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* EnsembleDarkhorse: Watari is by far the best-recieved character in this fic, due to his hilarious LargeHam characterization.
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* EnsembleDarkhorse: Watari is by far the best-recieved best-received character in this fic, due to his hilarious LargeHam characterization.
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** A [[DeathIsCheap relatively]] straight example: [[spoiler:“I HAVE KILLED MY ONE TRUE SON! NOW WHO WILL I TAKE TO SOCCER PRACTISE?”� “My deer father. You are bestest dad a dude could have.”�]]
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** A [[DeathIsCheap relatively]] straight example: [[spoiler:“I HAVE KILLED MY ONE TRUE SON! NOW WHO WILL I TAKE TO SOCCER PRACTISE?”� PRACTISE?” “My deer father. You are bestest dad a dude could have.”�]]”]]
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-->“YOU HAVE LEANED WELL FROM ME!”� he whispered like moldy bread. “LEARNED WELL LIKE A FOX WHO WENT TO SCHOL AND DID WELL AND THEN WENT TO COLLEGE”�
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-->“YOU HAVE LEANED WELL FROM ME!”� ME!” he whispered like moldy bread. “LEARNED WELL LIKE A FOX WHO WENT TO SCHOL AND DID WELL AND THEN WENT TO COLLEGE”�COLLEGE”
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* HilariousInHindsight: One of the story's first divergences from canon is establishing that it is set in the US and that almost all of the characters are american. [[Film/DeathNote2017 An official adaptation later did something similar.]]
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* HilariousInHindsight: One of the story's first divergences from canon is establishing that it is set in the US and that almost all of the characters are american.American. [[Film/DeathNote2017 An official adaptation later did something similar.]]
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** The Blind Note apparently exists solely as a reason for Light to hate Near (see KickTheSonOfABitch).
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** The Blind Note apparently exists solely as a reason for Light to hate Near (see KickTheSonOfABitch).Near.
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* SpiritualSuccessor: ''FanFic/CodeGeassAwesomeOfTheRebellion'', which borrows the idea of the main character teaming up with his much more awesome long lost twin brother and just runs with it.
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Gag Boobs has been renamed to Boob Based Gag. Changing to the proper trope where appropriate and cutting misuse.
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** There are "Sex Notes". What they do is unclear, but they seem to give TIOSEFAJ blonde hair and [[GagBoobs a killer rack]]. In the epilogue, it's mentioned Samanther/[[spoiler: Light's Mom]] has a sex note but it's not a Note, merely a book where she's written down people she wants to have sex with. Dark/[[spoiler: Soichiro]] being the only name on it so far.
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** There are "Sex Notes". What they do is unclear, but they seem to give TIOSEFAJ blonde hair and [[GagBoobs a killer rack]].rack. In the epilogue, it's mentioned Samanther/[[spoiler: Light's Mom]] has a sex note but it's not a Note, merely a book where she's written down people she wants to have sex with. Dark/[[spoiler: Soichiro]] being the only name on it so far.
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That's the actual name.
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** The Life Note[[note]]Although the Life Note is fairly common in Death Note fanfiction and appeared in the manga pilot in the form of a Life ''Eraser''[[/note]], each special ability of the Royal Death Note, Naomi's true identity... Dark's magic cellphone is both a metaphorical and [[AssShove literal asspull]].
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** The Life Note[[note]]Although the Life Note is fairly common in Death Note fanfiction and appeared in the manga pilot in the form of a Life ''Eraser''[[/note]], "Death Eraser"[[/note]], each special ability of the Royal Death Note, Naomi's true identity... Dark's magic cellphone is both a metaphorical and [[AssShove literal asspull]].
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* BadassDecay: Most of the characters who don't [[TookALevelInBadass Take a Level in Badass]] in the story suffer it in some form but Light definitely suffers the worst from it. [[spoiler:Until the final epilogue...]]
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* BadassDecay: BadassDecay:
** Most of the characters who don't [[TookALevelInBadass Take a Level in Badass]] in the story suffer it in some form but Light definitely suffers the worst from it. [[spoiler:Until the final epilogue...]]
** Most of the characters who don't [[TookALevelInBadass Take a Level in Badass]] in the story suffer it in some form but Light definitely suffers the worst from it. [[spoiler:Until the final epilogue...]]
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not Ho Yay because these are all couples that actually get together in the story
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* HoYay: Light and L.
* LesYay: Sayu/Misa, Takada/"Desk Lady", Naomi/Night.
* LesYay: Sayu/Misa, Takada/"Desk Lady", Naomi/Night.
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** Ruyk. "Why can't I eat a blood banana?" Practically everything he says could end ";_;"
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** Ruyk. "Why can't I eat a blood banana?" Practically everything he says could end with ";_;"
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Critical Research Failure is now a disambiguation page.
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* CriticalResearchFailure:
** As well as "Whales" being a town in England, the description of a nuclear bomb is wrong on about fifty levels.
** Watari somehow becomes the ''Queen'' of England and Scotland. Kilometers are said to be the same as miles in France.
** Apparently [[VideoGame/PokemonRedAndBlue Pokémon Red]] was for the UsefulNotes/SegaGenesis and it has a score system.
** Dark jumps from the Eiffel Tower in Paris and lands in the ''Thames'' in London. Also, people in [[TheNineties the 90s]] apparently used their TV to download stuff.
** As well as "Whales" being a town in England, the description of a nuclear bomb is wrong on about fifty levels.
** Watari somehow becomes the ''Queen'' of England and Scotland. Kilometers are said to be the same as miles in France.
** Apparently [[VideoGame/PokemonRedAndBlue Pokémon Red]] was for the UsefulNotes/SegaGenesis and it has a score system.
** Dark jumps from the Eiffel Tower in Paris and lands in the ''Thames'' in London. Also, people in [[TheNineties the 90s]] apparently used their TV to download stuff.
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* ShockingSwerve: Attempting to replicate the source material's penchant for plot twists, there's usually one per chapter. They are nowhere near as effective or epic as the author thinks they are, though; at most, they are hilarious.
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* RecurringFanonCharacter: This story is popular enough to make Dark one for the original series, as he has appeared in other fics, fanart, and parodies.
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