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* [[spoiler: DwindlingParty: The fate of the Straw-Hats and their rescue attempts. The same happens to Mar's crew on their raid on St. Magnus's mansion.]]
* [[spoiler: DwindlingParty: The fate of the Straw-Hats and their rescue attempts. The same happens to Mar's crew on their raid on St. Magnus's mansion.]]
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''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6328454/1/Marie_D_Suesse_And_The_Mystery_New_Pirate_Age Marie D. Suesse And The Mystery New Pirate Age!]]'' is an on-going ''OnePiece'' fanfic DeconstructionFic by [[http://www.fanfiction.net/u/388836/Phalanx Phalanx]]
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''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6328454/1/Marie_D_Suesse_And_The_Mystery_New_Pirate_Age Marie D. Suesse And The Mystery New Pirate Age!]]'' is an on-going a ''OnePiece'' fanfic DeconstructionFic by [[http://www.fanfiction.net/u/388836/Phalanx Phalanx]]
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* DeadGuyJunior: [[spoiler:Mar the kitten, or rather, "Written Out of Reality Guy Junior"]].
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* DiscontinuityNod: A variety pops up in the final chapter [[spoiler:as various characters make references to what happened in the fic after the world goes back to normal, such as some drunken marines discussing what Smoker's child would look like]]
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* WeNamedTheMonkeyJack: [[spoiler:Law names a kitten after Mar]].
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* INeedToGoIronMyDog: [[spoiler:Law leaves the Suesse family to spend their final minutes together in privacy]] under the pretext of going to look for Gurnade.
* MakeAWish: [[spoiler: Madelyn's powers allow her to grant wishes, often without the wisher (or sometimes Madelyn herself) realizing this, once per person]].
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* TakeMeInstead: In Chapter 31, [[spoiler:Madelyn]] pleads with Law to be satisfied with [[spoiler:taking revenge on her, sparing her loved ones]]. Law [[spoiler:refuses]].
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* TakeMeInstead: In Chapter 31, [[spoiler:Madelyn]] pleads with Law to be satisfied with [[spoiler:taking revenge on her, sparing her loved ones]]. Law [[spoiler:refuses]].[[spoiler:refuses, saying that Madelyn shouldn't think that her death is enough to make up for her actions, and wants her to instead wish the world back to the way it was]].
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* AbusiveParents: Mentioned as one of the most overused MarySue cliches intended to inspire sympathy. Mar's parents, however, [[ParentsAsPeople while far from perfect, are not abusive]].
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* AbusiveParents: Mentioned as one of the most overused MarySue cliches intended to inspire sympathy.sympathy, and Slashfang and Hana are said to have them. Mar's parents, however, [[ParentsAsPeople while far from perfect, are not abusive]].
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* PetTheDog: [[spoiler:Law leaving the room to allow the Suesse family time to say goodbye to each other in private]].
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* AwLookTheyReallyDoLoveEachOther: [[spoiler:The Suesse family, when they realize that the wish that will return the world to normal will undo Blake and Garreth's marriage and Mar's existence]].
** Two instances of this have a significant impact on the plot. [[spoiler:Law's wishing that Madelyn would get away from him results in Madelyn being transported to the real world, and Mar's wish to be free results in her family being pulled into the One Piece world]].
* EvilParentsWantGoodKids: [[spoiler:Marie's mother wanted to make sure that she turns out better than she did]]
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* MamaBear: Mrs. Suesse will do whatever it takes to protect her child. [[spoiler: That includes impersonating a Tenryuubito, or shooting a mind-controlled ally in the head.]]
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* MamaBear: Mrs. Suesse will do whatever it takes to protect her child. [[spoiler: That includes impersonating a Tenryuubito, Tenryuubito (or so we think at the time), or shooting a mind-controlled ally in the head.]]
* ParentalSubstitute: A flashback indicates that [[spoiler:Denise was one to Madelyn]].
* [[spoiler:RetGone]]: [[spoiler:Mar realizes she will suffer this fate if Garreth wishes that Blake/Madelyn had never eaten the Devil Fruit, resulting in her never going to the real world, marryign him or having Mar]].
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* UnwittingInstigatorOfDoom: [[spoiler:Eustass Kid wonders aloud in front of Madelyn what would happen if the Straw Hats were delayed, making it possible for the Kid and Heart Pirates to compete for One Piece. The "unwitting" part comes from the fact that he doesn't realize Madelyn could make this happen. Madelyn then concludes that Law has lost his spirit for pursuing One Piece because he thinks Luffy will win, and then wishes for him to get captured to force his crew to go after him]].
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* UnwittingInstigatorOfDoom: [[spoiler:Eustass Kid wonders aloud in front of Madelyn what would happen if the Straw Hats were delayed, making it possible for the Kid and Heart Pirates to compete for One Piece. ]] The "unwitting" part comes from the fact that he doesn't realize Madelyn [[spoiler:Madelyn]] could make this happen. Madelyn [[spoiler:Madelyn then concludes that Law has lost his spirit for pursuing One Piece because he thinks Luffy will win, and then wishes for him to get captured to force his crew to go after him]].
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** Admiral Imba is described as looking like the twin of a certain "[[WhiteHairedPrettyBoy pretty white-haired boy]]" from [[{{Bleach}} another manga series]].
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* AbusiveParents: Mentioned as one of the most overused MarySue cliches intended to inspire sympathy. Mar's parents, however, [[ParentsAsPeople while far from perfect, are not abusive]].
* BeQuietNudge: The Disinfector gives Mar one when she denies being captain of the Thousand Sunny, to indicate that she should play along with his story.
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-->[[spoiler:Trafalgar Law]]: "Did you get all that, Suesse?"
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-->'''[[spoiler:Trafalgar Law]]''': [[SarcasmMode "I can see you focused on the important details."]]
* DroppedABridgeOnHim: It's implied that Smoker and Tashigi were killed when their ship's engine exploded.
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* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them. Some are one-off [[ParodySue Parody Sues]], but the fic deliberately makes a point of using only OriginalCharacters to tell the story, but considers original characters to be only used when necessary. [[invoked]]
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* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them. Some are one-off [[ParodySue Parody Sues]], but the fic deliberately makes a point of using only OriginalCharacters to tell the story, but considers although the author believe original characters to be should only be used when necessary. [[invoked]]
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* StoicWoobie: Most of the main cast, with the exception of the Mar and Mr. Suesse, are this.
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* ChekhovsSkill: Mr. Suesse's real life job of being a locksmith and then a security consultant really came in handy.
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The story follows the character's adventures after falling into the OnePiece world. It also derails the formats of the typical SelfInsert story right at the beginning by bringing Mar's parents along for the ride and having her end up alone on the Straw-Hat's deserted ship.
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* ComedicallyMissingThePoint: Mr. Suesse's reaction to learning that [[spoiler:his wife is actually Monkey D. Madelyn]] is to respond to [[spoiler:Trafalgar Law's]] question of whethe he got everything with "Yeah... [[spoiler:You're my wife's ex]]".
* ContrivedCoincidence: In Chapter 27, Mar learns that her mother [[spoiler:is the spitting image of St. Magda, aka Madelyn]]. [[spoiler:Subverted; there's a good reason for that...]]
* ContrivedCoincidence: In Chapter 27, Mar learns that her mother [[spoiler:is the spitting image of St. Magda, aka Madelyn]]. [[spoiler:Subverted; there's a good reason for that...]]
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* ComedicallyMissingThePoint: ChekovsSkill: Mr. Suesse's real life job of being a locksmith and then a security consultant really came in handy.
* ComicallyMissingThePoint: Mr. Suesse's reaction tolearning that a long and dramatic flashback explaining how [[spoiler:his wife Blake is actually the main villain Monkey D. Madelyn]] is to respond to [[spoiler:Trafalgar Law's]] question of whethe he got everything with Madelyn]].
-->[[spoiler:Trafalgar Law]]: "Did you get all that, Suesse?"
-->Mr. Suesse: "Yeah... [[spoiler:You're my wife's ex]]".
* TheComicallySerious: The Disinfector and Gurnarde both have their moments.
* ContrivedCoincidence:In Early on in the story, Mar discovers that she looks exactly like Monkey D. Madelyn did 20 years ago. Much to her annoyance, she is constantly mistaken for the infamous Pirate Queen in-story as a result.
**In Chapter 27, Mar learns that her mother [[spoiler:is the spitting image of St. Magda, aka Madelyn]]. [[spoiler:Subverted;
**[[spoiler:Subverted; there's a good reason forthat...all of the above. It's even lampshaded in Chapter 31.]]
* ComicallyMissingThePoint: Mr. Suesse's reaction to
-->[[spoiler:Trafalgar Law]]: "Did you get all that, Suesse?"
-->Mr. Suesse: "Yeah... [[spoiler:You're my wife's ex]]".
* TheComicallySerious: The Disinfector and Gurnarde both have their moments.
* ContrivedCoincidence:
**In Chapter 27, Mar learns that her mother [[spoiler:is the spitting image of St. Magda, aka Madelyn]].
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*** TeamPet: The ''Sunny'' could count''Thousand Sunny'', sentient ghost ship who also doubles as their main mode of transport.
** Played with when Mar realizes that [[spoiler:Trafalgar Law]] could very well be her biological father. Then she does the math and deduces it's not possible.
** [[BlackHoleSue Blake Hoseau]] [[invoked]]
* MamaBear: Mrs. Suesse will do whatever it takes to protect her child. [[spoiler: That includes impersonating a Tenryuubito, or shooting a mind-controlled ally in the head.]]
* NobleBigot: Gurnarde has some very unfavorable views of humans in general. She gets better about it later.
* StoicWoobie: Most of the main cast, with the exception of the Mar and Mr. Suesse, are this.
** [[spoiler:In Chapter 31 it's revealed her power is a version of the Human-Human fruit which allows her to turn into a faerie with the ability to charm people and grant their wishes... without those people knowing she's doing it.]]
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* ComedicallyMissingThePoint: Mr. Suesse's reaction to learning that [[spoiler:his wife is actually Monkey D. Madelyn]] is to respond to [[spoiler:Trafalgar Law's]] question of whethe he got everything with "Yeah... [[spoiler:You're my wife's ex]]".
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-->'''[[spoiler:Trafalgar Law]]''': "''Mistakes''? The world doesn't exist as a testing ground for your mistakes so you could learn how to be a halfway-decent human being, Madelyn! [[spoiler:Straw-Hat Luffy! Bepo! Jean Bart! Penguin... (lists the rest of the Straw Hat and Heart Pirates]]...they weren't 'mistakes'! Those were real lives, Madelyn. They were people! And because of your actions: ''[[PunctuatedForEmphasis They. Are. All. Dead!]]''"
-->'''[[spoiler:Trafalgar Law]]''': "''Mistakes''? The world doesn't exist as a testing ground for your mistakes so you could learn how to be a halfway-decent human being, Madelyn! [[spoiler:Straw-Hat Luffy! Bepo! Jean Bart! Penguin... (lists the rest of the Straw Hat and Heart Pirates]]...they weren't 'mistakes'! Those were real lives, Madelyn. They were people! And because of your actions: ''[[PunctuatedForEmphasis They. Are. All. Dead!]]''"
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* HeroicBSOD:
** Mar goes into one when she realizes [[spoiler: she fell into the world 20 years after Luffy's death by execution.]]
** Mr. Suesse also gets one when Mar tells him they've fallen into a fictional world based on one of her manga comics.
** Mar goes into one when she realizes [[spoiler: she fell into the world 20 years after Luffy's death by execution.]]
** Mr. Suesse also gets one when Mar tells him they've fallen into a fictional world based on one of her manga comics.
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* HeroicBSOD:
**ContrivedCoincidence: In Chapter 27, Mar goes into one when she realizes [[spoiler: she fell into learns that her mother [[spoiler:is the world 20 years after Luffy's death by execution.]]
** Mr. Suesse also gets one when Mar tells him they've fallen into a fictional world based on onespitting image of her manga comics.St. Magda, aka Madelyn]]. [[spoiler:Subverted; there's a good reason for that...]]
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** Mr. Suesse also gets one when Mar tells him they've fallen into a fictional world based on one
* HeroicBSOD:
** Mar goes into one when she realizes [[spoiler: she fell into the world 20 years after Luffy's death by execution.]]
** Mr. Suesse also gets one when Mar tells him they've fallen into a fictional world based on one of her manga comics.
** Mar goes into one when she realizes [[spoiler: she fell into the world 20 years after Luffy's death by execution.]]
** Mr. Suesse also gets one when Mar tells him they've fallen into a fictional world based on one of her manga comics.
* [[spoiler:LukeIAmYourFather]]: Chapters 30 and 31 reveal that [[spoiler:Madelyn is actually Mar's mother]].
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* TakeMeInstead: In Chapter 31, [[spoiler:Madelyn]] pleads with Law to be satisfied with [[spoiler:taking revenge on her, sparing her loved ones]]. Law [[spoiler:refuses]].
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* WasItAllALie: Chapter 31, with TheReveal that [[spoiler:Blake was Madelyn all along]].
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* EvenEvilHasLovedOnes: Zig-zagged with Madelyn; it's unclear how much she really cared for [[spoiler:Trafalgar Law]], but [[spoiler:she does genuinely care for her husband and daughter enough to ask Law to take her and spare them]].
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-->'''Madelyn''': ''[[spoiler:[[MyGodWhatHaveIDone Luffy. Is. Dead]]!]]''
-->'''Madelyn''': ''[[spoiler:[[MyGodWhatHaveIDone Luffy. Is. Dead]]!]]''
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* FullNameUltimatum: Mr. Suesse yells this at Mar when she doubts whether he intends to find her mother.
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* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them. Some are one-off [[ParodySue Parody Sues]], but the fic deliberately makes a point of using only OriginalCharacters to tell the story.story, but considers original characters to be only used when necessary. [[invoked]]
* ParentsAsPeople: Mar's parents care for her, but their troubled marriage interferes with how well they do as parents.
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* WhamEpisode: From chapter 3, each becoming more worse than the last.
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* WhamEpisode: From Starting from chapter 3, each becoming more worse than the last.
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* ThatManIsDead: Invoked and discussed. Mar uses this trope to guess the true identity of The Disinfector, citing ''TheCountOfMonteCristo'' as her example.
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* ThatManIsDead: Invoked and discussed. Mar uses this trope to guess the true identity of The Disinfector, citing ''TheCountOfMonteCristo'' ''Literature/TheCountOfMonteCristo'' as her example.
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* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them. Some are one-off [[ParodySue Parody Sues]], but the fic deliberately makes a point of using only OCs OriginalCharacters to tell the story. [[invoked]]
** [[spoiler: Well, until Chapter 21anyway]] [[invoked]]anyway]]
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** Also the [[spoiler: Zoro's sword ''Shuusui''.''Shuusui'']].
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* ShoutOut / TakeThat:
** Mar derisively calls a marine captain who has bone-based devil fruit powers "[[{{Naruto}} Kimimaro]]"
** Admiral Imba is described as looking like the twin of a certain "[[WhiteHairedPrettyBoy pretty white-haired boy]]" from [[{{Bleach}} another manga series]].
** Mar derisively calls a marine captain who has bone-based devil fruit powers "[[{{Naruto}} Kimimaro]]"
** Admiral Imba is described as looking like the twin of a certain "[[WhiteHairedPrettyBoy pretty white-haired boy]]" from [[{{Bleach}} another manga series]].
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->''Now before I go any further, I should mention that if you are looking to read one of those stories where a girl from the real world falls into a fantasy world and maybe falls in love with one of the characters there, you are probably looking at the wrong story. ''
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* AllFlyersAreBirds: Discussed. As one character found out the hard way, flying foxes are not birds.
** Let's not forget she's also has the world's highest bounty of 666 million and goes by the title of "The Pirate Queen".
* DidntThinkThisThrough: Mar's reaction after she distracts the extremely powerful Admiral Imba [[spoiler: from killing the Disinfector]]
* HoistByHisOwnPetard: Admiral Imba pretty much had the crew on the ropes when he got greedy and decided to [[spoiler: copy Mar's Logic-Logic powers]]. Boy, did that decision backfire spectacularly.
* LaughingMad:
** Mr. Suesse's HeroicBSOD starts off this way.
**[[spoiler: Also used disturbingly in a flashback. Trafalgar Law, The Surgeon of Death, breaks down laughing at the irony his BadassNickname when he fails a critical operation and kills his patient. It also marks the beginning of his personality shift into The Disinfector.]]
* LaughingMad:
** Mr. Suesse's HeroicBSOD starts off this way.
**[[spoiler: Also used disturbingly in a flashback. Trafalgar Law, The Surgeon of Death, breaks down laughing at the irony his BadassNickname when he fails a critical operation and kills his patient. It also marks the beginning of his personality shift into The Disinfector.]]
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* MayDecemberRomance: Subverted. Mar clearly finds the at least 20 years older [[spoiler: Trafalgar Law]] attractive until she realises that he's likely around the same age as her father. {{Squick}} ensues.
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* NarrativeProfanityFilter: It's something of a running joke that the narrator is forced to to do this because the author wants to avoid raising the rating of the fic.
* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them.Most of them tend to be Some are one-off [[ParodySue Parody Sues]]. Sues]], but the fic deliberately makes a point of using only OCs to tell the story. [[spoiler: Well, until Chapter 21 anyway]] [[invoked]]
* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them.
* PowerCopying: Admiral Imba has the power of the Copy-Copy fruit.
* PuffOfLogic: As a power!
* PuffOfLogic: As a power!
* ThatManIsDead: Invoked and discussed. Mar uses this trope to guess the true identity of The Disinfector, citing ''TheCountOfMonteCristo'' as her example.
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* WhamLine: Almost every chapter ends with either this, a {{Cliffhanger}} or a [[TheReveal Reveal]].Reveal]].
* YouAllMeetInACell: It's even lampshaded as one of the chapter titles.
* YouAllMeetInACell: It's even lampshaded as one of the chapter titles.
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* RescueRomance: {{Averted}}; [[spoiler:the Disinfector]] makes it ''VERY'' clear he's only keeping Mar alive to suit his own ends.
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* TragicKeepsake: The Straw Hat.
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* HeroicBSODBeCarefulWhatYouWishFor: A key part of the {{Deconstruction}}, as well as a proper caution for dealing with [[spoiler:Madelyn's powers]].
* BlackHoleSue: [[invoked]] Monkey D. Madelyn, Luffy's 'sister' and Law's lover and co-leader of the Heart Pirates and and and...
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* BlackHoleSue: [[invoked]] Monkey D. Madelyn, Luffy's 'sister' and Law's lover and co-leader of the Heart Pirates and and and...
* HeroicBSOD:
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* MoreThanMindControl: [[spoiler:Squall claims to have been ''happy'' in Madelyn's thrall, and exploits her power to ensure he can stay that way.]]
* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: [[spoiler:Madelyn's horrified when her power gets exploited to nearly kill the man she claims to love.]]
* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them. Most of them tend to be [[ParodySue Parody Sues]]. [[invoked]]
* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: [[spoiler:Madelyn's horrified when her power gets exploited to nearly kill the man she claims to love.]]
* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them. Most of them tend to be [[ParodySue Parody Sues]]. [[invoked]]
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* SpeakIllOfTheDead: Marie discovers three graves; though one is mostly untouched, the middle has been destroyed to the point no sign of who it stands for remains, and the last's epitath is partly destroyed, along with [[spoiler:one of its blades stolen]].
* StoryBreakerPower: Monkey D. Madelyn is heavily implied to have one, but its true nature isn't revealed until Chapter 22: [[spoiler:she can literally make dreams come true]].
* SurvivorGuilt: Seen among the survivors of [[spoiler:the attempt to save Luffy]], particularly [[spoiler:Sogeking]].
* StoryBreakerPower: Monkey D. Madelyn is heavily implied to have one, but its true nature isn't revealed until Chapter 22: [[spoiler:she can literally make dreams come true]].
* SurvivorGuilt: Seen among the survivors of [[spoiler:the attempt to save Luffy]], particularly [[spoiler:Sogeking]].
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* TheReasonYouSuckSpeech: In Chapter 23's {{Flashback}}s, one gets delivered to Monkey D. Madelyn, brutally shutting down her claims that [[spoiler:she only wanted to make Law ''happy'']].
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* WeaponTombstone: Marking the graves of [[spoiler:Nico Robin and Roronoa Zoro]].
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* FridgeHorror: The story practically runs on it.
** Also a literal one in the early chapters.
** Also a literal one in the early chapters.
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** [[GodModeSue Lance D.Imba]]Imba]] [[invoked]]
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->''Now before I go any further, I should mention that if you are looking to read one of those stories where a girl from the real world falls into a fantasy world and maybe falls in love with one of the characters there, you are probably looking at the wrong story. ''
''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6328454/1/Marie_D_Suesse_And_The_Mystery_New_Pirate_Age Marie D. Suesse And The Mystery New Pirate Age!]]'' is an on-going ''OnePiece'' fanfic DeconstructionFic by [[http://www.fanfiction.net/u/388836/Phalanx Phalanx]]
Self-described as ''"A very different take on the typical OC-falls-into-OP story, deconstructed with a macabre twist"''.
The story follows the titular character's adventures after falling into the OnePiece world. It also manages to subvert the SelfInsert story right at the beginning by bringing Mar's parents along for the ride and having her end up alone on the Straw-Hat's deserted ship.
What ensues is a darkly humorous story that deconstructs the hell out of almost every fanfic cliche, all the while building a suspenseful mystery over the fate of the Straw-Hats.
Some parts can be quite disturbing.
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!!''Marie D. Suesse And The Mystery New Pirate Age!'' provides examples of:
* AdultsAreUseless: Defied with a vengeance. Almost every capable character in the story is an adult. And the only one who isn't is pretty much TheLoad.
* BadFuture: [[spoiler: Luffy has been executed, the Straw-Hats disappeared without a trace, and their allies are all either captured or dead. Oh, and the world is overrun with Sues.]]
* HeroicBSOD
** Mar goes into one when she realizes [[spoiler: she fell into the world 20 years after Luffy's death by execution.]]
** Mr. Suesse also gets one when Mar tells him they've fallen into a fictional world based on one of her manga comics.
* DarkActionGirl: Gurnarde, BloodKnight serial killer mermaid.
* DarkFic: The author really wasn't kidding about the "dark" and the "macabre".
* DrivingQuestion: ''"Why is The Thousand Sunny deserted? What happened to the crew? And how are the Heart Pirates involved?"''
* TheFaceless: The Disinfector is never seen without his hazard suit, [[spoiler: until Chapter 21 where he is [[TheReveal revealed]] to be Trafalgar Law]]
* FiveManBand
** TheHero: The Disinfector
** TheLancer: Gurnarde
** TheSmartGuy: Mr. Suesse
** TheBigGuy: Walker
** TheChick: Mar
***TeamPet: The ''Sunny'' could count
* FridgeHorror: The story practically runs on it.
** Also a literal one in the early chapters.
* GhostShip: The ''Thousand Sunny'' turns up as one.
* LemonyNarrator: Who also happens to be a bit of a FirstPersonSmartass.
* MarySue: The entire story revolves around the idea that one of these messed up the OnePiece world.
* MeaningfulName: The author ''loves'' these
** [[MarySue Marie D. Suesse]]
** [[GaryStu Garreth Stuart Suesse]]
** [[GodModeSue Lance D. Imba]]
* MarySueHunter: The Disinfector is introduced as one.
* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them. Most of them tend to be [[ParodySue Parody Sues]].
* OurMermaidsAreDifferent: They're bloodthirsty serial killers.
* PapaWolf: Don't threaten Mar in front of Mr. Suesse. It's a very bad idea.
* RealityEnsues
* RelationshipSue: The main antagonist, Monkey D. Madelyn, seems to have this as her power.
* SnicketWarningLabel: See the quote above.
* ThatWasTheLastEntry: Robin's ApocalypticLog in chapter 7.
* ThirdPersonPerson: Two of them.
*[[WhatKindOfLamePowerIsHeartAnyway What Kind Of Lame Power Is Logic Anyway?]]: Mar eats the Logic-Logic fruit and is disappointed when it only seems to make her think logically.
** [[spoiler: which later turns out to be incorrect as [[HeartIsAnAwesomePower Logic Is An Awesome Power]], thanks to it giving her [[RealityWarper power over logic itself]].]]
* WhamLine: Almost every chapter ends with either this, or a [[TheReveal Reveal]].
''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6328454/1/Marie_D_Suesse_And_The_Mystery_New_Pirate_Age Marie D. Suesse And The Mystery New Pirate Age!]]'' is an on-going ''OnePiece'' fanfic DeconstructionFic by [[http://www.fanfiction.net/u/388836/Phalanx Phalanx]]
Self-described as ''"A very different take on the typical OC-falls-into-OP story, deconstructed with a macabre twist"''.
The story follows the titular character's adventures after falling into the OnePiece world. It also manages to subvert the SelfInsert story right at the beginning by bringing Mar's parents along for the ride and having her end up alone on the Straw-Hat's deserted ship.
What ensues is a darkly humorous story that deconstructs the hell out of almost every fanfic cliche, all the while building a suspenseful mystery over the fate of the Straw-Hats.
Some parts can be quite disturbing.
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!!''Marie D. Suesse And The Mystery New Pirate Age!'' provides examples of:
* AdultsAreUseless: Defied with a vengeance. Almost every capable character in the story is an adult. And the only one who isn't is pretty much TheLoad.
* BadFuture: [[spoiler: Luffy has been executed, the Straw-Hats disappeared without a trace, and their allies are all either captured or dead. Oh, and the world is overrun with Sues.]]
* HeroicBSOD
** Mar goes into one when she realizes [[spoiler: she fell into the world 20 years after Luffy's death by execution.]]
** Mr. Suesse also gets one when Mar tells him they've fallen into a fictional world based on one of her manga comics.
* DarkActionGirl: Gurnarde, BloodKnight serial killer mermaid.
* DarkFic: The author really wasn't kidding about the "dark" and the "macabre".
* DrivingQuestion: ''"Why is The Thousand Sunny deserted? What happened to the crew? And how are the Heart Pirates involved?"''
* TheFaceless: The Disinfector is never seen without his hazard suit, [[spoiler: until Chapter 21 where he is [[TheReveal revealed]] to be Trafalgar Law]]
* FiveManBand
** TheHero: The Disinfector
** TheLancer: Gurnarde
** TheSmartGuy: Mr. Suesse
** TheBigGuy: Walker
** TheChick: Mar
***TeamPet: The ''Sunny'' could count
* FridgeHorror: The story practically runs on it.
** Also a literal one in the early chapters.
* GhostShip: The ''Thousand Sunny'' turns up as one.
* LemonyNarrator: Who also happens to be a bit of a FirstPersonSmartass.
* MarySue: The entire story revolves around the idea that one of these messed up the OnePiece world.
* MeaningfulName: The author ''loves'' these
** [[MarySue Marie D. Suesse]]
** [[GaryStu Garreth Stuart Suesse]]
** [[GodModeSue Lance D. Imba]]
* MarySueHunter: The Disinfector is introduced as one.
* OriginalCharacter: Loads of them. Most of them tend to be [[ParodySue Parody Sues]].
* OurMermaidsAreDifferent: They're bloodthirsty serial killers.
* PapaWolf: Don't threaten Mar in front of Mr. Suesse. It's a very bad idea.
* RealityEnsues
* RelationshipSue: The main antagonist, Monkey D. Madelyn, seems to have this as her power.
* SnicketWarningLabel: See the quote above.
* ThatWasTheLastEntry: Robin's ApocalypticLog in chapter 7.
* ThirdPersonPerson: Two of them.
*[[WhatKindOfLamePowerIsHeartAnyway What Kind Of Lame Power Is Logic Anyway?]]: Mar eats the Logic-Logic fruit and is disappointed when it only seems to make her think logically.
** [[spoiler: which later turns out to be incorrect as [[HeartIsAnAwesomePower Logic Is An Awesome Power]], thanks to it giving her [[RealityWarper power over logic itself]].]]
* WhamLine: Almost every chapter ends with either this, or a [[TheReveal Reveal]].
