not only vomits and has trouble standing after being knocked out, but also suffers episodes of delirium and disorientation afterwards.

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The main draw of the story is the removal of [[TheManBehindTheMan Anankos]] and Valla from the story completely. Everything tied to them undergoes a massive change as a result. Garon goes from OmnicidalManiac to WellIntentionedExtremist, Corrin goes from AllLovingHero to BloodKnight, and the story goes from a simpler plot to a dramatic, sometimes tear-jerking story.

Warning: AnyoneCanDie is in full effect.

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The main draw of the story is the removal of [[TheManBehindTheMan Anankos]] and Valla from the story completely. Everything tied to them undergoes a massive change as a result. Garon goes from OmnicidalManiac to WellIntentionedExtremist, Corrin goes from AllLovingHero to BloodKnight, and the story goes from a simpler plot to a dramatic, sometimes tear-jerking story.

Warning: AnyoneCanDie is in full effect.
an overall DarkerAndEdgier war story.



The story also had an April Fools Day chapter which served to accentuate many of the differences between the original and this one, which can be found [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11962940/26/A-Brighter-Dark here.]]

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The story also had an April Fools Day chapter which served to accentuate many was closed on March 13, 2021 with a plot outline of the differences between the original and this one, which can be found [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11962940/26/A-Brighter-Dark here.]]
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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: Nohr has no sun or moon, and has no knowledge of what the color green is despite the sun being needed to help grow the crops needed for Nohr to survive.

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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: Nohr has no sun or moon, and has no knowledge of what the color green is despite the sun being needed to help grow the crops needed for Nohr to survive. In addition, life-long lack of exposure to the sun would turn someone into an albino, and suddenly being in the sun could burn them to a crisp and cause skin cancer.

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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: Infamously, Nohr has no sun or moon, and has no knowledge of what the color green is. Despite the sun being needed to ''help grow the crops needed for Nohr to survive''.
-->'''[[https://das-sporking2.dreamwidth.org/1681459.html Beast Keaton]]:''' ARE YOU FUCKING KIDDING ME RIGHT NOW?! WE DON’T KNOW WHAT THE DRAGON-DAMNED SUN LOOKS LIKE?! HAS THIS AUTHOR NEVER STUDIED PHOTOSYNTHESIS?! WHAT DOES THE NOHR OF THIS FIC EAT, THEIR OWN LEAVINGS?! HUH?! OR DO WE SURVIVE ON THE NUTRITIONAL FORCE OF GRIMDARK?! GHWRRRROOARR!

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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: Infamously, Nohr has no sun or moon, and has no knowledge of what the color green is. Despite is despite the sun being needed to ''help help grow the crops needed for Nohr to survive''.
-->'''[[https://das-sporking2.dreamwidth.org/1681459.html Beast Keaton]]:''' ARE YOU FUCKING KIDDING ME RIGHT NOW?! WE DON’T KNOW WHAT THE DRAGON-DAMNED SUN LOOKS LIKE?! HAS THIS AUTHOR NEVER STUDIED PHOTOSYNTHESIS?! WHAT DOES THE NOHR OF THIS FIC EAT, THEIR OWN LEAVINGS?! HUH?! OR DO WE SURVIVE ON THE NUTRITIONAL FORCE OF GRIMDARK?! GHWRRRROOARR!
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** During the previous war Nohrian boarder guards remained in their armor for long periods in case of an attack. This ceased after Mikoto created the barrier and the threat of Hoshidian attacks stopped.

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** During the previous war Nohrian boarder border guards remained in their armor for long periods in case of an attack. This ceased after Mikoto created the barrier and the threat of Hoshidian attacks stopped.

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** During the previous war Nohrian boarder guards remained in their armor for long periods in case of an attack. This ceased after Mikoto created the barrier and the threat of Hoshdian attacks stopped.

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** During the previous war Nohrian boarder guards remained in their armor for long periods in case of an attack. This ceased after Mikoto created the barrier and the threat of Hoshdian Hoshidian attacks stopped.


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* AdaptationExplanationExtrication: Removing [[spoiler:Anankos and Valla]] from the plot leaves a massive number of plot holes, the ''smallest'' of which being that Lilith's friendship with Corrin makes no sense anymore.
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* DramaticIrony: With a story that covers [[LoadsAndLoadsOfCharacters many]] different perspectives, most of whom are unaware of the activities of the others, this comes up rather frequently.

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* DramaticIrony: With a story that covers [[LoadsAndLoadsOfCharacters many]] many different perspectives, most of whom are unaware of the activities of the others, this comes up rather frequently.



** Due to the problem of people getting shunted to the side due to having LoadsAndLoadsOfCharacters, the author retroactively added scenes for other characters in older chapters, starting with one for Takumi in Chapter 34.

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** Due to the problem of people getting shunted to the side due to having LoadsAndLoadsOfCharacters, a large cast, the author retroactively added scenes for other characters in older chapters, starting with one for Takumi in Chapter 34.
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* {{Flanderization}}: Canonically, Hoshido ''is'' surprisingly racist against Nohr (Hinoka's initial catchphrase is "Nohrian scum!"), which adds some shades of gray to the fight between the two nations. In this story, however, hating anything not Hoshidian is basically their only hat.
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* ScrewTheRulesIHaveConnections: Corrin tells Niles that as a member of the royal family she could easily get away with killing him, and even convince her brother Leo to look the other way at her murdering one of his subordinates.

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* ScrewTheRulesIHaveConnections: Corrin tells warns Niles that as a member of the royal family she could easily get away with killing him, him due to her being a member of the royal family, and even could more than likely convince her brother Leo to look the other way at her murdering one of his subordinates.



* ShedArmorGainSpeed: Xander removes most of his armor before his duel with Ryoma so he'll be able to dodge and move faster. Even after doing this he is still ''barely'' able to keep up.

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* ShedArmorGainSpeed: Xander removes most of his armor before his duel with dueling Ryoma so he'll be able to dodge and move faster. Even after doing this he is still ''barely'' able to keep up.
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* PutOnABus: Due to the original game having LotsAndLotsOfCharacters, there are a number of them that don't get to have screentime in the fic yet still have to be acknowledged as existing. As such, many of them get shoved to the side when they can't serve the main plot. [[SelfDeprecation The author lampshades and parodies it in their April Fools chapter.]]

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* PutOnABus: Due to the original game having LotsAndLotsOfCharacters, many characters, there are a number of them that don't get to have screentime in the fic yet still have to be acknowledged as existing. As such, many of them get shoved to the side when they can't serve the main plot. [[SelfDeprecation The author lampshades and parodies it in their April Fools chapter.]]
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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: Infamously, Nohr has no sun or moon, and has no knowledge of what the color green is. Despite both being needed to grow, you know, crops and stuff.

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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: Infamously, Nohr has no sun or moon, and has no knowledge of what the color green is. Despite both the sun being needed to grow, you know, ''help grow the crops and stuff. needed for Nohr to survive''.
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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: Infamously, Nohr has no sun or moon, and has no knowledge of what the color green is. Despite both being needed to grow, you know, crops and stuff.
-->'''[[https://das-sporking2.dreamwidth.org/1681459.html Beast Keaton]]:''' ARE YOU FUCKING KIDDING ME RIGHT NOW?! WE DON’T KNOW WHAT THE DRAGON-DAMNED SUN LOOKS LIKE?! HAS THIS AUTHOR NEVER STUDIED PHOTOSYNTHESIS?! WHAT DOES THE NOHR OF THIS FIC EAT, THEIR OWN LEAVINGS?! HUH?! OR DO WE SURVIVE ON THE NUTRITIONAL FORCE OF GRIMDARK?! GHWRRRROOARR!
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** Corrin catches a soldier forcing himself upon a woman during the battle at Cheve and kills him on the spot. She then offers the woman a hand, only to run her through with her sword. Reminding the remaining soldiers that they're there to [[PragmaticVillainy wipe out the town, and not to waste time raping and pillaging.]]

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** Corrin catches a soldier forcing himself upon a woman during the battle at Cheve and kills him on the spot. She then offers the woman a hand, only to run her through with her sword. Reminding She then reminds the remaining soldiers that they're there to [[PragmaticVillainy wipe out the town, and not to waste time raping and pillaging.]]
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** When Corrin catches one of her soldiers forcing himself upon a woman during the battle at Cheve, she kills him and offers the woman a hand... only to run her through with her sword, reminding the remaining soldiers that they're there to [[PragmaticVillainy wipe out the town, and not to waste time raping and pillaging.]]

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** When Corrin catches one of her soldiers a soldier forcing himself upon a woman during the battle at Cheve, she Cheve and kills him and on the spot. She then offers the woman a hand... hand, only to run her through with her sword, reminding sword. Reminding the remaining soldiers that they're there to [[PragmaticVillainy wipe out the town, and not to waste time raping and pillaging.]]

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