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!YMMV tropes for Mykan's ''FanFic/MyLittleUnicorn'', the ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' [[ByNoIMeanYes fanfic-that-isn't-a-fanfic]].
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* AccidentalInnuendo:
** Lightning's main weapon is the Rainbow Rod, a long stick with a ball, which shoots rainbows and has to be held tightly between his hooves.
*** Even better: After using it, Lightning is usually exhausted and it takes a certain amount of time [[DoesThisRemindYouOfAnything to recharge]].
*** It certainly doesn't help that the first time he used it was to [[AccidentalPun take out Dementia's flower monster]].
** One-shot character Cerise uses the Magenta Lance.
** "Artie and Rep-Stallion were going at it hard. His scythe against Artie's big brush spear…" Yeah.
** Among the nonsensical lyrics in the Demonites'/D-Man Knights' cover of ''Thriller'', there's rhyming "D-Man" with "C-Man".
* AlternativeCharacterInterpretation:
** The Grand Ruler: [[TheGoodKing benevolent king]], or racist tyrant?
*** [[TakeAThirdOption OR]] a [[TheGodsMustBeLazy slothful godking]] who lets Lightning Dawn and friends do all the dirty work?
*** ''OR'' a diabolical mastermind ObfuscatingStupidity who hates three-dimensional personalities that is slowly conquering the universe, one [[{{Brainwashed}} morality-altered planet]] at a time?
** Unicornicopia: a utopian paradise, or autocratic dystopia?
*** Or [[Film/{{Brazil}} too paper-thin and inefficient a dystopia]] without Lightning Dawn and his merry band?
** Titan: a villain with no redeeming qualities at all, or a bitter old man who lost his mind because no one ever gave him a chance, leaving [[ThenLetMeBeEvil turning to the dark side as his only option]]?
*** Or an EvilSorcerer who is plagued with BondVillainStupidity to a degree similar to a bad {{Sentai}} villain?
** Starfleet in general, with its tendencies to act as a multiversal police force and army, can seem like an evil overlord's armed force, making sure that everyone obeys the whims of the Unicornicopian overlords.
*** And even then, the only Starfleet people shown to be any effective at that are [[RuleOfThree Lightning Dawn and co.]] (Seriously, was there ever a Starfleet RedShirt that showed their prowess in battle at '''any point''' in the series?)
** For that matter, Ace Ray. Is he a bitter washout who [[UngratefulBastard badmouths the people who saved his life]]? Is he going through a hard time in his life and looking for some form of solace when no one will support him? [[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong Or is he being unfairly persecuted for daring to speak the truth about the regime]]?
*** Although he should have simply [[ScrewThisImOuttaHere quietly left said regime]] as, well, it's nowhere near as effective at security.
** The mysterious future voices in ''Starfleet Magic IV''. Helpful guides or sociopaths looking to torment Cadance?
** Brass Bolt: an eventual wannabe terrorist, who will be rebuked or [[TragicVillain shot]] by Starfleet in the end, with a possibility he could end up in a worse position than Ace Ray...
*** Or a young naive [[HeroAntagonist freedom fighter]] who actually had the guts to act with haste instead of feeling indifferent like Ace Ray.
*** Or the initiate of actual substance in terms of plot and characterization. Doubtful, but his realistic reaction to the setting gives us a whole new perspective towards the fic...
** As a meta interpretation, are we seeing through the eyes of happy content citizens and heroes of the greater good...
*** Or a brainwashed and indoctrinated society where tyranny rules over their lives without them noticing it? After all, we are always seeing it in the perspective of Lightning Dawn in the lessons he learned which praise Starfleet's methods. The Badfic itself could be inverse propaganda intended for children and the next generation of Unicornicopians. A true Antithesis to MLP [=FiM=]'s intent. There are [[Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis two]] [[Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony stories]] that go with this interpretation.
* ArchivePanic: These fanfics are ''long and numerous.'' If you want to catch up, be warned.
* {{Asspull}}: Here's a short list of examples:
** Lightning suddenly being able to summon the Uniforce because he remembers to believe, right when Titan is going to kill him.
** In the rewrite, Nightmare Moon destroys Twilight's wings; it's never explained how she's able to do this, why she does this, why she doesn't do the same with the Pegasi or other princesses, or why she doesn't take her horn as well.
** [[spoiler:Brain turns out to have a spaceship in his backyard, which the others use to escape the exploding Unicornicopia.]]
** [[spoiler:Celesto and Celestia fusing and turning into the Great Celestial Ruler, who destroys Titan]].
** [[spoiler:The MLP and Starfleet ponies being able to reconstruct a planet through the power of belief]].
** [[spoiler:Lightning is the last of a race of creatures known as Enticorns, which, as [[WordOfGod the author confirms]], is partially based off of [[Anime/DragonBallZ Super Saiyans]]]].
** [[spoiler:In ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'', Human!Grand Ruler was capable of surviving being lost in ''outer space'' while being low on oxygen.]]
* BileFascination: There are some people out there that will read the story just to see what's so controversial about it.
* CanonDefilement: While the fic itself is often loathed for making the cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic Friendship is Magic]]'' less competent to make Starfleet look superior, Celestia in particular is given the worst of it when she [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blames Twilight Sparkle, her own student, for getting killed instead of blaming Raven for killing her]], and pretty much acts as a ReplacementGoldfish for the Element of Magic, even though Celestia would never pull this kind of thing in canon. [[DesignatedHero And she (along with Starfleet) is supposed to be in the right for thinking this.]]]]
* CaptainObviousAesop:
** One of the many Aesops given out by the Grand Ruler can be summed up as "There are different ways to solve problems."
*** ...Which is another BrokenAesop, considering that throughout the fanfic, the Unicornicopians are portrayed as always being right and those who have different solutions are always wrong.
** Another one deals with how nightmares are frightening.
* ClicheStorm:
** Let's see... The villain is an ObviouslyEvil wizard who lives in a [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment dark castle in the dimension of darkness]]. His minions are a TerribleTrio consisting of a shallow VainSorceress, a [[EvilGenius schemer]], and [[TheBrute a brute]], none of whom possess any redeeming or positive qualities. On the other [[InsistentTerminology hoof]], we have a realm of good where the unicorns live happily without any personal conflict between each other, are ruled by a wise king and protected by a group of SuperSentai[=/=]MagicalGirl-inspired good guys, whose leader has a fairy sidekick, defeats monsters with ''Franchise/SailorMoon''-based moves and has to learn to believe in himself.
%% ** Ditto for ''Starfleet Humans''; it's pretty much just ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls Equestria Girls]]'', but with elements of ''Film/HighSchoolMusical''.
* CreatorsPet:
** Lightning Dawn, Rhymey, and the Grand Ruler.
** The sequel adds Goldwin to it, an {{Expy}} of Jeff from ''Series/TodaysSpecial''. Several episodes in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' (which plagiarize entire episodes of ''Today's Special'') are made specifically to involve Goldwin, even when they add nothing to the overall plot whatsoever.
** Ironically, while the author is willing to shout at everyone who makes fun of his characters, he does not care for the majority of them at all, ignoring them completely if he thinks that they serve no purpose for him anymore outside of battle scenes.
* CriticalResearchFailure: [[CriticalResearchFailure/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* DamselScrappy: Krysta in the earlier installments, who spent too much time playing the DamselInDistress and [[CaptainObvious stating the obvious]] to be of any actual use to the heroes. Even when she does try to fight, her contributions are so minimal she might as well not be there.
* DesignatedHero: The heroes are this to some extent. As described elsewhere on this page and even the main page, their practices and beliefs can be very questionable, if not outright horrible. About the only thing that could prevent them from entirely qualifying is the fact the main villains are often legitimately evil and not {{Designated Villain}}s.
** [[AuthorAvatar Mykan Jaden]] from Dakari-King Mykan's Yu-Gi-Oh!/Totally Spies fanfics, the last of which crosses over with My Little Pony. In the "final season", in spite of being a "master duelist", he makes two rookies duel brainwashed ponies despite knowing that, should they lose, they'll get brainwashed too. When the rookies triumph and Shining Armor is teleported away, Mykan gets so mad at a brainwashed Cadance for trying to brainwash and accidentally destroy his world with card games and double crossing them on a deal they made, [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/Chapter-16-Part-2-Tough-Love-524582150 he soundly beats her up]] with the power of a Millenium Item. When Mykan attempts to finish her and is stopped by his wife, he implies [[VictimBlaming that it's Cadance's fault]] that he nearly killed her. Incidentally, in the author's note at the end of that particular chapter, the author Mykan notes that it felt good to beat up Cadance in a manner that makes it sounds like he jizzed to it, then goes on to state [[BlatantLies he wouldn't disrespect real-life women like that.]]
** ''Starfleet Magic VI'' gives us the case of [[AuthorAvatar the pony counterpart of Mykan Stevens]]. He spends most of the season being an antagonistic {{Jerkass}} towards everybody and tries his level best to BeAsUnhelpfulAsPossible toward Starfleet as they deal with their latest threat, and ultimately, they end up unintentionally spurring him into a RoaringRampageOfRevenge against the ArcVillain ''after'' they've already pretty much defeated said villain. This results in Mykan going out in a SenselessSacrifice that inflicts untold amounts of gratuitous collateral damage, at which point Starfleet has him memorialized as a hero despite him never having demonstrated any sort of heroic behavior whatsoever.
* DesignatedMonkey:
** Cadance, full stop. The author hates her for being HappilyMarried (whereas [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] [[DidNotGetTheGirl didn't hook up with Terra and Kari Kamiya, respectively]]; [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer yes, really]]), so he makes her [[spoiler:kill her own brother who's been turned partly mechanical and evil]], suffer horrific nightmares, get beaten up by the AuthorAvatar, and [[spoiler:miscarry when a pillar topples onto her]]. For some reason, [[DoubleStandard even though he's her husband, Shining Armor doesn't get punished nearly as much]]...
*** Despite the "hates Cadance for being HappilyMarried" excuse, other relatively happy couples have shown up (Spike and Rarity, Lightning and Starla, Fluttershy and Rhymey) and haven't been been treated nearly as badly as Cadance has. Make of that what you will.
*** Shockingly, it now turns out that Cadance has been rendered infertile after that pillar thing.....and Shining Armor as well, due to his brainwashing and transformed state. Yes, neither one can ever have a kid now (adopting is out of the question for some reason), and to top it off, he has them keep a nursery in their home as well. Because they cannot bring themselves to get rid of it.
*** The only reason that Cadance hasn't been killed off like [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle]] is because, in Mykan's eyes, [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer pretty much everyone is expendable, including himself, apparently]]. He can just kill off anypony he wants, if he ever sees it fit. But Cadance is a special case; he wants her kept alive [[FateWorseThanDeath just so he can punish her]], [[DisproportionateRetribution all for the reason that she's married in canon]].
** Twilight Sparkle is another character that Mykan hates for [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/690404/im-true-to-myself-3-rant-why-i-hate-twilight-sparkle utterly ridiculous reasons]]. Shortly after Equestria is introduced in the rewrite, she loses her wings (though at least she gets them back offscreen), the MLP cast as a whole TookALevelInDumbass, she's called out for not following the Grand Ruler's orders no matter what, and of course [[spoiler:she is murdered, which Starfleet and [[OutOfCharacter Celestia]] [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for]] and the latter takes up her mantle as the Element of Magic]].
*** This even extends to ''Starfleet Humans''; despite chronologically taking place before the first ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls Equestria Girls]]'' film, the human Twilight Sparkle is shoehorned in, and contributes nothing to the plot other than getting yelled at by Lightning regularly over petty things.
* DesignatedVillain:
** May not exactly be an in-universe villain so much as merely an in-universe loser, but Ace Ray can still qualify.
** Brass Bolt for speaking out against Starfleet's draconian nature. The author tries to take sympathy away from him by having him release a bunch of prisoners, but seeing how our DesignatedHero cast mistreat the prisoners, it actually makes him more likable.
* EightDeadlyWords: Due to the [[DesignatedHero heroes being utterly unlikable]] [[FlatCharacter cardboard cutouts]], canon characters being stripped of their likable traits, loads of racism, sexism, all-around ''fucked-up'' morality, and {{Cliche}}d villains that always lose, there's no point in reading the series.
* EnsembleDarkhorse: Ace Ray. See StrawmanHasAPoint and TakeThatScrappy below. Mykan tries to make him come off as insane, but he really doesn't.
** Brass Bolt as well, for much the same reasons as well as actually taking some kind of action against Starfleet.
** Windy Bag, for pretty much the same reasons as the other two, trying to change Equestria back to the way it was, and having a vendetta against Mykan's most blatant AuthorAvatar.
** Despite suffering from [[TookALevelInDumbass the same fate as her fellow Equestrians]], Twilight Sparkle herself is this for at least being among the closest to her canon self, as well as gaining pity points from viewers who rightfully believe [[TheChewToy she's treated horribly by the Space Ponies]]. [[spoiler:Her death at the hands of Raven has also sparked several more accusations of Starfleet being unlikable, due to them [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blaming her for her own death]] because she disobeyed Starfleet.]] After all that's happened, it's hard not to see her as TheWoobie. Cadance is also this, for the same reasons (just replace [[spoiler:death]] with [[spoiler:having a miscarriage and her and her husband being rendered infertile for life]], and you're golden).
* EthnicScrappy: Dyno and Myte are basically a pair of walking Hispanic stereotypes that like blowing things up and basically nothing else. Ditto for Brain, whose main purpose seems to be rattling off StockBritishPhrases and occasionally providing an invention or two while contributing virtually nothing when things get hairy.
* FamilyUnfriendlyAesop: [[FamilyUnfriendlyAesop/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* FoeYay: Aplenty between Spike and the Black Dragon Knight. Spike first identifies the Knight as female by smelling her pheromones ([[DoesThisRemindYouOfAnything which already has a certain subtext]]), and she spends almost all of her appearances [[WeCanRuleTogether persuading him to join her]]. Not to mention, she really likes leaning in close to whisper in Spike's ear... [[spoiler:Becomes a bit squicky when the Black Dragon Knight is revealed to be Spike's sister.]]
* GirlShowGhetto: Essentially the whole story was written because Mykan hated the original series for being "girly" and was surprised that it appealed to boys at all. The story itself is even more stereotypically "girly" and childish that appeals to no one in particular.
* HarsherInHindsight: [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming Celestia blaming Twilight for her own death]] gets even worse as ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS7E1CelestialAdvice Celestial Advice]]'' shows that Celestia pretty much acted like a second mother to her. By having Celestia act like this, she's not just blaming her student; she's blaming a pony she'd grown attached to since youth.]]
* HilariousInHindsight:
** Mykan always wanted to make a more action-oriented story than ''Friendship Is Magic'', to no real avail. Come [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS4E26TwilightsKingdomPart2 the season 4 finale]], suddenly the show he hates gets an action sequence that blows anything he could write out of the water (not like that's particularly hard). {{Irony}} at its finest.
** The series has always stated that personalities are pathetic, cutie marks are stupid, individuality is wrong unless you're the leader, it's okay to shun and belittle others who are not the same as you, and that dissenters should be locked up and/or brainwashed. Cue [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E1TheCutieMapPart1 the Season 5 premiere]] of ''MLP'', featuring a society espousing those very "virtues"!
** Part of the main reason the fanfic was written was to denounce the values of Friendship and instead go with TheHero doing things all on his own, using the belief he has in himself. Irony of basing the fanfic off [[Franchise/PowerRangers a franchise based around teamwork]] aside, many detractors of My Little Pony have pointed out that the show's later arcs revolve around Twilight having to do things herself despite the theme of ThePowerOfFriendship.
** This is not the first time [[WesternAnimation/ATrollInCentralPark an infamously awful work implemented believing as its primary aesop.]]
** Mykan has stated that he wanted to give the Equestrians a dose of reality and [[EpicFail failed miserably]] [[Main/{{Irony}} at it]]. There would later come ''Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis'' and ''Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony'' which flat out ''succeed'' in [[DeconstructionFic applying]] [[RealityEnsues reality]] to the Unicornicopians.
** Turns out magic ''is'' believing in the MLP universe, but not the way Mykan imagined; according to the episode, ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS7E2AllBottledUp All Bottled Up]]'', [[EmotionalPowers magic is derived from a pony's emotions]], and also requires that the user have faith that the magic will work, i.e. "believing". For bonus points, [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/64687/my-little-unicorn-magic-is-believing-redo an attempted redo of Mykan's work]] had a similar idea.
* HoYay:
** Harkin's obsession with fighting against Lightning can easily be interpreted as an obsession of a ''[[FoeRomanceSubtext different]]'' kind.
** Grand Ruler angsting over the death of his old friend Starlight Braveheart in ''Starfleet Magic V'' has "[[TheLostLenore deceased love interest]]" written all over it.
* InferredHolocaust: At one point in ''III'', Frosteye freezes all of United Equestria over, with temperatures reaching as low as ''-100 degrees'' in parts such as the Crystal Empire. This is treated simply as global HarmlessFreezing by the story, but considering the toll it takes on Lightning and company despite their survival, it's safe to assume that some weren't so lucky...
* ItWasHisSled: [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle is killed in season 3, and Starfleet and Celestia [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]].]]
* JustHereForGodzilla: The fic's {{Ensemble Darkhorse}}s are one of its main draws. Seriously, Brass Bolt's entire, short lived character arc is a crowning moment of awesome, for simple virtue of one-upping Starfleet and basically giving them the biggest middle finger he could. But as was said, it was short lived.
* MarySuetopia: The world of [[IncrediblyLamePun Unicornicopia]].
* MemeticLoser: All of Starfleet due to how their [[InformedAbility supposed "superiority" is told rather than shown]] and they never demonstrate any remarkable ability that would make other races "inferior" to them. ''Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis'' and ''Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony'' [[DeconstructionFic both point out Starfleet's lack of effectiveness]].
* MemeticMutation:
** Dimension [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's tendency to describe any location as this.[[/labelnote]]
** SHUT THE F*CK UP, RHYMEY! [[labelnote:explanation]]The default response of most [=MSTers=] (and just in general people who have read ''Starfleet Magic'') to [[TheScrappy Rhymey's]] [[PainfulRhyme terrible rhymes]].[[/labelnote]]
** Rhymey: [[{{Fartillery}} Power of Flatulence]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Every member of Starfleet announces their element ([[FlatCharacter which also tends to be their one character trait]]). Rhymey's is [[PainfulRhyme "I summon within; power of wind!"]] Naturally, readers have taken [[ToiletHumor something else from that statement]].[[/labelnote]]
** "POWER OF ''FLORA''", YOU IDIOT! [[labelnote:explanation]][[GreenThumb Buddy Rose]] [[CriticalResearchFailure incorrectly announces "Power of Fauna"]] during the TransformationSequence when he should have said "Power of Flora". [[EnragedByIdiocy Reactions to this tend to be outrage at such a stupid mistake.]][[/labelnote]]
** PREFERENCES [[labelnote:explanation]]What Mykan uses to justify writing his stories the way they are; it's what he prefers. Naturally, people respond with the fact that, since Mykan is putting his stories out where others can read them, it is no longer about preferences and it is now about what makes a story good. Additionally, he thinks [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS6E13SpiceUpYourLife "Spice Up Your Life"]] justifies his writing however he wants.[[/labelnote]]
** Vanity [[labelnote:explanation]]What Mykan uses to explain why he and his works are so disliked. Responses to this are are typically YouKeepUsingThatWord. [[IResembleThatRemark There's also the fact that Mykan has proven to be quite egotistical such as believing that the writers of Friendship is Magic are copying his ideas.]] [[/labelnote]]
** [[OurDemonsAreDifferent Demons]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's idea that demons are all-powerful beings and thus numerous villains are at least partially demonic.[[/labelnote]]
** "PICK ONE TRAIT AND STICK TO IT!" [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's hatred of CharacterDevelopment; there's also his inability to comprehend that people can show multiple sides to themselves.[[/labelnote]]
** [[{{Hypocrite}} Also, Mykan's tendencies to contradict himself (i.e. Saying friendship is worthless, but creating a hero who would be useless without his friends).]]
** "He's not me, he's just ''voiced'' by me." [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's insistence that his obvious {{Author Avatar}}s are only voiced by him and [[BlatantLies do not reflect how he really is in person]]. Pony Mykan is the most blatant example of this.[[/labelnote]]
** Mykan's hatred of [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle, her death, and the subsequent UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming]] have since become well-known despite all the spoiler tags surrounding it. [[FanFic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony Two]] [[FanFic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis deconstructions]] take place after [[spoiler:her death]].
** [[MadLibsCatchphrase "[Character] is/does [their one personality trait]. That's it."]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Lampshading how [[FlatCharacter flat]] Mykan's "original" characters, as well as [[{{Flanderization}} the FiM cast]], are.[[/labelnote]]
** Mykan creating entire species that are AlwaysChaoticEvil.
** Because Cadance is HappilyMarried and [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] aren't. [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reason for why he [[TheChewToy tortures]] Princess Cadance in his fics [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
** Because Twilight preaches about the Magic of Friendship, tries to force this way of thinking onto others, and thinks she's better than everyone.[[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reasons [[CriticalResearchFailure (some of which are entirely inaccurate)]] for why he hates and [[TheChewToy tortures]] Twilight in his fics [[spoiler:and eventually kills her]] [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
** [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]] [[labelnote:explanation]]This is mostly used on Wiki/TvTropes to [[SincerityMode assure]] people reading the tropes pages for ''Starfleet Magic'' that the incredibly ridiculous examples of Mykan's writing and/or reasoning are completely true.[[/labelnote]]
* MemeticPsychopath: As noted under AlternativeCharacterInterpretation, it's all too common for Celesto to be depicted as a dictator and Unicornicopia as [[CrapsaccharineWorld a fascist dystopia]]. It doesn't help that riffers keep finding unintentional parallels to ''Literature/NineteenEightyFour'' in the writing.
* {{Moe}}: Raven's original form as an Equestrian [[https://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/MBPSFM-Raven-512986122 (pictured bottom right)]] [[DamnedByFaintPraise was admittedly kind of adorable]].
* MoralEventHorizon:
** The Grand Ruler crosses it in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', when he actually makes Twilight believe she is responsible for an entire family getting hurt, just so he can teach her that she should always follow his orders blindly.
** Lightning Dawn has one of his own in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Humans''. After Principal Celestia kicks Starla out of the play due to photographic evidence of her trashing the props and costumes, Lightning barges into her office, insults her and even states that ''it's a good thing her pet horse is dead.'' This causes Celestia to attack him but, of course, being a Gary-Stu, he's not affected by the punches and chokes and he fells her with a flip, a shove and by smashing a cup of coffee onto her head, which burns her. Naturally, Grand Ruler finds Celestia at fault and fires her. Lightning feeling ashamed of what he did and getting suspended doesn't negate his actions one bit since he runs off and doesn't go back to help and doesn't apologize to her until later in the fic.
*** As shown in UnintentionallySympathetic below, Celestia's attack is ''supposed'' to be seen as this for her. However, see below to understand why that's a load of [[{{Pun}} horsecrap.]]
** [[spoiler:Twilight]] dies and rather than blame, you know, ''the killer for killing [[spoiler:her]]'', Starfleet blames [[spoiler:Twilight]] for [[spoiler:her]] own death. Yeah, [[VictimBlaming Starfleet blames someone for their own death]] because they had the gall to disobey orders and try and fight someone who was a threat to someone they love. [[SarcasmMode Our heroes, everyone]].
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* {{Narm}}: [[Narm/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* NightmareFuel: Ace Ray's "[[MindRape reprogramming]]" in the original version of ''Starfleet Magic III'', which reads eerily like the infamous "Room101" scene from ''[[Literature/NineteenEightyFour 1984]]'' - and serves much the same purpose, too. It's made even worse by the fact that '''this is carried out [[DesignatedHero by the heroes]]''' and that it's meant to be seen as a '''[[ProtagonistCenteredMorality good thing]]'''.
** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history, from a moral standpoint.
** Cadance [[spoiler:[[MummiesAtTheDinnerTable keeping the corpse of her stillborn colt around for 9 chapters]]]] is just plain creepy and {{squick}}y, even if [[spoiler:[[ArtisticLicenseBiology decomposition doesn't seem to be an issue]]. [[DisproportionateRetribution Also, keep in the mind that the author is doing]] [[FelonyMisdemeanor this because he is enraged at the fact that Cadance is]] HappilyMarried [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]]]].
* OvershadowedByControversy: Although people can [[InNameOnly find]] [[ComplainingAboutComplaining plenty to dislike]] [[SelfInsertFic about the fic itself]]; the fanfic is remembered more for the author's [[{{Wangst}} wangsting and whining about MLP:FiM]] and how bad it is than the fact that it's a fanfic at all. His notoriety in the ''Franchise/{{Digimon}}'' and ''WesternAnimation/TeenTitans'' fandoms haven't helped.
* {{Padding}}:
** The author outright admits to using this, as he believes he has to fill a word quota. More specifically, he believes that every chapter has to be an equivalent length to a half-hour TV episode, with no exceptions.
*** Amazingly, he complains in the author's notes of the third series about how long his fanfics are, and yet does nothing to fix this.
** Aside from padding in-chapters, Mykan seems to have an obsession with writing 26 episodes per-season, which leads to many episodes where nothing advances the plot. The biggest offenders are in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' (as one MST points out, you can reorder most of the chapters without affecting the overall plot) and ''Starfleet Magic VI'' (which doesn't have an overarching plot so much as it does a bunch of unrelated story arcs stuck together).
* PainfulRhyme: Rhymey is meant to be an {{Expy}} of [[LiveAction/TodaysSpecial Muffy the Mouse]]. However, whereas Muffy's dialogue was written by people who knew what they were doing, Rhymey just rhymes for the sake of rhyme. And as you can guess, ''none'' of them are good. [[SarcasmMode Even better]], unlike Muffy who actually had a personality, in tune with the fic's [[FlatCharacter Flat Characters]], rhyming is Rhymey's only notable trait. Hence why he's the most hated character out of the lot.
** [[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic Zecora]] isn't immune to this either, especially with the way her accent is imitated. Seems to be a running gag in this story that nopony can rhyme...
** Taken UpToEleven in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', where there is an entire chapter written in rhymes. Ironically, it may be one of the better chapters in the entire story even though it plagiarizes an episode of ''{{WesternAnimation/Arthur}}''.
* RootingForTheEmpire: The story is meant as a RevengeFic against ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'', centering around ponies in another dimension and[=/=]or in space, fighting off an evil sorcerer [[AvertedTrope without]] ThePowerOfFriendship and therefore being superior to the cast of the original show. Many readers actually wished to see the bad guy win, just so that the main characters get their asses kicked.
** Especially the case with the ArcVillain Windy Bag in ''VI'', whose goal boils down to kicking Starfleet off of Equestria. Considering Starfleet's DesignatedHero status and treatment of the Equestrian population, it's not hard to see her as a WellIntentionedExtremist at worst. It helps that she also has a vendetta against a blatant AuthorAvatar, and a particularly jerkish one at that.
** In an actual decent twist, in chapter 20 of the original badfic, we find out that Serpent Tyrant's motive for collecting the Rainbow Stones is to undo the genocide his son Titan had caused. Other than being told the supposed Dimension of Darkness's denizens are evil, there are no indications of them committing great atrocities and we are only seeing things from a certain point of view - [[HolierThanThou The]] [[DesignatedHero Unicornicopians.]] It's also not hard to see him as a WellIntentionedExtremist.
** The Insectos in ''Starfleet Magic V''. Unlike most villains, the Insecto royals actually have a better family dynamic than any of the heroes, making them easier to sympathize with, especially as Pinsar actually says that he served Titan in part to keep his family safe. Additionally, they can easily be interpreted as {{Proud Warrior Race Guy}}s rather than AlwaysChaoticEvil, as the only evidence of them doing anything evil is [[UnreliableNarrator the word of Starfleet]].
* TheScrappy:
** While most of Mykan's "original" characters are detested, Rhymey is the least liked out of all of them [[PainfulRhyme for his incessant awful rhyming]]. It doesn't help that he ends up being paired with [[TheCutie Fluttershy]].
** Grand Ruler. Racism aside, he mostly lets Lightning Dawn and friends do all the work, [[TheGodsMustBeLazy only pitching in when the plot calls for it]] (and that rarely happens). And then there was [[MoralEventHorizon what he did to Twilight Sparkle]] in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II''.
** On the subject of MLP canon characters, Pony!Celestia has been getting flak for [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blaming Twilight for her own death]] [[UngratefulBitch even though she tried to protect her]], [[CanonDefilement which her canon self would never have done]].]] Even [[StrawmanHasAPoint Brass Bolt]] is disappointed in what she's become.
* {{Sequelitis}}: The original story has four sequels and counting, one's a "movie" and another is based on WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls, and they don't get any better. [=Beats0me=], a Website/DeviantArt member who draws parody comics of MLU, noted that the beginning of the series is SoBadItsGood, reminiscent of watching a corny old kids' action cartoon. However, the further it goes on, the more racism, sexism and other disturbing content start cropping up.
* SerialNumbersFiledOff: The prologue and first two chapters are pretty much a rip-off of the pilot episodes of ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic''.
* SnarkBait: If you didn't read the main page, just look at the other entries on this page for an explanation.
* SoBadItsGood: For some. The sequels are a much different case as shown by the {{Sequelitis}} entry.
* StrangledByTheRedString:
** Lightning and Starla, who fall in love immediately for no reason besides that the main character needs a love interest.
** Rhymey and Fluttershy as well, both pony and human versions.
** Ditto the Grand Ruler and Princess Celestia, both pony and human versions.
** Additionally, there is Sunset Shimmer and Human!Artie Bristles.
* StrawmanHasAPoint:
** In ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', there is an ex-Wonderbolt named Ace Ray who was kicked off the squad for [[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong badmouthing Starfleet]] and has become [[StrawLoser a loser who sits around stuffing his face all day]]. However, he accuses the Starfleet of being arrogant and lazy for not taking action against their enemies sooner and thus leading to the destruction of Equestria. He also calls them out on assuming every enemy they fight is [[AlwaysChaoticEvil irredeemably evil without even considering the possibility that they might have a reason for acting that way]]. He then accuses them of being overlords due to their species essentially taking over United Equestria, doing everything of value, and Celesto being extremely powerful, both politically and literally. The reader is clearly supposed to side with his sister Skye, who tells him he's bad for speaking his mind about Starfleet. However, he makes some very good points that were mentioned by reviewers and [[{{MST}} riffers]] of the original fic.
** Twilight Sparkle protests [[MurderIsTheBestSolution Starfleet killing all of their enemies]], Krysta and Lightning Dawn's argument can be summed up as "[[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong Starfleet is always right, everyone else is always wrong.]]"
** ''Starfleet Magic VI'' has Brass Bolt, who's basically Ace Ray 2.0, and makes even ''better'' points about Starfleet than Ace did. It's very hard not to agree with him, especially since his thoughts and situation read very much like a protagonist in dystopian fiction and are completely accurate to Starfleet's portrayal. To quote the story itself:
--> “They come to our world, lead their enemies to us, and if that wasn’t bad enough they turned us from normal ponies into these human shaped weirdos! Oh, and to add insult to injury, they treat us all like we’re inferior and enslave us with their martial laws, and when trouble comes they just fight and kill, and they arrest creatures with no good reason…
--> …They’re nothing but a bunch of silly, overbearing tyrannical dictators! Why can’t you guys see that? Why can’t anyone see that?”
* TakeThatScrappy: Rhymey is one of the more hated original characters because [[RhymesOnADime he speaks in nothing but rhymes]], [[PainfulRhyme and unfortunately, not good ones]]. [[note]]The canon character Zecora also speaks in rhyme, but unlike Rhymey, she actually has a personality.[[/note]] An unintentional example happens when he confronts Ace Ray in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic III'', who is in the process of making [[StrawmanHasAPoint points about Unicornicopia that are more valid than the author realizes]].
-->'''Rhymey''': [[PainfulRhyme There's no need to make a fuss / there is nothing he can do to us]].\\
'''Ace Ray''': [[CrowningMomentOfFunny And you... will YOU STOP WITH THAT RHYMING]]!
** The entire fic is ''supposed'' to be this towards the entire cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic FiM]]'' based on the fact that its message of friendship "hurt him", which is shown by having them all go through plenty of torment (such as losing their entire planet, being enslaved, or worst case scenario, [[spoiler:the death of friends and unborn family]]). And as you can tell from the rest of this page and beyond, this didn't work in the slightest, [[UnintentionallySympathetic as all the viewers end up doing is sympathizing with the denizens of former Equestria]] [[UnintentionallyUnsympathetic and despising Starfleet]].
%%* TheyCopiedItSoItSucks: One of the problems with the fic is Mykan copying plots and elements from ''Friendship is Magic'' only without what made ''[=FiM=]'' good in the first place.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodCharacter:
** Cerise from ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' is a major in Starfleet, can stand toe-to-toe with Lightning and can use the Uniforce. She was a one-shot character up until ''Starfleet Magic VI'', where her appearance consists of her completely sucking at her job.
** [[spoiler:Whenever Twilight's spirit shows up, she only appears to motivate the others before she's quickly forgotten about. As per usual with Mykan's hatred for the character, she's not allowed to be useful even as a ghost.]]
** Brass Bolt from ''Starfleet Magic VI'' is a SuspiciouslySimilarSubstitute for Ace Ray who wants to see a revolution overthrowing Starfleet and sets an entire prison's populace loose on them, making for a very interesting potential BigBad who's not a completely clichéd GenericDoomsdayVillain. Instead, he gets busted in the second chapter by a cheap {{Asspull}}. Even better, the author later complains that [[{{Irony}} he's having trouble driving the story forward without a Big Bad pulling the strings]].
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot:
** It may sound far-fetched, but the relationship between Lightning and [[ParentalSubstitute the Grand Ruler]] could have been quite an interesting plot arc.
** Despite the controversy surrounding it, [[spoiler:the idea of teaching about the death of a loved one could have been a good idea had Mykan just focused on meaningful character interactions and development instead of UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming and his own hatred for the pony in question, Twilight Sparkle.]]
* TrappedByMountainLions:
** Goldwin's episodes solely exist to plagiarize ''Series/TodaysSpecial'' and add absolutely nothing to the overall plot.
** ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'' has a subplot involving Celesto Grandruler working on the International Space Station. This adds absolutely nothing to the main plot.
** The Black Dragon Knight subplot of ''Starflet Magic V'' has virtually no impact on the main conflict against the Insectos.
* UncannyValley: The Unicornicopians are represented as pony heads on top of humanoid bodies, and later the Equestrians are forcibly converted into being the same thing. The result is completely unsettling, with some characters resembling colourful [[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tikbalang tikbalangs]]. Not helping is how obviously photoshopped the images are.
** Probably the worst example is [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/MBPSFM-Professor-Brain-435602978 Brain]], who's supposed to look old, but has a younger face with a balding head.
* UnintentionallySympathetic: Anyone who opposes [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] can be considered this.
** [[StrawmanHasAPoint Ace Ray]]: Even in the rewritten version, it is still this trope. For punching his sister upon being insulted and rejected by her, and the others who don't agree with him in making correct assumptions about Starfleet being an oppressive government, he is punished by getting his freedom taken away from him. Even though he's a clearly sane but jaded guy, he was pretty much stated to be imprisoned in an asylum for life. Wait, this sounds similar to Room101. Seriously, read his entire chapter and see if you can deem him [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/Episode-5-Truth-Hurts-468597311 insane:]]
-->''No one had ever broken out from this asylum, and even If they had there was no way they could leave the planet. The warp portals that led out into Dimensional Space were inaccessible by all convicts. Any one of them who tried to enter only got tossed back out again.''[...] '' Poor Ace, he did not take being locked up very well, and continued to insist he wasn’t insane, only to be restrained and sedated by the medical staff.''
** Human!Celestia in ''Starfleet Humans''. It's shown at the beginning when Lightning [[TooDumbToLive sings and dances while in the middle of the road she is driving on,]] clearly stressed and upset. Granted, it's not a good idea to look at your notes while driving, but the story [[NeverMyFault (and Lightning)]] shoehorns all the blame towards her for getting angry at him. When the fic reveals that her pet horse died, which led her into a HeroicBSOD [[spoiler:courtesy of Sapphira]], Lightning uses it as ammo against her in the aforementioned MoralEventHorizon above. We're supposed to see the attack as ''her's'' instead, as indicated by Luna calling her a 'monster' (even though, as mentioned earlier, Lightning was not hurt at all), but granted, Lightning, maybe saying that it's a good thing someone's pet is dead wasn't exactly the best course of action when you're trying to prove your friend's innocence.
** [[spoiler:Twilight dies and Starfleet has the nerve to blame her for her death because she disobeyed orders. Keep in mind, Twilight disobeyed orders to try and protect her loved ones from Raven, so even if you did consider her actions to be irrational, there would be a good reason for that behavior. So Starfleet, [[DesignatedHero as always]], just come across as assholes who only want that everyone follows what they say.]]
** Brass Bolt also shares this treatment. As noted in his entry in StrawmanHasAPoint, he's supposed to be seen as wrong for accusing Starfleet of being evil, but the writing never gives a good enough reason as to why the reader should side against him. The closest the story gets is having him release all of the prisoners from one of Starfleet's prisons, which actually makes him ''more'' sympathetic given that Starfleet's treatment of prisoners [[HellholePrison would likely qualify as a gross violation of civil rights (and probably the Geneva Convention as well) in real life]].
* UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: [[UpToEleven Practically the entire cast.]] The Equestria cast is simply TooDumbToLive or too busy CharacterShilling Starfleet ([[{{Flanderization}} not to mention that they've all been reduced to one-note cutouts that hardly resemble their canon selves]]}. Starfleet is full of [[FantasticRacism racist]], sexist, and [[DesignatedHero outright sociopathic "heroes" who see anyone who disagrees with them as their enemies]]. [[SarcasmMode Our heroes, everyone]].
* {{Wangst}}:
** Goldwin's a veritable fountain of this regarding [[PinocchioSyndrome his desire to become a normal pony]] and to be able to leave the palace grounds. It becomes tiresome rather quickly, especially as [[TrappedByMountainLions it contributes nothing to the main plot]].
** Human Starla bemoaning the fact that she is attracted with Lightning Dawn despite knowing that he is married can get tiring really quickly.
** Pony Mykan Stevens is practically made of this trope. He's so adamant about refusing help from Starfleet and driving them away, firmly believing that they don't actually care about him and that they can't understand what he's going through, that it's a wonder the protagonists put up with him at all.
** Lightning angsting over the destruction of his planet and his people is understandable. Lightning refusing to celebrate his birthday ever again because his planet happened to be destroyed on that day goes into wangsty territory.
* WhatAnIdiot: [[WhatAnIdiot/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* WhatDoYouMeanItsForKids: The story preaches that things like love and tolerance are actually worthless and only brute force can lead to true happiness. Characters get KilledOffForReal in rather brutal ways for little kids, and there are certain sexual innuendos to be found in the entire story. Yet the author proclaims that the fanfiction is way better entertainment for kids than the actual show it rips off.
** The best example for it may be a chapter of ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', in which Fluttershy is in the hospital to be operated on. A changeling slips in and tries to kill her by cutting her open and letting her bleed to death.
** Chapter 13 of ''Starfleet Magic VI'' is another good example: it deals with the full ramifications of a MayflyDecemberRomance, kills off the VillainOfTheWeek via RapidAging, and ends on a none-too-subtly implied sex scene. [[SarcasmMode Y'know, for kids]].
* TheWoobie: Twilight Sparkle and Cadance both need hugs [[TheChewToy given what the story puts them through]], even more so when you factor in that [[AuthorTract it's because the author just hates them for no good reason]].
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* AccidentalInnuendo:
** Lightning's main weapon is the Rainbow Rod, a long stick with a ball, which shoots rainbows and has to be held tightly between his hooves.
*** Even better: After using it, Lightning is usually exhausted and it takes a certain amount of time [[DoesThisRemindYouOfAnything to recharge]].
*** It certainly doesn't help that the first time he used it was to [[AccidentalPun take out Dementia's flower monster]].
** One-shot character Cerise uses the Magenta Lance.
** "Artie and Rep-Stallion were going at it hard. His scythe against Artie's big brush spear…" Yeah.
** Among the nonsensical lyrics in the Demonites'/D-Man Knights' cover of ''Thriller'', there's rhyming "D-Man" with "C-Man".
* AlternativeCharacterInterpretation:
** The Grand Ruler: [[TheGoodKing benevolent king]], or racist tyrant?
*** [[TakeAThirdOption OR]] a [[TheGodsMustBeLazy slothful godking]] who lets Lightning Dawn and friends do all the dirty work?
*** ''OR'' a diabolical mastermind ObfuscatingStupidity who hates three-dimensional personalities that is slowly conquering the universe, one [[{{Brainwashed}} morality-altered planet]] at a time?
** Unicornicopia: a utopian paradise, or autocratic dystopia?
*** Or [[Film/{{Brazil}} too paper-thin and inefficient a dystopia]] without Lightning Dawn and his merry band?
** Titan: a villain with no redeeming qualities at all, or a bitter old man who lost his mind because no one ever gave him a chance, leaving [[ThenLetMeBeEvil turning to the dark side as his only option]]?
*** Or an EvilSorcerer who is plagued with BondVillainStupidity to a degree similar to a bad {{Sentai}} villain?
** Starfleet in general, with its tendencies to act as a multiversal police force and army, can seem like an evil overlord's armed force, making sure that everyone obeys the whims of the Unicornicopian overlords.
*** And even then, the only Starfleet people shown to be any effective at that are [[RuleOfThree Lightning Dawn and co.]] (Seriously, was there ever a Starfleet RedShirt that showed their prowess in battle at '''any point''' in the series?)
** For that matter, Ace Ray. Is he a bitter washout who [[UngratefulBastard badmouths the people who saved his life]]? Is he going through a hard time in his life and looking for some form of solace when no one will support him? [[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong Or is he being unfairly persecuted for daring to speak the truth about the regime]]?
*** Although he should have simply [[ScrewThisImOuttaHere quietly left said regime]] as, well, it's nowhere near as effective at security.
** The mysterious future voices in ''Starfleet Magic IV''. Helpful guides or sociopaths looking to torment Cadance?
** Brass Bolt: an eventual wannabe terrorist, who will be rebuked or [[TragicVillain shot]] by Starfleet in the end, with a possibility he could end up in a worse position than Ace Ray...
*** Or a young naive [[HeroAntagonist freedom fighter]] who actually had the guts to act with haste instead of feeling indifferent like Ace Ray.
*** Or the initiate of actual substance in terms of plot and characterization. Doubtful, but his realistic reaction to the setting gives us a whole new perspective towards the fic...
** As a meta interpretation, are we seeing through the eyes of happy content citizens and heroes of the greater good...
*** Or a brainwashed and indoctrinated society where tyranny rules over their lives without them noticing it? After all, we are always seeing it in the perspective of Lightning Dawn in the lessons he learned which praise Starfleet's methods. The Badfic itself could be inverse propaganda intended for children and the next generation of Unicornicopians. A true Antithesis to MLP [=FiM=]'s intent. There are [[Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis two]] [[Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony stories]] that go with this interpretation.
* ArchivePanic: These fanfics are ''long and numerous.'' If you want to catch up, be warned.
* {{Asspull}}: Here's a short list of examples:
** Lightning suddenly being able to summon the Uniforce because he remembers to believe, right when Titan is going to kill him.
** In the rewrite, Nightmare Moon destroys Twilight's wings; it's never explained how she's able to do this, why she does this, why she doesn't do the same with the Pegasi or other princesses, or why she doesn't take her horn as well.
** [[spoiler:Brain turns out to have a spaceship in his backyard, which the others use to escape the exploding Unicornicopia.]]
** [[spoiler:Celesto and Celestia fusing and turning into the Great Celestial Ruler, who destroys Titan]].
** [[spoiler:The MLP and Starfleet ponies being able to reconstruct a planet through the power of belief]].
** [[spoiler:Lightning is the last of a race of creatures known as Enticorns, which, as [[WordOfGod the author confirms]], is partially based off of [[Anime/DragonBallZ Super Saiyans]]]].
** [[spoiler:In ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'', Human!Grand Ruler was capable of surviving being lost in ''outer space'' while being low on oxygen.]]
* BileFascination: There are some people out there that will read the story just to see what's so controversial about it.
* CanonDefilement: While the fic itself is often loathed for making the cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic Friendship is Magic]]'' less competent to make Starfleet look superior, Celestia in particular is given the worst of it when she [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blames Twilight Sparkle, her own student, for getting killed instead of blaming Raven for killing her]], and pretty much acts as a ReplacementGoldfish for the Element of Magic, even though Celestia would never pull this kind of thing in canon. [[DesignatedHero And she (along with Starfleet) is supposed to be in the right for thinking this.]]]]
* CaptainObviousAesop:
** One of the many Aesops given out by the Grand Ruler can be summed up as "There are different ways to solve problems."
*** ...Which is another BrokenAesop, considering that throughout the fanfic, the Unicornicopians are portrayed as always being right and those who have different solutions are always wrong.
** Another one deals with how nightmares are frightening.
* ClicheStorm:
** Let's see... The villain is an ObviouslyEvil wizard who lives in a [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment dark castle in the dimension of darkness]]. His minions are a TerribleTrio consisting of a shallow VainSorceress, a [[EvilGenius schemer]], and [[TheBrute a brute]], none of whom possess any redeeming or positive qualities. On the other [[InsistentTerminology hoof]], we have a realm of good where the unicorns live happily without any personal conflict between each other, are ruled by a wise king and protected by a group of SuperSentai[=/=]MagicalGirl-inspired good guys, whose leader has a fairy sidekick, defeats monsters with ''Franchise/SailorMoon''-based moves and has to learn to believe in himself.
%% ** Ditto for ''Starfleet Humans''; it's pretty much just ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls Equestria Girls]]'', but with elements of ''Film/HighSchoolMusical''.
* CreatorsPet:
** Lightning Dawn, Rhymey, and the Grand Ruler.
** The sequel adds Goldwin to it, an {{Expy}} of Jeff from ''Series/TodaysSpecial''. Several episodes in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' (which plagiarize entire episodes of ''Today's Special'') are made specifically to involve Goldwin, even when they add nothing to the overall plot whatsoever.
** Ironically, while the author is willing to shout at everyone who makes fun of his characters, he does not care for the majority of them at all, ignoring them completely if he thinks that they serve no purpose for him anymore outside of battle scenes.
* CriticalResearchFailure: [[CriticalResearchFailure/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* DamselScrappy: Krysta in the earlier installments, who spent too much time playing the DamselInDistress and [[CaptainObvious stating the obvious]] to be of any actual use to the heroes. Even when she does try to fight, her contributions are so minimal she might as well not be there.
* DesignatedHero: The heroes are this to some extent. As described elsewhere on this page and even the main page, their practices and beliefs can be very questionable, if not outright horrible. About the only thing that could prevent them from entirely qualifying is the fact the main villains are often legitimately evil and not {{Designated Villain}}s.
** [[AuthorAvatar Mykan Jaden]] from Dakari-King Mykan's Yu-Gi-Oh!/Totally Spies fanfics, the last of which crosses over with My Little Pony. In the "final season", in spite of being a "master duelist", he makes two rookies duel brainwashed ponies despite knowing that, should they lose, they'll get brainwashed too. When the rookies triumph and Shining Armor is teleported away, Mykan gets so mad at a brainwashed Cadance for trying to brainwash and accidentally destroy his world with card games and double crossing them on a deal they made, [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/Chapter-16-Part-2-Tough-Love-524582150 he soundly beats her up]] with the power of a Millenium Item. When Mykan attempts to finish her and is stopped by his wife, he implies [[VictimBlaming that it's Cadance's fault]] that he nearly killed her. Incidentally, in the author's note at the end of that particular chapter, the author Mykan notes that it felt good to beat up Cadance in a manner that makes it sounds like he jizzed to it, then goes on to state [[BlatantLies he wouldn't disrespect real-life women like that.]]
** ''Starfleet Magic VI'' gives us the case of [[AuthorAvatar the pony counterpart of Mykan Stevens]]. He spends most of the season being an antagonistic {{Jerkass}} towards everybody and tries his level best to BeAsUnhelpfulAsPossible toward Starfleet as they deal with their latest threat, and ultimately, they end up unintentionally spurring him into a RoaringRampageOfRevenge against the ArcVillain ''after'' they've already pretty much defeated said villain. This results in Mykan going out in a SenselessSacrifice that inflicts untold amounts of gratuitous collateral damage, at which point Starfleet has him memorialized as a hero despite him never having demonstrated any sort of heroic behavior whatsoever.
* DesignatedMonkey:
** Cadance, full stop. The author hates her for being HappilyMarried (whereas [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] [[DidNotGetTheGirl didn't hook up with Terra and Kari Kamiya, respectively]]; [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer yes, really]]), so he makes her [[spoiler:kill her own brother who's been turned partly mechanical and evil]], suffer horrific nightmares, get beaten up by the AuthorAvatar, and [[spoiler:miscarry when a pillar topples onto her]]. For some reason, [[DoubleStandard even though he's her husband, Shining Armor doesn't get punished nearly as much]]...
*** Despite the "hates Cadance for being HappilyMarried" excuse, other relatively happy couples have shown up (Spike and Rarity, Lightning and Starla, Fluttershy and Rhymey) and haven't been been treated nearly as badly as Cadance has. Make of that what you will.
*** Shockingly, it now turns out that Cadance has been rendered infertile after that pillar thing.....and Shining Armor as well, due to his brainwashing and transformed state. Yes, neither one can ever have a kid now (adopting is out of the question for some reason), and to top it off, he has them keep a nursery in their home as well. Because they cannot bring themselves to get rid of it.
*** The only reason that Cadance hasn't been killed off like [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle]] is because, in Mykan's eyes, [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer pretty much everyone is expendable, including himself, apparently]]. He can just kill off anypony he wants, if he ever sees it fit. But Cadance is a special case; he wants her kept alive [[FateWorseThanDeath just so he can punish her]], [[DisproportionateRetribution all for the reason that she's married in canon]].
** Twilight Sparkle is another character that Mykan hates for [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/690404/im-true-to-myself-3-rant-why-i-hate-twilight-sparkle utterly ridiculous reasons]]. Shortly after Equestria is introduced in the rewrite, she loses her wings (though at least she gets them back offscreen), the MLP cast as a whole TookALevelInDumbass, she's called out for not following the Grand Ruler's orders no matter what, and of course [[spoiler:she is murdered, which Starfleet and [[OutOfCharacter Celestia]] [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for]] and the latter takes up her mantle as the Element of Magic]].
*** This even extends to ''Starfleet Humans''; despite chronologically taking place before the first ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls Equestria Girls]]'' film, the human Twilight Sparkle is shoehorned in, and contributes nothing to the plot other than getting yelled at by Lightning regularly over petty things.
* DesignatedVillain:
** May not exactly be an in-universe villain so much as merely an in-universe loser, but Ace Ray can still qualify.
** Brass Bolt for speaking out against Starfleet's draconian nature. The author tries to take sympathy away from him by having him release a bunch of prisoners, but seeing how our DesignatedHero cast mistreat the prisoners, it actually makes him more likable.
* EightDeadlyWords: Due to the [[DesignatedHero heroes being utterly unlikable]] [[FlatCharacter cardboard cutouts]], canon characters being stripped of their likable traits, loads of racism, sexism, all-around ''fucked-up'' morality, and {{Cliche}}d villains that always lose, there's no point in reading the series.
* EnsembleDarkhorse: Ace Ray. See StrawmanHasAPoint and TakeThatScrappy below. Mykan tries to make him come off as insane, but he really doesn't.
** Brass Bolt as well, for much the same reasons as well as actually taking some kind of action against Starfleet.
** Windy Bag, for pretty much the same reasons as the other two, trying to change Equestria back to the way it was, and having a vendetta against Mykan's most blatant AuthorAvatar.
** Despite suffering from [[TookALevelInDumbass the same fate as her fellow Equestrians]], Twilight Sparkle herself is this for at least being among the closest to her canon self, as well as gaining pity points from viewers who rightfully believe [[TheChewToy she's treated horribly by the Space Ponies]]. [[spoiler:Her death at the hands of Raven has also sparked several more accusations of Starfleet being unlikable, due to them [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blaming her for her own death]] because she disobeyed Starfleet.]] After all that's happened, it's hard not to see her as TheWoobie. Cadance is also this, for the same reasons (just replace [[spoiler:death]] with [[spoiler:having a miscarriage and her and her husband being rendered infertile for life]], and you're golden).
* EthnicScrappy: Dyno and Myte are basically a pair of walking Hispanic stereotypes that like blowing things up and basically nothing else. Ditto for Brain, whose main purpose seems to be rattling off StockBritishPhrases and occasionally providing an invention or two while contributing virtually nothing when things get hairy.
* FamilyUnfriendlyAesop: [[FamilyUnfriendlyAesop/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* FoeYay: Aplenty between Spike and the Black Dragon Knight. Spike first identifies the Knight as female by smelling her pheromones ([[DoesThisRemindYouOfAnything which already has a certain subtext]]), and she spends almost all of her appearances [[WeCanRuleTogether persuading him to join her]]. Not to mention, she really likes leaning in close to whisper in Spike's ear... [[spoiler:Becomes a bit squicky when the Black Dragon Knight is revealed to be Spike's sister.]]
* GirlShowGhetto: Essentially the whole story was written because Mykan hated the original series for being "girly" and was surprised that it appealed to boys at all. The story itself is even more stereotypically "girly" and childish that appeals to no one in particular.
* HarsherInHindsight: [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming Celestia blaming Twilight for her own death]] gets even worse as ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS7E1CelestialAdvice Celestial Advice]]'' shows that Celestia pretty much acted like a second mother to her. By having Celestia act like this, she's not just blaming her student; she's blaming a pony she'd grown attached to since youth.]]
* HilariousInHindsight:
** Mykan always wanted to make a more action-oriented story than ''Friendship Is Magic'', to no real avail. Come [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS4E26TwilightsKingdomPart2 the season 4 finale]], suddenly the show he hates gets an action sequence that blows anything he could write out of the water (not like that's particularly hard). {{Irony}} at its finest.
** The series has always stated that personalities are pathetic, cutie marks are stupid, individuality is wrong unless you're the leader, it's okay to shun and belittle others who are not the same as you, and that dissenters should be locked up and/or brainwashed. Cue [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E1TheCutieMapPart1 the Season 5 premiere]] of ''MLP'', featuring a society espousing those very "virtues"!
** Part of the main reason the fanfic was written was to denounce the values of Friendship and instead go with TheHero doing things all on his own, using the belief he has in himself. Irony of basing the fanfic off [[Franchise/PowerRangers a franchise based around teamwork]] aside, many detractors of My Little Pony have pointed out that the show's later arcs revolve around Twilight having to do things herself despite the theme of ThePowerOfFriendship.
** This is not the first time [[WesternAnimation/ATrollInCentralPark an infamously awful work implemented believing as its primary aesop.]]
** Mykan has stated that he wanted to give the Equestrians a dose of reality and [[EpicFail failed miserably]] [[Main/{{Irony}} at it]]. There would later come ''Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis'' and ''Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony'' which flat out ''succeed'' in [[DeconstructionFic applying]] [[RealityEnsues reality]] to the Unicornicopians.
** Turns out magic ''is'' believing in the MLP universe, but not the way Mykan imagined; according to the episode, ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS7E2AllBottledUp All Bottled Up]]'', [[EmotionalPowers magic is derived from a pony's emotions]], and also requires that the user have faith that the magic will work, i.e. "believing". For bonus points, [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/64687/my-little-unicorn-magic-is-believing-redo an attempted redo of Mykan's work]] had a similar idea.
* HoYay:
** Harkin's obsession with fighting against Lightning can easily be interpreted as an obsession of a ''[[FoeRomanceSubtext different]]'' kind.
** Grand Ruler angsting over the death of his old friend Starlight Braveheart in ''Starfleet Magic V'' has "[[TheLostLenore deceased love interest]]" written all over it.
* InferredHolocaust: At one point in ''III'', Frosteye freezes all of United Equestria over, with temperatures reaching as low as ''-100 degrees'' in parts such as the Crystal Empire. This is treated simply as global HarmlessFreezing by the story, but considering the toll it takes on Lightning and company despite their survival, it's safe to assume that some weren't so lucky...
* ItWasHisSled: [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle is killed in season 3, and Starfleet and Celestia [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]].]]
* JustHereForGodzilla: The fic's {{Ensemble Darkhorse}}s are one of its main draws. Seriously, Brass Bolt's entire, short lived character arc is a crowning moment of awesome, for simple virtue of one-upping Starfleet and basically giving them the biggest middle finger he could. But as was said, it was short lived.
* MarySuetopia: The world of [[IncrediblyLamePun Unicornicopia]].
* MemeticLoser: All of Starfleet due to how their [[InformedAbility supposed "superiority" is told rather than shown]] and they never demonstrate any remarkable ability that would make other races "inferior" to them. ''Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis'' and ''Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony'' [[DeconstructionFic both point out Starfleet's lack of effectiveness]].
* MemeticMutation:
** Dimension [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's tendency to describe any location as this.[[/labelnote]]
** SHUT THE F*CK UP, RHYMEY! [[labelnote:explanation]]The default response of most [=MSTers=] (and just in general people who have read ''Starfleet Magic'') to [[TheScrappy Rhymey's]] [[PainfulRhyme terrible rhymes]].[[/labelnote]]
** Rhymey: [[{{Fartillery}} Power of Flatulence]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Every member of Starfleet announces their element ([[FlatCharacter which also tends to be their one character trait]]). Rhymey's is [[PainfulRhyme "I summon within; power of wind!"]] Naturally, readers have taken [[ToiletHumor something else from that statement]].[[/labelnote]]
** "POWER OF ''FLORA''", YOU IDIOT! [[labelnote:explanation]][[GreenThumb Buddy Rose]] [[CriticalResearchFailure incorrectly announces "Power of Fauna"]] during the TransformationSequence when he should have said "Power of Flora". [[EnragedByIdiocy Reactions to this tend to be outrage at such a stupid mistake.]][[/labelnote]]
** PREFERENCES [[labelnote:explanation]]What Mykan uses to justify writing his stories the way they are; it's what he prefers. Naturally, people respond with the fact that, since Mykan is putting his stories out where others can read them, it is no longer about preferences and it is now about what makes a story good. Additionally, he thinks [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS6E13SpiceUpYourLife "Spice Up Your Life"]] justifies his writing however he wants.[[/labelnote]]
** Vanity [[labelnote:explanation]]What Mykan uses to explain why he and his works are so disliked. Responses to this are are typically YouKeepUsingThatWord. [[IResembleThatRemark There's also the fact that Mykan has proven to be quite egotistical such as believing that the writers of Friendship is Magic are copying his ideas.]] [[/labelnote]]
** [[OurDemonsAreDifferent Demons]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's idea that demons are all-powerful beings and thus numerous villains are at least partially demonic.[[/labelnote]]
** "PICK ONE TRAIT AND STICK TO IT!" [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's hatred of CharacterDevelopment; there's also his inability to comprehend that people can show multiple sides to themselves.[[/labelnote]]
** [[{{Hypocrite}} Also, Mykan's tendencies to contradict himself (i.e. Saying friendship is worthless, but creating a hero who would be useless without his friends).]]
** "He's not me, he's just ''voiced'' by me." [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's insistence that his obvious {{Author Avatar}}s are only voiced by him and [[BlatantLies do not reflect how he really is in person]]. Pony Mykan is the most blatant example of this.[[/labelnote]]
** Mykan's hatred of [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle, her death, and the subsequent UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming]] have since become well-known despite all the spoiler tags surrounding it. [[FanFic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony Two]] [[FanFic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis deconstructions]] take place after [[spoiler:her death]].
** [[MadLibsCatchphrase "[Character] is/does [their one personality trait]. That's it."]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Lampshading how [[FlatCharacter flat]] Mykan's "original" characters, as well as [[{{Flanderization}} the FiM cast]], are.[[/labelnote]]
** Mykan creating entire species that are AlwaysChaoticEvil.
** Because Cadance is HappilyMarried and [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] aren't. [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reason for why he [[TheChewToy tortures]] Princess Cadance in his fics [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
** Because Twilight preaches about the Magic of Friendship, tries to force this way of thinking onto others, and thinks she's better than everyone.[[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reasons [[CriticalResearchFailure (some of which are entirely inaccurate)]] for why he hates and [[TheChewToy tortures]] Twilight in his fics [[spoiler:and eventually kills her]] [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
** [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]] [[labelnote:explanation]]This is mostly used on Wiki/TvTropes to [[SincerityMode assure]] people reading the tropes pages for ''Starfleet Magic'' that the incredibly ridiculous examples of Mykan's writing and/or reasoning are completely true.[[/labelnote]]
* MemeticPsychopath: As noted under AlternativeCharacterInterpretation, it's all too common for Celesto to be depicted as a dictator and Unicornicopia as [[CrapsaccharineWorld a fascist dystopia]]. It doesn't help that riffers keep finding unintentional parallels to ''Literature/NineteenEightyFour'' in the writing.
* {{Moe}}: Raven's original form as an Equestrian [[https://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/MBPSFM-Raven-512986122 (pictured bottom right)]] [[DamnedByFaintPraise was admittedly kind of adorable]].
* MoralEventHorizon:
** The Grand Ruler crosses it in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', when he actually makes Twilight believe she is responsible for an entire family getting hurt, just so he can teach her that she should always follow his orders blindly.
** Lightning Dawn has one of his own in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Humans''. After Principal Celestia kicks Starla out of the play due to photographic evidence of her trashing the props and costumes, Lightning barges into her office, insults her and even states that ''it's a good thing her pet horse is dead.'' This causes Celestia to attack him but, of course, being a Gary-Stu, he's not affected by the punches and chokes and he fells her with a flip, a shove and by smashing a cup of coffee onto her head, which burns her. Naturally, Grand Ruler finds Celestia at fault and fires her. Lightning feeling ashamed of what he did and getting suspended doesn't negate his actions one bit since he runs off and doesn't go back to help and doesn't apologize to her until later in the fic.
*** As shown in UnintentionallySympathetic below, Celestia's attack is ''supposed'' to be seen as this for her. However, see below to understand why that's a load of [[{{Pun}} horsecrap.]]
** [[spoiler:Twilight]] dies and rather than blame, you know, ''the killer for killing [[spoiler:her]]'', Starfleet blames [[spoiler:Twilight]] for [[spoiler:her]] own death. Yeah, [[VictimBlaming Starfleet blames someone for their own death]] because they had the gall to disobey orders and try and fight someone who was a threat to someone they love. [[SarcasmMode Our heroes, everyone]].
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* {{Narm}}: [[Narm/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* NightmareFuel: Ace Ray's "[[MindRape reprogramming]]" in the original version of ''Starfleet Magic III'', which reads eerily like the infamous "Room101" scene from ''[[Literature/NineteenEightyFour 1984]]'' - and serves much the same purpose, too. It's made even worse by the fact that '''this is carried out [[DesignatedHero by the heroes]]''' and that it's meant to be seen as a '''[[ProtagonistCenteredMorality good thing]]'''.
** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history, from a moral standpoint.
** Cadance [[spoiler:[[MummiesAtTheDinnerTable keeping the corpse of her stillborn colt around for 9 chapters]]]] is just plain creepy and {{squick}}y, even if [[spoiler:[[ArtisticLicenseBiology decomposition doesn't seem to be an issue]]. [[DisproportionateRetribution Also, keep in the mind that the author is doing]] [[FelonyMisdemeanor this because he is enraged at the fact that Cadance is]] HappilyMarried [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]]]].
* OvershadowedByControversy: Although people can [[InNameOnly find]] [[ComplainingAboutComplaining plenty to dislike]] [[SelfInsertFic about the fic itself]]; the fanfic is remembered more for the author's [[{{Wangst}} wangsting and whining about MLP:FiM]] and how bad it is than the fact that it's a fanfic at all. His notoriety in the ''Franchise/{{Digimon}}'' and ''WesternAnimation/TeenTitans'' fandoms haven't helped.
* {{Padding}}:
** The author outright admits to using this, as he believes he has to fill a word quota. More specifically, he believes that every chapter has to be an equivalent length to a half-hour TV episode, with no exceptions.
*** Amazingly, he complains in the author's notes of the third series about how long his fanfics are, and yet does nothing to fix this.
** Aside from padding in-chapters, Mykan seems to have an obsession with writing 26 episodes per-season, which leads to many episodes where nothing advances the plot. The biggest offenders are in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' (as one MST points out, you can reorder most of the chapters without affecting the overall plot) and ''Starfleet Magic VI'' (which doesn't have an overarching plot so much as it does a bunch of unrelated story arcs stuck together).
* PainfulRhyme: Rhymey is meant to be an {{Expy}} of [[LiveAction/TodaysSpecial Muffy the Mouse]]. However, whereas Muffy's dialogue was written by people who knew what they were doing, Rhymey just rhymes for the sake of rhyme. And as you can guess, ''none'' of them are good. [[SarcasmMode Even better]], unlike Muffy who actually had a personality, in tune with the fic's [[FlatCharacter Flat Characters]], rhyming is Rhymey's only notable trait. Hence why he's the most hated character out of the lot.
** [[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic Zecora]] isn't immune to this either, especially with the way her accent is imitated. Seems to be a running gag in this story that nopony can rhyme...
** Taken UpToEleven in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', where there is an entire chapter written in rhymes. Ironically, it may be one of the better chapters in the entire story even though it plagiarizes an episode of ''{{WesternAnimation/Arthur}}''.
* RootingForTheEmpire: The story is meant as a RevengeFic against ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'', centering around ponies in another dimension and[=/=]or in space, fighting off an evil sorcerer [[AvertedTrope without]] ThePowerOfFriendship and therefore being superior to the cast of the original show. Many readers actually wished to see the bad guy win, just so that the main characters get their asses kicked.
** Especially the case with the ArcVillain Windy Bag in ''VI'', whose goal boils down to kicking Starfleet off of Equestria. Considering Starfleet's DesignatedHero status and treatment of the Equestrian population, it's not hard to see her as a WellIntentionedExtremist at worst. It helps that she also has a vendetta against a blatant AuthorAvatar, and a particularly jerkish one at that.
** In an actual decent twist, in chapter 20 of the original badfic, we find out that Serpent Tyrant's motive for collecting the Rainbow Stones is to undo the genocide his son Titan had caused. Other than being told the supposed Dimension of Darkness's denizens are evil, there are no indications of them committing great atrocities and we are only seeing things from a certain point of view - [[HolierThanThou The]] [[DesignatedHero Unicornicopians.]] It's also not hard to see him as a WellIntentionedExtremist.
** The Insectos in ''Starfleet Magic V''. Unlike most villains, the Insecto royals actually have a better family dynamic than any of the heroes, making them easier to sympathize with, especially as Pinsar actually says that he served Titan in part to keep his family safe. Additionally, they can easily be interpreted as {{Proud Warrior Race Guy}}s rather than AlwaysChaoticEvil, as the only evidence of them doing anything evil is [[UnreliableNarrator the word of Starfleet]].
* TheScrappy:
** While most of Mykan's "original" characters are detested, Rhymey is the least liked out of all of them [[PainfulRhyme for his incessant awful rhyming]]. It doesn't help that he ends up being paired with [[TheCutie Fluttershy]].
** Grand Ruler. Racism aside, he mostly lets Lightning Dawn and friends do all the work, [[TheGodsMustBeLazy only pitching in when the plot calls for it]] (and that rarely happens). And then there was [[MoralEventHorizon what he did to Twilight Sparkle]] in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II''.
** On the subject of MLP canon characters, Pony!Celestia has been getting flak for [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blaming Twilight for her own death]] [[UngratefulBitch even though she tried to protect her]], [[CanonDefilement which her canon self would never have done]].]] Even [[StrawmanHasAPoint Brass Bolt]] is disappointed in what she's become.
* {{Sequelitis}}: The original story has four sequels and counting, one's a "movie" and another is based on WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls, and they don't get any better. [=Beats0me=], a Website/DeviantArt member who draws parody comics of MLU, noted that the beginning of the series is SoBadItsGood, reminiscent of watching a corny old kids' action cartoon. However, the further it goes on, the more racism, sexism and other disturbing content start cropping up.
* SerialNumbersFiledOff: The prologue and first two chapters are pretty much a rip-off of the pilot episodes of ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic''.
* SnarkBait: If you didn't read the main page, just look at the other entries on this page for an explanation.
* SoBadItsGood: For some. The sequels are a much different case as shown by the {{Sequelitis}} entry.
* StrangledByTheRedString:
** Lightning and Starla, who fall in love immediately for no reason besides that the main character needs a love interest.
** Rhymey and Fluttershy as well, both pony and human versions.
** Ditto the Grand Ruler and Princess Celestia, both pony and human versions.
** Additionally, there is Sunset Shimmer and Human!Artie Bristles.
* StrawmanHasAPoint:
** In ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', there is an ex-Wonderbolt named Ace Ray who was kicked off the squad for [[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong badmouthing Starfleet]] and has become [[StrawLoser a loser who sits around stuffing his face all day]]. However, he accuses the Starfleet of being arrogant and lazy for not taking action against their enemies sooner and thus leading to the destruction of Equestria. He also calls them out on assuming every enemy they fight is [[AlwaysChaoticEvil irredeemably evil without even considering the possibility that they might have a reason for acting that way]]. He then accuses them of being overlords due to their species essentially taking over United Equestria, doing everything of value, and Celesto being extremely powerful, both politically and literally. The reader is clearly supposed to side with his sister Skye, who tells him he's bad for speaking his mind about Starfleet. However, he makes some very good points that were mentioned by reviewers and [[{{MST}} riffers]] of the original fic.
** Twilight Sparkle protests [[MurderIsTheBestSolution Starfleet killing all of their enemies]], Krysta and Lightning Dawn's argument can be summed up as "[[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong Starfleet is always right, everyone else is always wrong.]]"
** ''Starfleet Magic VI'' has Brass Bolt, who's basically Ace Ray 2.0, and makes even ''better'' points about Starfleet than Ace did. It's very hard not to agree with him, especially since his thoughts and situation read very much like a protagonist in dystopian fiction and are completely accurate to Starfleet's portrayal. To quote the story itself:
--> “They come to our world, lead their enemies to us, and if that wasn’t bad enough they turned us from normal ponies into these human shaped weirdos! Oh, and to add insult to injury, they treat us all like we’re inferior and enslave us with their martial laws, and when trouble comes they just fight and kill, and they arrest creatures with no good reason…
--> …They’re nothing but a bunch of silly, overbearing tyrannical dictators! Why can’t you guys see that? Why can’t anyone see that?”
* TakeThatScrappy: Rhymey is one of the more hated original characters because [[RhymesOnADime he speaks in nothing but rhymes]], [[PainfulRhyme and unfortunately, not good ones]]. [[note]]The canon character Zecora also speaks in rhyme, but unlike Rhymey, she actually has a personality.[[/note]] An unintentional example happens when he confronts Ace Ray in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic III'', who is in the process of making [[StrawmanHasAPoint points about Unicornicopia that are more valid than the author realizes]].
-->'''Rhymey''': [[PainfulRhyme There's no need to make a fuss / there is nothing he can do to us]].\\
'''Ace Ray''': [[CrowningMomentOfFunny And you... will YOU STOP WITH THAT RHYMING]]!
** The entire fic is ''supposed'' to be this towards the entire cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic FiM]]'' based on the fact that its message of friendship "hurt him", which is shown by having them all go through plenty of torment (such as losing their entire planet, being enslaved, or worst case scenario, [[spoiler:the death of friends and unborn family]]). And as you can tell from the rest of this page and beyond, this didn't work in the slightest, [[UnintentionallySympathetic as all the viewers end up doing is sympathizing with the denizens of former Equestria]] [[UnintentionallyUnsympathetic and despising Starfleet]].
%%* TheyCopiedItSoItSucks: One of the problems with the fic is Mykan copying plots and elements from ''Friendship is Magic'' only without what made ''[=FiM=]'' good in the first place.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodCharacter:
** Cerise from ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' is a major in Starfleet, can stand toe-to-toe with Lightning and can use the Uniforce. She was a one-shot character up until ''Starfleet Magic VI'', where her appearance consists of her completely sucking at her job.
** [[spoiler:Whenever Twilight's spirit shows up, she only appears to motivate the others before she's quickly forgotten about. As per usual with Mykan's hatred for the character, she's not allowed to be useful even as a ghost.]]
** Brass Bolt from ''Starfleet Magic VI'' is a SuspiciouslySimilarSubstitute for Ace Ray who wants to see a revolution overthrowing Starfleet and sets an entire prison's populace loose on them, making for a very interesting potential BigBad who's not a completely clichéd GenericDoomsdayVillain. Instead, he gets busted in the second chapter by a cheap {{Asspull}}. Even better, the author later complains that [[{{Irony}} he's having trouble driving the story forward without a Big Bad pulling the strings]].
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot:
** It may sound far-fetched, but the relationship between Lightning and [[ParentalSubstitute the Grand Ruler]] could have been quite an interesting plot arc.
** Despite the controversy surrounding it, [[spoiler:the idea of teaching about the death of a loved one could have been a good idea had Mykan just focused on meaningful character interactions and development instead of UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming and his own hatred for the pony in question, Twilight Sparkle.]]
* TrappedByMountainLions:
** Goldwin's episodes solely exist to plagiarize ''Series/TodaysSpecial'' and add absolutely nothing to the overall plot.
** ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'' has a subplot involving Celesto Grandruler working on the International Space Station. This adds absolutely nothing to the main plot.
** The Black Dragon Knight subplot of ''Starflet Magic V'' has virtually no impact on the main conflict against the Insectos.
* UncannyValley: The Unicornicopians are represented as pony heads on top of humanoid bodies, and later the Equestrians are forcibly converted into being the same thing. The result is completely unsettling, with some characters resembling colourful [[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tikbalang tikbalangs]]. Not helping is how obviously photoshopped the images are.
** Probably the worst example is [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/MBPSFM-Professor-Brain-435602978 Brain]], who's supposed to look old, but has a younger face with a balding head.
* UnintentionallySympathetic: Anyone who opposes [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] can be considered this.
** [[StrawmanHasAPoint Ace Ray]]: Even in the rewritten version, it is still this trope. For punching his sister upon being insulted and rejected by her, and the others who don't agree with him in making correct assumptions about Starfleet being an oppressive government, he is punished by getting his freedom taken away from him. Even though he's a clearly sane but jaded guy, he was pretty much stated to be imprisoned in an asylum for life. Wait, this sounds similar to Room101. Seriously, read his entire chapter and see if you can deem him [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/Episode-5-Truth-Hurts-468597311 insane:]]
-->''No one had ever broken out from this asylum, and even If they had there was no way they could leave the planet. The warp portals that led out into Dimensional Space were inaccessible by all convicts. Any one of them who tried to enter only got tossed back out again.''[...] '' Poor Ace, he did not take being locked up very well, and continued to insist he wasn’t insane, only to be restrained and sedated by the medical staff.''
** Human!Celestia in ''Starfleet Humans''. It's shown at the beginning when Lightning [[TooDumbToLive sings and dances while in the middle of the road she is driving on,]] clearly stressed and upset. Granted, it's not a good idea to look at your notes while driving, but the story [[NeverMyFault (and Lightning)]] shoehorns all the blame towards her for getting angry at him. When the fic reveals that her pet horse died, which led her into a HeroicBSOD [[spoiler:courtesy of Sapphira]], Lightning uses it as ammo against her in the aforementioned MoralEventHorizon above. We're supposed to see the attack as ''her's'' instead, as indicated by Luna calling her a 'monster' (even though, as mentioned earlier, Lightning was not hurt at all), but granted, Lightning, maybe saying that it's a good thing someone's pet is dead wasn't exactly the best course of action when you're trying to prove your friend's innocence.
** [[spoiler:Twilight dies and Starfleet has the nerve to blame her for her death because she disobeyed orders. Keep in mind, Twilight disobeyed orders to try and protect her loved ones from Raven, so even if you did consider her actions to be irrational, there would be a good reason for that behavior. So Starfleet, [[DesignatedHero as always]], just come across as assholes who only want that everyone follows what they say.]]
** Brass Bolt also shares this treatment. As noted in his entry in StrawmanHasAPoint, he's supposed to be seen as wrong for accusing Starfleet of being evil, but the writing never gives a good enough reason as to why the reader should side against him. The closest the story gets is having him release all of the prisoners from one of Starfleet's prisons, which actually makes him ''more'' sympathetic given that Starfleet's treatment of prisoners [[HellholePrison would likely qualify as a gross violation of civil rights (and probably the Geneva Convention as well) in real life]].
* UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: [[UpToEleven Practically the entire cast.]] The Equestria cast is simply TooDumbToLive or too busy CharacterShilling Starfleet ([[{{Flanderization}} not to mention that they've all been reduced to one-note cutouts that hardly resemble their canon selves]]}. Starfleet is full of [[FantasticRacism racist]], sexist, and [[DesignatedHero outright sociopathic "heroes" who see anyone who disagrees with them as their enemies]]. [[SarcasmMode Our heroes, everyone]].
* {{Wangst}}:
** Goldwin's a veritable fountain of this regarding [[PinocchioSyndrome his desire to become a normal pony]] and to be able to leave the palace grounds. It becomes tiresome rather quickly, especially as [[TrappedByMountainLions it contributes nothing to the main plot]].
** Human Starla bemoaning the fact that she is attracted with Lightning Dawn despite knowing that he is married can get tiring really quickly.
** Pony Mykan Stevens is practically made of this trope. He's so adamant about refusing help from Starfleet and driving them away, firmly believing that they don't actually care about him and that they can't understand what he's going through, that it's a wonder the protagonists put up with him at all.
** Lightning angsting over the destruction of his planet and his people is understandable. Lightning refusing to celebrate his birthday ever again because his planet happened to be destroyed on that day goes into wangsty territory.
* WhatAnIdiot: [[WhatAnIdiot/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* WhatDoYouMeanItsForKids: The story preaches that things like love and tolerance are actually worthless and only brute force can lead to true happiness. Characters get KilledOffForReal in rather brutal ways for little kids, and there are certain sexual innuendos to be found in the entire story. Yet the author proclaims that the fanfiction is way better entertainment for kids than the actual show it rips off.
** The best example for it may be a chapter of ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', in which Fluttershy is in the hospital to be operated on. A changeling slips in and tries to kill her by cutting her open and letting her bleed to death.
** Chapter 13 of ''Starfleet Magic VI'' is another good example: it deals with the full ramifications of a MayflyDecemberRomance, kills off the VillainOfTheWeek via RapidAging, and ends on a none-too-subtly implied sex scene. [[SarcasmMode Y'know, for kids]].
* TheWoobie: Twilight Sparkle and Cadance both need hugs [[TheChewToy given what the story puts them through]], even more so when you factor in that [[AuthorTract it's because the author just hates them for no good reason]].
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* AccidentalInnuendo:
** Lightning's main weapon is the Rainbow Rod, a long stick with a ball, which shoots rainbows and has to be held tightly between his hooves.
*** Even better: After using it, Lightning is usually exhausted and it takes a certain amount of time [[DoesThisRemindYouOfAnything to recharge]].
*** It certainly doesn't help that the first time he used it was to [[AccidentalPun take out Dementia's flower monster]].
** One-shot character Cerise uses the Magenta Lance.
** "Artie and Rep-Stallion were going at it hard. His scythe against Artie's big brush spear…" Yeah.
** Among the nonsensical lyrics in the Demonites'/D-Man Knights' cover of ''Thriller'', there's rhyming "D-Man" with "C-Man".
* AlternativeCharacterInterpretation:
** The Grand Ruler: [[TheGoodKing benevolent king]], or racist tyrant?
*** [[TakeAThirdOption OR]] a [[TheGodsMustBeLazy slothful godking]] who lets Lightning Dawn and friends do all the dirty work?
*** ''OR'' a diabolical mastermind ObfuscatingStupidity who hates three-dimensional personalities that is slowly conquering the universe, one [[{{Brainwashed}} morality-altered planet]] at a time?
** Unicornicopia: a utopian paradise, or autocratic dystopia?
*** Or [[Film/{{Brazil}} too paper-thin and inefficient a dystopia]] without Lightning Dawn and his merry band?
** Titan: a villain with no redeeming qualities at all, or a bitter old man who lost his mind because no one ever gave him a chance, leaving [[ThenLetMeBeEvil turning to the dark side as his only option]]?
*** Or an EvilSorcerer who is plagued with BondVillainStupidity to a degree similar to a bad {{Sentai}} villain?
** Starfleet in general, with its tendencies to act as a multiversal police force and army, can seem like an evil overlord's armed force, making sure that everyone obeys the whims of the Unicornicopian overlords.
*** And even then, the only Starfleet people shown to be any effective at that are [[RuleOfThree Lightning Dawn and co.]] (Seriously, was there ever a Starfleet RedShirt that showed their prowess in battle at '''any point''' in the series?)
** For that matter, Ace Ray. Is he a bitter washout who [[UngratefulBastard badmouths the people who saved his life]]? Is he going through a hard time in his life and looking for some form of solace when no one will support him? [[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong Or is he being unfairly persecuted for daring to speak the truth about the regime]]?
*** Although he should have simply [[ScrewThisImOuttaHere quietly left said regime]] as, well, it's nowhere near as effective at security.
** The mysterious future voices in ''Starfleet Magic IV''. Helpful guides or sociopaths looking to torment Cadance?
** Brass Bolt: an eventual wannabe terrorist, who will be rebuked or [[TragicVillain shot]] by Starfleet in the end, with a possibility he could end up in a worse position than Ace Ray...
*** Or a young naive [[HeroAntagonist freedom fighter]] who actually had the guts to act with haste instead of feeling indifferent like Ace Ray.
*** Or the initiate of actual substance in terms of plot and characterization. Doubtful, but his realistic reaction to the setting gives us a whole new perspective towards the fic...
** As a meta interpretation, are we seeing through the eyes of happy content citizens and heroes of the greater good...
*** Or a brainwashed and indoctrinated society where tyranny rules over their lives without them noticing it? After all, we are always seeing it in the perspective of Lightning Dawn in the lessons he learned which praise Starfleet's methods. The Badfic itself could be inverse propaganda intended for children and the next generation of Unicornicopians. A true Antithesis to MLP [=FiM=]'s intent. There are [[Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis two]] [[Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony stories]] that go with this interpretation.
* ArchivePanic: These fanfics are ''long and numerous.'' If you want to catch up, be warned.
* {{Asspull}}: Here's a short list of examples:
** Lightning suddenly being able to summon the Uniforce because he remembers to believe, right when Titan is going to kill him.
** In the rewrite, Nightmare Moon destroys Twilight's wings; it's never explained how she's able to do this, why she does this, why she doesn't do the same with the Pegasi or other princesses, or why she doesn't take her horn as well.
** [[spoiler:Brain turns out to have a spaceship in his backyard, which the others use to escape the exploding Unicornicopia.]]
** [[spoiler:Celesto and Celestia fusing and turning into the Great Celestial Ruler, who destroys Titan]].
** [[spoiler:The MLP and Starfleet ponies being able to reconstruct a planet through the power of belief]].
** [[spoiler:Lightning is the last of a race of creatures known as Enticorns, which, as [[WordOfGod the author confirms]], is partially based off of [[Anime/DragonBallZ Super Saiyans]]]].
** [[spoiler:In ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'', Human!Grand Ruler was capable of surviving being lost in ''outer space'' while being low on oxygen.]]
* BileFascination: There are some people out there that will read the story just to see what's so controversial about it.
* CanonDefilement: While the fic itself is often loathed for making the cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic Friendship is Magic]]'' less competent to make Starfleet look superior, Celestia in particular is given the worst of it when she [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blames Twilight Sparkle, her own student, for getting killed instead of blaming Raven for killing her]], and pretty much acts as a ReplacementGoldfish for the Element of Magic, even though Celestia would never pull this kind of thing in canon. [[DesignatedHero And she (along with Starfleet) is supposed to be in the right for thinking this.]]]]
* CaptainObviousAesop:
** One of the many Aesops given out by the Grand Ruler can be summed up as "There are different ways to solve problems."
*** ...Which is another BrokenAesop, considering that throughout the fanfic, the Unicornicopians are portrayed as always being right and those who have different solutions are always wrong.
** Another one deals with how nightmares are frightening.
* ClicheStorm:
** Let's see... The villain is an ObviouslyEvil wizard who lives in a [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment dark castle in the dimension of darkness]]. His minions are a TerribleTrio consisting of a shallow VainSorceress, a [[EvilGenius schemer]], and [[TheBrute a brute]], none of whom possess any redeeming or positive qualities. On the other [[InsistentTerminology hoof]], we have a realm of good where the unicorns live happily without any personal conflict between each other, are ruled by a wise king and protected by a group of SuperSentai[=/=]MagicalGirl-inspired good guys, whose leader has a fairy sidekick, defeats monsters with ''Franchise/SailorMoon''-based moves and has to learn to believe in himself.
%% ** Ditto for ''Starfleet Humans''; it's pretty much just ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls Equestria Girls]]'', but with elements of ''Film/HighSchoolMusical''.
* CreatorsPet:
** Lightning Dawn, Rhymey, and the Grand Ruler.
** The sequel adds Goldwin to it, an {{Expy}} of Jeff from ''Series/TodaysSpecial''. Several episodes in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' (which plagiarize entire episodes of ''Today's Special'') are made specifically to involve Goldwin, even when they add nothing to the overall plot whatsoever.
** Ironically, while the author is willing to shout at everyone who makes fun of his characters, he does not care for the majority of them at all, ignoring them completely if he thinks that they serve no purpose for him anymore outside of battle scenes.
* CriticalResearchFailure: [[CriticalResearchFailure/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* DamselScrappy: Krysta in the earlier installments, who spent too much time playing the DamselInDistress and [[CaptainObvious stating the obvious]] to be of any actual use to the heroes. Even when she does try to fight, her contributions are so minimal she might as well not be there.
* DesignatedHero: The heroes are this to some extent. As described elsewhere on this page and even the main page, their practices and beliefs can be very questionable, if not outright horrible. About the only thing that could prevent them from entirely qualifying is the fact the main villains are often legitimately evil and not {{Designated Villain}}s.
** [[AuthorAvatar Mykan Jaden]] from Dakari-King Mykan's Yu-Gi-Oh!/Totally Spies fanfics, the last of which crosses over with My Little Pony. In the "final season", in spite of being a "master duelist", he makes two rookies duel brainwashed ponies despite knowing that, should they lose, they'll get brainwashed too. When the rookies triumph and Shining Armor is teleported away, Mykan gets so mad at a brainwashed Cadance for trying to brainwash and accidentally destroy his world with card games and double crossing them on a deal they made, [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/Chapter-16-Part-2-Tough-Love-524582150 he soundly beats her up]] with the power of a Millenium Item. When Mykan attempts to finish her and is stopped by his wife, he implies [[VictimBlaming that it's Cadance's fault]] that he nearly killed her. Incidentally, in the author's note at the end of that particular chapter, the author Mykan notes that it felt good to beat up Cadance in a manner that makes it sounds like he jizzed to it, then goes on to state [[BlatantLies he wouldn't disrespect real-life women like that.]]
** ''Starfleet Magic VI'' gives us the case of [[AuthorAvatar the pony counterpart of Mykan Stevens]]. He spends most of the season being an antagonistic {{Jerkass}} towards everybody and tries his level best to BeAsUnhelpfulAsPossible toward Starfleet as they deal with their latest threat, and ultimately, they end up unintentionally spurring him into a RoaringRampageOfRevenge against the ArcVillain ''after'' they've already pretty much defeated said villain. This results in Mykan going out in a SenselessSacrifice that inflicts untold amounts of gratuitous collateral damage, at which point Starfleet has him memorialized as a hero despite him never having demonstrated any sort of heroic behavior whatsoever.
* DesignatedMonkey:
** Cadance, full stop. The author hates her for being HappilyMarried (whereas [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] [[DidNotGetTheGirl didn't hook up with Terra and Kari Kamiya, respectively]]; [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer yes, really]]), so he makes her [[spoiler:kill her own brother who's been turned partly mechanical and evil]], suffer horrific nightmares, get beaten up by the AuthorAvatar, and [[spoiler:miscarry when a pillar topples onto her]]. For some reason, [[DoubleStandard even though he's her husband, Shining Armor doesn't get punished nearly as much]]...
*** Despite the "hates Cadance for being HappilyMarried" excuse, other relatively happy couples have shown up (Spike and Rarity, Lightning and Starla, Fluttershy and Rhymey) and haven't been been treated nearly as badly as Cadance has. Make of that what you will.
*** Shockingly, it now turns out that Cadance has been rendered infertile after that pillar thing.....and Shining Armor as well, due to his brainwashing and transformed state. Yes, neither one can ever have a kid now (adopting is out of the question for some reason), and to top it off, he has them keep a nursery in their home as well. Because they cannot bring themselves to get rid of it.
*** The only reason that Cadance hasn't been killed off like [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle]] is because, in Mykan's eyes, [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer pretty much everyone is expendable, including himself, apparently]]. He can just kill off anypony he wants, if he ever sees it fit. But Cadance is a special case; he wants her kept alive [[FateWorseThanDeath just so he can punish her]], [[DisproportionateRetribution all for the reason that she's married in canon]].
** Twilight Sparkle is another character that Mykan hates for [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/690404/im-true-to-myself-3-rant-why-i-hate-twilight-sparkle utterly ridiculous reasons]]. Shortly after Equestria is introduced in the rewrite, she loses her wings (though at least she gets them back offscreen), the MLP cast as a whole TookALevelInDumbass, she's called out for not following the Grand Ruler's orders no matter what, and of course [[spoiler:she is murdered, which Starfleet and [[OutOfCharacter Celestia]] [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for]] and the latter takes up her mantle as the Element of Magic]].
*** This even extends to ''Starfleet Humans''; despite chronologically taking place before the first ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls Equestria Girls]]'' film, the human Twilight Sparkle is shoehorned in, and contributes nothing to the plot other than getting yelled at by Lightning regularly over petty things.
* DesignatedVillain:
** May not exactly be an in-universe villain so much as merely an in-universe loser, but Ace Ray can still qualify.
** Brass Bolt for speaking out against Starfleet's draconian nature. The author tries to take sympathy away from him by having him release a bunch of prisoners, but seeing how our DesignatedHero cast mistreat the prisoners, it actually makes him more likable.
* EightDeadlyWords: Due to the [[DesignatedHero heroes being utterly unlikable]] [[FlatCharacter cardboard cutouts]], canon characters being stripped of their likable traits, loads of racism, sexism, all-around ''fucked-up'' morality, and {{Cliche}}d villains that always lose, there's no point in reading the series.
* EnsembleDarkhorse: Ace Ray. See StrawmanHasAPoint and TakeThatScrappy below. Mykan tries to make him come off as insane, but he really doesn't.
** Brass Bolt as well, for much the same reasons as well as actually taking some kind of action against Starfleet.
** Windy Bag, for pretty much the same reasons as the other two, trying to change Equestria back to the way it was, and having a vendetta against Mykan's most blatant AuthorAvatar.
** Despite suffering from [[TookALevelInDumbass the same fate as her fellow Equestrians]], Twilight Sparkle herself is this for at least being among the closest to her canon self, as well as gaining pity points from viewers who rightfully believe [[TheChewToy she's treated horribly by the Space Ponies]]. [[spoiler:Her death at the hands of Raven has also sparked several more accusations of Starfleet being unlikable, due to them [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blaming her for her own death]] because she disobeyed Starfleet.]] After all that's happened, it's hard not to see her as TheWoobie. Cadance is also this, for the same reasons (just replace [[spoiler:death]] with [[spoiler:having a miscarriage and her and her husband being rendered infertile for life]], and you're golden).
* EthnicScrappy: Dyno and Myte are basically a pair of walking Hispanic stereotypes that like blowing things up and basically nothing else. Ditto for Brain, whose main purpose seems to be rattling off StockBritishPhrases and occasionally providing an invention or two while contributing virtually nothing when things get hairy.
* FamilyUnfriendlyAesop: [[FamilyUnfriendlyAesop/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* FoeYay: Aplenty between Spike and the Black Dragon Knight. Spike first identifies the Knight as female by smelling her pheromones ([[DoesThisRemindYouOfAnything which already has a certain subtext]]), and she spends almost all of her appearances [[WeCanRuleTogether persuading him to join her]]. Not to mention, she really likes leaning in close to whisper in Spike's ear... [[spoiler:Becomes a bit squicky when the Black Dragon Knight is revealed to be Spike's sister.]]
* GirlShowGhetto: Essentially the whole story was written because Mykan hated the original series for being "girly" and was surprised that it appealed to boys at all. The story itself is even more stereotypically "girly" and childish that appeals to no one in particular.
* HarsherInHindsight: [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming Celestia blaming Twilight for her own death]] gets even worse as ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS7E1CelestialAdvice Celestial Advice]]'' shows that Celestia pretty much acted like a second mother to her. By having Celestia act like this, she's not just blaming her student; she's blaming a pony she'd grown attached to since youth.]]
* HilariousInHindsight:
** Mykan always wanted to make a more action-oriented story than ''Friendship Is Magic'', to no real avail. Come [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS4E26TwilightsKingdomPart2 the season 4 finale]], suddenly the show he hates gets an action sequence that blows anything he could write out of the water (not like that's particularly hard). {{Irony}} at its finest.
** The series has always stated that personalities are pathetic, cutie marks are stupid, individuality is wrong unless you're the leader, it's okay to shun and belittle others who are not the same as you, and that dissenters should be locked up and/or brainwashed. Cue [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E1TheCutieMapPart1 the Season 5 premiere]] of ''MLP'', featuring a society espousing those very "virtues"!
** Part of the main reason the fanfic was written was to denounce the values of Friendship and instead go with TheHero doing things all on his own, using the belief he has in himself. Irony of basing the fanfic off [[Franchise/PowerRangers a franchise based around teamwork]] aside, many detractors of My Little Pony have pointed out that the show's later arcs revolve around Twilight having to do things herself despite the theme of ThePowerOfFriendship.
** This is not the first time [[WesternAnimation/ATrollInCentralPark an infamously awful work implemented believing as its primary aesop.]]
** Mykan has stated that he wanted to give the Equestrians a dose of reality and [[EpicFail failed miserably]] [[Main/{{Irony}} at it]]. There would later come ''Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis'' and ''Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony'' which flat out ''succeed'' in [[DeconstructionFic applying]] [[RealityEnsues reality]] to the Unicornicopians.
** Turns out magic ''is'' believing in the MLP universe, but not the way Mykan imagined; according to the episode, ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS7E2AllBottledUp All Bottled Up]]'', [[EmotionalPowers magic is derived from a pony's emotions]], and also requires that the user have faith that the magic will work, i.e. "believing". For bonus points, [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/64687/my-little-unicorn-magic-is-believing-redo an attempted redo of Mykan's work]] had a similar idea.
* HoYay:
** Harkin's obsession with fighting against Lightning can easily be interpreted as an obsession of a ''[[FoeRomanceSubtext different]]'' kind.
** Grand Ruler angsting over the death of his old friend Starlight Braveheart in ''Starfleet Magic V'' has "[[TheLostLenore deceased love interest]]" written all over it.
* InferredHolocaust: At one point in ''III'', Frosteye freezes all of United Equestria over, with temperatures reaching as low as ''-100 degrees'' in parts such as the Crystal Empire. This is treated simply as global HarmlessFreezing by the story, but considering the toll it takes on Lightning and company despite their survival, it's safe to assume that some weren't so lucky...
* ItWasHisSled: [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle is killed in season 3, and Starfleet and Celestia [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]].]]
* JustHereForGodzilla: The fic's {{Ensemble Darkhorse}}s are one of its main draws. Seriously, Brass Bolt's entire, short lived character arc is a crowning moment of awesome, for simple virtue of one-upping Starfleet and basically giving them the biggest middle finger he could. But as was said, it was short lived.
* MarySuetopia: The world of [[IncrediblyLamePun Unicornicopia]].
* MemeticLoser: All of Starfleet due to how their [[InformedAbility supposed "superiority" is told rather than shown]] and they never demonstrate any remarkable ability that would make other races "inferior" to them. ''Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis'' and ''Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony'' [[DeconstructionFic both point out Starfleet's lack of effectiveness]].
* MemeticMutation:
** Dimension [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's tendency to describe any location as this.[[/labelnote]]
** SHUT THE F*CK UP, RHYMEY! [[labelnote:explanation]]The default response of most [=MSTers=] (and just in general people who have read ''Starfleet Magic'') to [[TheScrappy Rhymey's]] [[PainfulRhyme terrible rhymes]].[[/labelnote]]
** Rhymey: [[{{Fartillery}} Power of Flatulence]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Every member of Starfleet announces their element ([[FlatCharacter which also tends to be their one character trait]]). Rhymey's is [[PainfulRhyme "I summon within; power of wind!"]] Naturally, readers have taken [[ToiletHumor something else from that statement]].[[/labelnote]]
** "POWER OF ''FLORA''", YOU IDIOT! [[labelnote:explanation]][[GreenThumb Buddy Rose]] [[CriticalResearchFailure incorrectly announces "Power of Fauna"]] during the TransformationSequence when he should have said "Power of Flora". [[EnragedByIdiocy Reactions to this tend to be outrage at such a stupid mistake.]][[/labelnote]]
** PREFERENCES [[labelnote:explanation]]What Mykan uses to justify writing his stories the way they are; it's what he prefers. Naturally, people respond with the fact that, since Mykan is putting his stories out where others can read them, it is no longer about preferences and it is now about what makes a story good. Additionally, he thinks [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS6E13SpiceUpYourLife "Spice Up Your Life"]] justifies his writing however he wants.[[/labelnote]]
** Vanity [[labelnote:explanation]]What Mykan uses to explain why he and his works are so disliked. Responses to this are are typically YouKeepUsingThatWord. [[IResembleThatRemark There's also the fact that Mykan has proven to be quite egotistical such as believing that the writers of Friendship is Magic are copying his ideas.]] [[/labelnote]]
** [[OurDemonsAreDifferent Demons]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's idea that demons are all-powerful beings and thus numerous villains are at least partially demonic.[[/labelnote]]
** "PICK ONE TRAIT AND STICK TO IT!" [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's hatred of CharacterDevelopment; there's also his inability to comprehend that people can show multiple sides to themselves.[[/labelnote]]
** [[{{Hypocrite}} Also, Mykan's tendencies to contradict himself (i.e. Saying friendship is worthless, but creating a hero who would be useless without his friends).]]
** "He's not me, he's just ''voiced'' by me." [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's insistence that his obvious {{Author Avatar}}s are only voiced by him and [[BlatantLies do not reflect how he really is in person]]. Pony Mykan is the most blatant example of this.[[/labelnote]]
** Mykan's hatred of [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle, her death, and the subsequent UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming]] have since become well-known despite all the spoiler tags surrounding it. [[FanFic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony Two]] [[FanFic/MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis deconstructions]] take place after [[spoiler:her death]].
** [[MadLibsCatchphrase "[Character] is/does [their one personality trait]. That's it."]] [[labelnote:explanation]]Lampshading how [[FlatCharacter flat]] Mykan's "original" characters, as well as [[{{Flanderization}} the FiM cast]], are.[[/labelnote]]
** Mykan creating entire species that are AlwaysChaoticEvil.
** Because Cadance is HappilyMarried and [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] aren't. [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reason for why he [[TheChewToy tortures]] Princess Cadance in his fics [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
** Because Twilight preaches about the Magic of Friendship, tries to force this way of thinking onto others, and thinks she's better than everyone.[[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reasons [[CriticalResearchFailure (some of which are entirely inaccurate)]] for why he hates and [[TheChewToy tortures]] Twilight in his fics [[spoiler:and eventually kills her]] [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
** [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]] [[labelnote:explanation]]This is mostly used on Wiki/TvTropes to [[SincerityMode assure]] people reading the tropes pages for ''Starfleet Magic'' that the incredibly ridiculous examples of Mykan's writing and/or reasoning are completely true.[[/labelnote]]
* MemeticPsychopath: As noted under AlternativeCharacterInterpretation, it's all too common for Celesto to be depicted as a dictator and Unicornicopia as [[CrapsaccharineWorld a fascist dystopia]]. It doesn't help that riffers keep finding unintentional parallels to ''Literature/NineteenEightyFour'' in the writing.
* {{Moe}}: Raven's original form as an Equestrian [[https://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/MBPSFM-Raven-512986122 (pictured bottom right)]] [[DamnedByFaintPraise was admittedly kind of adorable]].
* MoralEventHorizon:
** The Grand Ruler crosses it in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', when he actually makes Twilight believe she is responsible for an entire family getting hurt, just so he can teach her that she should always follow his orders blindly.
** Lightning Dawn has one of his own in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Humans''. After Principal Celestia kicks Starla out of the play due to photographic evidence of her trashing the props and costumes, Lightning barges into her office, insults her and even states that ''it's a good thing her pet horse is dead.'' This causes Celestia to attack him but, of course, being a Gary-Stu, he's not affected by the punches and chokes and he fells her with a flip, a shove and by smashing a cup of coffee onto her head, which burns her. Naturally, Grand Ruler finds Celestia at fault and fires her. Lightning feeling ashamed of what he did and getting suspended doesn't negate his actions one bit since he runs off and doesn't go back to help and doesn't apologize to her until later in the fic.
*** As shown in UnintentionallySympathetic below, Celestia's attack is ''supposed'' to be seen as this for her. However, see below to understand why that's a load of [[{{Pun}} horsecrap.]]
** [[spoiler:Twilight]] dies and rather than blame, you know, ''the killer for killing [[spoiler:her]]'', Starfleet blames [[spoiler:Twilight]] for [[spoiler:her]] own death. Yeah, [[VictimBlaming Starfleet blames someone for their own death]] because they had the gall to disobey orders and try and fight someone who was a threat to someone they love. [[SarcasmMode Our heroes, everyone]].
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* {{Narm}}: [[Narm/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* NightmareFuel: Ace Ray's "[[MindRape reprogramming]]" in the original version of ''Starfleet Magic III'', which reads eerily like the infamous "Room101" scene from ''[[Literature/NineteenEightyFour 1984]]'' - and serves much the same purpose, too. It's made even worse by the fact that '''this is carried out [[DesignatedHero by the heroes]]''' and that it's meant to be seen as a '''[[ProtagonistCenteredMorality good thing]]'''.
** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history, from a moral standpoint.
** Cadance [[spoiler:[[MummiesAtTheDinnerTable keeping the corpse of her stillborn colt around for 9 chapters]]]] is just plain creepy and {{squick}}y, even if [[spoiler:[[ArtisticLicenseBiology decomposition doesn't seem to be an issue]]. [[DisproportionateRetribution Also, keep in the mind that the author is doing]] [[FelonyMisdemeanor this because he is enraged at the fact that Cadance is]] HappilyMarried [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]]]].
* OvershadowedByControversy: Although people can [[InNameOnly find]] [[ComplainingAboutComplaining plenty to dislike]] [[SelfInsertFic about the fic itself]]; the fanfic is remembered more for the author's [[{{Wangst}} wangsting and whining about MLP:FiM]] and how bad it is than the fact that it's a fanfic at all. His notoriety in the ''Franchise/{{Digimon}}'' and ''WesternAnimation/TeenTitans'' fandoms haven't helped.
* {{Padding}}:
** The author outright admits to using this, as he believes he has to fill a word quota. More specifically, he believes that every chapter has to be an equivalent length to a half-hour TV episode, with no exceptions.
*** Amazingly, he complains in the author's notes of the third series about how long his fanfics are, and yet does nothing to fix this.
** Aside from padding in-chapters, Mykan seems to have an obsession with writing 26 episodes per-season, which leads to many episodes where nothing advances the plot. The biggest offenders are in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' (as one MST points out, you can reorder most of the chapters without affecting the overall plot) and ''Starfleet Magic VI'' (which doesn't have an overarching plot so much as it does a bunch of unrelated story arcs stuck together).
* PainfulRhyme: Rhymey is meant to be an {{Expy}} of [[LiveAction/TodaysSpecial Muffy the Mouse]]. However, whereas Muffy's dialogue was written by people who knew what they were doing, Rhymey just rhymes for the sake of rhyme. And as you can guess, ''none'' of them are good. [[SarcasmMode Even better]], unlike Muffy who actually had a personality, in tune with the fic's [[FlatCharacter Flat Characters]], rhyming is Rhymey's only notable trait. Hence why he's the most hated character out of the lot.
** [[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic Zecora]] isn't immune to this either, especially with the way her accent is imitated. Seems to be a running gag in this story that nopony can rhyme...
** Taken UpToEleven in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', where there is an entire chapter written in rhymes. Ironically, it may be one of the better chapters in the entire story even though it plagiarizes an episode of ''{{WesternAnimation/Arthur}}''.
* RootingForTheEmpire: The story is meant as a RevengeFic against ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'', centering around ponies in another dimension and[=/=]or in space, fighting off an evil sorcerer [[AvertedTrope without]] ThePowerOfFriendship and therefore being superior to the cast of the original show. Many readers actually wished to see the bad guy win, just so that the main characters get their asses kicked.
** Especially the case with the ArcVillain Windy Bag in ''VI'', whose goal boils down to kicking Starfleet off of Equestria. Considering Starfleet's DesignatedHero status and treatment of the Equestrian population, it's not hard to see her as a WellIntentionedExtremist at worst. It helps that she also has a vendetta against a blatant AuthorAvatar, and a particularly jerkish one at that.
** In an actual decent twist, in chapter 20 of the original badfic, we find out that Serpent Tyrant's motive for collecting the Rainbow Stones is to undo the genocide his son Titan had caused. Other than being told the supposed Dimension of Darkness's denizens are evil, there are no indications of them committing great atrocities and we are only seeing things from a certain point of view - [[HolierThanThou The]] [[DesignatedHero Unicornicopians.]] It's also not hard to see him as a WellIntentionedExtremist.
** The Insectos in ''Starfleet Magic V''. Unlike most villains, the Insecto royals actually have a better family dynamic than any of the heroes, making them easier to sympathize with, especially as Pinsar actually says that he served Titan in part to keep his family safe. Additionally, they can easily be interpreted as {{Proud Warrior Race Guy}}s rather than AlwaysChaoticEvil, as the only evidence of them doing anything evil is [[UnreliableNarrator the word of Starfleet]].
* TheScrappy:
** While most of Mykan's "original" characters are detested, Rhymey is the least liked out of all of them [[PainfulRhyme for his incessant awful rhyming]]. It doesn't help that he ends up being paired with [[TheCutie Fluttershy]].
** Grand Ruler. Racism aside, he mostly lets Lightning Dawn and friends do all the work, [[TheGodsMustBeLazy only pitching in when the plot calls for it]] (and that rarely happens). And then there was [[MoralEventHorizon what he did to Twilight Sparkle]] in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II''.
** On the subject of MLP canon characters, Pony!Celestia has been getting flak for [[spoiler:[[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blaming Twilight for her own death]] [[UngratefulBitch even though she tried to protect her]], [[CanonDefilement which her canon self would never have done]].]] Even [[StrawmanHasAPoint Brass Bolt]] is disappointed in what she's become.
* {{Sequelitis}}: The original story has four sequels and counting, one's a "movie" and another is based on WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyEquestriaGirls, and they don't get any better. [=Beats0me=], a Website/DeviantArt member who draws parody comics of MLU, noted that the beginning of the series is SoBadItsGood, reminiscent of watching a corny old kids' action cartoon. However, the further it goes on, the more racism, sexism and other disturbing content start cropping up.
* SerialNumbersFiledOff: The prologue and first two chapters are pretty much a rip-off of the pilot episodes of ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic''.
* SnarkBait: If you didn't read the main page, just look at the other entries on this page for an explanation.
* SoBadItsGood: For some. The sequels are a much different case as shown by the {{Sequelitis}} entry.
* StrangledByTheRedString:
** Lightning and Starla, who fall in love immediately for no reason besides that the main character needs a love interest.
** Rhymey and Fluttershy as well, both pony and human versions.
** Ditto the Grand Ruler and Princess Celestia, both pony and human versions.
** Additionally, there is Sunset Shimmer and Human!Artie Bristles.
* StrawmanHasAPoint:
** In ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', there is an ex-Wonderbolt named Ace Ray who was kicked off the squad for [[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong badmouthing Starfleet]] and has become [[StrawLoser a loser who sits around stuffing his face all day]]. However, he accuses the Starfleet of being arrogant and lazy for not taking action against their enemies sooner and thus leading to the destruction of Equestria. He also calls them out on assuming every enemy they fight is [[AlwaysChaoticEvil irredeemably evil without even considering the possibility that they might have a reason for acting that way]]. He then accuses them of being overlords due to their species essentially taking over United Equestria, doing everything of value, and Celesto being extremely powerful, both politically and literally. The reader is clearly supposed to side with his sister Skye, who tells him he's bad for speaking his mind about Starfleet. However, he makes some very good points that were mentioned by reviewers and [[{{MST}} riffers]] of the original fic.
** Twilight Sparkle protests [[MurderIsTheBestSolution Starfleet killing all of their enemies]], Krysta and Lightning Dawn's argument can be summed up as "[[TheComplainerIsAlwaysWrong Starfleet is always right, everyone else is always wrong.]]"
** ''Starfleet Magic VI'' has Brass Bolt, who's basically Ace Ray 2.0, and makes even ''better'' points about Starfleet than Ace did. It's very hard not to agree with him, especially since his thoughts and situation read very much like a protagonist in dystopian fiction and are completely accurate to Starfleet's portrayal. To quote the story itself:
--> “They come to our world, lead their enemies to us, and if that wasn’t bad enough they turned us from normal ponies into these human shaped weirdos! Oh, and to add insult to injury, they treat us all like we’re inferior and enslave us with their martial laws, and when trouble comes they just fight and kill, and they arrest creatures with no good reason…
--> …They’re nothing but a bunch of silly, overbearing tyrannical dictators! Why can’t you guys see that? Why can’t anyone see that?”
* TakeThatScrappy: Rhymey is one of the more hated original characters because [[RhymesOnADime he speaks in nothing but rhymes]], [[PainfulRhyme and unfortunately, not good ones]]. [[note]]The canon character Zecora also speaks in rhyme, but unlike Rhymey, she actually has a personality.[[/note]] An unintentional example happens when he confronts Ace Ray in ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic III'', who is in the process of making [[StrawmanHasAPoint points about Unicornicopia that are more valid than the author realizes]].
-->'''Rhymey''': [[PainfulRhyme There's no need to make a fuss / there is nothing he can do to us]].\\
'''Ace Ray''': [[CrowningMomentOfFunny And you... will YOU STOP WITH THAT RHYMING]]!
** The entire fic is ''supposed'' to be this towards the entire cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic FiM]]'' based on the fact that its message of friendship "hurt him", which is shown by having them all go through plenty of torment (such as losing their entire planet, being enslaved, or worst case scenario, [[spoiler:the death of friends and unborn family]]). And as you can tell from the rest of this page and beyond, this didn't work in the slightest, [[UnintentionallySympathetic as all the viewers end up doing is sympathizing with the denizens of former Equestria]] [[UnintentionallyUnsympathetic and despising Starfleet]].
%%* TheyCopiedItSoItSucks: One of the problems with the fic is Mykan copying plots and elements from ''Friendship is Magic'' only without what made ''[=FiM=]'' good in the first place.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodCharacter:
** Cerise from ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'' is a major in Starfleet, can stand toe-to-toe with Lightning and can use the Uniforce. She was a one-shot character up until ''Starfleet Magic VI'', where her appearance consists of her completely sucking at her job.
** [[spoiler:Whenever Twilight's spirit shows up, she only appears to motivate the others before she's quickly forgotten about. As per usual with Mykan's hatred for the character, she's not allowed to be useful even as a ghost.]]
** Brass Bolt from ''Starfleet Magic VI'' is a SuspiciouslySimilarSubstitute for Ace Ray who wants to see a revolution overthrowing Starfleet and sets an entire prison's populace loose on them, making for a very interesting potential BigBad who's not a completely clichéd GenericDoomsdayVillain. Instead, he gets busted in the second chapter by a cheap {{Asspull}}. Even better, the author later complains that [[{{Irony}} he's having trouble driving the story forward without a Big Bad pulling the strings]].
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot:
** It may sound far-fetched, but the relationship between Lightning and [[ParentalSubstitute the Grand Ruler]] could have been quite an interesting plot arc.
** Despite the controversy surrounding it, [[spoiler:the idea of teaching about the death of a loved one could have been a good idea had Mykan just focused on meaningful character interactions and development instead of UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming and his own hatred for the pony in question, Twilight Sparkle.]]
* TrappedByMountainLions:
** Goldwin's episodes solely exist to plagiarize ''Series/TodaysSpecial'' and add absolutely nothing to the overall plot.
** ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'' has a subplot involving Celesto Grandruler working on the International Space Station. This adds absolutely nothing to the main plot.
** The Black Dragon Knight subplot of ''Starflet Magic V'' has virtually no impact on the main conflict against the Insectos.
* UncannyValley: The Unicornicopians are represented as pony heads on top of humanoid bodies, and later the Equestrians are forcibly converted into being the same thing. The result is completely unsettling, with some characters resembling colourful [[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tikbalang tikbalangs]]. Not helping is how obviously photoshopped the images are.
** Probably the worst example is [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/MBPSFM-Professor-Brain-435602978 Brain]], who's supposed to look old, but has a younger face with a balding head.
* UnintentionallySympathetic: Anyone who opposes [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] can be considered this.
** [[StrawmanHasAPoint Ace Ray]]: Even in the rewritten version, it is still this trope. For punching his sister upon being insulted and rejected by her, and the others who don't agree with him in making correct assumptions about Starfleet being an oppressive government, he is punished by getting his freedom taken away from him. Even though he's a clearly sane but jaded guy, he was pretty much stated to be imprisoned in an asylum for life. Wait, this sounds similar to Room101. Seriously, read his entire chapter and see if you can deem him [[http://dakari-king-mykan.deviantart.com/art/Episode-5-Truth-Hurts-468597311 insane:]]
-->''No one had ever broken out from this asylum, and even If they had there was no way they could leave the planet. The warp portals that led out into Dimensional Space were inaccessible by all convicts. Any one of them who tried to enter only got tossed back out again.''[...] '' Poor Ace, he did not take being locked up very well, and continued to insist he wasn’t insane, only to be restrained and sedated by the medical staff.''
** Human!Celestia in ''Starfleet Humans''. It's shown at the beginning when Lightning [[TooDumbToLive sings and dances while in the middle of the road she is driving on,]] clearly stressed and upset. Granted, it's not a good idea to look at your notes while driving, but the story [[NeverMyFault (and Lightning)]] shoehorns all the blame towards her for getting angry at him. When the fic reveals that her pet horse died, which led her into a HeroicBSOD [[spoiler:courtesy of Sapphira]], Lightning uses it as ammo against her in the aforementioned MoralEventHorizon above. We're supposed to see the attack as ''her's'' instead, as indicated by Luna calling her a 'monster' (even though, as mentioned earlier, Lightning was not hurt at all), but granted, Lightning, maybe saying that it's a good thing someone's pet is dead wasn't exactly the best course of action when you're trying to prove your friend's innocence.
** [[spoiler:Twilight dies and Starfleet has the nerve to blame her for her death because she disobeyed orders. Keep in mind, Twilight disobeyed orders to try and protect her loved ones from Raven, so even if you did consider her actions to be irrational, there would be a good reason for that behavior. So Starfleet, [[DesignatedHero as always]], just come across as assholes who only want that everyone follows what they say.]]
** Brass Bolt also shares this treatment. As noted in his entry in StrawmanHasAPoint, he's supposed to be seen as wrong for accusing Starfleet of being evil, but the writing never gives a good enough reason as to why the reader should side against him. The closest the story gets is having him release all of the prisoners from one of Starfleet's prisons, which actually makes him ''more'' sympathetic given that Starfleet's treatment of prisoners [[HellholePrison would likely qualify as a gross violation of civil rights (and probably the Geneva Convention as well) in real life]].
* UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: [[UpToEleven Practically the entire cast.]] The Equestria cast is simply TooDumbToLive or too busy CharacterShilling Starfleet ([[{{Flanderization}} not to mention that they've all been reduced to one-note cutouts that hardly resemble their canon selves]]}. Starfleet is full of [[FantasticRacism racist]], sexist, and [[DesignatedHero outright sociopathic "heroes" who see anyone who disagrees with them as their enemies]]. [[SarcasmMode Our heroes, everyone]].
* {{Wangst}}:
** Goldwin's a veritable fountain of this regarding [[PinocchioSyndrome his desire to become a normal pony]] and to be able to leave the palace grounds. It becomes tiresome rather quickly, especially as [[TrappedByMountainLions it contributes nothing to the main plot]].
** Human Starla bemoaning the fact that she is attracted with Lightning Dawn despite knowing that he is married can get tiring really quickly.
** Pony Mykan Stevens is practically made of this trope. He's so adamant about refusing help from Starfleet and driving them away, firmly believing that they don't actually care about him and that they can't understand what he's going through, that it's a wonder the protagonists put up with him at all.
** Lightning angsting over the destruction of his planet and his people is understandable. Lightning refusing to celebrate his birthday ever again because his planet happened to be destroyed on that day goes into wangsty territory.
* WhatAnIdiot: [[WhatAnIdiot/MyLittleUnicorn Has its own page.]]
* WhatDoYouMeanItsForKids: The story preaches that things like love and tolerance are actually worthless and only brute force can lead to true happiness. Characters get KilledOffForReal in rather brutal ways for little kids, and there are certain sexual innuendos to be found in the entire story. Yet the author proclaims that the fanfiction is way better entertainment for kids than the actual show it rips off.
** The best example for it may be a chapter of ''My Brave Pony: Starfleet Magic II'', in which Fluttershy is in the hospital to be operated on. A changeling slips in and tries to kill her by cutting her open and letting her bleed to death.
** Chapter 13 of ''Starfleet Magic VI'' is another good example: it deals with the full ramifications of a MayflyDecemberRomance, kills off the VillainOfTheWeek via RapidAging, and ends on a none-too-subtly implied sex scene. [[SarcasmMode Y'know, for kids]].
* TheWoobie: Twilight Sparkle and Cadance both need hugs [[TheChewToy given what the story puts them through]], even more so when you factor in that [[AuthorTract it's because the author just hates them for no good reason]].
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** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history.
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** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history.history, from a moral standpoint.
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** Because Twilight preaches about the Magic of Friendship, tries to force this way of thinking onto others, and thinks she's better than everyone.[[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reasons [[CriticalResearchFailure (some of which are entirely inaccurate)]] for why he hates [[TheChewToy tortures]] Twilight in his fics [[spoiler:and eventually kills her]] [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
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** Because Twilight preaches about the Magic of Friendship, tries to force this way of thinking onto others, and thinks she's better than everyone.[[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reasons [[CriticalResearchFailure (some of which are entirely inaccurate)]] for why he hates and [[TheChewToy tortures]] Twilight in his fics [[spoiler:and eventually kills her]] [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
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** He's not me, he's just ''voiced'' by me. [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's insistence that his obvious {{Author Avatar}}s are only voiced by him and [[BlatantLies do not reflect how he really is in person]]. Pony Mykan is the most blatant example of this.[[/labelnote]]
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** He's "He's not me, he's just ''voiced'' by me. me." [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's insistence that his obvious {{Author Avatar}}s are only voiced by him and [[BlatantLies do not reflect how he really is in person]]. Pony Mykan is the most blatant example of this.[[/labelnote]]
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** Mykan's "PICK ONE TRAIT AND STICK TO IT!" [[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's hatred of CharacterDevelopment; there's also his inability to comprehend that people can show multiple sides to themselves.[[/labelnote]]
** Because Twilight preaches about the Magic of Friendship, tries to force this way of thinking onto others, and thinks she's better than eveeryone.[[labelnote:explanation]]Mykan's reasons [[CriticalResearchFailure (some of which are entirely inaccurate)]] for why he hates [[TheChewToy tortures]] Twilight in his fics [[spoiler:and eventually kills her]] [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]].[[/labelnote]]
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** The entire fic is ''supposed'' to be this towards the entire cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic FiM]]'' based on the fact that its message of friendship "hurt him", which is shown by having them all go through plenty of torment (such as losing their entire planet, being enslaved, or worst case scenario, [[spoiler:the death of friends and unborn family]]). And as you can tell from the rest of this page and beyond, this didn't work in the slightest, as all the viewers end up doing is sympathizing with the denizens of former Equestria and despising Starfleet.
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** The entire fic is ''supposed'' to be this towards the entire cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic FiM]]'' based on the fact that its message of friendship "hurt him", which is shown by having them all go through plenty of torment (such as losing their entire planet, being enslaved, or worst case scenario, [[spoiler:the death of friends and unborn family]]). And as you can tell from the rest of this page and beyond, this didn't work in the slightest, [[UnintentionallySympathetic as all the viewers end up doing is sympathizing with the denizens of former Equestria Equestria]] [[UnintentionallyUnsympathetic and despising Starfleet.Starfleet]].
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These entries are disturbing enough to qualify as Nightmare Fuel on their own, it's the thought process of the supposed "heroes" that adds to how unsettling they are.
* NightmareFuel: Ace Ray's "[[MindRape reprogramming]]" in the original version of ''Starfleet Magic III'', which reads eerily like the infamous "Room101" scene from ''[[Literature/NineteenEightyFour 1984]]'' - and serves much the same purpose, too. It's made even worse by the fact that '''this is carried out [[DesignatedHero by the heroes]]''' and that it's meant to be seen as a '''[[ProtagonistCenteredMorality good thing]]'''.
** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history.
** Cadance [[spoiler:[[MummiesAtTheDinnerTable keeping the corpse of her stillborn colt around for 9 chapters]]]] is just plain creepy and {{squick}}y, even if [[spoiler:[[ArtisticLicenseBiology decomposition doesn't seem to be an issue]]. [[DisproportionateRetribution Also, keep in the mind that the author is doing]] [[FelonyMisdemeanor this because he is enraged at the fact that Cadance is]] HappilyMarried [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]]]].
** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history.
** Cadance [[spoiler:[[MummiesAtTheDinnerTable keeping the corpse of her stillborn colt around for 9 chapters]]]] is just plain creepy and {{squick}}y, even if [[spoiler:[[ArtisticLicenseBiology decomposition doesn't seem to be an issue]]. [[DisproportionateRetribution Also, keep in the mind that the author is doing]] [[FelonyMisdemeanor this because he is enraged at the fact that Cadance is]] HappilyMarried [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]]]].
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* OvershadowedByControversy: The fanfic is remembered more for the author's [[{{Wangst}} wangsting and whining about MLP:FiM]] and how bad it is than the fact that it's a fanfic at all. His notoriety in the ''Franchise/{{Digimon}}'' and ''WesternAnimation/TeenTitans'' fandoms haven't helped.
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* OvershadowedByControversy: The Although people can [[InNameOnly find]] [[ComplainingAboutComplaining plenty to dislike]] [[SelfInsertFic about the fic itself]]; the fanfic is remembered more for the author's [[{{Wangst}} wangsting and whining about MLP:FiM]] and how bad it is than the fact that it's a fanfic at all. His notoriety in the ''Franchise/{{Digimon}}'' and ''WesternAnimation/TeenTitans'' fandoms haven't helped.
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* NightmareFuel: Ace Ray's "[[MindRape reprogramming]]" in the original version of ''Starfleet Magic III'', which reads eerily like the infamous "Room101" scene from ''[[Literature/NineteenEightyFour 1984]]'' - and serves much the same purpose, too. It's made even worse by the fact that '''this is carried out [[DesignatedHero by the heroes]]''' and that it's meant to be seen as a '''[[ProtagonistCenteredMorality good thing]]'''.
** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history.
** Cadance [[spoiler:[[MummiesAtTheDinnerTable keeping the corpse of her stillborn colt around for 9 chapters]]]] is just plain creepy and {{squick}}y, even if [[spoiler:[[ArtisticLicenseBiology decomposition doesn't seem to be an issue]]. [[DisproportionateRetribution Also, keep in the mind that the author is doing]] [[FelonyMisdemeanor this because he is enraged at the fact that Cadance is]] HappilyMarried [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]]]].
* OvershadowedByControversy: The fanfic is remembered more for the author's [[{{Wangst}} wangsting and whining about MLP:FiM]] and how bad it is than the fact that it's a fanfic at all. His notoriety in the ''Franchise/{{Digimon}}'' and ''WesternAnimation/TeenTitans'' fandoms haven't helped. Although people can [[InNameOnly find]] [[ComplainingAboutComplaining plenty to dislike]] [[SelfInsertFic about the fic itself]].
** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history.
** Cadance [[spoiler:[[MummiesAtTheDinnerTable keeping the corpse of her stillborn colt around for 9 chapters]]]] is just plain creepy and {{squick}}y, even if [[spoiler:[[ArtisticLicenseBiology decomposition doesn't seem to be an issue]]. [[DisproportionateRetribution Also, keep in the mind that the author is doing]] [[FelonyMisdemeanor this because he is enraged at the fact that Cadance is]] HappilyMarried [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]]]].
* OvershadowedByControversy: The fanfic is remembered more for the author's [[{{Wangst}} wangsting and whining about MLP:FiM]] and how bad it is than the fact that it's a fanfic at all. His notoriety in the ''Franchise/{{Digimon}}'' and ''WesternAnimation/TeenTitans'' fandoms haven't helped. Although people can [[InNameOnly find]] [[ComplainingAboutComplaining plenty to dislike]] [[SelfInsertFic about the fic itself]].
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** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history.
** Cadance [[spoiler:[[MummiesAtTheDinnerTable keeping the corpse of her stillborn colt around for 9 chapters]]]] is just plain creepy and {{squick}}y, even if [[spoiler:[[ArtisticLicenseBiology decomposition doesn't seem to be an issue]]. [[DisproportionateRetribution Also, keep in the mind that the author is doing]] [[FelonyMisdemeanor this because he is enraged at the fact that Cadance is]] HappilyMarried [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer (yes, really)]]]].
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** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]], and this becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in history.
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** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that the [[spoiler:the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]], teaches]]]], and this potentially becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in fictional history.
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Just gonna leave this here, since it recently came to me. I'm hiding it in case someone wants to actually show it on here. ^^;
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%% * CounterpartComparison: The author himself takes innocent fictional ponies who did nothing wrong (except to him), punishes them for his own amusement, and treats all of this like a mere pastime at best, or an outright business at worst. Sounds an awful lot like [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 the Digimon Emperor]], wouldn't you say? Bonus points for the author being a Digimon fan.
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** Twilight Sparkle's [[spoiler:death at the hands of Raven; she pretty much slashes Twilight with her claws, through her heart, guaranteeing her death]]. Made worse is that, after the fact, [[spoiler: [[DesignatedHero Starfleet]] (and even ''[[OutOfCharacter Celestia]]'') proceed to [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blame her for her own death]]]] because she disobeyed Starfleet. Yep; they'll [[spoiler:SpeakIllOfTheDead]] if you happened to disobey direct orders before [[spoiler:your passing]]. Finally, add in the fact that the author did this because [[MisanthropeSupreme he loathes Twilight and the message of friendship she teaches]], and this becomes one of the worst [[spoiler:character deaths]] in history.
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I'll deal with Humans later.
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%%** ''WesternAnimation/EquestriaGirls'' was already one for high school movies, ''Starfleet Humans'' not only [[WholePlotReference rips off the plot of that movie]] but also several plot points from ''Film/HighSchoolMusical''.
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%%** Lightning Dawn in ''Starfleet Humans''.
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** The entire fic is ''supposed'' to be this towards the entire cast of ''[[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic FiM]]'' based on the fact that its message of friendship "hurt him", which is shown by having them all go through plenty of torment (such as losing their entire planet, being enslaved, or worst case scenario, [[spoiler:the death of friends and unborn family]]). And as you can tell from the rest of this page and beyond, this didn't work in the slightest, as all the viewers end up doing is sympathizing with the denizens of former Equestria and despising Starfleet.
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** Despite suffering from [[TookALevelInDumbass the same fate as her fellow Equestrians]], Twilight Sparkle herself is this for at least being among the closest to her canon self, as well as gaining pity points from viewers who rightfully believe [[TheChewToy she's treated horribly by the Space Ponies]]. [[spoiler:Her death at the hands of Raven has also sparked several more accusations of Starfleet being unlikable, due to them [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blaming her for her own death]] because she disobeyed Starfleet.]] After all that's happened, it's hard not to see her as TheWoobie. Cadance is also this, to a lesser extent, for the same reasons (minus [[spoiler:the death]]).
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** Despite suffering from [[TookALevelInDumbass the same fate as her fellow Equestrians]], Twilight Sparkle herself is this for at least being among the closest to her canon self, as well as gaining pity points from viewers who rightfully believe [[TheChewToy she's treated horribly by the Space Ponies]]. [[spoiler:Her death at the hands of Raven has also sparked several more accusations of Starfleet being unlikable, due to them [[UsefulNotes/VictimBlaming blaming her for her own death]] because she disobeyed Starfleet.]] After all that's happened, it's hard not to see her as TheWoobie. Cadance is also this, to a lesser extent, for the same reasons (minus [[spoiler:the death]]).(just replace [[spoiler:death]] with [[spoiler:having a miscarriage and her and her husband being rendered infertile for life]], and you're golden).
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** Cadance, full stop. The author hates her for being HappilyMarried (whereas [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] [[DidNotGetTheGirl didn't hook up with Terra and Kari Kamiya, respectively]]), so he makes her [[spoiler:kill her own brother who's been turned partly mechanical and evil]], suffer horrific nightmares, get beaten up by the AuthorAvatar, and [[spoiler:miscarry when a pillar topples onto her]]. For some reason, [[DoubleStandard even though he's her husband, Shining Armor doesn't get punished nearly as much]]...
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** Cadance, full stop. The author hates her for being HappilyMarried (whereas [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] [[DidNotGetTheGirl didn't hook up with Terra and Kari Kamiya, respectively]]), respectively]]; [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer yes, really]]), so he makes her [[spoiler:kill her own brother who's been turned partly mechanical and evil]], suffer horrific nightmares, get beaten up by the AuthorAvatar, and [[spoiler:miscarry when a pillar topples onto her]]. For some reason, [[DoubleStandard even though he's her husband, Shining Armor doesn't get punished nearly as much]]...
