turning and turning
#2: Feb 22nd 2011 at 1:31:53 AM
I think the British guy should give good advice, because we are the world's only sane country. And our accents are delightful.
How comedic is it supposed to be? Unless it's really on the comedy side, don't go too overboard with C and his 'women will take your heart and stamp on it. STAMP ON IT!' thing.
What is E's good advice?
Scepticism and doubt lead to study and investigation, and investigation is the beginning of wisdom. - Clarence Darrow
JWHarding
Since: Dec, 1969
#3: Feb 22nd 2011 at 2:23:50 AM
E's advice isn't really advice, he just offers a boost of confidence and tells him they're two adults of compatible sexual preference and he should stop worrying and just offer to buy her dinner. I'm working on that.
It's a humorous scene, but not a really comedic work. C's statement doesn't go beyond what's written above.
edited 22nd Feb '11 5:01:32 AM by JWHarding
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The hero and his recurring circle of friends are in a bar and the argument slips into the hero's interest in a woman.
The friends are as follows; "A" a consummate pick-up artist, "B" a southern fried private, "C" a guy who's fiance just left him, "D" and an upper-class Brit, "E" and an older married-man.
ABCD are supposed to offer unsolicited, un-PC advice, but without becoming unlikable or too sexist. The Hero and E are much more sensible.
What I've planned is something like...
A: I gotta tell ya, I don't think she's having any of it. On the boat over, I turned on the old Sullivan charm, full-auto like. Got nowhere. B: You New Yorkers, always going about the wrong way to treat a lady... *insert subversion or hypocritical humor* C: You should tear your heart out and give it to her to use as an ashtray. That's what women like.
Eventually "E" shuts them all up and offers reasonable advice to the hero.
So yeah, any help what characters like that might say would be nice.
edited 21st Feb '11 1:17:26 PM by JWHarding