Before I start, for those of you who don't know what a blurb is:
A blurb is a short summary accompanying a creative work
I'm rapidly approaching the point where I'll need to describe the story of Turtles all the Way
to people who are potential customers, so I need to come up with a quick summary that piques people's interest without spoiling them silly.
I made several attempts are writing a blurb for it, and ended up with this:
"The girl who appears to lead you astray... will be yours truly!"
Even when you’re an explosive, winged turtle on wheels who wields a guitar, weird things can happen to you. Magnet Zakame and company inadvertently take down several subgroups of a terrorist organization known as DOGS, and are called in by the government one day to help take them down once and for all. Magnet was pumped to annihilate DOGS for what they’d done to his father, but then the unthinkable happens. Magnet and company are attacked with sleeping gas and end up trapped on individual islands with girls that match their ideals almost too
well. Will he succumb to the power of this lovely distraction? Will Magnet’s implosions be enough to avenge his father? Find out in Turtles all the Way: A Shell Game
Then I posted about it on my blog
and asked for people's opinions and put up a poll.
As of right now, two days after the poll went up, "SHUT UP AND TAKE MY MONEY!" has two votes, "Are you high?" has one vote, and the option just saying it's OK but should be improved has two votes. The blog post has also been liked by 3 other WordPress users. The mixed reaction on the poll is rather worrying.
So I'm asking for help. How do you think I should go about improving it?
Of course, it's unreasonable to ask that without giving you people a spoilery description, so here's a link to one I gave before
edited 4th Apr '12 9:39:43 PM by burnpsy