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#2: Nov 1st 2013 at 10:27:13 PM
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It's a definite improvement overall but Jack being so washed-out is kinda bothersome.
#3: Nov 1st 2013 at 10:49:36 PM
Looks like an easy improvement to me. ![[tup]](https://static.tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pub/images/Thumbs_up_emoticon_3268.png "[thumb up]"){kind=small}
Jack isn't any more washed out here than he is in the current one, so that's not really an issue.
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#4: Nov 2nd 2013 at 4:12:47 AM
The suggestion is an improvement for me.
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#5: Nov 2nd 2013 at 5:53:09 AM
In the current, all you can see is Jack. From the suggestion, we can now infer who the villain is and the setting.
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#6: Nov 2nd 2013 at 2:06:27 PM
That's why I suggested it, indeed. 
So...any other thoughts?
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#8: Nov 3rd 2013 at 4:47:33 AM
Good enough; it's swapped in and the tag's adjusted. Locking up.
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The current image is good on its own. However, I looked around and found this image:
I believe this one demonstrates the scope of the main character's adventure. Also, this pic features the main narrator, who is the villain (I think most readers can make the connection). Besides, it looks much cooler.
Any objections or other suggestions?
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