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Uncanny vs. Fanservice:

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Yeah, that was my problem trying to figure out how to improve it: it's easy to change it from "obnoxious fanservice" to "generic beautiful woman, " but making it actually feel uncanny is challenging without completely obliterating what the original author said and starting over.

 27 JHM, Sat, 10th Dec '11 1:35:13 PM from Neither Here Nor There Relationship Status: I know
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Methinks the fellow that wrote the passage should go read Arthur Machen's "The White People", if only to get a better hand on what pushes "beautiful" to "creepy."
 28 Loni Jay, Mon, 12th Dec '11 4:12:54 AM from Australia Relationship Status: Pining for the fjords
Well, looking at 'thin and wispy'... maybe you could try looking at it as 'skeletal'. You know, like photos you see of girls with anorexia. Hip bones jutting out, hollows where there shouldn't be hollows, limbs too thin.

edited 12th Dec '11 4:15:37 AM by LoniJay

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 29 annebeeche, Mon, 12th Dec '11 5:26:05 AM from by the long tidal river
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i actually got 'vaguely erie pretty woman' out of that.

it could do without 'buttocks' and 'perky'. can't take those seriously.
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Even in the second version, she still sounds much more beautiful than eerie or unnatural. The trick is to use words with a different connotation: 'pallid' sounds much more ominous than 'white skinned.' Maybe mentioning something about her movement and/or behavior as feeling 'off' could tip the scale towards uncanny. H.P. Lovecraft loved this device: often featuring people that seemed externally normal, even attractive, but having some weird undertone to their mood and appearance that made others uneasy.
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