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* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: [[spoiler:Once Barry is informed he's in the past and not a BadFuture, it starts sinking in about what he did in the story.]]
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* ReasonableAuthorityFigure: [[spoiler:At the end, Dawn is informed of what Barry did throughout the story. Horrified, she explains that he misunderstood everything and was just scared. Both Clan Leaders want to punish Barry for his actions, but Cyllene speaks up and suggests he joins the Survey Corps instead to make up for the damage, given his battle abilities. Everyone agrees to the terms, and once Dawn leaves, the others ask why Cyllene was so charitable. She simply states then when she visited Barry earlier, his eyes were full of pure terror, so she believes Dawn's story.]]
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** Subverted: While Barry is clueless about Snacks the Snover's gender, the author's visual aid for his team at the end of chapters reveals she is a girl.
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** Subverted: While Barry is clueless about Snacks the Snover's gender, the author's visual aid for his team at the end of chapters reveals she [[spoiler:she is a girl.]]
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I'm just having fun at this point
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* AmbiguousGender: Fern's gender is a mystery for much of the story. [[spoiler:After her final evolution, it's revealed that she's a girl]].
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* AmbiguousGender: AmbiguousGender:
** Fern's gender is a mystery for much of thestory. story, due to being a gendered evolution. [[spoiler:After her final evolution, it's revealed that she's a girl]].girl]].
** Barry also catches a burmy, which is another gendered evolution. [[spoiler:After his final evolution, it's revealed that he is a boy.]]
** Mystery's gender is never revealed, which is the reason for its name in the first place.
** Subverted: While Barry is clueless about Snacks the Snover's gender, the author's visual aid for his team at the end of chapters reveals she is a girl.
** Fern's gender is a mystery for much of the
** Barry also catches a burmy, which is another gendered evolution. [[spoiler:After his final evolution, it's revealed that he is a boy.]]
** Mystery's gender is never revealed, which is the reason for its name in the first place.
** Subverted: While Barry is clueless about Snacks the Snover's gender, the author's visual aid for his team at the end of chapters reveals she is a girl.
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* NearDeathExperience: Barry has exceedingly bad luck in Hisui, and the author themselves has joked about how frequently this happens.
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* InelegantBlubbering: In chapter 15, Dawn ends up doing this when telling Adaman and Irida about Barry.
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* GroinAttack: Poor Gaeric ends up on the receiving end of this thanks to Barry. Made even funnier when Sabi tells him that [[{{Seers}} she]] knew he would do that, which infuriates Gaeric to no end.
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* GroinAttack: Poor Gaeric ends up on the receiving end of this thanks to Barry. Made even funnier when Sabi tells him that [[{{Seers}} she]] knew he would do that, that and didn't stop him [[ItAmusedMe because she thought it would be funny]], which infuriates Gaeric to no end.
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* GroinAttack: Poor Gaeric ends up on the receiving end of this thanks to Barry. Made even funnier when Sabi tells him that [[{{Seers}} she]] knew he would do that, which infuriates Gaeric to no end.
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* NotHelpingYourCase: Barry's misunderstandings regarding the Diamond and Pearl Clans are legitimately not helped by some of the ways they interact with him over the course of the story. Granted, they can be given some leeway as he's been acting increasingly hostile to them throughout the story, but as noted in chapter 16, they're not exactly looking friendly in his eyes no matter how much they claim to want to help him -- Irida approaches him on [[BearsAreBadNews Ursaluna's]] back whilst claiming to want to help him and Ingo's usual hammy delivery of his dramatic speech ends up sounding like a supervillain monologue.
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* LaserGuidedAmnesia: Inflicted on Barry by Jirachi, as it doesn't have the strength to get Dawn back from Arceus on its own. Despite Barry's panic in response to this, Jirachi assures him that it's only temporary.
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* LaserGuidedAmnesia: Inflicted on Barry by Jirachi, as it doesn't have the strength to get Dawn back from Arceus on its own. Jirachi takes all of Barry's memories regarding Dawn, leaving a void in his memory. Despite Barry's panic in response to this, Jirachi assures him that it's only temporary.
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* AdaptationNameChange: [[spoiler:Iron Valiant is referred to as "Galiant", since Barry doesn't know what to call it otherwise]].
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* DisabledInTheAdaptation: Barry is explicitly has ADHD in this fic (something that's often headcanoned but never confirmed in the games), and goes off his meds when Dawn disappears.
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* DisabledInTheAdaptation: Barry is explicitly has ADHD in this fic (something that's often headcanoned but never confirmed in the games), and goes off his meds medication when Dawn disappears.
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After his best friend Dawn disappears, Barry is distraught and now can think of only one thing: Getting her back. To this end, he seeks out Jirachi, the wish-granting Pokemon, who tries but fails to grant his wish... at first. It ultimately decides that it needs something in return, and what it needs is to temporarily "borrow" Barry's memories.
So now Barry is in Hisui, without his memories of who it is he's looking for... but he ''does'' know he's looking for ''someone.''
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After his best friend Dawn disappears, Barry is distraught and now can think of only one thing: Getting getting her back. To this end, he seeks out Jirachi, the wish-granting Pokemon, Pokémon, who tries but fails to grant his wish... at first. It ultimately decides that it needs something in return, and what it needs is to temporarily "borrow" Barry's memories.
So now Barry is in Hisui, without his memories of who it is he's looking for... but he ''does'' know he's looking for''someone.''
''someone''.
So now Barry is in Hisui, without his memories of who it is he's looking for... but he ''does'' know he's looking for
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* BabyTalk: Jirachi speaks like this, much to Barry's irritation.
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* DisabledInTheAdaptation: Barry not only explicitly has ADHD in this fic (something that's often headcanoned but never confirmed in the games), but goes off his meds when Dawn disappears.
* EntertaininglyWrong: After meeting members of the Diamond and Pearl Clans, Barry ends up believing he's in [[BadFuture a timeline where Cyrus won]].
* EntertaininglyWrong: After meeting members of the Diamond and Pearl Clans, Barry ends up believing he's in [[BadFuture a timeline where Cyrus won]].
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* DisabledInTheAdaptation: Barry not only is explicitly has ADHD in this fic (something that's often headcanoned but never confirmed in the games), but and goes off his meds when Dawn disappears.
* EntertaininglyWrong: After meeting members of the Diamond and Pearl Clans, Barry ends up believing he's in [[BadFuture a timeline where Cyrus won]].
* EntertaininglyWrong: After meeting members of the Diamond and Pearl Clans, Barry ends up believing he's in [[BadFuture a timeline where Cyrus won]].
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* WildChild: What the people of Hisui soon find themselves assuming Barry to be, with a particular rumor being that he was [[RaisedByWolves raised by Gardevoirs]].
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* MythicalMotifs: Barry at one point has a dream sequence that adapts [[Myth/ClassicalMythology the myth of Orpheus and Eurydice]], with Barry as Orpheus, Dawn as Eurydice and a Cofagrigus with Ingo's voice as Hades. [[ForegoneConclusion It goes about as well as you'd expect]].
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''Donut Hole'' is a ''VideoGame/PokemonLegendsArceus'' fanfiction by [=DoobleBugs=].
After his best friend Dawn disappears, [[VideoGame/PokemonDiamondAndPearl Barry]] is distraught and now can think of only one thing: Getting her back. To this end, he seeks out Jirachi, the wish-granting Pokemon, who tries but fails to grant his wish... at first. It ultimately decides that it needs something in return, and what it needs is to temporarily "borrow" Barry's memories.
After his best friend Dawn disappears, [[VideoGame/PokemonDiamondAndPearl Barry]] is distraught and now can think of only one thing: Getting her back. To this end, he seeks out Jirachi, the wish-granting Pokemon, who tries but fails to grant his wish... at first. It ultimately decides that it needs something in return, and what it needs is to temporarily "borrow" Barry's memories.
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''Donut Hole'' is a ''VideoGame/PokemonLegendsArceus'' ''Franchise/{{Pokemon}}'' fanfiction by [=DoobleBugs=].
[=DoobleBugs=]. Specifically, it takes elements from ''VideoGame/PokemonLegendsArceus'', ''VideoGame/PokemonDiamondAndPearl'' and ''VideoGame/PokemonScarletAndViolet''.
After his best friend Dawn disappears,[[VideoGame/PokemonDiamondAndPearl Barry]] Barry is distraught and now can think of only one thing: Getting her back. To this end, he seeks out Jirachi, the wish-granting Pokemon, who tries but fails to grant his wish... at first. It ultimately decides that it needs something in return, and what it needs is to temporarily "borrow" Barry's memories.
After his best friend Dawn disappears,
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* NoMedicationForMe: Barry gets so depressed after Dawn disappears that he stops taking his adderall. It only gets worse when he ends up in Hisui, because there ''is no'' adderall for him to take.
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* BreakTheCutie: Hisui is ''not'' kind to Barry, though admittedly, he's not very kind to it in turn.
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* WhamLine: The description (and [[WhamShot illustration]] of Fern's final evolution. [[spoiler:She's not a Gardevoir... and she's not [[VideoGame/PokemonScarletAndViolet a Gallade...]]]]
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* WhamLine: The description (and [[WhamShot illustration]] illustration]]) of Fern's final evolution. [[spoiler:She's not a Gardevoir... and she's not [[VideoGame/PokemonScarletAndViolet a Gallade...]]]]]]]]
* WildChild: What the people of Hisui soon find themselves assuming Barry to be, with a particular rumor being that he was [[RaisedByWolves raised by Gardevoirs]].
* WildChild: What the people of Hisui soon find themselves assuming Barry to be, with a particular rumor being that he was [[RaisedByWolves raised by Gardevoirs]].
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''Donut Hole'' is a ''VideoGame/PokemonLegendsArceus'' fanfiction by [=DoobleBugs=].
After his best friend Dawn disappears, [[VideoGame/PokemonDiamondAndPearl Barry]] is distraught and now can think of only one thing: Getting her back. To this end, he seeks out Jirachi, the wish-granting Pokemon, who tries but fails to grant his wish... at first. It ultimately decides that it needs something in return, and what it needs is to temporarily "borrow" Barry's memories.
So now Barry is in Hisui, without his memories of who it is he's looking for... but he ''does'' know he's looking for ''someone.''
Can be read [[https://archiveofourown.org/works/40408542/chapters/101226942 here]].
!!''Donut Hole'' contains examples of:
* AmbiguousGender: Fern's gender is a mystery for much of the story. [[spoiler:After her final evolution, it's revealed that she's a girl]].
* BabyTalk: Jirachi speaks like this, much to Barry's irritation.
* BrokenPedestal: A complicated example; since Barry thinks he's in an alternate timeline where Cyrus won, he's fully convinced Ingo (who was apparently friends with his dad) has joined Team Galactic and is very upset to learn this. Thing is, that's ''not'' what happened at all, but even so hearing the words "And to think I used to look up to you..." from who for all he knows is just a random kid shakes the amnesiac Ingo to his core.
* DisabledInTheAdaptation: Barry not only explicitly has ADHD in this fic (something that's often headcanoned but never confirmed in the games), but goes off his meds when Dawn disappears.
* EntertaininglyWrong: After meeting members of the Diamond and Pearl Clans, Barry ends up believing he's in [[BadFuture a timeline where Cyrus won]].
* IdenticalAncestor: A plot point: Barry meeting Arezu ends with him thinking she's Commander Mars of Team Galactic and immediately leads to him becoming hostile towards her... especially since, with him searching for his missing friend, he instantly puts two and two together and assumes that Team Galactic must've kidnapped her.
* LaserGuidedAmnesia: Inflicted on Barry by Jirachi, as it doesn't have the strength to get Dawn back from Arceus on its own. Despite Barry's panic in response to this, Jirachi assures him that it's only temporary.
* SignatureMon: Fern, the Ralts Barry ends up befriending and eventually training. It then evolves into a Kirlia... which then evolves into [[spoiler:Iron Valiant]].
* WhamLine: The description (and [[WhamShot illustration]] of Fern's final evolution. [[spoiler:She's not a Gardevoir... and she's not [[VideoGame/PokemonScarletAndViolet a Gallade...]]]]
After his best friend Dawn disappears, [[VideoGame/PokemonDiamondAndPearl Barry]] is distraught and now can think of only one thing: Getting her back. To this end, he seeks out Jirachi, the wish-granting Pokemon, who tries but fails to grant his wish... at first. It ultimately decides that it needs something in return, and what it needs is to temporarily "borrow" Barry's memories.
So now Barry is in Hisui, without his memories of who it is he's looking for... but he ''does'' know he's looking for ''someone.''
Can be read [[https://archiveofourown.org/works/40408542/chapters/101226942 here]].
!!''Donut Hole'' contains examples of:
* AmbiguousGender: Fern's gender is a mystery for much of the story. [[spoiler:After her final evolution, it's revealed that she's a girl]].
* BabyTalk: Jirachi speaks like this, much to Barry's irritation.
* BrokenPedestal: A complicated example; since Barry thinks he's in an alternate timeline where Cyrus won, he's fully convinced Ingo (who was apparently friends with his dad) has joined Team Galactic and is very upset to learn this. Thing is, that's ''not'' what happened at all, but even so hearing the words "And to think I used to look up to you..." from who for all he knows is just a random kid shakes the amnesiac Ingo to his core.
* DisabledInTheAdaptation: Barry not only explicitly has ADHD in this fic (something that's often headcanoned but never confirmed in the games), but goes off his meds when Dawn disappears.
* EntertaininglyWrong: After meeting members of the Diamond and Pearl Clans, Barry ends up believing he's in [[BadFuture a timeline where Cyrus won]].
* IdenticalAncestor: A plot point: Barry meeting Arezu ends with him thinking she's Commander Mars of Team Galactic and immediately leads to him becoming hostile towards her... especially since, with him searching for his missing friend, he instantly puts two and two together and assumes that Team Galactic must've kidnapped her.
* LaserGuidedAmnesia: Inflicted on Barry by Jirachi, as it doesn't have the strength to get Dawn back from Arceus on its own. Despite Barry's panic in response to this, Jirachi assures him that it's only temporary.
* SignatureMon: Fern, the Ralts Barry ends up befriending and eventually training. It then evolves into a Kirlia... which then evolves into [[spoiler:Iron Valiant]].
* WhamLine: The description (and [[WhamShot illustration]] of Fern's final evolution. [[spoiler:She's not a Gardevoir... and she's not [[VideoGame/PokemonScarletAndViolet a Gallade...]]]]
