I felt I should add to this review. Mainly, I strongly suspect that the author is a sociopath. The story is morally bankrupt, with Harry getting away with actions that, in canon, would've put him in Azkaban for life. Certain actions, such as locking the Dursleys in a basement to torture them, or having Draco Malfoy turned into a girl and raped, are treated as fitting revenges.
For a story that's marked as a "fantasy/humor" story, there is a surprising amount of attention and detail on gore, to the point that it's actually rather jarring. Snape clawing his eyes out before his head explodes, Malfoy being tortured by the nerves on his teeth, the Dursleys having their faces burned off - these are all given loving attention by an author who seems to relish in tormenting characters he doesn't like.
Even if the author isn't a sociopath, he's certainly smug as hell, judging by his pretentious author's notes. It's actually kind of funny how he professes to have a great deal of knowledge about human psychology, yet he can't write a character with more than one dimension. It's rather amazing how terrible he is at writing characters. Watch as Narcissa Malfoy, a character whose defining character trait in canon was that she was willing to defy Voldemort out of love for her son, in this story practically disowns him and signs him off to be a baby factory before joining Harry's harem.
The misogyny is also pretty staggering.
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So Partially Kissed Hero is a terrible story and Perfect Lionheart can't write. This shouldn't be a surprise to anyone. The story is essentially a braindead power fantasy full of half-baked author tracts and bitching about how Rowling supposedly ruined her own series. However, reviewing this fic is remarkably easy, seeing how Lionheart's failures as a writer are apparent from the early chapters.
The first chapter seems innocuous enough, but one might notice a few warning signs. Some slight character bashing, a big useless exposition dump and all that, but the real red flag is that the bulk of the first chapter is Harry going on a great big shopping spree in Diagon Alley because he wants to be like Hermione and take his studies seriously. It's completely pointless and a masturbatory waste of time.
Now, the central conceit of this story is that on the train ride during Prisoner of Azkaban, Harry is in a different compartment and a Dementor tries to kiss him, hence the title. This causes, like, his soul to become vulnerable or something, and so he enters into a battle with the fragment of Voldemort's soul in his forehead for control or something. It's a grueling, epic battle, one that forces Harry to fix his own shortcomings and man up.
Except we never actually see it. Lionheart is a phenomenally lazy writer, and thus can't be bothered to show us any of this, instead simply telling us about it. As will become clear in his author's notes, Lionheart thinks that exposition dumps are more important than building or developing your characters. This will become clear as entire chapters go by where nothing happens except Harry and Luna rattling insignificant "worldbuilding" to Hermione, who becomes a know-nothing garbage can for them to spout exposition to.
Of course, there are other problems. Harry inherits all of Voldy's powers and memories and gets a "backbone," by which I mean he becomes a complete sociopath. There is no conflict as he effortlessly waltzes through all his problems. Dumbledore is evil (because the author hated Deathly Hallows and can't grasp things like "moral ambiguity") and yet despite supposedly being a diabolical mastermind he is in practice a completely incompetent baffoon. The author abandons the supposed plot to go on tangents about fairies.
Ten Points from Fanfiction.net.