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* ADateWithRosiePalms: Referenced when Lynn says, "You stroke it," prompting the real Leni and Luna to wonder if Lincoln really does, ahem, "stroke it".

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* DramaticDrop: Lola grabs a glass just so she can drop it when reacting to the story.



* ShoutOut: When Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa (the real one) points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MisterRogersNeighborhood''.

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When Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa (the real one) points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MisterRogersNeighborhood''.''Series/MisterRogersNeighborhood''.
** Lisa and Lola both borrow gags from WebVideo/TheNostalgiaCritic (see DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment and DramaticDrop above)


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* StringyHairedGhostGirl: When fanfic Lincoln is telling his sisters what happened that night with Luna, Lucy guesses that what he saw at 3 in the morning was "A ghost girl with black hair and a white dress staring at you with her eyes wide open." She's disappointed when he says no.
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* BearsAreBadNews: In the fanfic, a bear rampages through the camp after Leni throws a rock at it. The real siblings point out the danger of provoking a bear.

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* BearsAreBadNews: In the fanfic, this story, a bear rampages through the camp after Leni throws a rock at it. The real siblings point out the danger of provoking a bear.



* ADateWithRosiePalms: Referenced when fanfic Lynn says, "You stroke it," prompting the real Leni and Luna to wonder if Lincoln really does, ahem, "stroke it".

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* ADateWithRosiePalms: Referenced when fanfic Lynn says, "You stroke it," prompting the real Leni and Luna to wonder if Lincoln really does, ahem, "stroke it".



--->'''Lisa''': "Redundant much, redundant?"

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--->'''Lisa''': "Redundant "[[WebVideo/TheNostalgiaCritic Redundant much, redundant?"redundant?]]"



* EtherealWhiteDress: Discussed when fanfic Lucy wonders if the scary thing Lincoln saw was a ghost girl in a white dress.

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* EtherealWhiteDress: Discussed when fanfic Lucy wonders if the scary thing Lincoln saw was a ghost girl in a white dress.



** The camp counselor in the fanfic says, "For the love of cod!".

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** The camp counselor in the fanfic says, "For the love of cod!".



** Fanfic Lynn hides away from the music, even though, as Luna says, if Lynn was afraid of loud music, she'd have PTSD by now.

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** Fanfic Lynn hides away from the music, even though, as Luna says, if Lynn was afraid of loud music, she'd have PTSD by now.



* ShoutOut: When fanfic Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa (the real one) points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MisterRogersNeighborhood''.

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* ShoutOut: When fanfic Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa (the real one) points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MisterRogersNeighborhood''.



* WhyDidItHaveToBeSnakes: Fanfic Lynn hides near the bin because of the loud music. The real siblings point out the ludicrousness of the idea of Lynn being scared of loud music.

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* WhyDidItHaveToBeSnakes: Fanfic Lynn hides near the bin because of the loud music. The real siblings point out the ludicrousness of the idea of Lynn being scared of loud music.

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The fanfic opens on Luan packing for sleepaway camp... without having informed Luna about it first. Fic!Lynn and Fic!Lincoln, meanwhile, are playing baseball outdoors and accidentally break Fic!Mr. Grouse's window. Fic!Lincoln goes upstairs to find Fic!Luna crying over Fic!Luan's absence. She then suggests staying in his room. He's not pleased because of the events of "Space Invader" (even though, as Lincoln's real sisters point out, Luna would make a way better roommate than Lynn), but she insists, so he caves in.

In Fic!Lincoln's room, Fic!Luna wants to jam, but Fic!Lincoln would rather read comics. She insists, so they play loud music that bothers their siblings for such a long time that they miss dinner. They go to bed, but Fic!Luna annoys Fic!Lincoln by playing loud music and eating pizza at night. He takes the pizza box down, only for Fic!Lori to see him and assume he ordered it. He finds the bin full and goes outside to find Fic!Lynn hiding from the music for some reason.

He comes back to find that Fic!Luna has written, "Why?!" on the wall in her sleep, is sleep-crying and ranting to "Luan" about her leaving. She then tries to whip him with a belt! This, understandably, shocks the real siblings.

In the morning, Fic!Lincoln is understandably jittery and tells his sisters (sans Luna and Luan) what happened after spending breakfast time trying to avoid Fic!Luna and bailing out of another jam session using some acid to melt her speakers. After a bit of convincing, Fic!Lisa decides the best thing to do is to get Fic!Luan back (even though the real Lisa disagrees and thinks that they should address Luna's psychological issues instead).

The fanfic siblings search for Fic!Luan's "acceptance letter" and, when they find it, drive off, while Fic!Lisa explains her plan to get Fic!Luan out of camp, which involves provoking a ''bear''. The bear rampages through the camp (meanwhile, Lisa berates her fanfic counterpart) and somehow blows something up. Despite this, they still manage to get Fic!Luan back and Fic!Luna writes a song dedicated to her brother.

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The fanfic opens on Luan packing for sleepaway camp... without having informed Luna about it first. Fic!Lynn Fanfic Lynn and Fic!Lincoln, Lincoln, meanwhile, are playing baseball outdoors and accidentally break Fic!Mr.Mr. Grouse's window. Fic!Lincoln Fanfic Lincoln goes upstairs to find Fic!Luna Luna crying over Fic!Luan's Luan's absence. She then suggests staying in his room. He's not pleased because of the events of "Space Invader" (even though, as Lincoln's real sisters point out, Luna would make a way better roommate than Lynn), but she insists, so he caves in.

In Fic!Lincoln's room, Fic!Luna Lincoln's room in the fanfic, Luna wants to jam, but Fic!Lincoln Lincoln would rather read comics. She insists, so they play loud music that bothers their siblings for such a long time that they miss dinner. They go to bed, but Fic!Luna Luna annoys Fic!Lincoln Lincoln by playing loud music and eating pizza at night. He takes the pizza box down, only for Fic!Lori Lori to see him and assume he ordered it. He finds the bin full and goes outside to find Fic!Lynn Lynn hiding from the music for some reason.

He comes back to find that Fic!Luna Luna has written, "Why?!" on the wall in her sleep, is sleep-crying and ranting to "Luan" about her leaving. She then tries to whip him with a belt! This, understandably, shocks the real siblings.

In the morning, Fic!Lincoln story Lincoln is understandably jittery and tells his sisters (sans Luna and Luan) what happened after spending breakfast time trying to avoid Fic!Luna Luna and bailing out of another jam session using some acid to melt her speakers. After a bit of convincing, Fic!Lisa Lisa decides the best thing to do is to get Fic!Luan Luan back (even though the real Lisa disagrees and thinks that they should address Luna's psychological issues instead).

The fanfic siblings search for Fic!Luan's Luan's "acceptance letter" and, when they find it, drive off, while Fic!Lisa Lisa explains her plan to get Fic!Luan out of camp, which involves provoking a ''bear''. The bear rampages through the camp (meanwhile, Lisa berates her fanfic counterpart) and somehow blows something up. Despite this, they still manage to get Fic!Luan Luan back and Fic!Luna Luna writes a song dedicated to her brother.



** Fic!Luna is gullible enough to believe Fic!Lincoln's lie that they don't allow rock stars at the park.
** Fic!Lisa thinks that provoking a bear just to get her sister out of camp early is a good idea.
* BearsAreBadNews: In the fanfic, a bear rampages through the camp after Fic!Leni throws a rock at it. The real siblings point out the danger of provoking a bear.
* BigWhat: Fic!Luna says, "WHAT?!" upon learning that all Fic!Lincoln does in his room is read comics.
* BlatantLies: Fic!Lincoln lies that they don't allow rock stars at the park, and Fic!Luna ''believes'' him.

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** Fic!Luna Fanfic Luna is gullible enough to believe Fic!Lincoln's Lincoln's lie that they don't allow rock stars at the park.
** Fic!Lisa Fanfic Lisa thinks that provoking a bear just to get her sister out of camp early is a good idea.
* AffectionHatingKid: The fanfic version of Lincoln hates being hugged and kissed by Luna.
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BearsAreBadNews: In the fanfic, a bear rampages through the camp after Fic!Leni Leni throws a rock at it. The real siblings point out the danger of provoking a bear.
* BigWhat: Fic!Luna Fanfic Luna says, "WHAT?!" upon learning that all Fic!Lincoln Lincoln does in his room is read comics.
* BlatantLies: Fic!Lincoln Fanfic Lincoln lies that they don't allow rock stars at the park, and Fic!Luna Luna ''believes'' him.



* CassandraTruth: When Fic!Lincoln tells Fic!Lori that it was Fic!Luna who ordered pizza, not him, she doesn't believe him.

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* CassandraTruth: When Fic!Lincoln Lincoln in the story tells Fic!Lori Lori that it was Fic!Luna Luna who ordered pizza, not him, she doesn't believe him.



* CoughSnarkCough: Fic!Lincoln says, "The last time I let someone in[to my room] *cough* Lynn *cough*, she tried to harm me, kept me up all night with her snoring, and tried to wreck my room!".
* ADateWithRosiePalms: Referenced when Fic!Lynn says, "You stroke it," prompting Leni and Luna to wonder if Lincoln really does, ahem, "stroke it".

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* CoughSnarkCough: Fic!Lincoln Lincoln in the fanfic says, "The last time I let someone in[to my room] *cough* Lynn *cough*, she tried to harm me, kept me up all night with her snoring, and tried to wreck my room!".
* ADateWithRosiePalms: Referenced when Fic!Lynn fanfic Lynn says, "You stroke it," prompting the real Leni and Luna to wonder if Lincoln really does, ahem, "stroke it".



** Apparently, Fic!Luna had her mental breakdown at "3AM in the morning."
** The acid "melts [Fic!]Luna's speakers, causing them to be melted".

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** Apparently, Fic!Luna fanfic Luna had her mental breakdown at "3AM in the morning."
** The acid "melts [Fic!]Luna's [fanfic] Luna's speakers, causing them to be melted".



* EdibleThemeNaming: Fic!Leni wrote a story about two guys named Macaroni and Cheese.
* EtherealWhiteDress: Discussed when Fic!Lucy wonders if the scary thing Fic!Lincoln saw was a ghost girl in a white dress.

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* EdibleThemeNaming: Fic!Leni Fanfic Leni wrote a story about two guys named Macaroni and Cheese.
* EtherealWhiteDress: Discussed when Fic!Lucy fanfic Lucy wonders if the scary thing Fic!Lincoln Lincoln saw was a ghost girl in a white dress.



** Fic!Lincoln says, "For the love of Ronnie Anne!".

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** Fic!Lincoln Fanfic Lincoln says, "For the love of Ronnie Anne!".



** While Fic!Luan is mainly in-character, it's a bit weird that she told everyone ''but'' Luna, her roommate, that she was going to sleepaway camp.
** So many problems with Fic!Luna:

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** While Fic!Luan Luan is mainly in-character, it's a bit weird that she told everyone ''but'' Luna, her roommate, that she was going to sleepaway camp.
** So many problems with Fic!Luna:fanfic Luna:



*** Luna isn't so needy she'd beg Lincoln to bunk with her while Luan was away and then demand that Lincoln jam with him even after he says no, but that's exactly what Fic!Luna does.

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*** Luna isn't so needy she'd beg Lincoln to bunk with her while Luan was away and then demand that Lincoln jam with him even after he says no, but that's exactly what Fic!Luna fanfic Luna does.



** Fic!Lincoln is annoyed by Fic!Luna hugging and kissing him, even though the real Lincoln hugs and kisses his sisters all the time.
** While Lola has watched shows about plastic surgery gone wrong, she wouldn't watch a "dogbite show" like Fic!Lola does.
** Lori wouldn't let Lincoln get away with calling her a dweeb like Fic!Lori does.
** Fic!Lynn hides away from the music, even though, as Luna says, if Lynn was afraid of loud music, she'd have PTSD by now.
** A minor one, but Fic!Lisa seems to be a bit strange with nicknames, calling Fic!Lincoln a "rodent" and a "mus musculus", and Lola "princess". She also thinks provoking a bear is a good idea.

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** Fic!Lincoln Fanfic Lincoln is annoyed by Fic!Luna Luna hugging and kissing him, even though the real Lincoln hugs and kisses his sisters all the time.
** While Lola has watched shows about plastic surgery gone wrong, she wouldn't watch a "dogbite show" like Fic!Lola fanfic Lola does.
** Lori wouldn't let Lincoln get away with calling her a dweeb like Fic!Lori fanfic Lori does.
** Fic!Lynn Fanfic Lynn hides away from the music, even though, as Luna says, if Lynn was afraid of loud music, she'd have PTSD by now.
** A minor one, but Fic!Lisa fanfic Lisa seems to be a bit strange with nicknames, calling Fic!Lincoln Lincoln a "rodent" and a "mus musculus", and Lola "princess". She also thinks provoking a bear is a good idea.



** Fic!Luna complains that she's lonely and there's nothing to do in her room... so why can't she just leave her room and/or hang out with her other nine siblings?
** How did Fic!Luna find the belt (which, if it was hers, why was it in her room?) and ink? Much less in her sleep.
** The fanfic siblings are looking for Fic!Luan's acceptance letter to find where the camp is, only for Fic!Lisa to say that they don't need to look at the letter to find where it is.
* {{Pun}}: Fic!Luan says, "I wouldn't bear to say it!" about the bear in the camp.

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** Fic!Luna Fanfic Luna complains that she's lonely and there's nothing to do in her room... so why can't she just leave her room and/or hang out with her other nine siblings?
** How did Fic!Luna fanfic Luna find the belt (which, if it was hers, why was it in her room?) and ink? Much less in her sleep.
** The fanfic siblings are looking for Fic!Luan's Luan's acceptance letter to find where the camp is, only for Fic!Lisa Lisa to say that they don't need to look at the letter to find where it is.
* {{Pun}}: Fic!Luan Fanfic Luan says, "I wouldn't bear to say it!" about the bear in the camp.



** Fic!Lincoln shouts, "LUNA!" upon seeing Fic!Luna eating pizza in the middle of the night and again when she follows him down (or "up" according to the narration) to the basement.
** Fic!Luna shouts, "LUAN!" in her sleep. Fic!Lincoln says back, "LUNA?!". Fic!Luna shouts Luan's name again when the latter comes back from camp.

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** Fic!Lincoln Fanfic Lincoln shouts, "LUNA!" upon seeing Fic!Luna Luna eating pizza in the middle of the night and again when she follows him down (or "up" according to the narration) to the basement.
** Fic!Luna Fanfic Luna shouts, "LUAN!" in her sleep. Fic!Lincoln Lincoln says back, "LUNA?!". Fic!Luna Luna shouts Luan's name again in the story when the latter comes back from camp.



* ShakingTheRump: Fic!Luna apparently shakes her butt whenever she washes Vanzilla. The real Leni says that she does it too.
* ShoutOut: When Fic!Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MisterRogersNeighborhood''.

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* ShakingTheRump: Fic!Luna Fanfic Luna apparently shakes her butt whenever she washes Vanzilla. The real Leni says that she does it too.
* ShoutOut: When Fic!Mr. fanfic Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa (the real one) points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MisterRogersNeighborhood''.



** All of the siblings say, "Ewwww!" when Fic!Luna eats maple syrup from off the floor.

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** All of the siblings say, "Ewwww!" when Fic!Luna fanfic Luna eats maple syrup from off the floor.



* TalkingInYourSleep: Fic!Luna rants in her sleep about Fic!Luan going away.

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* TalkingInYourSleep: Fic!Luna Fanfic Luna rants in her sleep about Fic!Luan Luan going away.



* WhyDidItHaveToBeSnakes: Fic!Lynn hides near the bin because of the loud music. The real siblings point out the ludicrousness of the idea of Lynn being scared of loud music.

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* WhyDidItHaveToBeSnakes: Fic!Lynn Fanfic Lynn hides near the bin because of the loud music. The real siblings point out the ludicrousness of the idea of Lynn being scared of loud music.

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The fanfic siblings search for Fic!Luan's "acceptance letter" and, when they find it, drive off. To be continued...

Part two begins with Fic!Lisa's plan to get Fic!Luan out of camp, which involves provoking a ''bear''. The bear rampages through the camp (meanwhile, Lisa berates her fanfic counterpart) and somehow blows something up. Despite this, they still manage to get Fic!Luan back and Fic!Luna writes a song dedicated to her brother.

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The fanfic siblings search for Fic!Luan's "acceptance letter" and, when they find it, drive off. To be continued...

Part two begins with Fic!Lisa's
off, while Fic!Lisa explains her plan to get Fic!Luan out of camp, which involves provoking a ''bear''. The bear rampages through the camp (meanwhile, Lisa berates her fanfic counterpart) and somehow blows something up. Despite this, they still manage to get Fic!Luan back and Fic!Luna writes a song dedicated to her brother.
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* ShoutOut: When Fic!Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MrRogersNeighborhood''.

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* ShoutOut: When Fic!Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MrRogersNeighborhood''.''Series/MisterRogersNeighborhood''.
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Lincoln and Lisa are back, reading a story. This time, they've brought along Leni, Luna, and Lola. This time, they're going to be reading ''Substitute Roommate'' and it's by... Bobbybooboobear? Lincoln, however, is pretty sure that it is not, in fact, Bobby who wrote it. Things are already looking off because, according to the plot summary, Luna does something scary in her sleep...

The fanfic opens on Luan packing for sleepaway camp... without having informed Luna about it first. Fic!Lynn and Fic!Lincoln, meanwhile, are playing baseball outdoors and accidentally break Fic!Mr. Grouse's window. Fic!Lincoln goes upstairs to find Fic!Luna crying over Fic!Luan's absence. She then suggests staying in his room. He's not pleased because of the events of "Space Invader" (even though, as Lincoln's real sisters point out, Luna would make a way better roommate than Lynn), but she insists, so he caves in.

In Fic!Lincoln's room, Fic!Luna wants to jam, but Fic!Lincoln would rather read comics. She insists, so they play loud music that bothers their siblings for such a long time that they miss dinner. They go to bed, but Fic!Luna annoys Fic!Lincoln by playing loud music and eating pizza at night. He takes the pizza box down, only for Fic!Lori to see him and assume he ordered it. He finds the bin full and goes outside to find Fic!Lynn hiding from the music for some reason.

He comes back to find that Fic!Luna has written, "Why?!" on the wall in her sleep, is sleep-crying and ranting to "Luan" about her leaving. She then tries to whip him with a belt! This, understandably, shocks the real siblings.

In the morning, Fic!Lincoln is understandably jittery and tells his sisters (sans Luna and Luan) what happened after spending breakfast time trying to avoid Fic!Luna and bailing out of another jam session using some acid to melt her speakers. After a bit of convincing, Fic!Lisa decides the best thing to do is to get Fic!Luan back (even though the real Lisa disagrees and thinks that they should address Luna's psychological issues instead).

The fanfic siblings search for Fic!Luan's "acceptance letter" and, when they find it, drive off. To be continued...

Part two begins with Fic!Lisa's plan to get Fic!Luan out of camp, which involves provoking a ''bear''. The bear rampages through the camp (meanwhile, Lisa berates her fanfic counterpart) and somehow blows something up. Despite this, they still manage to get Fic!Luan back and Fic!Luna writes a song dedicated to her brother.

With that, the story ends, and the Loud siblings go out for Chinese.

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* AdaptationalDumbass:
** Fic!Luna is gullible enough to believe Fic!Lincoln's lie that they don't allow rock stars at the park.
** Fic!Lisa thinks that provoking a bear just to get her sister out of camp early is a good idea.
* BearsAreBadNews: In the fanfic, a bear rampages through the camp after Fic!Leni throws a rock at it. The real siblings point out the danger of provoking a bear.
* BigWhat: Fic!Luna says, "WHAT?!" upon learning that all Fic!Lincoln does in his room is read comics.
* BlatantLies: Fic!Lincoln lies that they don't allow rock stars at the park, and Fic!Luna ''believes'' him.
* CampingEpisode: In the fanfic, Luan is going to sleepaway camp. The actual Peeking episode, however, takes place in the house as usual.
* CassandraTruth: When Fic!Lincoln tells Fic!Lori that it was Fic!Luna who ordered pizza, not him, she doesn't believe him.
* ContinuityNod: Leni references Lynn bench-pressing her in "Room with a Feud".
* CoughSnarkCough: Fic!Lincoln says, "The last time I let someone in[to my room] *cough* Lynn *cough*, she tried to harm me, kept me up all night with her snoring, and tried to wreck my room!".
* ADateWithRosiePalms: Referenced when Fic!Lynn says, "You stroke it," prompting Leni and Luna to wonder if Lincoln really does, ahem, "stroke it".
* DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment:
** Apparently, Fic!Luna had her mental breakdown at "3AM in the morning."
** The acid "melts [Fic!]Luna's speakers, causing them to be melted".
--->'''Lisa''': "Redundant much, redundant?"
* EdibleThemeNaming: Fic!Leni wrote a story about two guys named Macaroni and Cheese.
* EtherealWhiteDress: Discussed when Fic!Lucy wonders if the scary thing Fic!Lincoln saw was a ghost girl in a white dress.
* GirlsHaveCooties: Lincoln comments that his fanfic self's aversion to Luna's hugs and kisses is like a six-year-old boy who thinks girls have cooties.
* OhMyGods:
** Fic!Lincoln says, "For the love of Ronnie Anne!".
** The real Lincoln says, "What in the name of Chris Savino?!".
** The camp counselor in the fanfic says, "For the love of cod!".
* OutOfCharacter:
** While Fic!Luan is mainly in-character, it's a bit weird that she told everyone ''but'' Luna, her roommate, that she was going to sleepaway camp.
** So many problems with Fic!Luna:
*** While Luna may be, as she puts it, a bit "bummed out" if Luan was away at camp, she definitely wouldn't ''cry'' about it and she certainly wouldn't have a mental breakdown in her sleep.
*** Luna isn't so needy she'd beg Lincoln to bunk with her while Luan was away and then demand that Lincoln jam with him even after he says no, but that's exactly what Fic!Luna does.
*** She wouldn't order pizza in the middle of the night, and even if she did, Chunk wouldn't give it to her like he does in the fanfic. She also wouldn't eat maple syrup from the floor.
---->'''Lola''': "What ''is'' it with Luna's eating habits in this story?!"
*** Luna isn't actually gullible enough to believe a lie that they don't allow rock stars at the park.
** Fic!Lincoln is annoyed by Fic!Luna hugging and kissing him, even though the real Lincoln hugs and kisses his sisters all the time.
** While Lola has watched shows about plastic surgery gone wrong, she wouldn't watch a "dogbite show" like Fic!Lola does.
** Lori wouldn't let Lincoln get away with calling her a dweeb like Fic!Lori does.
** Fic!Lynn hides away from the music, even though, as Luna says, if Lynn was afraid of loud music, she'd have PTSD by now.
** A minor one, but Fic!Lisa seems to be a bit strange with nicknames, calling Fic!Lincoln a "rodent" and a "mus musculus", and Lola "princess". She also thinks provoking a bear is a good idea.
* PlotHole:
** Fic!Luna complains that she's lonely and there's nothing to do in her room... so why can't she just leave her room and/or hang out with her other nine siblings?
** How did Fic!Luna find the belt (which, if it was hers, why was it in her room?) and ink? Much less in her sleep.
** The fanfic siblings are looking for Fic!Luan's acceptance letter to find where the camp is, only for Fic!Lisa to say that they don't need to look at the letter to find where it is.
* {{Pun}}: Fic!Luan says, "I wouldn't bear to say it!" about the bear in the camp.
* SayMyName:
** Fic!Lincoln shouts, "LUNA!" upon seeing Fic!Luna eating pizza in the middle of the night and again when she follows him down (or "up" according to the narration) to the basement.
** Fic!Luna shouts, "LUAN!" in her sleep. Fic!Lincoln says back, "LUNA?!". Fic!Luna shouts Luan's name again when the latter comes back from camp.
** Lisa's siblings shout, "LISA!" to get her to stop mocking the narrator.
* ShakingTheRump: Fic!Luna apparently shakes her butt whenever she washes Vanzilla. The real Leni says that she does it too.
* ShoutOut: When Fic!Mr. Grouse complains about his neighbours playing ball in a "neighbourhood where you can hit people", Lisa points out that there aren't any neighbourhoods where you ''can't''. Leni then mentions that nobody hits each other on ''Series/MrRogersNeighborhood''.
* SmartBall: Leni somehow ''knows'' that goldfish don't have short memories, which even ''Lisa'' didn't know.
* SpeakInUnison:
** All of the siblings say, "Ewwww!" when Fic!Luna eats maple syrup from off the floor.
** Lisa's siblings shout her name to make her stop mocking the narration during the acid scene.
* StuffBlowingUp: In the fanfic, the bear causes an explosion.
* TalkingInYourSleep: Fic!Luna rants in her sleep about Fic!Luan going away.
* ToiletHumour: Lisa claims that Lynn's flatulence smells like sulphur and gasoline.
* ViewersAreGoldfish: Lisa asks if the story was written for goldfish because it keeps reminding the readers that Luna and Luan aren't present.
* WhyDidItHaveToBeSnakes: Fic!Lynn hides near the bin because of the loud music. The real siblings point out the ludicrousness of the idea of Lynn being scared of loud music.
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