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* FelonyMisdemeanor: Lieutenant Starfall [[spoiler: assaults Gilda and challenges her to an illegal duel. Why? Because she talked with his wife and kids.]]
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* WhatDoYouMeanItsNotHeinous: Lieutenant Starfall [[spoiler: assaults Gilda and challenges her to an illegal duel. Why? Because she talked with his wife and kids.]]
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* RoyalsWhoActullyDoSomething: At one point in history, an 80-member tribe of griffons was eating ponies. Celestia caught wind of this and responded by personally killing 77 of them with one spell. The survivors only lived because she wanted them to tell the other tribes about it.
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* RoyalsWhoActullyDoSomething: RoyalsWhoActuallyDoSomething: At one point in history, an 80-member tribe of griffons was eating ponies. Celestia caught wind of this and responded by personally killing 77 of them with one spell. The survivors only lived because she wanted them to tell the other tribes about it.
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* RoyalsWhoActullyDoSomething: At one point in history, an 80-member tribe of griffons was eating ponies. Celestia caught wind of this and responded by personally killing 77 of them with one spell. The survivors only lived because she wanted them to tell the other tribes about it.
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* IHaveThisFriend: Gilda is confused about her relationship with Iron, so she writes to her friend Rainbow Dash for advice. Rainbow is just as uneducated in romance as her, so goes to Applejack, using the classic device to explain Gilda's situation. It's vauge enough that Applejack assumes ''she'' is asking ''her'' about their relationship. HilarityEnsues.
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* IHaveThisFriend: Gilda is confused about her relationship with Iron, so she writes to her friend Rainbow Dash for advice. Rainbow is just as uneducated in romance as her, so she goes to Applejack, using the classic device to explain Gilda's situation. It's vauge enough that Applejack assumes ''she'' is asking ''her'' about their relationship. HilarityEnsues.
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* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: [[spoiler: Starfall puts his racism aside long enough to rescue Gilda from several criminals, freeing her from her bonds and defending her form would-be lethal blows. Although he did kill one (in defense of another), he was still arrested due to "vigilantism" by not being reinstated into the guard yet.]]
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* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: [[spoiler: Starfall puts his racism aside long enough to rescue Gilda from several criminals, freeing her from her bonds and defending her form from would-be lethal blows. Although he did kill one (in defense of another), he was still arrested due to "vigilantism" by not being reinstated into the guard yet.]]
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* IHaveThisFriend: Gilda is confused about her relationship with Iron, so writes to her friend Rainbow Dash for advice. Rainbow is just as uneducated in romance as her, so goes to Applejack, using the classic device to explain Gilda's situation. It's vauge enough that Applejack assumes ''she'' is asking ''her'' about their relationship. HilarityEnsues.
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* IHaveThisFriend: Gilda is confused about her relationship with Iron, so she writes to her friend Rainbow Dash for advice. Rainbow is just as uneducated in romance as her, so goes to Applejack, using the classic device to explain Gilda's situation. It's vauge enough that Applejack assumes ''she'' is asking ''her'' about their relationship. HilarityEnsues.
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* FantasyCounterpartCulture: The Griffins are very similar to Germanic tribes
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* RedOniBlueOni: Starfall and Bulwark, respectively
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* IAintGotTimeToBleed: In the prologue, Bulwark doesn't register that Starfall stabbed him until he starts giving him judgement
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* GratuitousGerman: Griffin tribes are based of Germanic tribes, so it makes sense that Gilda slips into her natural tounge occasionally.
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* BrokenAngel: Starfall's wife, having lost her wings by a griffin attack, which [[Fantasticracism leads Starfall to hate all of their race]]. [[spoiler: Turns out it was Gilda's father who did it.]]
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* BrokenAngel: Starfall's wife, having lost her wings by a griffin attack, which [[Fantasticracism [[FantasticRacism leads Starfall to hate all of their race]]. [[spoiler: Turns out it was Gilda's father who did it.]]
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* BrokenAngel: Starfall's wife, having lost her wings by a griffin attack, which [[Fantasticracism leads Starfall to hate all of their race]]. [[spoiler: Turns out it was Gilda's father who did it.]]
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* TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend. The next month after calming down, he realizes that he was fired because... he attacked Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. After seeing Starfall change his attitude, Iron invites him back into the guard (albeit at a lower rank).
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* TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall [[spoiler: attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend. The next month after calming down, he realizes that he was fired because... he attacked Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. After seeing Starfall change his attitude, Iron invites him back into the guard (albeit at a lower rank).]]
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* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: [[spoiler: Starfall puts his racism aside long enough to rescue Gilda from several criminals, freeing her from her bonds and defending her form would-be lethal blows. Although he did kill one (in defense of another), he was still imprisoned due to "vigilantism" by not being reinstated into the guard yet.]]
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* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: [[spoiler: Starfall puts his racism aside long enough to rescue Gilda from several criminals, freeing her from her bonds and defending her form would-be lethal blows. Although he did kill one (in defense of another), he was still imprisoned arrested due to "vigilantism" by not being reinstated into the guard yet.]]
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* TurnIntYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend. The next month after calming down, he realizes that he was fired because... he attacked Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. After seeing Starfall change his attitude, Iron invites him back into the guard (albeit at a lower rank).
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* TurnIntYourBadge: TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend. The next month after calming down, he realizes that he was fired because... he attacked Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. After seeing Starfall change his attitude, Iron invites him back into the guard (albeit at a lower rank).
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* AbusiveParents: Gilda's father, big time. Dealing with the lasting effects of his "raising" drives many of Gilda's interactions.
* ActionGirl: In Chapter Ten, a group of nearly twenty would-be criminals find out the hard way it's not easy to kidnap an angry griffin.
* ActionGirl: In Chapter Ten, a group of nearly twenty would-be criminals find out the hard way it's not easy to kidnap an angry griffin.
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* AlternateAnimalAffection: Played with. Ponies kiss in the normal fashion. However, trying to do the same with a griffin's beak ends painfully for Iron, so they instead settle for nuzzling or Iron kissing the end of Gilda's beak. It also ends up as the butt of a joke when Iron asks Sherry for advice.
--> '''Sherry''': "Well, you can either practice tonguing a knife or ''ask her''."
--> '''Sherry''': "Well, you can either practice tonguing a knife or ''ask her''."
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* FantasticRacism: A major theme in the fanfic, along with the repercussions. Gilda's father hated ponies, and took out his anger on her and any ponies that wandered over the border. At the same time, Starfall hates griffins (actually due to Gilda's father) and his hatred of Gilda drives many of the conflicts.
* FantasticSlurs: "Half-breed" is apparently a derogatory term for griffins. Also, several citizens insult Gilda by referring to her as "that beast".
* FantasticSlurs: "Half-breed" is apparently a derogatory term for griffins. Also, several citizens insult Gilda by referring to her as "that beast".
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* HappyMarriageCharade: It's been pointed out that Starfall hasn't been in a particularly loving relationship with his wife, viewing her as "damaged goods" subconsciously. When he realizes this, he promises himself to try to amend their love.
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* PreAssKickingOneLiner: Outnumbered and outgunned by a group of kidnappers led by the brother of a perp she arrested, Gilda utters this gem:
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---> '''Gilda''': All of you are now under arrest.
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* AccidentalAimingSkills: [[spoiler: Gilda, who has apparently never used a crossbow in her life, picks one up in a desperate effort to take down a fleeing criminal, aiming for his knee. She doesn't hit ''[[GroinAttack that...]]'']]
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* AloofOlderBrother: Iron Bulwark is the Captain of the Farrington Guard and acts as befits his position. His younger sister Maxie is a mail clerk and has a [[IfYouKnowWhatIMean interesting]] night life.
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* AloofOlderBrother: Iron Bulwark is the Captain of the Farrington Guard and acts as befits his position. His younger sister Maxie is a mail clerk and has a [[IfYouKnowWhatIMean interesting]] ''interesting'' night life.
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* NobleBigot: Lieutenant Starfall hates griffins, on account of his wife being maimed by one. [[spoiler: Gilda's father no less]]. He extends his hatred onto Gilda, making her integration to the Farringotn Guard a lot less pleasant.
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* NobleBigot: Lieutenant Starfall hates griffins, on account of his wife being maimed by one. [[spoiler: Gilda's father no less]]. He extends his hatred onto Gilda, making her integration to the Farringotn Farrington Guard a lot less pleasant.
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A [[MyLittlePony MLP]] {{Fanfic}} by Nicknack, continuing on from his earlier story.
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A [[MyLittlePony MLP]] {{Fanfic}} by Nicknack, continuing on from his an earlier story.
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* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where]] UnqeualPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
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* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where]] UnqeualPairing UnequalPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
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* TheAlcoholic: Implied in the case of Sergeant Sherry, at least while off duty. She lost her husband and fellow guard a few years prior.
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* DrowningYourSorrows: Implied in the case of Sergeant Sherry, who lost her husband and fellow guard a few years prior.
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Gilda's had it rough for the past few years. She's been kicked out from her tribe, been barely surviving out in the wilderness, and [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS1E5GriffonTheBrushOff her hopes with reuniting with her old friends have been shot]]. Unwilling to go through with the ultimanum her [[{{Jerkass}} father]] ordained for her, she resigns herself for permanent life of an exile.
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Gilda's had it rough for the past few years. She's been kicked out from her tribe, been barely surviving out in the wilderness, and [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS1E5GriffonTheBrushOff her hopes with reuniting with her old friends friend have been shot]]. Unwilling to go through with the ultimanum her [[{{Jerkass}} father]] ordained for her, she resigns herself for permanent life of an exile.
* DrowningYourSorrows: Implied in the case of Sergeant Sherry, who lost her husband and fellow guard a few years prior.
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* GratuitousGerman: Griffins tribes are based of Germanic tribes, so it makes sense that Gilda slips into her natural tounge occasionally.
* HatesBeingTouched: After years of severe physical abuse at the hands of her father and other male griffins, Gilda's uncomfortable with even light touches, especially by those she invites emotionally close. Overcoming this to earn a HugAndComment is a major step forward.
* HatesBeingTouched: After years of severe physical abuse at the hands of her father and other male griffins, Gilda's uncomfortable with even light touches, especially by those she invites emotionally close. Overcoming this to earn a HugAndComment is a major step forward.
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* GratuitousGerman: Griffins Griffin tribes are based of Germanic tribes, so it makes sense that Gilda slips into her natural tounge occasionally.
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* InterspeciesRomance: Gilda eventually starts going out with Iron Bulwark. She's justifiably worried that dating him could make others look down on him.
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* InterspeciesRomance: Gilda eventually starts going out with dating Iron Bulwark. She's justifiably worried that dating him could make others look down on him.
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* MarriedToTheJob: Iron Bulwark's spent ten years on the force. He's willing to do a lot for a griffon he's only just met, but even when MakeUpOrBreakUp is on the table, he's not going to stop being a guard. Unusually for the trope, his romantic partner both understands, and is beginning to become attached to her career, too.
* NeverMyFault: [[spoiler: Starfall challenges Gilda to an illegal duel and gets hospitalized during so. His wife visits him and berats him for almost getting himself killed and not thinking about what would happen if he lost, straining their marriage. Starfall blames Gilda for this]].
* NeverMyFault: [[spoiler: Starfall challenges Gilda to an illegal duel and gets hospitalized during so. His wife visits him and berats him for almost getting himself killed and not thinking about what would happen if he lost, straining their marriage. Starfall blames Gilda for this]].
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* MarriedToTheJob: Iron Bulwark's spent ten years on the force. He's willing to do a lot for a griffon he's only just met, but even when MakeUpOrBreakUp is on the table, he's not going to stop being a guard. Unusually Unusual for the trope, his romantic partner both understands, and is beginning to become attached to her career, too.
* NeverMyFault: [[spoiler: Starfall challenges Gilda to an illegal duel and gets hospitalized during so. His wife visits him andberats berates him for almost getting himself killed and not thinking about what would happen if he lost, straining their marriage. Starfall still blames Gilda for this]].this.]]
* NeverMyFault: [[spoiler: Starfall challenges Gilda to an illegal duel and gets hospitalized during so. His wife visits him and
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* [[ThrowingYourSwordAlwaysWorks Throwing Your Baton Always Works]]: Out of options and faced with a taunting thief, Gilda uses tosses her baton to stun her long enough to get close and make an arrest.
* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where UnqeualPairing is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where UnqeualPairing is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
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* [[ThrowingYourSwordAlwaysWorks Throwing Your Baton Always Works]]: Out of options and faced with a taunting thief, Gilda uses tosses her baton to stun her long enough to get close and make an arrest.
* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culturewhere where]] UnqeualPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
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* HatesBeingTouched: After years of severe physical abuse at the hands of her father and other male griffins, Gilda's uncomfortable with even light touches, especially by those she invites emotionally close. Overcoming this to earn a HugAndComment is a major step forward.
** And he's seriously concerned about the physical side of things. That Gilda's beak can score glass, and might be a bit tricky to kiss, to be precise.
* MarriedToTheJob: Iron Bulwark's spent ten years on the force. He's willing to do a lot for a griffon he's only just met, but even when MakeUpOrBreakUp is on the table, he's not going to stop being a guard. Unusually for the trope, his romantic partner both understands, and is beginning to become attached to her career, too.
* MarriedToTheJob: Iron Bulwark's spent ten years on the force. He's willing to do a lot for a griffon he's only just met, but even when MakeUpOrBreakUp is on the table, he's not going to stop being a guard. Unusually for the trope, his romantic partner both understands, and is beginning to become attached to her career, too.
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** NobleBigotWithABadge: At least from Iron Bulwark's viewpoint, Starfall's still a Good Cop, or at worst a CowboyCop, who genuinely cares for his kids and recognizes his prejudice against griffins enough to avoid giving bad romantic advice. Deconstructed into TroubledSympatheticBigot at best, as the HappyMarriageCharade and effect on Gilda goes far beyond being merely unprofessional, and jeopardizes everything he cares about in a way he can not comprehend.
** NobleBigotWithABadge: At least from Iron Bulwark's viewpoint, Starfall's still a Good Cop, or at worst a CowboyCop, who genuinely cares for his kids and recognizes his prejudice against griffins enough to avoid giving bad romantic advice. Deconstructed into TroubledSympatheticBigot at best, as the HappyMarriageCharade and effect on Gilda goes far beyond being merely unprofessional, and jeopardizes everything he cares about in a way he can not comprehend.
* SamaritanRelationshipStarter: Iron Bulwark not only got Gilda [[SubordinateExcuse a job in the guard]], but also saved her life when she escaped from her tribe and helps her get used to dealing with pony etiquette.
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