The half-finished finale to the DAY Dverse is a power trip with an ego trip back around. The worst part of the novel-length journey is how enjoyable it had to the potential to be. The wizarding world dealing with the fallout of the families of Death Eaters and economy issues has the trappings of greatness. In the hands of anyone but Thanfiction.
Neville, or the Commander, as no one fails to refer to him as, is ceaselessly adored by everyone. He's usurped the DA as "his", he's supplanted Dean as Seamus' best friend, Neville and Draco have an enmity now and on several occasions we're hit over the head with the fact that Neville is More Important and Also Better Than Harry. Two characters explicitly tell him he's the "voice of their generation" even moreso than The Boy Who Lived. Harry is twisted by Thanfiction into a mewling mess at Neville's feet, shooting him envious looks over his parents being able to communicate, looking to Neville for guidance and reassurance, hungering for Neville's spotlight and at chapter 9's end apologizing to Neville for not having been his friend. It's in a bunch of other places as well: Neville's new BFF Seamus is more powerful and cooler than Harry's, since Ron is now the pudgy butt of a joke. Zacharias calls Neville Commander as well, apparently having forgotten he left the DA, and Harry is calling Neville "Nev", so Harry is closer to Neville than he's ever been to Ron or Hermione, enough to use pet names that not even Hannah does. Not two conversations pass in the 200,000 words where Neville isn't reminded that he's the Famousest or that he wouldn't be blindly followed/obeyed. Justin, who's royalty follows him over the Prince!
The purplest of prose, the murdering of every named canon character who wasn't there on Platform 9 3/4 in 2017, how utterly 1 dimensional the main character is in that he only exists as a target of masturbatory control fantasies, there's so much holding A Peccatis back. It doesn't shy away from depicting war vets in a grim way, but having Ricky King's coming down being couched in Neville being his Commander and him belonging to Neville through the DA sours it. Not to mention the wildly non-canon Green Man powers Neville got that allow him to fix his wand, something Harry only managed once with a little stick of Elder.
A Peck At This
The half-finished finale to the DAY Dverse is a power trip with an ego trip back around. The worst part of the novel-length journey is how enjoyable it had to the potential to be. The wizarding world dealing with the fallout of the families of Death Eaters and economy issues has the trappings of greatness. In the hands of anyone but Thanfiction.
Neville, or the Commander, as no one fails to refer to him as, is ceaselessly adored by everyone. He's usurped the DA as "his", he's supplanted Dean as Seamus' best friend, Neville and Draco have an enmity now and on several occasions we're hit over the head with the fact that Neville is More Important and Also Better Than Harry. Two characters explicitly tell him he's the "voice of their generation" even moreso than The Boy Who Lived. Harry is twisted by Thanfiction into a mewling mess at Neville's feet, shooting him envious looks over his parents being able to communicate, looking to Neville for guidance and reassurance, hungering for Neville's spotlight and at chapter 9's end apologizing to Neville for not having been his friend. It's in a bunch of other places as well: Neville's new BFF Seamus is more powerful and cooler than Harry's, since Ron is now the pudgy butt of a joke. Zacharias calls Neville Commander as well, apparently having forgotten he left the DA, and Harry is calling Neville "Nev", so Harry is closer to Neville than he's ever been to Ron or Hermione, enough to use pet names that not even Hannah does. Not two conversations pass in the 200,000 words where Neville isn't reminded that he's the Famousest or that he wouldn't be blindly followed/obeyed. Justin, who's royalty follows him over the Prince!
The purplest of prose, the murdering of every named canon character who wasn't there on Platform 9 3/4 in 2017, how utterly 1 dimensional the main character is in that he only exists as a target of masturbatory control fantasies, there's so much holding A Peccatis back. It doesn't shy away from depicting war vets in a grim way, but having Ricky King's coming down being couched in Neville being his Commander and him belonging to Neville through the DA sours it. Not to mention the wildly non-canon Green Man powers Neville got that allow him to fix his wand, something Harry only managed once with a little stick of Elder.
"Nev".