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* Jerry's re-edited introduction introduces him as a "[[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Serpents_in_the_Bible serpent]]" of the Lord. And that's not even close to the only time serpents pop up.
* One author's note warns that the reader will "burn in gel" if they do not convert.
* Percy Jackson coining the name "[[Franchise/StarWars Jedi]] [[KungFuJesus Christ]]".
* One author's note warns that the reader will "burn in gel" if they do not convert.
* Percy Jackson coining the name "[[Franchise/StarWars Jedi]] [[KungFuJesus Christ]]".
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* [[RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment [[Administrivia/RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment Whatever you think]] of the significance of this event or the man himself, UsefulNotes/DonaldTrump becoming president means that for the first time since the series began, an American presidential election went as the Prayer Warriors predicted and hoped.
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** It's even funnier when you realize their names are more or less ripped from the elemental masks from [[Franchise/CrashBandicoot Wrath of Cortex.]]
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** It's even funnier when you realize their names are more or less ripped from the elemental masks from [[Franchise/CrashBandicoot [[VideoGame/CrashBandicoot Wrath of Cortex.]]
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* The writer claiming Music/JohnLennon (rather than ([[DontExplainTheJoke rather than]] UsefulNotes/VladimirLenin) was the leader of Russia in 1918 in order to prove he knows history.
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* The absurd amount of detail the author goes into about the cars the Prayer Warriors use, and the fact that one of his many hang-ups is imported cars.
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* [[RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment Whatever you think]] of the significance of this event or the man himself, UsefulNotes/DonaldTrump becoming president means that for the first time since the series began, an American presidential election went as the Prayer Warriors predicted and hoped.
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* Appearently, [[Myth/EgyptianMythology Horus]] has the head of a '''house'''.
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* Appearently, Apparently, [[Myth/EgyptianMythology Horus]] has the head of a '''house'''.
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* William, desperate to get to Syria and help Carter, ask the pilot of their airplane to fly faster. When the pilot explains that he can't do that, William prays to God and makes the plane fly faster. [[DeusExMachina Deus ex Machinae]] have rarely been this obvious or amusing.
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* While Jupiter's torturing Grover is fairly horrific, even by this fic's standards, it's quite funny when the author gives an over-the-top AndThatsTerrible, saying "see, isn't this evil or what?" and "seriously that is so evil that even I cannot wait to kill him off." The latter is even more amusing when you realize that Jupiter survives.
* In one scene between Jerry and his wife Mary in Chapter 18, the author accidentally puts Percy's name in place of Mary's when she talks to Jerry about how much she loves him, leading to an accidental bit of HoYay.
* In one scene between Jerry and his wife Mary in Chapter 18, the author accidentally puts Percy's name in place of Mary's when she talks to Jerry about how much she loves him, leading to an accidental bit of HoYay.
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* So, in the first chapter or two, Jason and Annabeth are talking about who the traitor-oh I'm sorry-''tractor'' is.
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!The Prayer Ponies
* The pretentious and overwrought PurpleProse in Chapter 8, such as when describing Applejack calling the police on the Prayer Ponies.
-->She did not anticipate Applejack to ring the constabularies. She truly thought that the other pony was only calling her bluff. The moment Applejack responded to the phone, Fluttershy discerned that the other pony was being severe. The edict implementation organization got there within a minute or so, since Ponyville was not a surely immense municipality.[[labelnote:Translation]] She didn't think Applejack would call the police. She really thought the other pony was only calling her bluff. The moment Applejack responded to the phone, Fluttershy realized the other pony was serious. The police got there in about a minute, since Ponyville was not a large city[[/labelnote]]
!The Prayer Ponies
* The pretentious and overwrought PurpleProse in Chapter 8, such as when describing Applejack calling the police on the Prayer Ponies.
-->She did not anticipate Applejack to ring the constabularies. She truly thought that the other pony was only calling her bluff. The moment Applejack responded to the phone, Fluttershy discerned that the other pony was being severe. The edict implementation organization got there within a minute or so, since Ponyville was not a surely immense municipality.[[labelnote:Translation]] She didn't think Applejack would call the police. She really thought the other pony was only calling her bluff. The moment Applejack responded to the phone, Fluttershy realized the other pony was serious. The police got there in about a minute, since Ponyville was not a large city[[/labelnote]]
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* When trying to break Percy out of prison, Ebony[[hottip:Note:Never mind that she and Michael were captured at the end of Battle with the Witches]] dresses up in a seductive black dress to seduce the guards, and an entire paragraph is spent justifying this. She walks up to the guards, and ends up just ripping their testicles out and slitting their throats, defeating the point.
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* When trying to break Percy out of prison, Ebony[[hottip:Note:Never Ebony[[note]]Never mind that she and Michael were captured at the end of Battle with the Witches]] Witches[[/note]] dresses up in a seductive black dress to seduce the guards, and an entire paragraph is spent justifying this. She walks up to the guards, and ends up just ripping their testicles out and slitting their throats, defeating the point.
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* When trying to break Percy out of prison, Ebony[[hottip:Note:Never mind that she and Michael were captured at the end of Battle with the Witches]] dresses up in a seductive black dress to seduce the guards, and an entire paragraph is spent justifying this. She walks up to the guards, and ends up just ripping their testicles out and slitting their throats, defeating the point.
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* Immediately after killing Socrates, Jason [[{{Hypocrite}} refuses to kill one of his followers when she begs for death, saying that he will not because murder is a sin]].
* This author's note at the end of Chapter 8, which gets posted twice- once almost completely incomprehensible, and another time with poor spelling and grammar.
-->'''Proofreader''': [[BlatantLies I removed all grammatical errors, so nobody can criticize you about that]]. ^_^
-->'''[=IHeartThomasBrown=] Commentary''': You did NOT just use a smiley.
* This author's note at the end of Chapter 8, which gets posted twice- once almost completely incomprehensible, and another time with poor spelling and grammar.
-->'''Proofreader''': [[BlatantLies I removed all grammatical errors, so nobody can criticize you about that]]. ^_^
-->'''[=IHeartThomasBrown=] Commentary''': You did NOT just use a smiley.
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* The way Draco kills Lola- he [[AssPull prays to God to turn his sword into a vacuum cleaner]]([[PlotHole ignoring Lola's]] [[NoSell ability to nullify prayer]] and sucks her up, killing her.
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* The way Draco kills Lola- he [[AssPull prays to God to turn his sword into a vacuum cleaner]]([[PlotHole ignoring Lola's]] [[NoSell ability to nullify prayer]] and sucks her up, killing her.
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* The names of the "[[InNameOnly Titans]]". Because Lola, Wawa, Pyro and Rocco are totally more intimidating and dignifying names than Hyperion, Iapetus, Krios or Koios.
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!The Evil Gods Part 2
* Thalia saying that [[spoiler:Luke]] cannot possibly be the traitor, in a defiance of canon so blatant it could be considered a FanonDiscontinuity [[DiscontinuityNod Nod]].
!The Titans Strike Back
* The Mike Tyson-like ear biting a young boy inflicts on the Queen of England.
* Thalia saying that [[spoiler:Luke]] cannot possibly be the traitor, in a defiance of canon so blatant it could be considered a FanonDiscontinuity [[DiscontinuityNod Nod]].
!The Titans Strike Back
* The Mike Tyson-like ear biting a young boy inflicts on the Queen of England.
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* The Draco and Ebony sex scene... or rather, [[UnusualEuphemism cooking and gardening]] scene.
-->'''Narration''': Draco and Ebony removed skin from an onion. After that, they put Draco`s noodles into Ebony`s bowl, and Draco then planted some seeds into Ebony`s pot, and then they laid on their bed for the rest the night. They were very tired from all that hard work.
-->'''Narration''': Draco and Ebony removed skin from an onion. After that, they put Draco`s noodles into Ebony`s bowl, and Draco then planted some seeds into Ebony`s pot, and then they laid on their bed for the rest the night. They were very tired from all that hard work.
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!Attack of the Sphinx:
* Appearently, [[EgyptianMythology Horus]] has the head of a '''house'''.
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* During the train ride with Ginny, Michael gives indications of being a CovertPervert, [[HypocriticalHumor then complains about Ginny's fairly innocuous gestures toward him]].
-->'''Michael''': . She looked pretty hot, but I decided to put such impure thought out of my mind. She started to pat my back, and I stood really still. How dare someone touch someone out of wedlock!
-->'''Michael''': . She looked pretty hot, but I decided to put such impure thought out of my mind. She started to pat my back, and I stood really still. How dare someone touch someone out of wedlock!
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* After Jerry kills Grover [[DeathIsCheap for the second time]], in addition to having also killed Annabeth in the second chapter, the author specifically points out that Percy emerged to attack Jerry for "no reason why so ever".
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!Threat of Satanic Commonism
*Books' ShutUpKirk, especially in how it makes Jerry's speech fall flat.
-->'''Jerry''': "Jesses Christ is my saviour. HE will pretext me in my lime of need. Where is your false gods now? I know perfumery well that your gods is not real but is a lie created by Stalin (which s secretly demon processed by the Satan, the worse demon of them all! And he is not a god!)"
-->'''Books''': "Laugh out loud."
-->'''Jerry''': "Is that all you are going to say?"
-->'''Books''': "Laugh out loud."
*Books' ShutUpKirk, especially in how it makes Jerry's speech fall flat.
-->'''Jerry''': "Jesses Christ is my saviour. HE will pretext me in my lime of need. Where is your false gods now? I know perfumery well that your gods is not real but is a lie created by Stalin (which s secretly demon processed by the Satan, the worse demon of them all! And he is not a god!)"
-->'''Books''': "Laugh out loud."
-->'''Jerry''': "Is that all you are going to say?"
-->'''Books''': "Laugh out loud."
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!Battle with the Witches
*This Fanfic/MyImmortal ShoutOut.
-->'''Hagrid''': "I may be a Hogwarts teacher, but I`m also a Christian!"
*Dumbledore's confession, largely because of how flippant it is.
-->'''Dumbledore''': "Okay, so I have sex with little boys, so what?"
*This Fanfic/MyImmortal ShoutOut.
-->'''Hagrid''': "I may be a Hogwarts teacher, but I`m also a Christian!"
*Dumbledore's confession, largely because of how flippant it is.
-->'''Dumbledore''': "Okay, so I have sex with little boys, so what?"
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!The Evil Gods Part 1
*The IDoNotOwn disclaimer
-->Disclaimer: I do not own the Bible, God does. I will not feel sorry for using Percy Jackson as it is evil and should not have a disclaimer.
*The part when the author apologizes to God for having PercyJackson and Satan say bad things about Him in the VillainEpisode.
*The author's reason for the SexyDiscretionShot
-->I will not describe what happened for I do not want any atheist to get pleasure out of it and have an [[RougeAnglesOfSatin organism]].
*The IDoNotOwn disclaimer
-->Disclaimer: I do not own the Bible, God does. I will not feel sorry for using Percy Jackson as it is evil and should not have a disclaimer.
*The part when the author apologizes to God for having PercyJackson and Satan say bad things about Him in the VillainEpisode.
*The author's reason for the SexyDiscretionShot
-->I will not describe what happened for I do not want any atheist to get pleasure out of it and have an [[RougeAnglesOfSatin organism]].
