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I\'m confused why we should assume the Wardens know what the audience knows. But mod says, I\'ll fold. Again, I concede that it fits, but the original example still needs to change. That I do not concede. It\'s too detailed, too emotional, too long, too emphasised, too ranty. I tried to write a replacement using a less specific and more neutral tone. What specifically about my version is wrong? What would you add or remove?
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I\\\'m confused why we should assume the Wardens know everything the audience knows. But mod says, I\\\'ll fold. End of argument. Again, I concede that it fits, but the original example still needs to change. That I do not concede. It\\\'s too detailed, too emotional, too long, too emphasised, too ranty. I tried to write a replacement using a less specific and more neutral tone. What specifically about my version is wrong? What would you add or remove?
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I\'m confused why we should assume the Wardens know what the audience knows. But mod says, I\'ll fold. Again, I concede that it fits, but the original example still needs to change. That I do not concede. It\'s too detailed, too emotional, too long, too emphasised, too ranty. I tried to write a replacement using less a specific and more neutral tone. What specifically about my version is bad? What would you add or remove?
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I\\\'m confused why we should assume the Wardens know what the audience knows. But mod says, I\\\'ll fold. Again, I concede that it fits, but the original example still needs to change. That I do not concede. It\\\'s too detailed, too emotional, too long, too emphasised, too ranty. I tried to write a replacement using a less specific and more neutral tone. What specifically about my version is wrong? What would you add or remove?
Or to put it another way: what about the original example needs to be preserved?
Or to put it another way: what about the original example needs to be preserved?
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I\'m confused why we should assume the Wardens know what the audience knows. But okay, mod says, I\'ll fold. Again, I concede that it fits, but the original example still needs to change. That I do not concede. It\'s too detailed, too emotional, too long, too emphasised, too ranty. I tried to write a replacement using less a specific and more neutral tone. What specifically about my version is bad? What would you add or remove?
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I\\\'m confused why we should assume the Wardens know what the audience knows. But mod says, I\\\'ll fold. Again, I concede that it fits, but the original example still needs to change. That I do not concede. It\\\'s too detailed, too emotional, too long, too emphasised, too ranty. I tried to write a replacement using less a specific and more neutral tone. What specifically about my version is bad? What would you add or remove?
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I\'m confused why we should assume the Wardens know what the audience knows. But okay, mod says, I\'ll fold. Again, I concede that it fits, but the original example still needs to change. That I do not concede. It\'s too detailed, too emotional, too long, too emphasised, too ranty. I tried to write a replacement. What specifically about my version is bad? What would you add or remove?
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I\\\'m confused why we should assume the Wardens know what the audience knows. But okay, mod says, I\\\'ll fold. Again, I concede that it fits, but the original example still needs to change. That I do not concede. It\\\'s too detailed, too emotional, too long, too emphasised, too ranty. I tried to write a replacement using less a specific and more neutral tone. What specifically about my version is bad? What would you add or remove?
