Gauging interest for a shared universe.

Yay!! Monster hunter it is then!!

Oh, and will our characters be nakama/friends in this, or will there be relatively no interaction beteen them?

Depends on you and the individual authors.

Personally, the two characters I have in mind aren't friends with anyone, excluding Riana's girlfriend. Then again, one of them is a mentally damaged angel, and the other's a Death God, so yeah...

But yeah, mostly, I'd say the characters would have little to no interaction with each other. If you set it up with the other authors, they can be friends, but tht's probably not all that likely.

My entire story will be semi-episodic slice of life kind of stuff, so I'm entirely willing for him (or his friends) to drop in on other people's lives every now and again.

Attention Tropers!

Ettina has just been accepted to the authors through unanimous (100%) vote! Congratulations!

Also, a ridiculously huge amount of confetti has just arrived.

~dives into the pile of confetti~

~starts throwing it around everywhere~

YAY CONFETTI

I've had this character floating around for quite some time and never really knew what to do with her. Part of the problem was that she didn't fit into the main universe I write in, the Continuity, and hence wound up as a bit of a spare part for a plot-car I didn't own.

Anyway, here is said character unaltered. There'd have to be several retcons, I reckon, but I'll let people judge this first.

Name: Jennifer Fibonacci, a.k.a. Rave Siren.

Appearance: around 18, black/brown hair, brown eyes. A tendency for very bright, often fluorescent and baggy clothing, generally like it never stopped being the 1990s. Which, as the backstory below explains, it kinda didn't.

Race: human, half-Italian British.

Skills/Abilities: began as largely immortal, barring some weaknesses, but when facing off against an enemy, wound up completely immortal, with the upside of never ageing, but also with the downside of a completely perfect memory - no exceptions; every casual remark, every styrofoam cup drifting across the pavement in the wind, gets remembered. Also has the ability to acquire any power she is on the receiving end of, although it's not an exact process and perfect usage and strength is not a guarantee unless hit several times with said power.

Personality: Chaotic Good, somewhat morose and downbeat, generally someone who feels the weight of responsibility at all times. Maybe require good writing to avoid slipping into excessive angst. Probably nostalgic, given that memory (might as well use it).

Backstory: was raised in the British city of Steelbank (basically my attempt at writing a British version of Gotham City), having been born in the early 1980s. After the collapse of the Labour Party in the 1990s effectively rendered Britain a one-party state, with the authoritarianism and corruption of the Major government amplified and taken to extremes, Steelbank's crime rate soared, and someone had to step forward and fill the gap left by an at-best skeletal police force.

edited 19th Nov '10 8:00:43 AM by CtraK

Quick note, then I'm off to bed-

The ability to copy any power would quickly bring her up to God-Mode levels. With people like Merlin- the strongest mage in existenc, even more powerful than most Demons-, Thor- a guy strong enough to lift his 400-pound hammer like it's made of plastic, and casually throw lightning bolts around- and the Shinigami, who are literally Death Gods, running around, she would soon become the strongest person in the world.

Admittedly, they're the three strongest people in this 'verse, but hey. That's the power levels.

The character would only be able to copy powers she could survive being hit with. Which works if she's immortal, but not invulnerable.

Yeah. But what if she's hit with a non-lethal dose of the powers? Like, what if Merlin casts a healing spell on her? Or Thor just tazes her, rather than blasting her with a lightning bolt? She'd still absorb the powers then.

If you wanted the character in, I'd explicitly state that she only absorbs powers that are used on her, and only up to the power that was used on her. So, if she absorbs a healing spell, then she can use that healing spell, but she can't throw around fireballs. If Thor tazes her, then she can taze people, but not throw around lightning bolts.

Hope Im good enough for this!!

edited 20th Nov '10 11:41:16 AM by cutewithoutthe

In this 'verse, is there still a possibility of an omnipotent God, or is Christianity disproven here?

I'm afraid that that particular question is something I cannot reveal.

{Is it a spoiler? Or is Cygan just being a b!tch and not revealing the info? She refuses to say }

{Actually, it's something we Authors agreed to not reveal. We've thought about it, but there are certain things we are not revealing unnesessarily.}

{Also, I just received your application. I haven't read it yet, but I'm going to once I've finished this message. I'll be sending you a review via PM. Please remember not to be too disappointed if you don't get in- I've turned down several people via PM already.}

Oh, crap, i just know Im not going to get in. I had to work on the thing without internet access, so please excuse anything that compromises your continuity.

Well, if you don't get in- if; I haven't read it yet. If you don't get in, I'll be providing you with a detailed review of your work, highlighting the areas you need to work on, and the ares I thought you did fine in.

Violating continuity is fine in your sample scene; there's a whole lot more information than we've posted here in our Bible, and some of my earlier notes are out-of-date now that there's ore than just me working on it.

You may find the story a little TOO normal at first. That was what i was going for because I didn't want to do what everybody else is doing, I'm hoping to aim this character as a little less extroardinary as everyoone else may be, to provide a more human retrospective on the 'verse.

Wow, I was gone for a while.

Well, reading through the first little bit, I will make this point; I asked for a single scene, to see how you plot throughout a single scene or setting. With your story, it almost feels like you've tried to condense a full story into 5,000 words. It has promise.... But there simply isn't enough room in it for the type of story you're going for.

Again: It has promise. I haven't read it through yet. However, at the moment, I'm wavering between a 'yes' and a 'no'. I'm leaning towards a 'no', simply because of the problems I outlined earlier.

That said, a 'no' isn't the end of the world. If I say 'no', you can always send in a new submission, taking into account my advice.

I'll provide more critique via PM soon enough.

Sorry, you're definitely right, and theyre some spelling mistakes; I should have looked through it more. Yeah.....you're probabally not going to like the rest, but on the plus side, it ends on a rather awesome note.....

Yeah. But like I said; it's not the end of the world. You can always listen to my advice, and write a new scene. If you don't try and add in as much as possible into the one story, then I think that you could write a fine story.

{I still haven't finished it. I keep getting distracted by my new Dragon Quest game.}

For the new admission, should I scrap the whole other story as non-canon(for my character's backstory), or should I just start after the scene, with John being transported to the Institute? Oh, and which country is the Institute located? I dont really want to throw away the plot I had for the first admission because I think I could use Lily/Ashley/Emily as a later antagonist(which would be awesomness).

edited 20th Nov '10 10:05:22 PM by cutewithoutthe

I think you should scrap this one completely. It's...

Well, to be blunt, it's got some pretty narmy lines, some cheesy dialogue, and some of the plot events don't make sense. I'll expound on this later in a PM. {I'm trying to work on that- I'm either always too nice or too harsh. I'm trying to find a middle ground.}

Again, though; as long as you think about what you're writing, I think that you could be a pretty good writer. If you're having trouble, you can run it past me, and I'll review it; same as I will for the actual, canon stories.

And the Institute is located in America, in Iowa.

{You can always keep the character as your villain. Just rewrite her a bit.}

{And try to keep the scene between 1500 and 2000 words, this time. Otherwise, as you can see, it takes me forever to read through.}

edited 20th Nov '10 10:09:57 PM by CyganAngel

yeah, I just read through it a fourth time and....yeah. It was bad,bad,bad. Sorry, dialouges my weak point. Ill scrap it completely1! But should i make the next one more...normal, or insert more paranormal into it?

That depends on the scene. For example, for my scene {Yes, even I have to write a scene- although I'm pretty much guaranteed entrance, I'm not relaxing the rules even for me} I'm writing a Shinigami. On the surface, it looks like a relatively normal story, until you realize just what's happening.

But on the other hand, Dealan's application dealt with completely normal issues, no paranormal involved.

So, whichever you want.

Alright, this time I'll just show John being jumped by supernatural forces(or something) and saved by Lily(btw, the changing names thing in the first character admission wasnt me being indecisive about the name, I wanted to showcase just how powerful the spell Lily used to make John forget her. Just informing you; I wont use that as a plot dynamic this time around.)

Well, it turns out I was attempting a 50-yard field goal and predictably missed. The issue is this:

"The ability to copy any power would quickly bring her up to God-Mode levels."

...which was the idea, barring the italicised word. One of the ideas for the character was to do this incredibly slowly, resulting in a very distant finale in which an godlike Rave Siren in a decaying universe had to restart it.

Now that I put it like that, it sounds fairly cliched. No wonder I dropped it. I tried, anyhow.