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* Tara wasn't insane or a {{troll}}; she was GenreSavvy and knew the TV Tropes page for ''Fanfic/MyImmortal'' would eventually be made, and not only would it be made, it would be a non-stop SugarWiki/{{Funny Moment|s}}, and a temporary cure for depression. Bless you, Tara, you MagnificentBastard, you.
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* Tara wasn't insane or a {{troll}}; she was GenreSavvy and knew the TV Tropes page for ''Fanfic/MyImmortal'' would eventually be made, and not only would it be made, it would be a non-stop SugarWiki/{{Funny Moment|s}}, and a temporary cure for depression. Bless you, Tara, you MagnificentBastard, you.Tara.
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* Although she proudly {{Lampshades}} it at one point, Tara proving her "Stanist" cred by changing "a cross between ''[X] and [Y]''" into "a '''pentagram''' between ''[X] and [Y]''" is still genuinely clever.
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* Ebony's bisexuality is often written off as being ButNotTooBi because she never actively peruses any female relationships in the story. However if you look closely her sexuality does shine through in [[MaleGaze her descriptions of other women she likes.]] She often takes significant effort into describing how beautiful and sexy her female friends are, taking especially close notice to their big breasts, snatched waists and how their clothes compliment those features. She may not be looking to date any of the women around her, but she's sure as hell scoping them out still.
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* Ebony's bisexuality is often written off as being ButNotTooBi because she never actively peruses any female relationships in the story. However if you look closely her sexuality does shine through in [[MaleGaze her descriptions of other women female characters she likes.]] She often takes significant effort into describing how beautiful and sexy her female friends are, taking especially close notice to their big breasts, snatched waists and how their clothes compliment those features. She may not be looking to date any of the women around her, but she's sure as hell scoping them out still.
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*** Even worse, what if the whole damn book was [[AdultFear a cry]] [[NightmareFuel for help?]]
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*** Even worse, what if the whole damn book was [[AdultFear a cry]] cry [[NightmareFuel for help?]]
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* Enoby calls Snap and Loopin pedophiles when she catches them filming a video of her in the bathtub and masticating to it. Ebony is 17, the canonical age of adulthood in the ''Harry Potter'' universe.
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** The last line in the story is Ebony using Avada Kedavra. Perhaps she used it on the fic and that's why it's suddenly a DeadFic.
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* In both instances in which she insists Ebony is not a {{Mary Sue}}, she misspells Ebony's name (As Enoby and Evony, respectively.) and in the instance where she seems to have a vague understanding of what a Mary Sue ''is'' , she spells it as Mary Su. So, she wasn't technically lying, as ''{{VideoGame/Evony}}'' (a "game") is not a Mary Su (a term she just made up).
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** When going through My Immortal, trying to find all the errors (Over six thousand in count), there's a notice. After Ebony has her vision, she leaves with Vampire and Draco to tell Dumbledore about it. In the process, they leave Draco's flying Mercedes-Benz parked in the forest. When it shows up again, Snape suddenly has it, which you'd write off as Tara forgetting where she left the car--then it hit me. They left the car in the forest twenty chapters ago, where Snape could have easily stolen it.
* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well, it's uncertain what he expected them to do, but apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal with them?
** Actually, it is mentioned later that Snap is in Gryffindor now, since he has converted to Christianity. So, then, Snake must be head of Gryffindor, since a teacher cannot be "in" a house unless they are head of house. (Not counting Hagrid, of course. He is a HOGWARTS STUDENT! AND ALSO A SATANTIST!) Therefore it is possible that [=McGonagle=] is the Slytherin head of house now.
*** But then we get the ''opposite'' problem, where there is no reason for Snap to be there since he's the Gryffindor head.
*** Come on folks. [=McGoogle=] is probably still ''Deputy Headmisstress''.
* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well, it's uncertain what he expected them to do, but apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal with them?
** Actually, it is mentioned later that Snap is in Gryffindor now, since he has converted to Christianity. So, then, Snake must be head of Gryffindor, since a teacher cannot be "in" a house unless they are head of house. (Not counting Hagrid, of course. He is a HOGWARTS STUDENT! AND ALSO A SATANTIST!) Therefore it is possible that [=McGonagle=] is the Slytherin head of house now.
*** But then we get the ''opposite'' problem, where there is no reason for Snap to be there since he's the Gryffindor head.
*** Come on folks. [=McGoogle=] is probably still ''Deputy Headmisstress''.
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** When going through My Immortal, trying to find all the errors (Over six thousand in count), there's a notice. After Ebony has her vision, she leaves with Vampire and Draco to tell Dumbledore about it. In the process, they leave Draco's flying Mercedes-Benz parked in the forest. When it shows up again, Snape suddenly has it, which you'd write off as Tara forgetting where she left the car--then it hit me.hits you. They left the car in the forest twenty chapters ago, where Snape could have easily stolen it.
* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well, it's uncertain what he expected them to do, but apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal withthem?
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**Actually, it It is mentioned later that Snap is in Gryffindor now, since he has converted to Christianity. So, then, Snake must be head of Gryffindor, since a teacher cannot be "in" a house unless they are head of house. (Not counting Hagrid, of course. He is a HOGWARTS STUDENT! AND ALSO A SATANTIST!) Therefore it is possible that [=McGonagle=] is the Slytherin head of house now.
*** Butnow. (But [[VoodooShark then we get get]] the ''opposite'' problem, where there is no reason for Snap to be there since he's the Gryffindor head.
*** Come on folks.head.)
** Even if she's still the Head of Gryffindor, [=McGoogle=] is probably still ''Deputy Headmisstress''.
* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well, it's uncertain what he expected them to do, but apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal with
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** Even if she's still the Head of Gryffindor, [=McGoogle=] is probably still ''Deputy Headmisstress''.
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* Seeing as Hagrid is a student now, that could explain why [=McGoggle=] teaches "Hair" of Magical Creatures instead of him.
* A possible explanation for the fic's abrupt ending is that Tara forgot about it. She did previously not update for long periods of time, then come back and claim she'd slit her wrists. It's possible that Tara was actually just forgetting to update, but not wanting to admit it and lying about slitting her wrists. Then, eventually, she forgot altogether.
* A possible explanation for the fic's abrupt ending is that Tara forgot about it. She did previously not update for long periods of time, then come back and claim she'd slit her wrists. It's possible that Tara was actually just forgetting to update, but not wanting to admit it and lying about slitting her wrists. Then, eventually, she forgot altogether.
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* The chapter following Draco's first apparent suicide, Dumbledore comes to Ebony's room next chapter and tells her: "Ebony, it has been revealed that someone has - NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" And the chapter following that, Draco is revealed to be alive and in bondage by Volfemort. Maybe Dumbledore was trying to tell Ebony that Draco was kidnapped instead?
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* The chapter following Draco's first apparent suicide, Dumbledore comes to Ebony's room next chapter and tells her: "Ebony, it has been revealed that someone has - NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" And the chapter following that, Draco is revealed to be alive and in bondage by Volfemort. Maybe Dumbledore was trying to tell Ebony that Draco was kidnapped instead?
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* "Morti McFli" appears to be a goff, given that he gives TaEbory the "Tim Machine". However, when it's disguised as an I-Pod, Dumbledore listens to Avril Levine on it. Was Marty a poser, given that he downloaded poser music onto his time machine?
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* "Morti McFli" [=McFli=]" appears to be a goff, given that he gives TaEbory [=TaEbory=] the "Tim Machine". However, when it's disguised as an I-Pod, Dumbledore listens to Avril Levine on it. Was Marty a poser, given that he downloaded poser music onto his time machine?
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* Ebony's bisexuality is often written off as being ButNotTooBi because she never actively peruses any female relationships in the story. However if you look closely her sexuality does shine through in [[MaleGaze her descriptions of other women she likes.]] She often takes significant effort into describing how beautiful and sexy her female friends are, taking especially close notice to their big breasts, snatched waists and how their clothes compliment those features. She may not be looking to date any of the women around her, but she's sure as hell scoping them out still.
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** When I was going through My Immortal, trying to find all the errors I could (I found over six thousand), I noticed something. After Ebony has her vision, she leaves with Vampire and Draco to tell Dumbledore about it. In the process, they leave Draco's flying Mercedes-Benz parked in the forest. When it shows up again, Snape suddenly has it, which you'd write off as Tara forgetting where she left the car--then it hit me. They left the car in the forest twenty chapters ago, where Snape could have easily stolen it. ~Tropers/Dante668
%%* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well, I don't know what he expected them to do, but apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal with them? ~Tropers/MarshyShonen
%%* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well, I don't know what he expected them to do, but apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal with them? ~Tropers/MarshyShonen
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** When I was going through My Immortal, trying to find all the errors I could (I found over (Over six thousand), I noticed something.thousand in count), there's a notice. After Ebony has her vision, she leaves with Vampire and Draco to tell Dumbledore about it. In the process, they leave Draco's flying Mercedes-Benz parked in the forest. When it shows up again, Snape suddenly has it, which you'd write off as Tara forgetting where she left the car--then it hit me. They left the car in the forest twenty chapters ago, where Snape could have easily stolen it. ~Tropers/Dante668
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* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well,I don't know it's uncertain what he expected them to do, but apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal with them? ~Tropers/MarshyShonenthem?
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* I was listening to the LetsPlay/HellfireCommentaries dramatic reading of My Immortal when something occured to me. It came off of a single thought of the reason that some of the characters were turned into vampires was because of Ebony turning them into vampires. And then I thought of something. Why stop with just some students? Why not put the entirety of Hogwarts under her thrall? Make the entire area into her little fantasy and force everyone to play along to her every little whim. The reason for all the drastic changes to the characters? Her deciding 'I don't like those aspects of you. I like these better' and then proceeding to break them to the point where they're forced to comply to her whims. ~Tropers/LordTyph
** Something even worse came to mind as I put this in too... What if this ended up being Voldermort's plan? If this was the case, Ebony would have to have a great affinity with spells that deal with illusions and mind control. Basically get her to help out with imprisoning everyone inside of Hogwarts. Ebony is basically their prison warden, doing whatever the hell she likes and being free to live out her fantasies. THAT'S why the entire fanfic makes no sense. She's constantly trying to find new ways to entertain herself. And when things go wrong? That's Hogwarts fighting back. No, not the people there, [[GeniusLoci The very enchantments and spells placed upon Hogwarts in order to protect it from evil.]] It's possible that everyone in Hogwarts will escape with mental scars all around... [[DownerEnding but only to see everything they love and cherish destroyed.]] Just like die-hard Harry Potter fans when they read this fanfic, really. ~Tropers/LordTyph
** Something even worse came to mind as I put this in too... What if this ended up being Voldermort's plan? If this was the case, Ebony would have to have a great affinity with spells that deal with illusions and mind control. Basically get her to help out with imprisoning everyone inside of Hogwarts. Ebony is basically their prison warden, doing whatever the hell she likes and being free to live out her fantasies. THAT'S why the entire fanfic makes no sense. She's constantly trying to find new ways to entertain herself. And when things go wrong? That's Hogwarts fighting back. No, not the people there, [[GeniusLoci The very enchantments and spells placed upon Hogwarts in order to protect it from evil.]] It's possible that everyone in Hogwarts will escape with mental scars all around... [[DownerEnding but only to see everything they love and cherish destroyed.]] Just like die-hard Harry Potter fans when they read this fanfic, really. ~Tropers/LordTyph
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* I was listening Listening to the LetsPlay/HellfireCommentaries dramatic reading of My Immortal when something occured to me.occured. It came off of a single thought of the reason that some of the characters were turned into vampires was because of Ebony turning them into vampires. And then I thought of something.came another thought. Why stop with just some students? Why not put the entirety of Hogwarts under her thrall? Make the entire area into her little fantasy and force everyone to play along to her every little whim. The reason for all the drastic changes to the characters? Her deciding 'I don't like those aspects of you. I like these better' and then proceeding to break them to the point where they're forced to comply to her whims. ~Tropers/LordTyph
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** Something even worse came to mind asI put this was put in too... What if this ended up being Voldermort's plan? If this was the case, Ebony would have to have a great affinity with spells that deal with illusions and mind control. Basically get her to help out with imprisoning everyone inside of Hogwarts. Ebony is basically their prison warden, doing whatever the hell she likes and being free to live out her fantasies. THAT'S why the entire fanfic makes no sense. She's constantly trying to find new ways to entertain herself. And when things go wrong? That's Hogwarts fighting back. No, not the people there, [[GeniusLoci The very enchantments and spells placed upon Hogwarts in order to protect it from evil.]] It's possible that everyone in Hogwarts will escape with mental scars all around... [[DownerEnding but only to see everything they love and cherish destroyed.]] Just like die-hard Harry Potter fans when they read this fanfic, really. ~Tropers/LordTyph
** Something even worse came to mind as
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*** I'm calling the Doctor and Stephan Strange about this. ~Tropers/{{Vampireandthen}}
** Reading these made this troper have a disturbing thought along the same lines as the above one. Let's say she did turn everyone's parents into vampires and such. Well remember some of the characters were [[RapeAsBackstory raped either by their parents or someone else.]] Which could either be a coincidence that has nothing to do with her, or Ebony [[MindRape forced those people]] to [[RapeByProxy molest her friends]]. If she's capable of that kind of treatment towards her friends think of what she would do to people she hates.
** Reading these made this troper have a disturbing thought along the same lines as the above one. Let's say she did turn everyone's parents into vampires and such. Well remember some of the characters were [[RapeAsBackstory raped either by their parents or someone else.]] Which could either be a coincidence that has nothing to do with her, or Ebony [[MindRape forced those people]] to [[RapeByProxy molest her friends]]. If she's capable of that kind of treatment towards her friends think of what she would do to people she hates.
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** Reading thesemade this troper would have a disturbing thought along the same lines as the above one. Let's say she did turn everyone's parents into vampires and such. Well remember some of the characters were [[RapeAsBackstory raped either by their parents or someone else.]] Which could either be a coincidence that has nothing to do with her, or Ebony [[MindRape forced those people]] to [[RapeByProxy molest her friends]]. If she's capable of that kind of treatment towards her friends think of what she would do to people she hates.
** Reading these
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** Actually, it makes sense to me because I was born with A LOT of hair and it was black until I was about 8 months when it started to go blonde. It's entirely possible, is what I'm trying to get at. I guess out of all the things this thing got wrong, we don't have to add this bit onto the list. ~Tropers/CanisLuka
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** Actually, it makes sense to me because I was some are born with A LOT of hair and it was black until I was about 8 months when it started later starts to go blonde. It's entirely possible, is what I'm trying to get at. I guess out possible. Out of all the things this thing got wrong, we don't have to add this bit onto the list. ~Tropers/CanisLukalist.
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* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well, I don't know what he expected them to do, but apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal with them?
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** When I was going through My Immortal, trying to find all the errors I could (I found over six thousand), I noticed something. After Ebony has her vision, she leaves with Vampire and Draco to tell Dumbledore about it. In the process, they leave Draco's flying Mercedes-Benz parked in the forest. When it shows up again, Snape suddenly has it, which you'd write off as Tara forgetting where she left the car--then it hit me. They left the car in the forest twenty chapters ago, where Snape could have easily stolen it.
*it. ~Tropers/Dante668
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* I was listening to the LetsPlay/HellfireCommentaries dramatic reading of My Immortal when something occured to me. It came off of a single thought of the reason that some of the characters were turned into vampires was because of Ebony turning them into vampires. And then I thought of something. Why stop with just some students? Why not put the entirety of Hogwarts under her thrall? Make the entire area into her little fantasy and force everyone to play along to her every little whim. The reason for all the drastic changes to the characters? Her deciding 'I don't like those aspects of you. I like these better' and then proceeding to break them to the point where they're forced to comply to her whims.
** Something even worse came to mind as I put this in too... What if this ended up being Voldermort's plan? If this was the case, Ebony would have to have a great affinity with spells that deal with illusions and mind control. Basically get her to help out with imprisoning everyone inside of Hogwarts. Ebony is basically their prison warden, doing whatever the hell she likes and being free to live out her fantasies. THAT'S why the entire fanfic makes no sense. She's constantly trying to find new ways to entertain herself. And when things go wrong? That's Hogwarts fighting back. No, not the people there, [[GeniusLoci The very enchantments and spells placed upon Hogwarts in order to protect it from evil.]] It's possible that everyone in Hogwarts will escape with mental scars all around... [[DownerEnding but only to see everything they love and cherish destroyed.]] Just like die-hard Harry Potter fans when they read this fanfic, really.
** Something even worse came to mind as I put this in too... What if this ended up being Voldermort's plan? If this was the case, Ebony would have to have a great affinity with spells that deal with illusions and mind control. Basically get her to help out with imprisoning everyone inside of Hogwarts. Ebony is basically their prison warden, doing whatever the hell she likes and being free to live out her fantasies. THAT'S why the entire fanfic makes no sense. She's constantly trying to find new ways to entertain herself. And when things go wrong? That's Hogwarts fighting back. No, not the people there, [[GeniusLoci The very enchantments and spells placed upon Hogwarts in order to protect it from evil.]] It's possible that everyone in Hogwarts will escape with mental scars all around... [[DownerEnding but only to see everything they love and cherish destroyed.]] Just like die-hard Harry Potter fans when they read this fanfic, really.
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* I was listening to the LetsPlay/HellfireCommentaries dramatic reading of My Immortal when something occured to me. It came off of a single thought of the reason that some of the characters were turned into vampires was because of Ebony turning them into vampires. And then I thought of something. Why stop with just some students? Why not put the entirety of Hogwarts under her thrall? Make the entire area into her little fantasy and force everyone to play along to her every little whim. The reason for all the drastic changes to the characters? Her deciding 'I don't like those aspects of you. I like these better' and then proceeding to break them to the point where they're forced to comply to her whims.
whims. ~Tropers/LordTyph
** Something even worse came to mind as I put this in too... What if this ended up being Voldermort's plan? If this was the case, Ebony would have to have a great affinity with spells that deal with illusions and mind control. Basically get her to help out with imprisoning everyone inside of Hogwarts. Ebony is basically their prison warden, doing whatever the hell she likes and being free to live out her fantasies. THAT'S why the entire fanfic makes no sense. She's constantly trying to find new ways to entertain herself. And when things go wrong? That's Hogwarts fighting back. No, not the people there, [[GeniusLoci The very enchantments and spells placed upon Hogwarts in order to protect it from evil.]] It's possible that everyone in Hogwarts will escape with mental scars all around... [[DownerEnding but only to see everything they love and cherish destroyed.]] Just like die-hard Harry Potter fans when they read this fanfic, really. ~Tropers/LordTyph
** Something even worse came to mind as I put this in too... What if this ended up being Voldermort's plan? If this was the case, Ebony would have to have a great affinity with spells that deal with illusions and mind control. Basically get her to help out with imprisoning everyone inside of Hogwarts. Ebony is basically their prison warden, doing whatever the hell she likes and being free to live out her fantasies. THAT'S why the entire fanfic makes no sense. She's constantly trying to find new ways to entertain herself. And when things go wrong? That's Hogwarts fighting back. No, not the people there, [[GeniusLoci The very enchantments and spells placed upon Hogwarts in order to protect it from evil.]] It's possible that everyone in Hogwarts will escape with mental scars all around... [[DownerEnding but only to see everything they love and cherish destroyed.]] Just like die-hard Harry Potter fans when they read this fanfic, really. ~Tropers/LordTyph
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** Actually, it makes sense to me because I was born with A LOT of hair and it was black until I was about 8 months when it started to go blonde. It's entirely possible, is what I'm trying to get at. I guess out of all the things this thing got wrong, we don't have to add this bit onto the list.
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** Actually, it makes sense to me because I was born with A LOT of hair and it was black until I was about 8 months when it started to go blonde. It's entirely possible, is what I'm trying to get at. I guess out of all the things this thing got wrong, we don't have to add this bit onto the list. ~Tropers/CanisLuka
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*** I accept your challenge.
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*** I accept your challenge. ~Tropers/{{Etheru}}
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* "Morti McFli" appears to be a goff, given that he gives TaEbory the "Tim Machine". However, when it's disguised as an I-Pod, Dumbledore listens to Avril Levine on it. Was Marty a poser, given that he downloaded poser music onto his time machine? [[ARareSentence Did I really just write that?]]
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* "Morti McFli" appears to be a goff, given that he gives TaEbory the "Tim Machine". However, when it's disguised as an I-Pod, Dumbledore listens to Avril Levine on it. Was Marty a poser, given that he downloaded poser music onto his time machine? [[ARareSentence Did I really just write that?]]that?]] ~Tropers/AnonFangeekGirl
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* Tara wasn't insane or a {{troll}}; she was GenreSavvy and knew the TV Tropes page for ''Fanfic/MyImmortal'' would eventually be made, and not only would it be made, it would be a non-stop CrowningMomentOfFunny, and a temporary cure for depression. Bless you, Tara, you MagnificentBastard, you.
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* Tara wasn't insane or a {{troll}}; she was GenreSavvy and knew the TV Tropes page for ''Fanfic/MyImmortal'' would eventually be made, and not only would it be made, it would be a non-stop CrowningMomentOfFunny, SugarWiki/{{Funny Moment|s}}, and a temporary cure for depression. Bless you, Tara, you MagnificentBastard, you.
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* Tara wasn't insane or a {{troll}}; she was GenreSavvy and knew the TV Tropes page for ''MyImmortal'' would eventually be made, and not only would it be made, it would be a non-stop CrowningMomentOfFunny, and a temporary cure for depression. Bless you, Tara, you MagnificentBastard, you.
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* Tara wasn't insane or a {{troll}}; she was GenreSavvy and knew the TV Tropes page for ''MyImmortal'' ''Fanfic/MyImmortal'' would eventually be made, and not only would it be made, it would be a non-stop CrowningMomentOfFunny, and a temporary cure for depression. Bless you, Tara, you MagnificentBastard, you.
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* At the original ending of ''MyImmortal'', before the (supposed) hacking and the author's hiatus, Enoby wakes up in the nurse's office after getting shot. Voldemort then appears and is said to look "less mean than usual", and cries at the sight of Enoby. This could easily be seen as just another example of VillainDecay, until you consider the reason Enoby went back in time in the first place was to redeem Voldemort! It looks like she ''did'' manage to soften him up a bit, after all.
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* At the original ending of ''MyImmortal'', ''Fanfic/MyImmortal'', before the (supposed) hacking and the author's hiatus, Enoby wakes up in the nurse's office after getting shot. Voldemort then appears and is said to look "less mean than usual", and cries at the sight of Enoby. This could easily be seen as just another example of VillainDecay, until you consider the reason Enoby went back in time in the first place was to redeem Voldemort! It looks like she ''did'' manage to soften him up a bit, after all.
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* Voldemort and Harry's butchering of Avada Kedavra (Voldemort's "Allah Kedabra"; Harry's "Abra Kedavra") could explain why the curse didn't appear to kill anyone.
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** Voldemort is often called Satan; at first it seems odd since they are satanists, but in his youth he used the nickname Satan, and it could be taken as a lampshading for this.
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** Voldemort is often called Satan; at first it seems odd since they are satanists, Satanists, but in his youth he used the nickname Satan, and it could be taken as a lampshading for this.
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* After [=TaEbory=] and Draco are caught having sex in the forest, Dublywhore calls Snap and [=McGoggle=] to the office to, well, I don't know what he expected them to do, but apperently apparently it was to insult them and then let them run off after a declaration of love. Well. Regardless, there was no reason for Mcgogle to be there. Enoby and Darco are both in Slytherin, why would Dublydore call the Gryffandor Head of House to deal with them?
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** Psychotherapy, most likely. Perhaps wizards think that sex offenses should be treated as sicknesses, rather than as crimes.