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Author: Benthelame

Apr 3rd 2017 at 10:05:12 PM

Pretending to be on location??? What are you talking about? That first paragraph doesn't say anything  about Alice and Bob pretending to be on location. It never did.  . Secondly That comment is referring to an earlier draft. The first was wordy and brought up way too many  other tropes that did not relate.   Check the history.  I think you mean well but   the problems you mention are nonexistent.  You stopped reading mid-sentence. Once again there was no conversation taking place between  Calvin and Susie. It was only falsely implied to be.    Please return with something substantial if you wish to discuss this further or say something that the moderator hasn't already said.  All you've done is repeat what others have said and ask me to fix what I already have. I mean no disrespect,  but that isn't help.

As for the  obsessed  example, you can interpret  it however you'd like, but  she feigned a  phone call  with  Sharon to make it seem as though  her presence was expected and even that  his mother was mad at her for barring  her from doing  what she allegedly came to do.

I know you're capable of  helping, so why don't you try and find some examples you think will fit  instead of repeating  others? That would be great!