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Author: Dacilriel

Sep 9th 2012 at 11:48:03 PM

To me, the main post looks more like a rant against people who are opposed to torture than an actual trope description. I know you said you are new to writing trope descriptions, so here is a good rule of thumb to keep in mind: when you are writing about something that is socially or politically charged try to present the issue as fairly as possible. Remember that tropers cover the whole range of positions and beliefs.

I think that if the article is launched as is you'll get a lot of angry edits from people who are opposed to torture feeling like they're being painted as obssessed with political-correctness, and then you'll get a lot of angry responses from people who support torture. Refer to EditWar and RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgement.

I would recommend that you describe the attitude of torture being ineffective by simply stating what the belief is, giving some reasons why people feel that way, and giving a hypothetical example or two of how it might play out. You can also explain why that attitude might be fallible, but make sure you are giving a clear explanation, not a complaint.

For a laconic I would recommend something like "characters don't believe that torture works" or "torture fails to yield results." The current laconic referencing political correctness and aesops could apply to anything and makes no reference to torture.

It takes some time and experience to get the hang of writing up descriptions, so I hope my comments were helpful.