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* And this episode seemingly takes place in Afghanistan or another country just like it. Not some distant planet, not some alternate dimension, but ''Afghanistan.'' An all-powerful and destructive EldritchAbomination, with the power to control humans, is entombed in a remote cave in the middle of one of the most unstable nations on Earth. And as we can see from the beginning, the insurgents are fully aware this cave exists (though they don't appear to be aware of what's inside it.) It was defeated this time, but who's to say the creature won't get out eventually?
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* And this episode seemingly takes place in Afghanistan or another country just like it. Not some distant planet, not some alternate dimension, but ''Afghanistan.'' An all-powerful and destructive EldritchAbomination, with the power to control humans, is entombed in a remote cave in the middle of one of the most unstable nations on Earth. And as we can see from the beginning, the insurgents are fully aware this cave exists (though they don't appear to be aware of what's inside it.) it). It was defeated this time, but who's to say the creature won't get out eventually?
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** The Siren, or the Golden Woman. Thanks to it being comprised almost entirely of valuable metals and jewelry, the creature resides deep within the UncannyValley, especially with its metallic mask. Then there's the [[HellIsThatNoise sounds it makes]].
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** The Siren, or the Golden Woman. Thanks to it being comprised almost entirely of valuable metals and jewelry, the creature resides deep within the UncannyValley, especially with its metallic mask. Then there's the [[HellIsThatNoise sounds it makes]].makes.
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** When Torrin kills the rest of the crew after they attempt a mutiny and throws their bodies into the hold, we get several close-up shots of the corpses being crushed as the Thanapod 'tenderizes' the corpses so that it's easier for its' offspring to feed. Special mention goes for the shot where the Thanapod flattens a crewmate's skull as if it were a ball of clay.
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** When Torrin kills the rest of the crew after they attempt a mutiny and throws their bodies into the hold, we get several close-up shots of the corpses being crushed as the Thanapod 'tenderizes' the corpses so that it's easier for its' its offspring to feed. Special mention goes for the shot where the Thanapod flattens a crewmate's skull as if it were a ball of clay.
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** If the routing error isn't correct, then more ships will keep being sent there.
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** If the routing error isn't correct, corrected, then more ships will keep being sent there.
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* The station the routing error sends Thom's ship to. It’s at the edge of the galaxy, so help isn’t an option. [[EldritchLocation The real appearance of the station]] however, is covered in what looks like muscular fiber, keeping Thom’s ship, and who knows how many others, suspended there.
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* The station the routing error sends Thom's ship to. It’s at the edge of the galaxy, so help isn’t an option. [[EldritchLocation The real appearance of the station]] however, is covered in what looks like muscular fiber, keeping Thom’s Thom's ship, and who knows how many others, suspended there.
** If the routing error isn't correct, then more ships will keep being sent there.
** If the routing error isn't correct, then more ships will keep being sent there.
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* The Woman cuddles up to Jibaro. As he's sleeping. While the camera has an inexplicable light on them that can't be diegetic. ''And she stares at us the whole time.''
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* The Railman also claims that the train somehow loses steam and is forced to stop at the exact same spot surrounded by the tall grass every time it travels this way, and he believes that there's some kind of door to another world hidden within the grass that opens up when the train passes by. If this is true, then whatever causes the monsters to exist, [[ItCanThink it wants people to wander into the grass so it can claim more victims.]]
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* The Railman also claims says that the train somehow loses steam and is forced to stop at the exact same spot surrounded by the tall grass every time it travels this way, and he believes that there's some kind of door to another world hidden within the grass that opens up when the train passes by.grass. If this is true, then whatever causes the monsters to exist, [[ItCanThink it wants people to wander into the grass so it can claim more victims.]]
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* The Railman also claims that the train somehow loses steam and is forced to stop at the exact same spot surrounded by the tall grass every time it travels this way, and he believes that there's some kind of door to another world hidden within the grass that opens up when the train passes by. If this is true, then whatever causes the monsters to exist [[ItCanThink wants people to be lured into the grass so it can claim more victims.]]
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* The Railman also claims that the train somehow loses steam and is forced to stop at the exact same spot surrounded by the tall grass every time it travels this way, and he believes that there's some kind of door to another world hidden within the grass that opens up when the train passes by. If this is true, then whatever causes the monsters to exist exist, [[ItCanThink it wants people to be lured wander into the grass so it can claim more victims.]]
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* The Railman also claims that the train somehow loses steam and is forced to stop at the exact same spot surrounded by the tall grass every time it travels this way, and he believes that there's some kind of door to another world hidden within the grass that opens up when the train passes by. If this is true, then whatever causes the monsters to exist [[ItCanThink wants people to be lured into the grass so it can claim more victims.]]
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** Even worse, while we only see a small few of the creatures, the final shot of the short shows the tall grass surrounding the tracks being lit up on all sides by their luminous skin, indicating that there are possibly hundreds of these monsters lurking out there.
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** Even worse, while we only see a small few of the creatures, the final shot of the short shows the tall grass surrounding the tracks being lit up on all sides by their luminous skin, indicating that there are possibly hundreds dozens of these monsters lurking out there.
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** Even worse, while we only see a small few of the creatures, the final shot of the short shows the tall grass surrounding the tracks being lit up on all sides by their luminous skin, indicating that there are possibly hundreds of these monsters lurking out there.
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* When Torrin tells the Thanapod that he needs the key to a lockbox under the captain's bed, the Thanapod regurgitates what's left of said captain onto the floor, as he kept the key on his person at all times. Torrin is then forced to search through the slimy, half-digested remains of his deceased captain to find the key. Worse, considering Torrin knows where the gun is kept, it's very likely he and Torrin were good friends who trusted one another. Now take a moment to imagine not only losing a friend to a monster, but also having to rummage around in their gruesome remains, just for a chance at staying alive.
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* When Torrin tells the Thanapod that he needs the key to a lockbox under the captain's bed, the Thanapod regurgitates what's left of said captain onto the floor, as he kept the key on his person at all times. Torrin is then forced to search through the slimy, half-digested remains of his deceased captain to find the key. Worse, considering Torrin knows where the gun is kept, it's very likely he and Torrin were good friends who trusted one another. Now take a moment to imagine not only losing a friend to a monster, friend, but also having to rummage around in through their gruesome remains, mangled remains after they're dead, just for a chance at staying alive.
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* When Torrin tells the Thanapod that he needs the key to a lockbox under the captain's bed, the Thanapod regurgitates what's left of said captain onto the floor, as he kept the key on his person at all times. Torrin is then forced to search through the slimy, half-digested remains of his deceased captain to find the key. Worse, considering Torrin knows where the gun is kept, it's very likely he and Torrin were good friends who trusted one another. Now take a moment to imagine not only losing a friend to a monster, but also having to rummage around in their gruesome remains, just for a chance at staying alive.
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** When Torrin kills the rest of the crew after they attempt a mutiny and throws their bodies into the hold, we get several close-up shots of the thanapod 'tenderizing' the corpses so that it's easier for its' offspring to feed.
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** When Torrin kills the rest of the crew after they attempt a mutiny and throws their bodies into the hold, we get several close-up shots of the thanapod 'tenderizing' corpses being crushed as the Thanapod 'tenderizes' the corpses so that it's easier for its' offspring to feed.feed. Special mention goes for the shot where the Thanapod flattens a crewmate's skull as if it were a ball of clay.
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*** The corpse that the Thanapod uses to converse with Torrin visibly *rots* throughout the short.
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*** The corpse that the Thanapod uses to converse with Torrin visibly *rots* ''rots'' throughout the short.
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* The swarm uses Galina as a DeadGuyPuppet to speak to Simon, by means of tendrils digging into her skull and body (a closer inspection reveals that the top of Galina's skull is gone and the tendrils and going directly into her ''brain'') and a forced, agonized voice. What makes it worse is that Galina might ''not'' actually be dead, [[FateWorseThanDeath or at least not fully;]] as her original personality (sounding incredibly tortured) comes through a few times. Plus the swarm plans Simon and her to be a perfect 'breeding pair', which in turn means that the swarm expects him to have sex with what it's turned Galina into...
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* The swarm uses Galina as a DeadGuyPuppet to speak to Simon, by means of tendrils digging into her skull and body (a closer inspection reveals that the top of Galina's skull is gone and the tendrils and are going directly into her ''brain'') and a forced, agonized voice. What makes it worse is that Galina might ''not'' actually be dead, [[FateWorseThanDeath or at least not fully;]] as her original personality (sounding incredibly tortured) comes through a few times. Plus the swarm plans Simon and her to be a perfect 'breeding pair', which in turn means that the swarm expects him to have sex with what it's turned Galina into...
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* Picture for a moment if you will, you have won your 18th Deathmatch in a row, and you are about to get lucky with one of the most beautiful women in the world. When suddenly, mid kiss, you have four spikes lodged through your skull, and are being hoist up by said spikes. While the psycho and her pimp are mocking about how you are about to die.
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* Picture for a moment if you will, you have won your 18th Deathmatch in a row, and you are about to get lucky with one of the most beautiful women in the world. When suddenly, mid kiss, mid-kiss, you have four spikes lodged through your skull, and are being hoist hoisted up by said spikes. While the psycho and her pimp are mocking about how you are about to die.
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* Two people are stuck in a [[StableTimeLoop Stable]] GroundhogDayLoop, ending up killing the other one each loop. And [[PunctuatedForEmphasis every. single. time.]] they try to just talk and explain the situation to the other side, they end up murdered in self-defense, triggering the other half of the loop, then reset. The fact the loop takes only few minutes and constantly keeps them in a hurry only adds to it - there is ''no'' rest or peace for them and they might end up doing it forever.
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* Two people are stuck in a [[StableTimeLoop Stable]] GroundhogDayLoop, ending up killing the other one each loop. And [[PunctuatedForEmphasis every. single. time.]] they try to just talk and explain the situation to the other side, they end up murdered in self-defense, triggering the other half of the loop, then reset. The fact the loop takes only a few minutes and constantly keeps them in a hurry only adds to it - there is ''no'' rest or peace for them and they might end up doing it forever.
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* Flip perspective: you are living a simple life on your planet, then some invaders arrive, take part of the planet and reshape it to their convenience, bringing in new species. And you are hunted down for trying to live on the new resources. As if it wasn't enough, their ''farmers'' are armed with mechs and weapon able to take your people down by the dozen, and no qualms using it. Yeah, you would want to eradicate them pretty quickly as well...
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* Flip perspective: you are living a simple life on your planet, then some invaders arrive, take part of the planet and reshape it to their convenience, bringing in new species. And you are hunted down for trying to live on the new resources. As if it wasn't enough, their ''farmers'' are armed with mechs and weapon weapons able to take your people down by the dozen, and no qualms using it. Yeah, you would want to eradicate them pretty quickly as well...
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* Thom never wakes up for real. What he sees as a reality is in fact still a dream, but rather than being a soothing fantasy, it's showing him his real surroundings... and he isn't awake. Probably ''can't'' even get awake, unless allowed to. Which will never happen, as it's all but stated outright he ends up in state of shock and panic each time the whole charade comes down.
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* Thom never wakes up for real. What he sees as a reality is in fact still a dream, but rather than being a soothing fantasy, it's showing him his real surroundings... and he isn't awake. Probably ''can't'' even get awake, unless allowed to. Which will never happen, as it's all but stated outright he ends up in a state of shock and panic each time the whole charade comes down.
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** The only thing more frightening than the titular squad is the [[ApatheticCitizens utterly apathetic citizens]] who are too busy with the privilege (if you can even call it that) of living for hundreds of years to even recognise someone would want to have children or, even weirder, irreversibly age two years for that.
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** The only thing more frightening than the titular squad is the [[ApatheticCitizens utterly apathetic citizens]] who are too busy with the privilege (if you can even call it that) of living for hundreds of years to even recognise recognize someone would want to have children or, even weirder, irreversibly age two years for that.
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* ''The Thanapod''. A giant, man-eating crab that is able to take hold of a dead corpse and use it to talk, with one hell of a creepy voice to boot. And like its mundane, real life counterparts, it's an extreme ExplosiveBreeder which can produce hundreds of offspring in one batch.
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* ''The Thanapod''. A giant, man-eating crab that is able to take hold of a dead corpse and use it to talk, with one hell of a creepy voice to boot. And like its mundane, real life real-life counterparts, it's an extreme ExplosiveBreeder which can produce hundreds of offspring in one batch.
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* The titular swarm is essentially a NonMaliciousMonster. Start doing experiments on it, however, and it will activate "genetic protocols", in which it first creates a new caste to grant it sapience, relying on its previous GeneticMemory. Then clones you and sends its new, loyal troops with fervor to exterminate you. Then makes a new SlaveRace using the leftover genetic material. One of its previous assailaints was apparently TheEmpire: its descendents are now vomit eating scavengers.
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* The titular swarm is essentially a NonMaliciousMonster. Start doing experiments on it, however, and it will activate "genetic protocols", in which it first creates a new caste to grant it sapience, relying on its previous GeneticMemory. Then clones you and sends its new, loyal troops with fervor to exterminate you. Then makes a new SlaveRace using the leftover genetic material. One of its previous assailaints assailants was apparently TheEmpire: its descendents descendants are now vomit eating vomit-eating scavengers.
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* Jibaro becoming more and more deranged throughout the episode after witnessing his fellow soldiers' slaughter and later being pursued by the Golden Woman since, thanks to his immunity from her CompellingVoice, [[ILoveYouBecauseICantControlYou he peaked her interest.]] It reaches its apex when, after the Golden Woman tries to seduce him (that including ignoring his pushing back and biting part of his lips off), he viciously beats her to a bloody mess then tears the metal and jewels off her body in a manner disturbingly similar to rape. He discards her broken and battered body into the river, and as he gathers the loot the river starts turning into blood...
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* Jibaro becoming more and more deranged throughout the episode after witnessing his fellow soldiers' slaughter and later being pursued by the Golden Woman since, thanks to his immunity from her CompellingVoice, [[ILoveYouBecauseICantControlYou he peaked piqued her interest.]] It reaches its apex when, after the Golden Woman tries to seduce him (that including ignoring his pushing back and biting part of his lips off), he viciously beats her to a bloody mess then tears the metal and jewels off her body in a manner disturbingly similar to rape. He discards her broken and battered body into the river, and as he gathers the loot the river starts turning into blood...
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* Jibaro becoming more and more deranged throughout the episode after witnessing his fellow soldiers' slaughter and later being pursued by the Golden Woman since, thanks to his immunity from her CompellingVoice, [[ILoveYouBecauseICantControlYou he peaked her interest.]] It reaches it's apex when, after the Golden Woman tries to seduce him (that including ignoring his pushing back and biting part of his lips off), he viciously beats her to a bloody mess then tears the metal and jewels off her body in a manner disturbingly similar to rape. He discards her broken and battered body into the river, and as he gathers the loot the river starts turning into blood...
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* Jibaro becoming more and more deranged throughout the episode after witnessing his fellow soldiers' slaughter and later being pursued by the Golden Woman since, thanks to his immunity from her CompellingVoice, [[ILoveYouBecauseICantControlYou he peaked her interest.]] It reaches it's its apex when, after the Golden Woman tries to seduce him (that including ignoring his pushing back and biting part of his lips off), he viciously beats her to a bloody mess then tears the metal and jewels off her body in a manner disturbingly similar to rape. He discards her broken and battered body into the river, and as he gathers the loot the river starts turning into blood...
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* The eyeless fanged horrors featured in the short, which the Railman speculates to have [[WasOnceAMan once been people who were lost on the plains or perhaps passengers on the train who wandered off.]]
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*** The corpse that the Thanapod uses to converse with Torrin visibly *rots* throughout the short.
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* The swarm uses Galina as a DeadGuyPuppet to speak to Simon, by means of tendrils digging into her skull and body (closer expection reveals that the top of Galina's skull is gone and the tendrils and going directly into her ''brain'') and a forced, agonized voice. What makes it worse is that Galina might ''not'' actually be dead, [[FateWorseThanDeath or at least not fully;]] her original personality (sounding incredibly tortured) comes through a few times. Plus the swarm plans Simon and her to be a perfect 'breeding pair', which in turn means that the swarm expects him to have sex with what it's turned Galina into...
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* The swarm uses Galina as a DeadGuyPuppet to speak to Simon, by means of tendrils digging into her skull and body (closer expection (a closer inspection reveals that the top of Galina's skull is gone and the tendrils and going directly into her ''brain'') and a forced, agonized voice. What makes it worse is that Galina might ''not'' actually be dead, [[FateWorseThanDeath or at least not fully;]] as her original personality (sounding incredibly tortured) comes through a few times. Plus the swarm plans Simon and her to be a perfect 'breeding pair', which in turn means that the swarm expects him to have sex with what it's turned Galina into...
