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* TheBusCameBack: Boma, a character not seen in ''Trek'' canon since the [[Series/StarTrekTheOriginalSeries TOS episode]] [[Recap/StarTrekS1E16TheGalileoSeven "The Galileo Seven"]], is a minor character, the head of the team that developed ''Star Empire''[='s=] hull material. During an angry confrontation with Bones and Scotty, he reveals that they filed insubordination charges against him for his conduct toward Spock in the episode, leading to him being CourtMartialed and booted from of Starfleet.
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* TheBusCameBack: Boma, a character not seen in ''Trek'' canon since the [[Series/StarTrekTheOriginalSeries TOS episode]] [[Recap/StarTrekS1E16TheGalileoSeven "The Galileo Seven"]], is a minor character, the head of the team that developed ''Star Empire''[='s=] hull material. During an angry confrontation with Bones and Scotty, he reveals that they filed insubordination charges against him for his conduct toward Spock in the episode, leading to him being CourtMartialed and booted from of Starfleet.
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removing the spoilers on that part since it's generally spoiled in the description
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* TheBusCameBack: Boma, a character not seen in ''Trek'' canon since the [[Series/StarTrekTheOriginalSeries TOS episode]] [[Recap/StarTrekS1E16TheGalileoSeven "The Galileo Seven"]], is a minor character, the head of the team that developed ''Star Empire''[='s=] hull material. During an angry confrontation with Bones and Scotty, he reveals that they filed insubordination charges against him for his conduct toward Spock in the episode, leading to him being court-martialed.
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* TheBusCameBack: Boma, a character not seen in ''Trek'' canon since the [[Series/StarTrekTheOriginalSeries TOS episode]] [[Recap/StarTrekS1E16TheGalileoSeven "The Galileo Seven"]], is a minor character, the head of the team that developed ''Star Empire''[='s=] hull material. During an angry confrontation with Bones and Scotty, he reveals that they filed insubordination charges against him for his conduct toward Spock in the episode, leading to him being court-martialed.CourtMartialed and booted from of Starfleet.
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* TheCoup: Ultimately revealed to be Rittenhouse's long-term plan. [[spoiler:Piper and Sarda discover that he has associates and cronies in a ''lot'' of high-ranking places within Starfleet, and ''Star Empire'' and future dreadnoughts of the same class are meant to be the tools by which he'll subjugate non-Federation governments and enforce his will.]]
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* TheCoup: Ultimately revealed to be Rittenhouse's long-term plan. [[spoiler:Piper Piper and Sarda discover that he has associates and cronies in a ''lot'' of high-ranking places within Starfleet, and ''Star Empire'' and future dreadnoughts of the same class are meant to be the tools by which he'll subjugate non-Federation governments and enforce his will.]]
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* DeerInTheHeadlights: Piper freezes up during a battle when Kirk orders her to do something that seems to be suicidally nonsensical. She's then shoved out of her chair by an ''ensign'' who performs the ordered tactic...and it works.
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* DeerInTheHeadlights: During the confrontation between the Klingons and ''Star Empire'', Piper freezes up during a battle when is manning the helm. When the Klingons take notice of ''Enterprise'', Kirk orders her to do something perform a maneuver that seems to be suicidally nonsensical. She's She freezes up and can't make herself do it, and is then shoved out of her chair by an ''ensign'' who performs the ordered tactic...and it works.
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** ''Star Empire'' sounds like a silly name for a warship. [[spoiler:Then Rittenhouse's plan to overthrow the Federation is revealed and it becomes a major hint to his true intentions.]]
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** ''Star Empire'' sounds like a silly name for a warship. [[spoiler:Then Then Rittenhouse's plan to overthrow the Federation is revealed and it becomes a major hint to his true intentions.]]
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** When Piper tells Merete about her past with Sarda, she describes their relationship as being about as close to friendship as a Vulcan will allow, but her ignorance of Vulcan cultural norms led her to try to help his career, which blew up ''badly'' and ruined their relationship and, more importantly, wrecks Sarda's life.
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** When Piper tells Merete about her past with Sarda, she describes their relationship as being about as close to friendship as a Vulcan will allow, but her ignorance of Vulcan cultural norms led her to try to help his career, which blew up ''badly'' and ruined their relationship and, more importantly, wrecks wrecked Sarda's life.
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Previous version implied that Sarda took is own life, rather than just his life being ruined
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** When Piper tells Merete about her past with Sarda, she describes their relationship as being about as close to friendship as a Vulcan will allow, but her ignorance of Vulcan cultural norms led her to try to help his career, which blew up ''badly'' and ruined their relationship and, more importantly, Sarda's life.
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** When Piper tells Merete about her past with Sarda, she describes their relationship as being about as close to friendship as a Vulcan will allow, but her ignorance of Vulcan cultural norms led her to try to help his career, which blew up ''badly'' and ruined their relationship and, more importantly, wrecks Sarda's life.
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* FieldPromotion: Scanner rigs the computers in a meeting room to allow Piper and the others to eavesdrop on a meeting between Rittenhouse, the other captains supporting him, and the senior officers of ''Enterprise''. During the meeting, Rittenhouse basically slaps Kirk in the face by giving Captain Nash a field promotion to Commodore for the remainder of the time they are trying to apprehend ''Star Empire''. Kirk stays calm, but Bones and Scotty are both outraged at the blatant disrespect shown by Rittenhouse.
* HalfHumanHybrid: Merete [[InvokedTrope jokes about this]] when she's introduced to Piper, noting that her species is very similar to humans but that successful interbreeding hasn't happened.
* HalfHumanHybrid: Merete [[InvokedTrope jokes about this]] when she's introduced to Piper, noting that her species is very similar to humans but that successful interbreeding hasn't happened.
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* FieldPromotion: Scanner rigs the computers in a meeting room to allow Piper and the others to eavesdrop on a meeting between Rittenhouse, the three other captains supporting him, and the senior officers of ''Enterprise''. During the meeting, Rittenhouse basically slaps Kirk in the face by giving Captain Cpt. Nash a field promotion to Commodore for the remainder of the time they are trying to apprehend ''Star Empire''. Kirk stays calm, but Bones and Scotty are both outraged at the blatant disrespect shown by Rittenhouse.
* HalfHumanHybrid: Merete [[InvokedTrope jokes about this]] when she's introduced to Piper, noting that her species is very similar to humans but that successful interbreeding hasn'thappened.happened...and not for lack of trying.
* HalfHumanHybrid: Merete [[InvokedTrope jokes about this]] when she's introduced to Piper, noting that her species is very similar to humans but that successful interbreeding hasn't
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* ThisIsGonnaSuck: As the meeting between Rittenhouse, the captains supporting him, and the ''Enterprise'' officers is closing up, Piper notes that captains Leedson and Tutakai share a "worried, 'in-over-our-heads' look" just before walking out of the room, as if they're beginning to realize the mess the situation is turning into.
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* ThisIsGonnaSuck: As the meeting between Rittenhouse, the captains supporting him, other captains, and the ''Enterprise'' officers is closing up, Piper notes that captains Leedson and Tutakai share a "worried, 'in-over-our-heads' look" just before walking out of the room, as if they're beginning to realize the mess the situation is turning into.
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* MeleeATrois: The "cosmic scramble" at the climax involves multiple Klingon Houses, the Romulans, the Tholians, and more than one unidentified race's ships in a massive brawl over the transwarp MacGuffin aboard the crippled ''Enterprise''.
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* ExcitedShowTitle: Both novels' titles are shouting at the reader.
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* NoPronunciationGuide: Merete. It's spelled the same as a RealLife Norwegian name pronounced "Muh-rhet-uh," and a ''Film/GuardiansOfTheGalaxy'' character who pronounces it "Mee-reet."
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* CallingYourBathroomBreaks: A minor funny moment happens when Piper, in the middle of a very tense situation, really needs to use the head.
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* CallingYourBathroomBreaks: A minor funny moment happens when Piper, in the middle of a very tense situation, really needs to use the head. Thankfully, it only takes Spock (currently in the captain's chair) a moment to figure out what she means by [[GoToTheEuphemism "Permission to step updeck?"]].
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* ValuesDissonance: {{Invoked|Trope}} in the references to Argelius II. The Argelian devotion to [[TheHedonist hedonism]] above all else has turned their culture stagnant, and offering shore leave services to passing starships is the only effective way to support the planetary economy. Also, if you're not there specifically to get laid, it's the singularly most boring place in the galaxy.
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* ValuesDissonance: {{Invoked|Trope}} in the references to Argelius II. The Argelian devotion to [[TheHedonist hedonism]] above all else has turned their culture stagnant, and offering shore leave services to passing starships is the only effective way to support the planetary economy. Also, if you're not there specifically to get laid, it's the singularly most boring place in the galaxy.
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* ValuesDissonance: {{Invoked|Trope}} in the references to Argelius II. The Argelian devotion to [[TheHedonist hedonism]] above all else has turned their culture stagnant, and offering shore leave services to passing starships is the only effective way to support the planetary economy. Also, if you're not there specifically to get laid, it's the singularly most boring place in the galaxy.
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* CallForward: The story takes place at a point when transwarp technology has just been developed but has not had a chance to be thoroughly tested.
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* CallForward: The story takes place at a point when transwarp technology technology, a key feature of ''Excelsior'' from ''Film/StarTrekIIITheSearchForSpock'', has just been developed but has not had a chance to be thoroughly tested.
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''Dreadnought!'' centers on Piper being associated with the theft of a prototype dreadnought-class warship, which eventually turns into an effort to stop a power-mad admiral from staging a coup within the Federation itself. ''Battlestations!'' picks up a few months later, and revolves around the theft of transwarp technology and the power scramble that results from multiple spacefaring peoples desiring the tech for themselves, with Piper again being pulled into events due to one of the key people behind the tech being an old associate.
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''Dreadnought!'' centers on Piper being associated with the theft of a prototype dreadnought-class warship, which eventually turns into an effort to stop a power-mad admiral from staging a coup within the Federation itself. ''Battlestations!'' picks up a few months later, and revolves around the theft of prototype transwarp technology and the power scramble that results from multiple spacefaring peoples desiring the tech for themselves, with Piper again being pulled into events due to one of the key people behind the tech being an old associate.
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* BrokeYourArmPunchingOutCthulu: Piper's little space tug managed to prevent ''Enterprise'' from jumping to warp by yanking one nacelle askew with its heavy-duty tractor beam, but it blows out most of the systems on the ship, including life support.
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* BrokeYourArmPunchingOutCthulu: BrokeYourArmPunchingOutCthulhu: Piper's little space tug managed to prevent ''Enterprise'' from jumping to warp by yanking one nacelle askew with its heavy-duty tractor beam, but it blows out most of the systems on the ship, including life support.
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* AuthorFilibuster: Piper goes on an extended pro-Libertarian rant while locked in the brig with Sarda.
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* AuthorFilibuster: Piper goes on an extended pro-Libertarian rant while locked in the ''Pompeii''[='s=] brig with Sarda.Sarda, couched as her comparing Rittenhouse's political maneuvering and consolidation of power to the political upheavals that eventually led to Earth's third world war. She notes this was the topic she chose for a historical thesis required by captaincy candidates.
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* RammingAlwaysWorks: {{Subverted|Trope}} at the end of the starship battle when [[spoiler:Rittenhouse's ship is destroyed by ''Enterprise'' as it attempts to ram ''Star Empire'']].
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* RammingAlwaysWorks: {{Subverted|Trope}} at the end of the starship battle when [[spoiler:Rittenhouse's ship is destroyed by ''Enterprise'' as it attempts to ram ''Star Empire'']]. It's noted that Federation destroyers (smaller ships than heavy cruisers like ''Enterprise'') are designed with this purpose in mind [[spoiler:(and Piper realises this is the reason Rittenhouse chose ''Pompeii'' as his flagship rather than a more powerful ship)]], which is rather bizarrely out of character for an organisation like Starfleet.