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->'''Sally:''' I don't know. Like her dialogue is... People just don't talk like that, you know? Like in perfectly worded arguments.\\
'''Writer:''' I would disagree with that assumption. Her naiveté is a direct result of the history of subjugation of women by a draconian patriarchy.\\
'''Sally:''' Right... Maybe we throw a few "um's" in there?
-->-- ''Series/{{Barry}}'', "limonada"
'''Writer:''' I would disagree with that assumption. Her naiveté is a direct result of the history of subjugation of women by a draconian patriarchy.\\
'''Sally:''' Right... Maybe we throw a few "um's" in there?
-->-- ''Series/{{Barry}}'', "limonada"
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->''We have developed a need that we cannot satisfy in reality: to hear people in the most difficult situations speak well and at length; we are delighted when the {{tragic hero}} still finds words, reasons, eloquent gestures, and altogether intellectual brightness, where life approaches abysses and men in reality usually lose their heads and certainly their linguistic felicity.''
-->-- '''Creator/FriedrichNietzsche''', ''The Gay Science''
-->-- '''Creator/FriedrichNietzsche''', ''The Gay Science''
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->''They should have called Days Gone "Verbal Tic: The Game". Maybe it's more naturalistic to pepper every line with ums and ers and stutters and flubs, but it's so fucking exhausting to listen to, and Deacon St. John is the verbal tic-iest of them all, constantly... er... talking like he's... (sigh)... just woken up... and is working a--uh... kink out of his back, and... phew... really can't be bothered with your bullshit right now...''
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->''They should have called Days Gone "Verbal Tic: The Game". Maybe it's more naturalistic to pepper every line with ums and ers and stutters and flubs, but it's so fucking exhausting to listen to, and Deacon St. John is the verbal tic-iest of them all, constantly... er... talking like he's... (sigh)...(sighs)... just woken up... and is working a--uh... kink out of his back, and... phew...(exhales)... really can't be bothered with your bullshit right now...''
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->''They should have called Days Gone "Verbal Tic: The Game". Maybe it's more naturalistic to pepper every line with ums and ers and stutters and flubs, but it's so fucking exhausting to listen to, and Deacon St. John is the verbal tic-iest of them all, constantly... er... talking like he's... (sigh)... just woken up... and is working a--uh... kink out of his back, and... phew... really can't be bothered with your bullshit right now...''
-->-- ''WebAnimation/ZeroPunctuation'' on VideoGame/DaysGone
-->-- ''WebAnimation/ZeroPunctuation'' on VideoGame/DaysGone
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->Sally came into the kitchen and stopped, looking at me plaintively. "You know that big doll of mine that Jannie wrote all over with crayon?"
->"I didn't, it was Laurie and he wrote my name."
->"You did so write on it, I saw you. Because it was the day Mommy said she would take you to get new shoes if you didn't do one single more thing bad all day and you did and she didn't take you."
->"She did so take me and I got sneakers."
->"Because anyway," Sally went on, addressing me, "you know that big doll? Because I was making a house and playing very nicely for Dikidiki Bear's birthday." She turned to Jannie. "We're going to have a party and no bad girls can come if they write on dolls."
->"See if I care."
->"What is it?" I turned to Laurie, who was poking me urgently.
->"-- goldfish?"
->"No."
->"So ''any''way I ''told'' him not to and he did anyway. So," Sally went on insistently, "I think you better come and get him out."
->"Who?"
->"''Barry.'' I been ''telling'' you."
->"Barry?"
->"Yes, because he's ''stuck'' in the ''toy'' box."
-->--''Raising Demons'' by Creator/ShirleyJackson
->"I didn't, it was Laurie and he wrote my name."
->"You did so write on it, I saw you. Because it was the day Mommy said she would take you to get new shoes if you didn't do one single more thing bad all day and you did and she didn't take you."
->"She did so take me and I got sneakers."
->"Because anyway," Sally went on, addressing me, "you know that big doll? Because I was making a house and playing very nicely for Dikidiki Bear's birthday." She turned to Jannie. "We're going to have a party and no bad girls can come if they write on dolls."
->"See if I care."
->"What is it?" I turned to Laurie, who was poking me urgently.
->"-- goldfish?"
->"No."
->"So ''any''way I ''told'' him not to and he did anyway. So," Sally went on insistently, "I think you better come and get him out."
->"Who?"
->"''Barry.'' I been ''telling'' you."
->"Barry?"
->"Yes, because he's ''stuck'' in the ''toy'' box."
-->--''Raising Demons'' by Creator/ShirleyJackson
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->Sally came into the kitchen and stopped, looking at me plaintively. "You know that big doll of mine that Jannie wrote all over with crayon?"
->"Icrayon?"\\
"I didn't, it was Laurie and he wrote my name."
->"You"\\
"You did so write on it, I saw you. Because it was the day Mommy said she would take you to get new shoes if you didn't do one single more thing bad all day and you did and she didn't take you."
->"She"\\
"She did so take me and I got sneakers."
->"Because"\\
"Because anyway," Sally went on, addressing me, "you know that big doll? Because I was making a house and playing very nicely for Dikidiki Bear's birthday." She turned to Jannie. "We're going to have a party and no bad girls can come if they write on dolls."
->"See"\\
"See if I care."
->"What"\\
"What is it?" I turned to Laurie, who was poking meurgently.
->"-- goldfish?"
->"No."
->"Sourgently.\\
"-- goldfish?"\\
"No."\\
"So ''any''way I ''told'' him not to and he did anyway. So," Sally went on insistently, "I think you better come and get him out."
->"Who?"
->"''Barry."\\
"Who?"\\
"''Barry.'' I been ''telling'' you."\\
"Barry?"\\
"Yes, because he's ''stuck'' in the ''toy'' box."
->"Barry?"
->"Yes, because he's ''stuck'' in the ''toy'' box."
-->--''Raising Demons''-->-- ''Literature/RaisingDemons'' by Creator/ShirleyJackson
->"I
"I didn't, it was Laurie and he wrote my name.
->"You
"You did so write on it, I saw you. Because it was the day Mommy said she would take you to get new shoes if you didn't do one single more thing bad all day and you did and she didn't take you.
->"She
"She did so take me and I got sneakers.
->"Because
"Because anyway," Sally went on, addressing me, "you know that big doll? Because I was making a house and playing very nicely for Dikidiki Bear's birthday." She turned to Jannie. "We're going to have a party and no bad girls can come if they write on dolls.
->"See
"See if I care.
->"What
"What is it?" I turned to Laurie, who was poking me
->"-- goldfish?"
->"No."
->"So
"-- goldfish?"\\
"No."\\
"So ''any''way I ''told'' him not to and he did anyway. So," Sally went on insistently, "I think you better come and get him out.
->"Who?"
->"''Barry.
"Who?"\\
"''Barry.'' I been ''telling'' you."\\
"Barry?"\\
"Yes, because he's ''stuck'' in the ''toy'' box."
->"Yes, because he's ''stuck'' in the ''toy'' box."
-->--''Raising Demons''
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->''"Everybody talks first draft."''
-->-- '''Creator/LarryNiven''', [[http://www.larryniven.net/stories/nivens_laws.shtml Niven's Laws for Writers]]
-->-- '''Creator/LarryNiven''', [[http://www.larryniven.net/stories/nivens_laws.shtml Niven's Laws for Writers]]
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-->--''Raising Demons'' by ShirleyJackson
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-->--''Raising Demons'' by ShirleyJackson
Creator/ShirleyJackson
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->"I say the same thing twice, I'm awkward when I speak."
-->-- "Express Yourself" by Labrinth
-->-- "Express Yourself" by Labrinth
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-->--''{{Maus}}''
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-->--''Raising Demons by Shirley Jackson.''
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-->--''Raising Demons Demons'' by Shirley Jackson.''
ShirleyJackson
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->"What is it? I turned to Laurie, who was poking me urgently.
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->"What is it? it?" I turned to Laurie, who was poking me urgently.
