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* PatchworkKids: Averted. Although something about [[spoiler:Zaheer's mug shot]] looks vaguely familiar to Hakini [[note]]WordOfGod is that it's [[spoiler:the [[VillainousCheekbones cheekbones]]]][[/note]], she's implied to mainly just have a StrongFamilyResemblance to [[spoiler:her father P'Li]] (or, at very least, to have inherited [[spoiler:the [[PlayingWithFire bending element]] and the [[HugeSchoolgirl height]]]]).
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* PatchworkKids: Averted. Although something about [[spoiler:Zaheer's mug shot]] looks vaguely familiar to Hakini [[note]]WordOfGod Hakini[[note]]WordOfGod is that it's [[spoiler:the the [[VillainousCheekbones cheekbones]]]][[/note]], cheekbones]][[/note]], she's implied to mainly just have a StrongFamilyResemblance to [[spoiler:her father mother P'Li]] (or, at very least, to have inherited [[spoiler:the [[PlayingWithFire bending element]] and the [[HugeSchoolgirl height]]]]).
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* NurtureOverNature: Teased at.
* OriginalCharacter: Hakini is one, as are [[HappilyAdopted her parents]][[spoiler:; "the people who'd brought her into the world," however, are canon antagonists]].
* PatchworkKids: Averted; although something about [[spoiler:Zaheer's mug shot]] looks vaguely familiar to her (WordOfGod is that it's [[spoiler:the [[VillainousCheekbones cheekbones]]]]), she's implied to mainly just have a StrongFamilyResemblance to [[spoiler:P'Li]] (or, at very least, to have inherited [[spoiler:the [[PlayingWithFire bending element]] and the [[HugeSchoolgirl height]]]]).
* PlayingWithFire: Hakini is stated to be a firebender. [[spoiler:Yet ''another'' way in which she takes after her birth mother.]]
* OriginalCharacter: Hakini is one, as are [[HappilyAdopted her parents]][[spoiler:; "the people who'd brought her into the world," however, are canon antagonists]].
* PatchworkKids: Averted; although something about [[spoiler:Zaheer's mug shot]] looks vaguely familiar to her (WordOfGod is that it's [[spoiler:the [[VillainousCheekbones cheekbones]]]]), she's implied to mainly just have a StrongFamilyResemblance to [[spoiler:P'Li]] (or, at very least, to have inherited [[spoiler:the [[PlayingWithFire bending element]] and the [[HugeSchoolgirl height]]]]).
* PlayingWithFire: Hakini is stated to be a firebender. [[spoiler:Yet ''another'' way in which she takes after her birth mother.]]
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* PlayingWithFire: Hakini is stated to be a firebender. [[spoiler:Yet
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* SliceOfLife: When it comes right down to it, this is a story about a kid reading the newspaper while waiting for the bus.
* [[TellMeAboutMyFather Tell Me About My Birth Parents!]]: Defied. Sure, Hakini ''asked'' once...only to find out that [[LockedOutOfTheLoop the information had been deliberately withheld]]. Hence...
* TitleDrop: In the second-to-last paragraph; and it doesn't just apply to Hakini:
-->"She'd [[HappilyAdopted asked her parents, once, about the people who'd brought her into the world]]. They [[LockedOutOfTheLoop hadn't been told names]]--only that they were better off not knowing."
* [[TellMeAboutMyFather Tell Me About My Birth Parents!]]: Defied. Sure, Hakini ''asked'' once...only to find out that [[LockedOutOfTheLoop the information had been deliberately withheld]]. Hence...
* TitleDrop: In the second-to-last paragraph; and it doesn't just apply to Hakini:
-->"She'd [[HappilyAdopted asked her parents, once, about the people who'd brought her into the world]]. They [[LockedOutOfTheLoop hadn't been told names]]--only that they were better off not knowing."
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* SliceOfLife: When it comes right down to it, this is a The story is ultimately just a short moment about a kid reading the newspaper while waiting for the bus.
* [[TellMeAboutMyFather Tell Me About My Birth Parents!]]: Defied. Sure, Hakini ''asked'' only asked her parents about her biological family once...only to find out that [[LockedOutOfTheLoop the information had been deliberately withheld]]. Hence...
withheld from them]]. While Hakini does wonder sometimes, she mostly decides that she's content not knowing her birth parents' identities.
* TitleDrop:In the The second-to-last paragraph; and it doesn't just apply to Hakini:
paragraph quotes the title verbatim:
-->"She'd[[HappilyAdopted asked her parents, once, about the people who'd brought her into the world]].world. They [[LockedOutOfTheLoop hadn't been told names]]--only that they were better off not knowing."
* [[TellMeAboutMyFather Tell Me About My Birth Parents!]]: Defied.
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It's roughly concurrent with the finale of Book 3, and involves a twelve-year-old girl reading a newspaper article about the events of said finale while waiting for the school bus. Details about the viewpoint character emerge throughout the narrative.
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* AllThereInTheManual: The story summary discloses the viewpoint character's place of residence, and [[AllThereInTheScript her name is revealed in the tags]]. The author has also offhandedly revealed other details elsewhere.
* AllThereInTheScript: Her name is given as "Hakini" in the work tags.
* BigEater: Hakini [[JustifiedTrope is a growing girl]][[spoiler:--potentially quite dramatically so, if [[StatuesqueStunner her birth mother]]'s genes leave their mark--]]who's [[HugeSchoolgirl already big for her age]], and the "increasingly ravenous appetite" that she has to show for it gets a brief mention.
* AllThereInTheScript: Her name is given as "Hakini" in the work tags.
* BigEater: Hakini [[JustifiedTrope is a growing girl]][[spoiler:--potentially quite dramatically so, if [[StatuesqueStunner her birth mother]]'s genes leave their mark--]]who's [[HugeSchoolgirl already big for her age]], and the "increasingly ravenous appetite" that she has to show for it gets a brief mention.
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* AllThereInTheManual: The story summary is the only thing that discloses the viewpoint character's place of residence, and [[AllThereInTheScript her name is revealed in the tags]]. The author has also offhandedly revealed other details elsewhere.
* AllThereInTheScript:Her The viewpoint character's name is given as "Hakini" in the work tags.
* BigEater: Hakini[[JustifiedTrope is a growing girl]][[spoiler:--potentially quite dramatically so, if [[StatuesqueStunner her birth mother]]'s genes leave their mark--]]who's girl who is [[HugeSchoolgirl already quite big for her age]], and the "increasingly ravenous appetite" that she has to show for it gets a brief mention.mention. It's implied that [[spoiler:her height stems from [[StatuesqueStunner her birth mother]]'s genes, which means she could potentially get even taller than she already is]].
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* ElsewhereFic: Although it's roughly concurrent with the Book 3 finale, it's set "somewhere in the Fire Nation." As such, no canon characters actually appear.
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* ElsewhereFic: Although it's roughly concurrent with the Book 3 finale, it's the story is set "somewhere in the Fire Nation." As such, no canon characters actually appear.
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* GiveHerANormalLife: Implied[[spoiler:, although the choice wasn't made by her biological parents]].
* HappilyAdopted: Hakini draws a distinction between "[[GoodParents her parents]]" and the (unknown [[DramaticIrony to her]]) "people who'd brought her into the world."
* HugeSchoolgirl: She's a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who--at a confirmed height of 5'11" (slightly over 180cm) and still growing--is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8" (2.03m)...]]
* HappilyAdopted: Hakini draws a distinction between "[[GoodParents her parents]]" and the (unknown [[DramaticIrony to her]]) "people who'd brought her into the world."
* HugeSchoolgirl: She's a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who--at a confirmed height of 5'11" (slightly over 180cm) and still growing--is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8" (2.03m)...]]
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* GiveHerANormalLife: Implied[[spoiler:, Implied to be the reason that Hakini was given up for adoption, although the [[spoiler:the choice wasn't made by her biological parents]].
* HappilyAdopted: Hakini draws a distinction between "[[GoodParents her parents]]" andthe (unknown [[DramaticIrony to her]]) "people "the people who'd brought her into the world."
* HugeSchoolgirl:She's Hakini is a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who--at a confirmed height of 5'11" (slightly over 180cm) and still growing--is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8" (2.03m)...03m).]]
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* LockedOutOfTheLoop: The title says it all; and it applies not ''only'' to Hakini, but to her adoptive parents as well.
* NamelessNarrative: Canon characters are mentioned, but not named. Hakini's name (the author has admitted that, when it was written, she hadn't yet actually been ''given'' one) and those of her adoptive parents [[NoNameGiven are not revealed in the story proper]].
* NoInfantileAmnesia: Downplayed. Hakini was born in the [[SeasonalBaggage summer]], but her earliest memory is of "bone-crushing cold." [[spoiler:Considering her age, she'd have been conceived shortly before the Red Lotus "[[QuirkyMinibossSquad op team]]" were incarcerated and born in [[TailorMadePrison P'Li's cell]]; ice crevasses tend to be cold throughout the year.]]
* NamelessNarrative: Canon characters are mentioned, but not named. Hakini's name (the author has admitted that, when it was written, she hadn't yet actually been ''given'' one) and those of her adoptive parents [[NoNameGiven are not revealed in the story proper]].
* NoInfantileAmnesia: Downplayed. Hakini was born in the [[SeasonalBaggage summer]], but her earliest memory is of "bone-crushing cold." [[spoiler:Considering her age, she'd have been conceived shortly before the Red Lotus "[[QuirkyMinibossSquad op team]]" were incarcerated and born in [[TailorMadePrison P'Li's cell]]; ice crevasses tend to be cold throughout the year.]]
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* LockedOutOfTheLoop: The title says it all; and it applies not ''only'' to Hakini, but to Neither Hakini nor her adoptive adopted parents as well.
know who Hakini's biological parents are, and they seem to have no involvement in politics or the events of the plot.
* NamelessNarrative: Canon characters are mentioned, but not named. Hakini's name Noncanon characters are referred to only with epithets: Hakini is referred to as "the girl," and while she has a name, it isn't revealed in the story proper--it's simply [[AllThereInTheScript listed in the character tags of the fic]] (the author has admitted that, when it was written, she hadn't yet actually been ''given'' one) and those of her Hakini didn't even ''have'' a name). Similarly, the names Hakini's adoptive parents [[NoNameGiven are not never revealed in the story proper]].
story]].
* NoInfantileAmnesia: Downplayed. Hakini was born in the [[SeasonalBaggage summer]], but her earliest memory is of "bone-crushing cold." [[spoiler:Considering her age,she'd she would have been conceived shortly before the Red Lotus "[[QuirkyMinibossSquad op team]]" were incarcerated and born in [[TailorMadePrison P'Li's cell]]; ice crevasses tend to be cold throughout the year.]]
* NamelessNarrative: Canon characters are mentioned, but not named.
* NoInfantileAmnesia: Downplayed. Hakini was born in the [[SeasonalBaggage summer]], but her earliest memory is of "bone-crushing cold." [[spoiler:Considering her age,
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* [[TellMeAboutMyFather Tell Me About My Birth Parents]]: Defied. Sure, Hakini ''asked'' once...only to find out that [[LockedOutOfTheLoop the information had been deliberately withheld]]. Hence...
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* HugeSchoolgirl: She's a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who—at a confirmed height of 5'11" (slightly over 180cm) and still growing—is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8" (203cm)...]]
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* HugeSchoolgirl: She's a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who—at a confirmed height of 5'11" (slightly over 180cm) and still growing—is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8" (203cm)...(2.03m)...]]
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* HugeSchoolgirl: She's a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who—at a confirmed height of 5'11" (slightly over 180cm) and still growing—is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8"...]]
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* HugeSchoolgirl: She's a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who—at a confirmed height of 5'11" (slightly over 180cm) and still growing—is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8"...6'8" (203cm)...]]
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* HugeSchoolgirl: She's a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who—at a confirmed height of 5'11" and still growing—is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8"...]]
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* HugeSchoolgirl: She's a twelve-year-old student, described as gangly and awkward, who—at a confirmed height of 5'11" (slightly over 180cm) and still growing—is already promising to be taller than her adoptive father. [[spoiler:Not too surprising, considering that her birth mother was 6'8"...]]
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* AllThereInTheManual: The story summary discloses the viewpoint character's place of residence, and her name is given as "Hakini" in the tags. The author has also offhandedly revealed other details elsewhere.
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* AllThereInTheManual: The story summary discloses the viewpoint character's place of residence, and [[AllThereInTheScript her name is given as "Hakini" revealed in the tags. tags]]. The author has also offhandedly revealed other details elsewhere.elsewhere.
* AllThereInTheScript: Her name is given as "Hakini" in the work tags.
* AllThereInTheScript: Her name is given as "Hakini" in the work tags.
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* TitleDrop: In the second-to-last paragraph; and it doesn't just apply to Hakini.
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* TitleDrop: In the second-to-last paragraph; and it doesn't just apply to Hakini.Hakini:
-->"She’d [[HappilyAdopted asked her parents, once, about the people who’d brought her into the world]]. They [[LockedOutOfTheLoop hadn’t been told names]]—only that they were better off not knowing."
-->"She’d [[HappilyAdopted asked her parents, once, about the people who’d brought her into the world]]. They [[LockedOutOfTheLoop hadn’t been told names]]—only that they were better off not knowing."
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* PlayingWithFire: Hakini is stated to be a firebender. [[spoiler:Yet ''another'' way in which she takes after Mama.]]
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* PlayingWithFire: Hakini is stated to be a firebender. [[spoiler:Yet ''another'' way in which she takes after Mama.her birth mother.]]
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* OriginalCharacter: Hakini is one, as are her parents[[spoiler:; "the people who'd brought her into the world," however, are canon antagonists]].
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* OriginalCharacter: Hakini is one, as are [[HappilyAdopted her parents[[spoiler:; parents]][[spoiler:; "the people who'd brought her into the world," however, are canon antagonists]].
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A [[FlashFiction brief]] SliceOfLife [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/3909817 fanfic]] based on ''WesternAnimation/TheLegendOfKorra'', written by {{AO3}} user [=RhazadeWaterbender=].
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A [[FlashFiction brief]] SliceOfLife [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/3909817 fanfic]] based on ''WesternAnimation/TheLegendOfKorra'', written by {{AO3}} Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn user [=RhazadeWaterbender=].
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* TitleDrop: In the second-to-last paragraph; and it doesn't just apply to Hakini.Hakini.
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* LockedOutOfTheLoop: The title says it all; and it applies not ''only'' to Hakini, but to her adoptive parents as well.
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* TitleDrop: In the second-to-last paragraph. Applied not only to Hakini, but to her adoptive parents as well.
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* TitleDrop: In the second-to-last paragraph. Applied not only paragraph; and it doesn't just apply to Hakini, but to her adoptive parents as well.Hakini.
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* ElsewhereFic: Although it's roughly concurrent with the Book 3 finale, it's set "somewhere in the Fire Nation." As such, no canon characters actually appear.
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* NoInfantileAmnesia: Downplayed. Hakini was born in the [[SeasonalBaggage summer]], but her earliest memory is of "bone-crushing cold." [[spoiler:Considering her age, she'd have been conceived shortly before the Red Lotus "[[QuirkyMinibossSquad op team]]" were incarcerated and born in [[TailorMadePrison P'Li's cell]]. And ice crevasses, after all, tend to be cold all year round.]]
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* NoInfantileAmnesia: Downplayed. Hakini was born in the [[SeasonalBaggage summer]], but her earliest memory is of "bone-crushing cold." [[spoiler:Considering her age, she'd have been conceived shortly before the Red Lotus "[[QuirkyMinibossSquad op team]]" were incarcerated and born in [[TailorMadePrison P'Li's cell]]. And cell]]; ice crevasses, after all, crevasses tend to be cold all year round.throughout the year.]]
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* AllThereInTheManual: The story summary discloses the viewpoint character's place of residence, and her name is given as "Hakini" in the tags The author has also offhandedly revealed other details elsewhere.
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* AllThereInTheManual: The author has offhandedly revealed—among other details not made explicit in the story—the viewpoint character's name, height, and place of residence.
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* AllThereInTheManual: The author has offhandedly revealed—among other details not made explicit in story summary discloses the story—the viewpoint character's name, height, and place of residence.residence, and her name is given as "Hakini" in the tags The author has also offhandedly revealed other details elsewhere.
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I don't think there's supposed to be a space before a punctuation mark such as a comma.
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* GiveHerANormalLife: Implied [[spoiler:, although the choice wasn't made by her biological parents]].
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* GiveHerANormalLife: Implied [[spoiler:, Implied[[spoiler:, although the choice wasn't made by her biological parents]].
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* BigEater: Hakini [[JustifiedTrope is a growing girl]] [[spoiler:—possibly quite dramatically so, if [[StatuesqueStunner her birth mother]]'s genes leave their mark—]]who's [[HugeSchoolgirl already big for her age]], and the "increasingly ravenous appetite" that she has to show for it gets a brief mention.
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* BigEater: Hakini [[JustifiedTrope is a growing girl]] [[spoiler:—possibly girl]][[spoiler:—potentially quite dramatically so, if [[StatuesqueStunner her birth mother]]'s genes leave their mark—]]who's [[HugeSchoolgirl already big for her age]], and the "increasingly ravenous appetite" that she has to show for it gets a brief mention.
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* BigEater: Hakini [[JustifiedTrope is a growing girl]][[spoiler:—possibly quite dramatically so, if [[StatuesqueStunner her birth mother]]'s genes leave their mark—]]who's [[HugeSchoolgirl already big for her age]], and the "increasingly ravenous appetite" that she has to show for it gets a brief mention.
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* BigEater: Hakini [[JustifiedTrope is a growing girl]][[spoiler:—possibly girl]] [[spoiler:—possibly quite dramatically so, if [[StatuesqueStunner her birth mother]]'s genes leave their mark—]]who's [[HugeSchoolgirl already big for her age]], and the "increasingly ravenous appetite" that she has to show for it gets a brief mention.
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* GiveHerANormalLife: Implied[[spoiler:, although the choice wasn't made by her biological parents]].
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* GiveHerANormalLife: Implied[[spoiler:, Implied [[spoiler:, although the choice wasn't made by her biological parents]].
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More like shortly after the final battle.
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* DramaticIrony: It becomes increasingly clear to the reader that Hakini is [[spoiler:the biological daughter of the ArcVillain [[UnholyMatrimony and]] TheBrute]]. She herself, however, is mercifully unaware of the fact.
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* DramaticIrony: It becomes increasingly clear to the reader that Hakini is [[spoiler:the biological daughter of the ArcVillain [[ArcVillain Zaheer]] [[UnholyMatrimony and]] TheBrute]].[[TheBrute P'Li]]]]. She herself, however, is mercifully unaware of the fact.
