Created By: WhiteLover on November 25, 2011 Last Edited By: WhiteLover on February 14, 2013


Character's thought process injected into narrative to further emotional depth

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An author wants to convey the thoughts of a character to the audience by making a sentence look like said character's thought processes. Thought processes continue in long trains and there are barely any pauses and much less any punctuation and the only thing linking them together is an and so that the end result looks something like this sentence and...

Used for emotionally climaxing scenes (Alice and Bob finally admit their love for each other after 6 seasons of UST and CoitusEnsues, the girl being chased by the EldritchAbomination cannot form coherent thoughts; the narrative is effected too).

Quite a favourite among fanfiction writers, especially in Shipping Fics when characters finally get together in one life-changing, earth-shattering kiss/sex scene.

Though intended to be emotional, it can be very unoriginal and tiring to read if not written well. In romance, this trope should be applied carefully, or narm will be born.

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  • November 25, 2011
    Disregarding the question of whether this is a real trope, I have encountered this in a lot of texts, not only fanfiction (of which I read very little), and their unifying quality is the lack of editing. Any serious editor would burn a sentence with a welding torch.
  • November 25, 2011
    It's not really a question of lack of editing. People actually do do this on purpose to invoke an emotional scene.
  • November 25, 2011
    ^ Agreed. It's a style of writing meant to evoke a specific feel, there is nothing inherently wrong with it that it needs to be edited in all situations no matter what.
  • November 25, 2011
    This sounds more like an excuse to rag on fanfics you don't like than an actual trope. Even if it isn't intended that way, that's what it will become.
  • November 25, 2011
    Well, if you put it that way, then Purple Prose and Wall of Text isn't really a trope either. But on the home page, a trope is described: 'Tropes are devices and conventions that a writer can reasonably rely on as being present in the audience members' minds and expectations.' It certainly does appear in many works, not just fanfiction. It's just that it appears more often in fanfiction. So, by the above definition, it is a trope, a device and convention that a writer uses. It's just more common in fanfiction, just like Purple Prose, Mary Sues, Wall of Text, etc. Also, just like any other trope, 'And-ism' doesn't necessarily have to be a bad thing. Sometimes, they do invoke the specific emotions the author intended, if well written.
  • November 25, 2011
    Is this possibly just Inner Monologue + Wall Of Text?
  • November 25, 2011
    Wall of text is characterized by lack of paragraphs in a very long text, thus making it overwhelming. This doesn't need to be long or overwhelming, it just has really little pauses so it resembles a train of thought that has nothing to do with stopping to think what should you say or think nest but is rather a change of loosely connected subjects in your mind, often repeating itself and doing much more weird things that are characteristic to your thinking.
  • November 25, 2011
    I was going to suggest you call this "Stream Of Consciousness" but I just now noticed that Stream Of Consciousness, for some odd reason, redirects to Inner Monologue. This is kind of weird, since Stream Of Consciousness style writing and Inner Monologue are two different things (though they can overlap).
  • November 25, 2011
    The spoken portion of the Novelty Song "Along Came Jones."
    And then he grabbed her (and then)
    He tied her up (and then)
    A train started comin' (and then, and then...!)
    And then along came Jones
  • November 25, 2011
    Ulysses of course has Molly Bloom's extended 4-sentence Inner Monologue- replace "and" with "yes", and that IS this trope.
  • November 26, 2011
    It can overlap with Inner Monologue, but the writing style is different because it is mixed/injected into the narration where previously the narration was consistent. Thank you very much for your input, guys, it has been very valuable. (Sincerity Mode)
  • December 5, 2011
    Shnakepup: propose a split? You're right, they are two different things.
  • December 6, 2011
  • February 14, 2013
    I am discarding this because it has not been worked on since December 2011. If you bring it back, please consider rolling up the examples and taking responsibility for seeing it through to a launch.