Suggestion: Stable Time Loop

Found this one, it's perfect:

The author said it's OK to use it, we only need to give him credit.

I would like a permission to add the image there, if it's OK, I can edit the page.

If there is a grammatical error in it, please tell me, I made the translation

edited 11th Jul '12 4:25:59 PM by VictorDamazio

Fixed the link, you have to enter it in CamelCase. As is, it's too tall; can it be arranged in a 2x3 pattern without sacrificing pic size?

edited 10th Jul '12 9:43:49 AM by Willbyr

Yes◊; that was the first version he put up. Can someone explain the image to me (the English is perfect, by the way)? I have a feeling it's decent, but my brain is fogged up right now.

That version's much better. The guy's watching TV, the ball lands on the TV, and after he declares that he has to travel back in time to fix the issue, he comes out of the ball, revealing the time loop.

The TV is destroyed by his traveling back in time to watch a show because the TV was destroyed.

"Did I get on time?" is grammatically incorrect. "Am I here in time?" or "Did I make it in time?" or "Did I make it on time?" I think.

Also the "Oh no..." line needs some punctuation or a change (or both). "That was the last episode. That never will be aired again." or "That was the last episode. It will never be aired again." or "That was the last episode, which will never be aired again."

Also also consider removing the word "only" from the fourth panel: "I can travel back in time and prevent this tragedy."

edited 10th Jul '12 3:29:17 PM by rodneyAnonymous

Or, "The only thing I can do is travel back in time and prevent this tragedy."

Updated the image with some grammar corrections.

So, do I have the permission to add the image to the page now?

If I don't, tell me what I need to do.

And also, I would like to delete the older versions of the image, where can I find them?

I still prefer the comic all vertical like this, unlike the older version, if it's too tall, I can try editing again, or just adding more text to the page.

edited 11th Jul '12 4:34:41 PM by VictorDamazio

You don't have to (can't?) delete the old versions. Images that are not linked from the wiki or forum are periodically wiped.

edited 11th Jul '12 5:22:04 PM by rodneyAnonymous

Right. I still much prefer the 2 x 3 arrangement.

The comic is good, but even if you like the tall version aesthetically you have to consider that it would stretch well into the examples. The 2x3 arrangement works much better because you certainly won't have to scroll to read all of it.

Is "I must travel back in time to prevent this tragedy" right?

_vv "Archaic"? It is replacing "only can" with "must".

edited 12th Jul '12 1:27:41 PM by rodneyAnonymous

it's definitely correct, and I think it fits in with the panels before and after it (if you're replacing the 'I can only travel back in time..' bit with it).

It's a little archaic-sounding, but it's grammatically correct.

So, can I edit the page and add the image now?

No hurry :) Is there a 3x2 of the updated text?

I have it in the original language, but I still prefer the 6X1 version...

Well, if I really need to upload the 3X2 version then I guess I will have to do it then, but I still want a permission to use the 6X1.

The original comic was 3X2 anyway, I thought it would be better for the page to edit.

edited 12th Jul '12 2:43:04 PM by VictorDamazio

You don't need permission. Go for it, it's better than nothing. But you asked, and you're ignoring that most of the reply is people saying it's too tall, better 2x3.

edited 12th Jul '12 3:19:53 PM by rodneyAnonymous

I prefer the more compact version as well.

I don't get the insistence on 1x6, but as long as it's properly translated I suppose it's fine.

edited 12th Jul '12 3:30:00 PM by bananasloth

The 2x3 version is much better for the page. Here's the version with the edited translation.

For comparison's sake: On my laptop, the 1x6 hangs down to the closed Fan Fiction folder; the 2x3 doesn't go past the end of the third paragraph.

edited 12th Jul '12 4:05:40 PM by Willbyr

yeah that's much easier on the eyes. I liked Rodney's "I must travel back in time to prevent this tragedy" better though, that part in the current translation is kind of awkwardly worded.

edited 12th Jul '12 4:08:47 PM by bananasloth

Could the third panel be changed to "...last episode, which..."? It just seems a bit clunky as currently written.

Agree with this as well.

edited 12th Jul '12 4:07:47 PM by DarkConfidant

I pulled the pic off the page pending the new edits.

OK I reworked the text (hopefully to its final version). I changed the font but I think it's actually closer to the original◊ which was more cartoony so I hope that's all right.

Looks good to me.