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Author: oneuglybunny

Mar 1st 2013 at 9:39:34 AM

Two items:

Commander?  "goals" appears twice in the fourth paragraph.  One of them is redundant.

Ironeye?  It's rare, but a PlotTwist can occur that isn't a Game Changer.  An example from LawAndOrder: A woman shoots a man dead.  She claims self-defense, "he was going to rape me."  The woman is charged with Voluntary Manslaughter.  The victim was also a key witness in a Federal trial against a Mob Boss.  Detectives Briscoe and Logan discover that same Mob Boss has been financing the woman's ritzy apartment.  The PlotTwist is [[spoiler:the woman had been married to an abusive husband.  She approached the Mob Boss, who had his goons whack her husband.  In return, the woman killed the witness who was going to rat on the Boss.  The DA moved to raise the charges to Complicity To Capital Murder ... unless she testified against the Mob Boss.]]  The woman changed her plea to Guilty of Voluntary Manslaughter with a promise to testify.  The DA's game didn't change, but the net of Justice caught one more fish.