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* DesignatedHero: Weiss is implied to have murdered Jacques, and Blake and Yang are implied to have helped. There was no real reason for it beyond snapping from his verbal abuse. Keep in mind that Cinder performing the same action is what sent her down her path of evil in canon.
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}} Gundam]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen, ect. It's even lampshaded in the latter case. One of the most jarring examples is when the ''entire Mistral arc'' is skipped entirely, going from Teams JNPR and CMNE starting out their journey to Glynda arriving in Ironwood's office in Atlas between two chapters.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen, ect. It's even lampshaded in the latter case. One of the most jarring examples is when the ''entire Mistral arc'' is skipped entirely, going from Teams JNPR and CMNE starting out their journey to Glynda arriving in Ironwood's office in Atlas between two chapters.
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}} Gundam]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable forgivable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable forgivable is when it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen,ect.etc. It's even lampshaded in the latter case. One of the most jarring examples is when the ''entire Mistral arc'' is skipped entirely, going from Teams JNPR and CMNE starting out their journey to Glynda arriving in Ironwood's office in Atlas between two chapters.chapters.
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* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen,
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}} Gundam]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}} Gundam]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problemproblem.
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}} Gundam]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen, ect. It's even lampshaded in the latter case. One of the most jarring examples is when the ''entire Mistral arc'' is skipped entirely, going from Teams JNPR and CMNE starting out their journey to Glynda arriving in Ironwood's office between two chapters.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen, ect. It's even lampshaded in the latter case. One of the most jarring examples is when the ''entire Mistral arc'' is skipped entirely, going from Teams JNPR and CMNE starting out their journey to Glynda arriving in Ironwood's office between two chapters.
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}} Gundam]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen, ect. It's even lampshaded in the latter case. One of the most jarring examples is when the ''entire Mistral arc'' is skipped entirely, going from Teams JNPR and CMNE starting out their journey to Glynda arriving in Ironwood's office in Atlas between two chapters.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen, ect. It's even lampshaded in the latter case. One of the most jarring examples is when the ''entire Mistral arc'' is skipped entirely, going from Teams JNPR and CMNE starting out their journey to Glynda arriving in Ironwood's office in Atlas between two chapters.
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** At several occasions, the dialogue will spontaneously [[WaxingLyrical reference]] to [[ImageSong Image Songs]] from [[WebAnimation/{{RWBY}} the show]]. It usually comes completely out of nowhere, even if it doesn't fit the speech patterns of the person who's saying it.
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** At several occasions, the dialogue will spontaneously [[WaxingLyrical reference]] start WaxingLyrical to [[ImageSong Image Songs]] the image songs from [[WebAnimation/{{RWBY}} the show]]. It usually comes completely out of nowhere, even if it doesn't fit the speech patterns of the person who's saying it.
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}} Gundam]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}}]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem
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** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}}]] [[Franchise/{{Gundam}} Gundam]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem
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* {{Glurge}}: Most of the relationships in the fic, especially Ruby and Penny. Admittedly, [[IntendedAudienceReaction this is sort of the point of the fic]], but it gets old after a while.
* {{Narm}}: ''Hoo boy''.
** At several occasions, the dialogue will spontaneously [[WaxingLyrical reference]] to [[ImageSong Image Songs]] from [[WebAnimation/{{RWBY}} the show]]. It usually comes completely out of nowhere, even if it doesn't fit the speech patterns of the person who's saying it.
** The [[SirSwearsALot constant swearing]] from nearly every character gets rather tiresome eventually.
** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}}]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem
* {{Narm}}: ''Hoo boy''.
** At several occasions, the dialogue will spontaneously [[WaxingLyrical reference]] to [[ImageSong Image Songs]] from [[WebAnimation/{{RWBY}} the show]]. It usually comes completely out of nowhere, even if it doesn't fit the speech patterns of the person who's saying it.
** The [[SirSwearsALot constant swearing]] from nearly every character gets rather tiresome eventually.
** During the Vytal Festival, several characters spontaneously begin reenacting moves from [[Franchise/{{Gundam}}]] with little-to-no explanation. This makes it completely impossible to take any of those scenes seriously. However, it's somewhat forgiveable since the main purpose of those scenes was simply to have mindless yet spectacular fight scenes. Less forgiveable is when it returns in ''the final battle with Salem''. When the main villain of the entire fic, who has been built up towards for the entire plot, is defeated by a Gundam reference, there is a problem
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* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic tends to skip over the most climactic elements of the story, giving summaries from the characters recovering later on. Ruby's OneWingedAngel fight with Adam, Cinder's stepsisters' plan to destroy Beacon, Adam's death offscreen, ect. It's even lampshaded in the latter case. One of the most jarring examples is when the ''entire Mistral arc'' is skipped entirely, going from Teams JNPR and CMNE starting out their journey to Glynda arriving in Ironwood's office between two chapters.
