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* NoAntagonist: The closest thing the story has to an antagonist is when the characters misunderstand each other.
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* LipstickLesbian: Lyra and Bon Bon.
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* LipstickLesbian: Lyra and Bon Bon. And to an extent, Twilight and Applejack. Their orientations seem to have no bearing on their how they're portrayed.
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What happens when you realize that your feelings for one of your friends aren't quite the same as your feelings for the rest of them? Do you just prefer some friends for others, or is it a sign of something deeper? What do you do with those feelings? Hide them? Admit them? And how will the rest of your friends react when they find out? Twilight is going to have to do her best to find the answers, because they're anything but obvious.
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What happens when you realize that your feelings for one of your friends aren't quite the same as your feelings for the rest of them? Do you just prefer some friends for over others, or is it a sign of something deeper? What do you do with those feelings? Hide them? Admit them? And how will the rest of your friends react when they find out? Twilight is going to have to do her best to find the answers, because they're anything but obvious.
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* RealityEnsues: Pretty much the entire thing is an extended example of this as applied to {{Shipping}}. Specifically concerning the fact that [[spoiler: just because one's LoveConfession is accepted doesn't mean things are going to go smoothly.]]
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* SeinfeldianConversation: Pops up several times, the most obvious one being Pinkie's rant in chapter 15 about why chocolate chip and oatmeal raisin cookies should be kept on separate plates.
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-->"This is the most unromantic ship-fic I've ever read."
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* TheUnintelligible: Owlowysius gets this treatment. Spike is the only character who seems to understand him.
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* ShipTease: The whole fic is about Twilight X Applejack, although it is mostly from the former. A certain [[spoiler:yellow Pegasus]] is hinted to have a feeling toward Twilight too...
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* ShipTease: The whole fic is about Twilight X Applejack, although it is mostly from the former. A certain [[spoiler:yellow Pegasus]] is hinted to have a feeling toward Twilight too...which is then revealed to be lies. However, attentive readers will find sly hints about the feelings of a certain cyan pegasus toward her yellow friend...
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* GossipEvolution: One of these is responsible for Rainbow Dash believing that a love triangle is forming between Twilight, Applejack, and Fluttershy. [[spoiler: Ultimately subverted; as soon as Rarity hears the rumor, she traces it back to its source, realizes how inaccurate it is, and quashes it before it spreads.]]
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* JerkWithAHeartOfGold: Bon Bon is rather... brusque with just about everyone, but according to Lyra she's a softie at heart.
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* LoveTriangle: Discussed; Rarity talks about how love triangles suck because unless the parties involved are okay with sharing, it guarantees that ''somebody'' is going to end up alone. And that if everyone is already on friendly terms it's even ''worse'' because even the two who ''do'' end up together will still feel bad about excluding the third party.
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* PoorCommunicationKills: Subverted. The end of one chapter sets up a misunderstanding in which Rainbow Dash believes that Fluttershy has a crush on Twilight. [[spoiler: The next chapter starts with Rarity explaining why this probably isn't the case, and deciding to find out what's ''actually'' going on before attempting to do anything.]]
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* TriangRelations: Subverted. Several character think a type 4 is forming with Fluttershy developing feelings for Twilight, but [[spoiler: it turns out that [[TheFourLoves Fluttershy's feelings aren't romantic in nature]].]]
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* HollywoodKiss: Pointedly averted. Any time a kiss is attempted, they tend to bump noses a few times first.
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-->"This is the most unromantic ship-fic I've ever read."
-->--'''[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/31793/a-delicate-balance#comment/1795367 A comment on Fimfiction.]]'''
-->--'''[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/31793/a-delicate-balance#comment/1795367 A comment on Fimfiction.]]'''
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A Twilight/Applejack fic with a very subtle (and deliberately paced) approach to {{Shipping}}, and a strong dedication to [[OriginalFlavor keeping everyone as in character as possible]]. As a result, it borders on a GenreDeconstruction of ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' shipping stories; it takes a ''[[ProlongedPrologue long]]'' time to set the relationship up, and also attempts to deal with the ripple effect that Twilight's romantic endeavors spread through the rest of the cast.
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A Twilight/Applejack fic with a very subtle (and deliberately paced) approach to {{Shipping}}, and a strong dedication to [[OriginalFlavor keeping everyone as in character as possible]]. As a result, it borders on a GenreDeconstruction of ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' shipping stories; it takes a ''[[ProlongedPrologue long]]'' time to set the relationship up, and also attempts to deal with the ripple effect that Twilight's romantic endeavors spread through the rest of the cast.
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* GreenEyedMonster: Fluttershy's conflict in the story so far. She isn't happy that Twilight's infatuation means less time for them to spend together, but she recognizes that this jealousy isn't a healthy attitude, so she pushes herself to support the two of them in spite of her feelings. At one point she hopes, to herself, that Twi and AJ's relationship won't work out--then she immediately hates herself for thinking that.
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* ContinuityNod: To the show. Lyra explicitly says that [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS1E20GreenIsntYourColor Bon Bon has trouble remembering Rarity's name]].
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** In the second chapter, Twilight is so distracted that she picks up a cup of water with her hooves rather than her telekinesis. She does fine until she realizes she's holding the cup that way, at which point she drops it.
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* DatePeepers: Pinkie Pie ''intends'' to spy on Twilight and Applejack's first date, but Rarity ultimately convinces her to respect their privacy.
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* {{Squee}}: Upon seeing [[spoiler:AJ and Twi are a couple]], Pinkie squees so hard that she manages to insert a heart icon into her exclamation.
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* DoubleSubversion: It's common in ''FIM'' fanworks to portray Applejack's hat as some kind of precious heirloom. In this story, [[spoiler:it's not special at all. AJ actually has dozens of identical hats; individual hats tend to survive only a few months of farm life. However, the specific hat AJ was wearing during Twilight's love confession ''is'' special to AJ ''now'', so she gives it to Twilight for safekeeping.]]
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* PaintingTheFourthWall: Pinkie is capable of [[SayItWithHearts inserting hearts into her dialogue.]]
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* PaintingTheFourthWall: PaintingTheMedium: Pinkie is capable of [[SayItWithHearts inserting hearts into her dialogue.]]
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* ComfortFood: While wallowing in sorrow, Twilight chows down on chocolatey granola bars.
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* ComfortFood: While wallowing in sorrow, Twilight chows down on chocolatey chocolaty granola bars.
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* FandomNod: Argueably, Pinkie saying that AJ might give Twilight her hat if she and AJ become a couple [[spoiler: and the fact that AJ does give Twilight her special hat soon after Twilight confesses her love]] may be a nod to how some shipping pics tend to have AJ's lover (whoever it may be depending on the pairing) wearing her hat.
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* FandomNod: Argueably, Arguably, Pinkie saying that AJ might give Twilight her hat if she and AJ become a couple [[spoiler: and the fact that AJ does give Twilight her special hat soon after Twilight confesses her love]] may be a nod to how some shipping pics tend to have AJ's lover (whoever it may be depending on the pairing) wearing her hat.
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* RealDreamsAreWeirder: Rarity points out that one can't really trust dreams for insight into waking reality. She cites one of Pinkie's dreams, involving a donut-balloon and Diamond Dogs firing chocolatizing magic bolts. On the other hand, Twilight's dream about Applejack "seemed so real, for a moment I almost didn't realize that it had been a dream. Well, that sea serpent from the Everfree Forest was there, wearing a rainbow clown wig, but other than that it was just like real life!"
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* RealDreamsAreWeirder: Rarity points out that one can't really trust dreams for insight into waking reality. She cites one of Pinkie's dreams, involving a donut-balloon doughnut-balloon and Diamond Dogs firing chocolatizing magic bolts. On the other hand, Twilight's dream about Applejack "seemed so real, for a moment I almost didn't realize that it had been a dream. Well, that sea serpent from the Everfree Forest was there, wearing a rainbow clown wig, but other than that it was just like real life!"
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* ShipTease: The whole fic is about Twilight X Applejack, although it is mostly from the former. A certain [[spoiler:yellow pegasus]] is hinted to have a feeling toward Twilight too...
* SmarterThanYouLook: Rainbow Dash uses a quite solid stragedy, even if it just meant exploiting Twilight's "eggheaded approaches" to beat her in Battlecloud. ''17 times in a row.''
* SmarterThanYouLook: Rainbow Dash uses a quite solid stragedy, even if it just meant exploiting Twilight's "eggheaded approaches" to beat her in Battlecloud. ''17 times in a row.''
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* ShipTease: The whole fic is about Twilight X Applejack, although it is mostly from the former. A certain [[spoiler:yellow pegasus]] Pegasus]] is hinted to have a feeling toward Twilight too...
* SmarterThanYouLook: Rainbow Dash uses a quite solidstragedy, strategy, even if it just meant exploiting Twilight's "eggheaded approaches" to beat her in Battlecloud. ''17 times in a row.''
* SmarterThanYouLook: Rainbow Dash uses a quite solid
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* BrickJoke: Kinda, if one is following the story as it updates: Chapter 8 ends with [[spoiler: Twilight and Applejack joking about how Pinkie was watching them through a telescope. Chapter 9 opens with... Pinkie actually watching them through a telescope]]. If you're ArchiveBinging, it turns into more of a SmashCut, though.
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* BrickJoke: Kinda, if one is following the story as it updates: Chapter 8 ends with [[spoiler: Twilight and Applejack joking about how Pinkie was watching them through a telescope. Chapter 9 opens with... Pinkie actually watching them through a telescope]]. If you're ArchiveBinging, doing an ArchiveBinge, it turns into more of a SmashCut, though.
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* BrickJoke: Kinda, if one is following the story as it updates: Chapter 8 ends with [[spoiler: Twilight and Applejack joking about how Pinkie was watching them through a telescope. Chapter 9 opens with... Pinkie actually watching them through a telescope]]. If you're ArchiveBinging, it turns into more of a SmashCut, though.
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* SayItWithHearts: Pinkie does this on occasion.
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* EverythingsBetterWithChocolate: See ComfortFood. Rarity is also very fond of it, although she refrains herself from it for the sake of her figure.
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* EverythingsBetterWithChocolate: See ComfortFood. Rarity Chocolate is also a major plot point. It's in Twilight's ComfortFood of choice, in Pinkie's analogies, and both Pinkie and Rarity's dreams. Lyra gave Bon Bon a box of chocolates when she first asked Bon Bon out; [[spoiler:when Twilight decides to ask Applejack out, Bon Bon gives Twi the very fond same assortment of it, although she refrains herself from it for the sake of her figure. chocolates to offer to AJ]].
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* FandomNod: Argueably, Pinkie saying that AJ might give Twilight her hat if she and AJ become a couple [[spoiler: and the fact that AJ does give Twilight her special hat soon after Twilight confesses her love]] may be a nod to how some shipping pics tend to have AJ's lover {Whoever (whoever it may be depending on the pairing} pairing) wearing her hat.
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* TimeForPlanB: Twilight's over-thought-out attempt to ask Applejack out. “I've actually put together plans going all the way through N. Although I doubt I'll have to go past plan G.”
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* AntiClimax: After six chapters of buildup, Twilight finally gets the nerve to ask Applejack whether or not she's willing to go out with her. [[spoiler: Applejack's answer? "I don't know". It isn't for two more chapters that Twilight actually gets an answer.]]
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* ProlonguedPrologue: For a shipping story, it takes its sweet time in actually getting to the pairing, preferring to spend the first few chapters setting Twilight's state of mind. The initial LoveConfession doesn't even come up until roughly forty thousand words into the story.
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* ProlonguedPrologue: For a shipping story, it takes its sweet time in actually getting to the pairing, preferring to spend the first few chapters setting Twilight's state of mind. The initial LoveConfession doesn't even come up until roughly forty thousand words into the story.
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A Twilight/Applejack fic with a very subtle (and deliberately paced) approach to {{Shipping}}, and a strong dedication to [[OriginalFlavor keeping everyone as in character as possible]]. As a result, it borders on a GenreDeconstruction of ''FriendshipIsMagic'' ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' shipping stories; it takes a ''[[ProlongedPrologue long]]'' time to set the relationship up, and also attempts to deal with the ripple effect that Twilight's romantic endeavors spread through the rest of the cast.
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