History YMMV / WhiteDevilOfTheMoon

* DesignatedHero: A significant portion of the MGLN cast. For reference, Nanoha mocks a ''suicide victim'' for being weak and Fate constantly throws her weight around and threatens people with arrest (on a planet she has no jurisdiction on) for the crime of wanting to ''talk'' to Nanoha.

** Nanoha pointed out that at the time of her death Princess Serenity was in no way ready to rule the Moon Kingdom despite being already legally capable of inheriting the throne. Was this mainly because Queen Serenity was an indulgent parent or an irresponsible one? Was it due to elements of the court wanting a weak, immature and naive heir that they could shape into a pliable puppet monarch or advisors that were negligent in her training? Perhaps all of the above?

* CriticalResearchFailure: At one point, Fate is very reluctant to wear a backless dress, implied to be because of her whip scars. Precia only ever whipped Fate from the ''front.''

* DesignatedHero: A significant portion of the MGLN cast. Nanoha mocks a ''suicide victim'' for being weak, Fate constantly throws her weight around and threatens people with arrest (on a planet she has no jurisdiction on) for the crime of wanting to ''talk'' to Nanoha.

* DesignatedHero: A significant portion of the MGLN cast. Nanoha mocks a ''suicide victim'' for being weak, Fate constantly throws her weight around and threatens people with arrest (on a planet she has no jurisdiction on) for the crime of wanting to ''talk'' to Nanoha, and Vivio erases a girl from existence because it might inconvenience her if that girl continues existing.

** A lot of Fate's actions early on in the story are meant to be seen as her protecting Nanoha from needless stress, they come across as borderline yandere at times (her fending off Mamoru and Luna attacking her is understandable. Her contemplating having them ''kidnapped off of Earth'' and taken to a planet where the TSAB has jurisdiction is... less so). It doesn't help that her incredibly vague explanation to Luna why Nanoha couldn't help fight Beryl (While Luna never actually said out loud that the fate of the planet was in jeopardy, Fate also failed to actually say that Nanoha's out of commission) caused the initial conflict between herself and the senshi. When Luna makes it clear she's not happy with what she's told, Fate promptly jumps to ''threatening'' Luna, which is part of the reason why Luna was convinced Fate was a "dark senshi". It doesn't help that nobody, not even Fate herself, acknowledges her part in the subsequent misunderstanding.

** A lot of Fate's actions early on in the story are meant to be seen as her protecting Nanoha from needless stress, they come across as borderline yandere at times (her fending off Mamoru and Luna attacking her is understandable. Her contemplating having them ''kidnapped off of Earth'' and taken to a planet where the TSAB has jurisdiction is... less so). It doesn't help that her incredibly vague explanation to Luna why Nanoha couldn't help fight Beryl (Luna made it clear the fate of the planet was in jeopardy, Fate doesn't say that Nanoha's out of commission) caused the initial conflict between herself and the senshi. When Luna makes it clear she's not happy with what she's told, Fate promptly jumps to ''threatening'' Luna, which is part of the reason why Luna was convinced Fate was a "dark senshi". It doesn't help that nobody, not even Fate herself, acknowledges her part in the subsequent misunderstanding.

* WriterOnBoard: Bissek goes out of his way to give the Senshi the short end of the stick, using an altered canon that incorporates elements cherry-picked from both manga and anime canon with the goal of making the Senshi look as weak, useless, and morally bankrupt as possible. [[note]] This diminishes after the first arc but is nonetheless present.[[/note]] The whole issue with Serenity killing herself, for instance, is taken from the manga, while the Senshi themselves display abilities only on par with their heavily-nerfed anime counterparts. The villains that the Senshi struggled with for over a year are also trivially dispatched within weeks of the TSAB showing up (granted, the Senshi took out the same number of Dark Generals as the TSAB, and Nephrite only lost to Vita via a GroinAttack he didn't expect). And let's not even get started on the Picoha omake.

* WhatAnIdiot: A lot of the early plot revolves around Fate and the Sailor Moon cast coming to the worst conclusions possible and being utterly unwilling to talk to each other clearly.

* PlotInducedStupidity: A lot of the early plot revolves around Fate and the Sailor Moon cast coming to the worst conclusions possible and being utterly unwilling to talk to each other clearly.

* DesignatedHero: A significant portion of the MGLN cast. Nanoha mocks a ''suicide victim'' for being weak, Fate constantly throws her weight around and threatens people with arrest (on a planet she has no jurisdiction on) for the crime of wanting to ''talk'' to Nanoha, and Vivio erases a girl from existence because it might inconvenience her.

%%* DesignatedHero: Nanoha, Fate and Vivio.

* CreatorsPet: The MGLN cast is constantly and consistently portrayed as better in every way than the Sailor Senshi, to the point Mercury eventually ''abandons her Sailor powers'' in favor of MGLN-style magic.

** Vivio defeating Chibi-Usa and causing her and her alternate timeline to disappear was also a controversial action, especially since it was essentially killing her. Furthermore, the chapter itself is unrelated to the rest of the story and felt like it was created just to shit on the Sailor Moon side some more. WordOfGod has clarified that Picoha was the aggressor, attacking without stating her intent, and Vivio tried to defeat her non-lethally, without knowing what would happen to her. To be fair to Vivio, if Chibi-Usa had succeeded then there was a good chance that Vivio herself would cease to exist (or at least in her current incarnation) so it was an either or situation, both of them could not coexist as potential children of Nanoha Takamachi. Vivio simply did to Chibi-Usa what Chibi-Usa intended to do to her.

* RonTheDeathEater: There is a slice of readers who see Fate in a very bad light because she doesn't know about the existence of Moon Kingdom or its enemies, and for contemplating (just contemplating mind, not acting on) desperate measures to make sure her Workaholic best friend/love interest doesn't overwork herself into an early grave.

** In this series, Fate comes off as an unstable {{Yandere}}, who uses threats of TSAB interference ON EARTH SOIL - forgetting that Earth is not under its jurisdiction, all just because she's jealous of a relationship that a man had with Nanoha in a past life. The author treats this as if she's in the right.

* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot[=/=]TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodCharacter:

** While Luna is legitimately backwards in her views about the Moon Kingdom existing, she still genuinely wants to help the senshi and protect the planet. Everyone's exasperation and constant belittling of her may be a bit easier to take if (A) there was any indication that someone at least ''tried'' to explain to her that she was operating under misconceptions about the relevancy of the Moon Kingdom and (B) if the characters were willing to admit that not everything she did was 100% her fault (the initial conflict between the senshi and Fate is treated as being completely Luna's fault, despite it being ''Fate'' who initially acted aggressively and didn't think to simply explain "Nanoha is injured and needs rest, but I can put you in contact with some people who can help, in the meantime").

** A lot of Fate's actions early on in the story are meant to be seen as her protecting Nanoha from needless stress, they come across as borderline yandere at times (her fending off Mamoru and Luna attacking her is understandable. Her contemplating having them ''kidnapped off of Earth'' and taken to a planet where the TSAB has jurisdiction is... less so). It doesn't help that her incredibly vague explanation to Luna why Nanoha couldn't help fight Beryl (Luna made it clear the fate of the planet was in jeopardy, Fate doesn't say that Nanoha's out of commission ''or'' that the people she can pass Luna's message to are fully-trained, very powerful magical girls) caused the initial conflict between herself and the senshi. When Luna makes it clear she's not happy with what she's told, Fate promptly jumps to ''threatening'' Luna, which is part of the reason why Luna was convinced Fate was a "dark senshi". It doesn't help that nobody, not even Fate herself, acknowledges her part in the subsequent misunderstanding.

** Vivio defeating Chibi-Usa and causing her and her alternate timeline to disappear was also a controversial action, especially since it was essentially killing her. Furthermore, the chapter itself is unrelated to the rest of the story and felt like it was created just to shit on the Sailor Moon side some more. WordOfGod has clarified that Picoha was the aggressor, attacking without stating her intent, and Vivio tried to defeat her non-lethally, without knowing what would happen to her.

* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot[=/=]TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodCharacter: Seeing as Chibi-Usa is Usagi's daughter, having her enter the picture would have made for some excellent plot points, not the least of which making Nanoha and Fate (who would undoubtedly be unwilling to make an innocent child die) have second thoughts about getting together. But the author not only says that she will NOT be appearing in the story, but she gets unceremoniously killed off in an omake that honestly makes it seem like, to the author, Chibi-Usa is TheScrappy.

** Was Nanoha justified in harshly calling the Queen out on how she raised Serenity? Additionally, was this in character for Nanoha, who is more responsible than Usagi or Serenity, or was this contrary to someone who would "befriend" her enemies? Or was Nanoha pushed too far with memories of her past life returning and called her out due to a DespairEventHorizon?

** Picoha came off [[BrokenBase to people who have seen both series]] as a girl who tried to protect her own timeline and got written out of existence in the process.

** In this series, Fate comes off as an unstable Yandere, who uses threats of the TSAB ON EARTH SOIL - forgetting that Earth is not under it's jurisdiction, all just because she's jealous of a relationship that a man had with Nanoha in a past life. The author treats this as if she's in the right.
* BrokenBase: Two in Chapter 10, surprisingly ''not'' over [[spoiler:Nanoha and Fate becoming the OfficialCouple]]

* UnintentionallySympathetic: Picoha came off [[BrokenBase to people who have seen both series]] as a girl who tried to protect her own timeline and got written out of existence in the process.
* WriterOnBoard: Bissek goes out of his way to give the Senshi the short end of the stick, using an altered canon that incorporates elements cherry-picked from both manga and anime canon with the goal of making the Senshi look as weak, useless, and morally bankrupt as possible [[note]] This diminishes after the first arc but is nonetheless present [[/note]]. The whole issue with Serenity killing herself, for instance, is taken from the manga, while the Senshi themselves display abilities only on par with their heavily-nerfed anime counterparts. The villains that the Senshi struggled with for over a year are also trivially dispatched within weeks of the TSAB showing up (granted, the Senshi took out the same number of Dark Generals as the TSAB, and Nephrite only lost to Vita via a GroinAttack he didn't expect). And let's not even get started on the Picoha omake.