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* CareerEndingInjury: Volepaw's leg injury is believed to be this, but Nightpelt is determined that he'll be a warrior one day, regardless.
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* CareerEndingInjury: Volepaw's leg injury is believed to be this, but Nightpelt is determined that he'll be a warrior one day, regardless. Nightpelt also mentions that his breathing problems, though not caused by an injury, forced him to retire early.
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* TheReasonYouSuckSpeech: Clawface tells Nightpelt, when his brother tells him to take the [=ThunderClan=] kits back, that he doesn't do anything, that the elders do nothing but bring the Clan down, and are only allowed to live in [=ShadowClan=] territory "out of the goodness of Brokenstar's heart". This, along with him not sending the kits back, causes Nightpelt to decide to lead the rebellion against Brokenstar himself.
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Nightpelt feels that it's up to him and his Clanmates to do something, but many are doubtful that they should kill Brokenstar. A few, including Cinderfur, suggest talking to their leader, but they're not successful. A couple of days later, Nightpelt finds his brother Clawface bringing [=ThunderClan=] kits to the [=ShadowClan=] camp. He knows Brokenstar has gone too far, and tries to convince the others again... and that's when Yellowfang arrives, telling them that she wasn't the one that killed Brightflower's kits, and that they can help a [=ThunderClan=] patrol rescue the kidnapped kits.
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Nightpelt feels that it's up to him and his Clanmates to do something, but many are doubtful that they should drive out, dethrone or kill Brokenstar. A few, including Cinderfur, suggest talking to their leader, but they're not successful. A couple of days later, Nightpelt finds his brother Clawface bringing [=ThunderClan=] kits to the [=ShadowClan=] camp. He knows Brokenstar has gone too far, and tries to convince the others again... and that's when Yellowfang arrives, telling them that she wasn't the one that killed Brightflower's kits, and that they can help a [=ThunderClan=] patrol rescue the kidnapped kits.
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** In ''Into the Wild'', Brightflower is stated to be black-and-white, while in this story, she is an orange tabby. This could be EarlyInstallmentWeirdness though.
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** In ''Into the Wild'', Brightflower is stated to be black-and-white, while in this story, and in ''Yellowfang's Secret'', she is an orange tabby. This could be EarlyInstallmentWeirdness though.
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** In ''Yellowfang's Secret'', Yellowfang leaves Runningnose to help the elders finish settling in, and returns to the [=ShadowClan=] camp in time to witness Mosspaw's accidental death in training the same day, and Brokenstar makes the other kits apprentices and exiles Featherstorm that same day. In this graphic novel, Yellowfang and Runningnose leave the elders' camp together, and Featherstorm joins the elders several days later.
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** Dawncloud joins the exiled elders in leaf-bare, and seemingly already has her warrior name, while Yellowfang is still in [=ShadowClan=]. In ''Yellowfang's Secret'', Dawncloud was still an apprentice named Dawnpaw, and still lived in the camp, not with the exiled elders, when Yellowfang was exiled. This also leads to a mistake in this story, when Volepaw expresses excitement over becoming a warrior before Dawnpaw, even though Dawncloud, having been cast out, should already be a warrior.
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** Dawncloud joins the exiled elders in leaf-bare, and seemingly already has her warrior name, while Yellowfang is still in [=ShadowClan=]. In ''Yellowfang's Secret'', Dawncloud was still an apprentice named Dawnpaw, and still lived in the camp, not with the exiled elders, when Yellowfang was exiled. This also leads to a mistake in this story, when Volepaw expresses excitement over becoming a warrior before Dawnpaw, first, even though Dawncloud, having been cast out, should already be a warrior.warrior.
** In ''Into the Wild'', Brightflower is in camp when Brokenstar admits he killed her kits, and wails in anguish. In this graphic novel, she is in the elders camp, and doesn't return until Brokenstar and his followers are driven out.
** In ''Into the Wild'', Brightflower is stated to be black-and-white, while in this story, she is an orange tabby. This could be EarlyInstallmentWeirdness though.
** Mosskit is stated to have been made an apprentice when he was four moons old. In ''Yellowfang's Secret'', he was three moons old, and didn't make it to his fourth moon before he died in training.
** In ''Into the Wild'', Brightflower is in camp when Brokenstar admits he killed her kits, and wails in anguish. In this graphic novel, she is in the elders camp, and doesn't return until Brokenstar and his followers are driven out.
** In ''Into the Wild'', Brightflower is stated to be black-and-white, while in this story, she is an orange tabby. This could be EarlyInstallmentWeirdness though.
** Mosskit is stated to have been made an apprentice when he was four moons old. In ''Yellowfang's Secret'', he was three moons old, and didn't make it to his fourth moon before he died in training.
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** Dawncloud joins the exiled elders in leaf-bare, and seemingly already has her warrior name, while Yellowfang is still in [=ShadowClan=]. In ''Yellowfang's Secret'', Dawncloud was still an apprentice named Dawnpaw, and still lived in the camp, not with the exiled elders, when Yellowfang was exiled. This also leads to a mistake in this story, when Volepaw expresses excitement over becoming a warrior before Dawnpaw, even though Dawncloud, having been cast out, should already be a warrior.
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* DramaticallyMissingThePoint: When Volepaw bemoans his injured leg, feeling that he's just as useless as the elders now, Nightpelt tries to help him realize that his fighting the rats wasn't right and that Brokenstar was in the wrong for making them do so. To this, Volepaw spits back that Brokenstar is right and it's [[SocialDarwinist all about strength]].
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* DramaticallyMissingThePoint: When DramaticallyMissingThePoint:
** Upon witnessing that Brokenstar is making the apprentices fight rats in order to make them ready for battle, Nightpelt soberly remarks that in spite of being his mentor, he failed to teach Brokenstar anything. Brokenstar agrees, if only to telegraph he thinks Nightpelt failed to teach him how to fight. It certainly indicates that he's incapable of realizing what Nightpelt is trying to tell him: that there should be more to being a Warrior than fighting and warfare.
** Later, Volepaw bemoans his injured leg, feeling that he's just as useless as the eldersnow, now. In response, Nightpelt tries to help him realize that his fighting the rats wasn't right and that Brokenstar was in the wrong for making them do so. To this, Volepaw spits back that Brokenstar is right and it's [[SocialDarwinist all about strength]].
** Upon witnessing that Brokenstar is making the apprentices fight rats in order to make them ready for battle, Nightpelt soberly remarks that in spite of being his mentor, he failed to teach Brokenstar anything. Brokenstar agrees, if only to telegraph he thinks Nightpelt failed to teach him how to fight. It certainly indicates that he's incapable of realizing what Nightpelt is trying to tell him: that there should be more to being a Warrior than fighting and warfare.
** Later, Volepaw bemoans his injured leg, feeling that he's just as useless as the elders
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* {{Jerkass}}: When Nightpelt is trying to get a medicine cat to help a greatly injured Poolcloud, Brokenstar forbids it. When he silences the cats who speak out on this cruel act, one ginger cat smirks smugly.
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* {{Jerkass}}: When Nightpelt is trying to get a medicine cat to help a greatly injured Poolcloud, Brokenstar forbids it. When he silences the cats who speak out on this cruel act, one ginger cat (revealed by concept art to be Russetfur) smirks smugly.
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* LesserOfTwoEvils: While Clawface fully supports Brokenstar, calling him a great leader, believing his claims that Yellowfang killed Brightflower's kits, and being ashamed of helping Volepaw to the point of seeing it as weakness, he at least isn't willing to murder kits, or let them die. Brokenstar has no such scruples, to the point where he killed kits to drive out Yellowfang and justified it as them being weak.
