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Does it not bother anyone else that there isn\'t any kind of \
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Does it not bother anyone else that there isn\\\'t any kind of \\\"general\\\" description of the series at the top of the page? Approach it from the viewpoint of someone who isn\\\'t familiar at all with the series, aside from the name. They look it up to see what it is.
The first paragraph just says its a \\\"Doorstopper epic fantasy series\\\" but gives no details and spends the rest of the time just listing various books and publications. Then there\\\'s several lists, exhaustively listing all the various main novels, companion novels, prequels...ugh. It\\\'s not until you scroll down past all that you finally find some description of what the series is actually \\\'\\\'about\\\'\\\'. Like, seriously, someone shouldn\\\'t have to scroll down half the dang page just to find out what the page even is.
I\\\'d suggest putting at least a sentence or two in the first paragraph explaining, in broad strokes, what the heck ASOIAF is. If it were up to me, I\\\'d also take out all the random trivia about prequels and adaptions out...but that\\\'s just me. At the very least I\\\'d suggest moving it to lower in the introduction. There\\\'s no reason to front-load the page with all this miscellanea! Start with simple descriptions at first, with an unfamiliar reader in mind, and \\\'\\\'then\\\'\\\' get progressively further into details as the intro goes along.
Just my two cents.
The first paragraph just says its a \\\"Doorstopper epic fantasy series\\\" but gives no details and spends the rest of the time just listing various books and publications. Then there\\\'s several lists, exhaustively listing all the various main novels, companion novels, prequels...ugh. It\\\'s not until you scroll down past all that you finally find some description of what the series is actually \\\'\\\'about\\\'\\\'. Like, seriously, someone shouldn\\\'t have to scroll down half the dang page just to find out what the page even is.
I\\\'d suggest putting at least a sentence or two in the first paragraph explaining, in broad strokes, what the heck ASOIAF is. If it were up to me, I\\\'d also take out all the random trivia about prequels and adaptions out...but that\\\'s just me. At the very least I\\\'d suggest moving it to lower in the introduction. There\\\'s no reason to front-load the page with all this miscellanea! Start with simple descriptions at first, with an unfamiliar reader in mind, and \\\'\\\'then\\\'\\\' get progressively further into details as the intro goes along.
Just my two cents.
