It's pretty good. Good job
(屮≖益≖)屮 彡 ┻━┻ F*ck yo' table; Go read my book! —> http://goo.gl/mtXkmHey, thanks. ^_^ I'm surprised I got any takers at all, really, since I'm pretty sure those word counts are Archive Binge-scary.
"Proto-Indo-European makes the damnedest words related. It's great. It's the Kevin Bacon of etymology." ~MadrugadaYeah- I'm sorry. I feel the need to apologize because, while this looks interesting I simply don't have the time to go through them because of college.
SO yeah. Again, sorry
yeyI'm not far in, only midway through the first chapter, but I like what I'm reading so far. I don't really have any comments deeper than that yet, but that might change.
Oh, I do have one other comment: I think you used the prologue really well. It's not an infodump, it's not set a thousand years in the past or future, it's not setting up something that only becomes relevant eighty chapters in— it's just a page-long hook that prompts a ton of questions, gives a taste of the story to come, and moves on. Nice.
Thanks for the all fish!So far, I read the Prologue and the first chapter, and I have to second the other people here. It's pretty good.
What I like is that you actually know how to use first-person perspective. Cora has a voice and a personality. It really comes through in the text.
Hey pardon me Freezair But wih of them is you know... that story.I would like to begin there :D.
Also I still need to answerd the pm, sorry I have a lot of school stuff.
edited 19th Sep '11 5:34:20 PM by FallenLegend
Make your hearth shine through the darkest night; let it transform hate into kindness, evil into justice, and loneliness into love.Thanks, y'all! I do try.
@Fallen: No; I haven't started on "that" story yet. I won't until November. XD It's coming; don't worry!
"Proto-Indo-European makes the damnedest words related. It's great. It's the Kevin Bacon of etymology." ~MadrugadaUpdate: On the off chance anyone sees this, I've uploaded a new version of Lit's Green Earth. This one just has some typo and odd grammar corrections in it; no major changes yet. Just nitpicks.
"Proto-Indo-European makes the damnedest words related. It's great. It's the Kevin Bacon of etymology." ~Madrugada
Hello, one and all. Folks call me Freezair. And I would like you welcome you all to The Suenyaverse.
The Suenyaverse (or, as it is "officially" titled, the Miracle Series) is a series of fantasy stories written by me. (As if the title didn't cue you in, this is a Shameless Self-Promotion topic.) Rather than a unified series, where each story directly continues from the next, the Suenyaverse series are instead loosely tied together by a couple of factors:
As of this writing, there are two completed Suenyaverse stories: Always a Hero (Book 1) and Lit's Green Earth (Book 2). As well, I'm working on two short stories related to the Suenyaverse: "Cora and Lizzie" and "Cora and the Dreamers."'
If you would like to read these stories, be sure to download them from the links provided. They can be read from the links, but they are set to expire. If they've expired and I've forgotten to update them, don't hesitate to notify me so I can replace them.
Always a Hero
Now Arabesque has broken free from his magical imprisonment, and the people believe that Cora is the only one who can stop him. They even called her "Miracle!" Cora thinks it's all a dream, but when she wakes up in a bed fit for a king, she realizes she's gotten in over her head. Certain that she'll lose her memories again, she begins keeping a journal of her experiences in Suenya. Bitterly sarcastic, jaded, and distrustful, Cora isn't exactly the savior the Suenyans had hoped for. But Arabesque doesn't care if she's lost all her memories, and barely remembers her old magic. Cora's going to get a crash-course in heroism, whether she wants it or not!
Cora and Lizzie
Cora and the Dreamers
Lit's Green Earth
It's hard being Angeline Eggertawn. For one thing, her parents proudly believe that she's a Green Witch that can make plants grow with a touch of a finger. For another, she's never actually made a plant grow; all she can do is enrich soil and see what nutrients plants need. And did we mention that she's also helping her next-door neighbor hide an adolescent dragon in his barn? Finally, a group of miners near the town have dug into something they shouldn't have, and unleashed a terrible curse on her village.
All Angeline wants is to find out what her powers really are and make her parents happy. In the process, however, she discovers that the same ability that lets her enrich soil also lets her see the source of her town's curse. Soon, she winds up embroiled in a wild hunt to uncover the source of Clear Waters' curse and save her town. She'll need the help of all her friends—and even the legendary sorceress, Miracle—to break the curse and protect the people of Suenya!
To those of you who actually bother to sit down and read this junk... Hey, thanks. I appreciate you spending your time on me. Even if you hate it, or you grow quickly bored of it and never finish, the fact that you took the time to at least LOOK means a lot to me.
And if you actually sit and read through to the end, then you, my good person, are awesome.
OTHER STUFF:
Peppermint Wind
Reluctantly, Kane agrees, though he's currently in a muddle about who, theoretically, should take over his business if he were to suddenly die. So his cousin's children arrive: Argumentative twins Chaz and Bergy, and hyperactive Ercole. While that would be a problem enough on its own, things suddenly start going pear-shaped at the shop. It begins with a contaminated vat of chocolate. It spirals out of control, leading to sabotage, suspcion, and strange protests. Will Kane's shop survive the chaos?
edited 2nd Oct '11 3:18:25 PM by FreezairForALimitedTime
"Proto-Indo-European makes the damnedest words related. It's great. It's the Kevin Bacon of etymology." ~Madrugada