Reviews Fanfic / My Little Dashie

Don't get the hype

While I hesitate to call this a bad story…it's really not that good, for several reasons.

1. The spelling and grammar, while not at They Just Didnt Care levels, comes across as rather sloppy nonetheless. It just seems to be a rushed job.

2. The main character isn't as fleshed out as he could be. Whereas Jerry conveyed the growing hopelessness of the protagonist through sheer monotony and blurring repetition, here it's just…talked about in somewhat vague terms, although his dilapidated neighborhood and living conditions are described pretty well. His depression is said to stem from the deaths of his loving parents, but we hardly know anything about them or his childhood.

3. Rainbow Dash isn't given too much of a personality beyond "cute"; the closest she gets to her canon self is the way she sometimes addresses her adoptive father. And while she's continually referred to as adorable, Dash hardly even has any dialogue to truly show how cute she is. No mention is even made of her distinctive voice cracks. There are no really vivid retellings or anecdotes of how she actually behaved as a baby or a filly in her day-to-day life, or what it was like to care for and parent her. Only summaries are given.

4. The writer obviously couldn't be bothered to worry much about the logistics of raising a technicolor pegasus pony from infancy and concealing her from the outside world. While not a huge flaw, the sheer lack of attention paid to this aspect of the story strains credibility.

Again, not terrible, but as a whole "My Little Dashie" reads more like a rambling, stream-of-conciousness entry in some individual's journal than a good fanfic. This review probably isn't much better, but there you go.