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Reviews Comments: Would Avoid Skipping Ponies One Half fanfic review by gonzomehum

"...she had LONG purple hair that was LONG but had a twin buns in it..."

Redundancy is the least-evil of the crimes committed against literary language here. The author needs to work a lot more on basic grammatical structure and storytelling elements before this fic can be legitimately recommended.

Let me emphasize: A LOT more.

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  • LovelyCherryBlossom
  • 13th Nov 11
Funny, when I read it, it said "she had long purple hair that that was mostly worn down"
  • Kingofsouls
  • 27th Jul 13
Amen brother. A-men. I think a crew of editors are needed.

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