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General clarification on work content. I don't fully agree with the example, but I feel like it might have some merit, so I tried to reinforce it instead of deleting.
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* Harry eventually figures out that Ravenclaw's lost diadem is in the Room of Requirement and comes within inches of destroying it when he is stopped by Malfoy, Crabbe and Goyle[[labelnote:note 1]]Malfoy became knowledgeable on how the Room of Requirement works in [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheHalfBloodPrince the previous book]][[/labelnote]]. A duel breaks out where [[TheStarscream Crabbe betrays Malfoy]] by trying to kill Harry and co. when Malfoy knows [[TheOnlyOneAllowedToDefeatYou Voldemort wants Harry alive]]. Crabbe eventually casts Fiendfyre, an extremely powerful spell that can destroy Horcruxes, but is also incredibly dangerous and unpredictable[[labelnote:note 2]]To put its danger in perspective, [[BookSmart Hermione]] later says she would have never dared use Fiendfyre to destroy Horcruxes[[/labelnote]].\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Crabbe would have paid attention in Amycus Carrow's classes on how to control Fiendfyre.\\
'''Instead:''' He didn't.\\
'''As A Result:''' He [[HoistByHisOwnPetard loses control of his own spell and is burned to death]], earning himself the distinction of being the only character in the entire series who was TooDumbToLive enough to [[EpicFail die in the Room of Requirement]].
'''You'd Expect:''' Crabbe would have paid attention in Amycus Carrow's classes on how to control Fiendfyre.\\
'''Instead:''' He didn't.\\
'''As A Result:''' He [[HoistByHisOwnPetard loses control of his own spell and is burned to death]], earning himself the distinction of being the only character in the entire series who was TooDumbToLive enough to [[EpicFail die in the Room of Requirement]].
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* Harry eventually figures out that Ravenclaw's lost diadem is in the Room of Requirement and comes within inches of destroying it when he is stopped by Malfoy, Crabbe and Goyle[[labelnote:note 1]]Malfoy became knowledgeable on how the Room of Requirement works in [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheHalfBloodPrince the previous book]][[/labelnote]].Goyle. A duel breaks out where [[TheStarscream Crabbe betrays Malfoy]] by trying to kill Harry and co. when Malfoy knows [[TheOnlyOneAllowedToDefeatYou Voldemort wants Harry alive]]. Crabbe eventually casts Fiendfyre, an extremely powerful spell that can destroy Horcruxes, but is also incredibly dangerous and unpredictable[[labelnote:note 2]]To put its danger in perspective, [[BookSmart Hermione]] later says she would have never dared use Fiendfyre to destroy Horcruxes[[/labelnote]].\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Even considering the best-case scenario for the betrayal, for Crabbewould have paid attention to be careful with his spells. After all, they're fighting in Amycus Carrow's classes on how to control Fiendfyre.an enclosed space full of magical artifacts, so there are many ways a stray shot could lead into a catastrophic chain reaction, for example.\\
'''Instead:''' Hedidn't.casts a Fiendfyre, an incredibly dangerous and unpredictable spell that grows out of control easily, even for experienced wizards. \\
'''As A Result:'''He [[HoistByHisOwnPetard loses Crabbe fails to control of his own spell the fire, which quickly turns the whole room into a death trap. When the dust settles, Crabbe is dead, Malfoy's on the path to a HeelFaceTurn and Voldemort is burned to death]], earning himself the distinction of being the only character in the entire series who was TooDumbToLive enough to [[EpicFail die in the Room of Requirement]].down yet another Horcrux.
'''You'd Expect:''' Even considering the best-case scenario for the betrayal, for Crabbe
'''Instead:''' He
'''As A Result:'''
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* Following from that point, Voldemort concludes he does not own the Elder Wand Wand because the wand doesn't perform any differently from an ordinary one, so apparently the difference is palpable, or at least he believes it should be.\\
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* Following from that point, Voldemort concludes he does not own the Elder Wand Wand because the wand doesn't perform any differently from an ordinary one, so apparently the difference is palpable, or at least he believes it should be.\\
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* Voldemort finds out that his wand and Harry's have identical cores, causing them to malfunction when used against each other.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to be a little more creative in his spell usage. The man is one of the most talented wizards alive and has demonstrated several spells that would not require him to use a direct magical attack. In his fight with Dumbledore alone in the film, he conjures a giant flaming snake and turns a room full of glass into a deadly FlechetteStorm.\\
'''Instead:''' Voldemort keeps trying the Killing Curse to no effect. He wastes time on futile schemes to find a loophole, such as using another servant's wand or searching for [[ArtifactOfDoom the Elder Wand]]. So Harry survives. Again. And again. And again.
'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to be a little more creative in his spell usage. The man is one of the most talented wizards alive and has demonstrated several spells that would not require him to use a direct magical attack. In his fight with Dumbledore alone in the film, he conjures a giant flaming snake and turns a room full of glass into a deadly FlechetteStorm.\\
'''Instead:''' Voldemort keeps trying the Killing Curse to no effect. He wastes time on futile schemes to find a loophole, such as using another servant's wand or searching for [[ArtifactOfDoom the Elder Wand]]. So Harry survives. Again. And again. And again.
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* Voldemort has hit Harry with the killing curse, but isn't sure if it worked, as Harry surrendered willingly and without a fight, so he wants to be absolutely certain before announcing Harry's death, especially since the curse appeared to hurt Voldemort as well.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to be ''very'' cautious. The last time he tried to kill Harry with a killing curse, some magic he doesn't understand activated suddenly and turned the curse on himself, and there's no real reason some other magical phenomenon could have not happened now; in fact, the sole notion that the curse seems to have affected Voldemort himself leaves it very clear that '''something''' has definitely happened again. Therefore, he should [[DoubleTap hit Harry again with a couple killing curses more]] or, in case he suspects those might absolutely not work on him, [[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill get creative with his magic and mangle the corpse]], as its severed head should be enough to parade around Hogwarts. In any case, checking that Harry is dead should be basic; Voldemort could use Legilimency to see if there are any thoughts on Harry's brain or just order the corpse to be brought to him to check its pulse himself. Even if Voldemort is a bit shaken by the event, he can take any time he needs to recover, as Harry isn't going anywhere even if he is alive.\\
'''Instead:''' He does nothing and instead sends a mook to check his pulse. When Harry is proclaimed dead, Voldemort subjects his foe's "corpse" to the Cruciatus curse which, while excruciatingly painful, can be withstood without a wand.\\
'''As A Result:''' It turns out that the mook betrayed Voldemort, an outcome he might have not been able to predict, but surely to prevent. Harry is still alive and only pretending to be dead so he can be returned to the castle, and then he reveals himself to be alive after Voldemort's last Horcrux is destroyed and the Death Eaters are all either incapacitated or not actually fighting, after which he goes on to defeat Voldemort for good.
'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to be ''very'' cautious. The last time he tried to kill Harry with a killing curse, some magic he doesn't understand activated suddenly and turned the curse on himself, and there's no real reason some other magical phenomenon could have not happened now; in fact, the sole notion that the curse seems to have affected Voldemort himself leaves it very clear that '''something''' has definitely happened again. Therefore, he should [[DoubleTap hit Harry again with a couple killing curses more]] or, in case he suspects those might absolutely not work on him, [[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill get creative with his magic and mangle the corpse]], as its severed head should be enough to parade around Hogwarts. In any case, checking that Harry is dead should be basic; Voldemort could use Legilimency to see if there are any thoughts on Harry's brain or just order the corpse to be brought to him to check its pulse himself. Even if Voldemort is a bit shaken by the event, he can take any time he needs to recover, as Harry isn't going anywhere even if he is alive.\\
'''Instead:''' He does nothing and instead sends a mook to check his pulse. When Harry is proclaimed dead, Voldemort subjects his foe's "corpse" to the Cruciatus curse which, while excruciatingly painful, can be withstood without a wand.\\
'''As A Result:''' It turns out that the mook betrayed Voldemort, an outcome he might have not been able to predict, but surely to prevent. Harry is still alive and only pretending to be dead so he can be returned to the castle, and then he reveals himself to be alive after Voldemort's last Horcrux is destroyed and the Death Eaters are all either incapacitated or not actually fighting, after which he goes on to defeat Voldemort for good.
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Rewrite. Yes, the sword can be recovered via the Sorting Hat, but there's no telling if the trio will be able to reach it while it's within the Snape-controlled Hogwarts. And honestly, the speech from Harry just seems redundant. Also, wasn't Griphook only confirmed to have been killed in the film?
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* Griphook demands the sword of Godric Gryffindor as payment for helping them break into Gringotts. Harry is willing to give it to him, but only after destroying the Horcruxes with it. Harry also knows that, thanks to whatever powerful enchantments that were placed on the blade by Godric Gryffindor, it can present itself to a true Gryffindor through the Sorting Hat at a time of need, so Hogwarts won't actually lose the sword.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' That Harry would simply be honest with the goblin, and tell him, ''without'' going into details, that they need the sword to defeat Voldemort and that he would hand it over once the Dark Lord had been vanquished. Griphook had already admitted that he was very unhappy with Voldemort's regime, and that he believed Harry did not seek personal material gains or riches. If appealing to the goblin's better nature doesn't work, Harry can simply point out that Griphook is a fugitive from justice, Gringotts is being interfered with by wizards, and his people are on the brink of enduring another age of oppression at Voldemort's hands. ("So if you take the sword from us before we can kill You-Know-Who, you'll still be on the run with nowhere to go, Gringotts will still be under his control, your people will still be suffering at the hands of "Wand-Carriers", Death Eaters will still be in charge of the Goblin Liaison Office of the Department for the Regulation and Control of Magical Creatures, and considering the Ministry's charming new policies that deal with non-humans and muggles… um, what was the rest of your plan again, Griphook?")\\
'''Instead:''' Harry chooses to lie, on one occasion actually grabbing the sword to keep it near him ''while Griphook is in the room.''\\
'''As A Result:''' The goblin becomes suspicious, betrays them during the heist to steal the sword, and is eventually killed by Voldemort, after which the blade returns to the Sorting Hat, making the entire affair pointless. In the film, this gets rectified where the trio doesn't scheme to cheat the goblin, and Harry does hand over the sword as promised, but [[AdaptationalVillainy Griphook still betrays them]].
'''You'd Expect:''' That Harry would simply be honest with the goblin, and tell him, ''without'' going into details, that they need the sword to defeat Voldemort and that he would hand it over once the Dark Lord had been vanquished. Griphook had already admitted that he was very unhappy with Voldemort's regime, and that he believed Harry did not seek personal material gains or riches. If appealing to the goblin's better nature doesn't work, Harry can simply point out that Griphook is a fugitive from justice, Gringotts is being interfered with by wizards, and his people are on the brink of enduring another age of oppression at Voldemort's hands. ("So if you take the sword from us before we can kill You-Know-Who, you'll still be on the run with nowhere to go, Gringotts will still be under his control, your people will still be suffering at the hands of "Wand-Carriers", Death Eaters will still be in charge of the Goblin Liaison Office of the Department for the Regulation and Control of Magical Creatures, and considering the Ministry's charming new policies that deal with non-humans and muggles… um, what was the rest of your plan again, Griphook?")\\
'''Instead:''' Harry chooses to lie, on one occasion actually grabbing the sword to keep it near him ''while Griphook is in the room.''\\
'''As A Result:''' The goblin becomes suspicious, betrays them during the heist to steal the sword, and is eventually killed by Voldemort, after which the blade returns to the Sorting Hat, making the entire affair pointless. In the film, this gets rectified where the trio doesn't scheme to cheat the goblin, and Harry does hand over the sword as promised, but [[AdaptationalVillainy Griphook still betrays them]].
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* The trio ask Griphook for help in breaking into Gringotts, in order to retrieve a horcrux they suspect to be hidden there. Griphook offers his help, but demands the sword of Godric Gryffindor as payment for helping them break into Gringotts. it. This creates a dilemma; while Harry is willing to give it the sword to him, but only Griphook, he'd much rather do so after destroying he's destroyed all the Horcruxes with it. Harry also knows that, thanks to whatever powerful enchantments that were placed on it, since it's the blade by Godric Gryffindor, it can present itself to a true Gryffindor through the Sorting Hat at a time only means of need, doing so Hogwarts won't actually lose the sword.he has on hand.\\
'''You'd Expect:'''That Harry would simply be honest with the goblin, and tell him, him - ''without'' going into details, details - that they he and his friends need the sword to defeat Voldemort Voldemort, and that he would he'll hand it over once the Dark Lord had been vanquished. Griphook had already admitted that he was very unhappy with Voldemort's regime, and that he believed Harry did not seek personal material gains or riches. If appealing to the goblin's better nature doesn't work, Harry can simply point out that Griphook is a fugitive from justice, Gringotts is being interfered with by wizards, and his people are on the brink of enduring another age of oppression at Voldemort's hands. ("So if you take the sword from us before we can kill You-Know-Who, you'll still be on the run with nowhere to go, Gringotts will still be under his control, your people will still be suffering at the hands of "Wand-Carriers", Death Eaters will still be in charge of the Goblin Liaison Office of the Department for the Regulation and Control of Magical Creatures, and considering the Ministry's charming new policies that deal with non-humans and muggles… um, what was the rest of your plan again, Griphook?")\\\n\\
'''Instead:''' Harry chooses to lie, claiming he'll turn the sword over after the heist's conclusion, while pointedly not saying ''when'' he plans to do so. And on one occasion he actuallygrabbing grabs the sword to keep it near him ''while Griphook is in the room.''\\
'''As A Result:''' The goblin becomes suspicious, and betraysthem the trio during the heist to steal the sword, leaving Harry and is eventually killed by Voldemort, after which friends with no means to destroy the blade returns recovered horcrux until they travel to the Sorting Hat, making the entire affair pointless.Hogwarts. In the film, this gets rectified where the trio doesn't scheme to cheat the goblin, and Harry does hand over the sword as promised, but [[AdaptationalVillainy Griphook still betrays them]].
'''You'd Expect:'''
'''Instead:''' Harry chooses to lie, claiming he'll turn the sword over after the heist's conclusion, while pointedly not saying ''when'' he plans to do so. And on one occasion he actually
'''As A Result:''' The goblin becomes suspicious, and betrays
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* Adding directly to the above, Harry only pronounced the first syllable of Lord He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named's name but his friends managed to stop him from saying the rest.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to remember why the current situation prevents him from being able to say Voldemort's name as he prefers to and either quickly say another word, add on random syllables, or just ''something'' other than "demort".\\
'''Instead:''' He says "demort" which leads to the trio's capture as well as the horrors that go down in the Malfoy Manor.
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to remember why the current situation prevents him from being able to say Voldemort's name as he prefers to and either quickly say another word, add on random syllables, or just ''something'' other than "demort".\\
'''Instead:''' He says "demort" which leads to the trio's capture as well as the horrors that go down in the Malfoy Manor.
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* Adding directly to the above, Harry only pronounced the first syllable of Lord He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named's name but his friends managed to stop him from saying the rest.
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to remember why the current situation prevents him from being able to say Voldemort's name as he prefers to and either quickly say another word, add on random syllables, or just ''something'' other than "demort".
'''Instead:''' He says "demort" which leads to the trio's capture as well as the horrors that go down in the Malfoy Manner.
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to remember why the current situation prevents him from being able to say Voldemort's name as he prefers to and either quickly say another word, add on random syllables, or just ''something'' other than "demort".
'''Instead:''' He says "demort" which leads to the trio's capture as well as the horrors that go down in the Malfoy Manner.
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* Adding directly to the above, Harry only pronounced the first syllable of Lord He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named's name but his friends managed to stop him from saying the rest.
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to remember why the current situation prevents him from being able to say Voldemort's name as he prefers to and either quickly say another word, add on random syllables, or just ''something'' other than "demort".
'''Instead:''' He says "demort" which leads to the trio's capture as well as the horrors that go down in the Malfoy Manner.
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to remember why the current situation prevents him from being able to say Voldemort's name as he prefers to and either quickly say another word, add on random syllables, or just ''something'' other than "demort".
'''Instead:''' He says "demort" which leads to the trio's capture as well as the horrors that go down in the Malfoy Manner.
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They already knew how to destroy Horcruxes thanks to Secrets of the Darkest Arts, or whatever the book was called. The problem was obtaining a means of doing so.
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'''You'd Expect:''' The trio, in addition to figuring out how to enter the Ministry in the first place, would come up with ideas on how to go about finding the Horcrux, how to move around the Ministry without arousing suspicion or being sidetracked, and perhaps most importantly, how they can escape, not to mention that the Department of Mysteries, by nature, probably has information on how to destroy Horcruxes.\\
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'''You'd Expect:''' The trio, in addition to figuring out how to enter the Ministry in the first place, would come up with ideas on how to go about finding the Horcrux, how to move around the Ministry without arousing suspicion or being sidetracked, and perhaps most importantly, how they can escape, not to mention that the Department of Mysteries, by nature, probably has information on how to destroy Horcruxes.escape.\\
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The whole point of this example seems to be that sending Narcissa to check on Harry was the worst possible idea Voldemort could've had. While it certainly didn't work out for Voldemort, there was little to no reason for him to suspect that would be the case at the time. Yes, the Malfoys have made some cock-ups outside of Draco managing to smuggle Death Eaters into Hogwarts, but checking on a corpse is far from a hard task. As for his use of the Cruciatus Curse afterwards, there's little to no reason for him to believe that Harry would be able to No Sell it.
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* Voldemort has hit Harry with the killing curse, but isn't sure if it worked, as Harry surrendered willingly and without a fight, so he wants to be absolutely certain before announcing Harry's death, especially since the curse appeared to hurt Voldemort as well.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to be ''very'' cautious. The last time he tried to kill Harry with a killing curse, some magic he doesn't understand activated suddenly and turned the curse on himself, and there's no real reason some other magical phenomenon could have not happened now; in fact, the sole notion that the curse seems to have affected Voldemort himself leaves it very clear that '''something''' has definitely happened again. Therefore, he should [[DoubleTap hit Harry again with a couple killing curses more]] or, in case he suspects those might absolutely not work on him, [[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill get creative with his magic and mangle the corpse]], as its severed head should be enough to parade around Hogwarts. In any case, checking that Harry is dead should be basic; Voldemort could use Legilimency to see if there are any thoughts on Harry's brain or just order the corpse to be brought to him to check its pulse himself. Even if Voldemort is a bit shaken by the event, he can take any time he needs to recover, as Harry isn't going anywhere even if he is alive.\\
'''Or At The Very Least:''' If he is going to send someone to check its pulse, send a couple of his {{mooks}} to have a second opinion. Or again, just go with them to ensure that they aren't doing anything else while there.\\
'''Instead:''' He does nothing and instead sends Narcissa, whose family has failed him on multiple occasions, and gives her enough time and space to discreetly talk with Harry about her son's safety. When Narcissa claims Harry is dead, Voldemort subjects his foe's "corpse" to the Cruciatus curse which, while excruciatingly painful, can be withstood without a wand.\\
'''As A Result:''' It turns out that Harry is still alive and only pretending to be dead so he can be returned to the castle. Harry reveals himself to be alive after Voldemort's last Horcrux is destroyed and the Death Eaters are all either incapacitated or not actually fighting and goes on to defeat Voldemort for good.
'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to be ''very'' cautious. The last time he tried to kill Harry with a killing curse, some magic he doesn't understand activated suddenly and turned the curse on himself, and there's no real reason some other magical phenomenon could have not happened now; in fact, the sole notion that the curse seems to have affected Voldemort himself leaves it very clear that '''something''' has definitely happened again. Therefore, he should [[DoubleTap hit Harry again with a couple killing curses more]] or, in case he suspects those might absolutely not work on him, [[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill get creative with his magic and mangle the corpse]], as its severed head should be enough to parade around Hogwarts. In any case, checking that Harry is dead should be basic; Voldemort could use Legilimency to see if there are any thoughts on Harry's brain or just order the corpse to be brought to him to check its pulse himself. Even if Voldemort is a bit shaken by the event, he can take any time he needs to recover, as Harry isn't going anywhere even if he is alive.\\
'''Or At The Very Least:''' If he is going to send someone to check its pulse, send a couple of his {{mooks}} to have a second opinion. Or again, just go with them to ensure that they aren't doing anything else while there.\\
'''Instead:''' He does nothing and instead sends Narcissa, whose family has failed him on multiple occasions, and gives her enough time and space to discreetly talk with Harry about her son's safety. When Narcissa claims Harry is dead, Voldemort subjects his foe's "corpse" to the Cruciatus curse which, while excruciatingly painful, can be withstood without a wand.\\
'''As A Result:''' It turns out that Harry is still alive and only pretending to be dead so he can be returned to the castle. Harry reveals himself to be alive after Voldemort's last Horcrux is destroyed and the Death Eaters are all either incapacitated or not actually fighting and goes on to defeat Voldemort for good.
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Voldemort's whole motivation for wanting to kill Harry is that he feels it's the best way to prove his superiority over the kid to his followers. And considering how - from his perspective - most of those followers abandoned him after the mishap at Godric's Hollow, that logic is quite understandable.
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* Voldemort finds out that his wand and Harry's have identical cores, causing them to malfunction when used against each other.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to let someone else kill Harry. It's too dangerous to risk going wand-to-wand against Harry personally when all it does is reflect your spells and [[spoiler: cause Harry's own wand to become more powerful]].\\
'''Or:''' Voldemort to be a little more creative in his spell usage. The man is one of the most talented wizards alive and has demonstrated several spells that would not require him to use a direct magical attack. In his fight with Dumbledore alone in the film, he conjures a giant flaming snake and turns a room full of glass into a deadly FlechetteStorm.\\
'''Instead:''' Voldemort insists [[TheOnlyOneAllowedToKillYou HE must kill Harry]] and keeps trying the Killing Curse to no effect. He wastes time on futile schemes to find a loophole, such as using another servant's wand or searching for [[ArtifactOfDoom the Elder Wand]]. So Harry survives. Again. And again. And again.
'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to let someone else kill Harry. It's too dangerous to risk going wand-to-wand against Harry personally when all it does is reflect your spells and [[spoiler: cause Harry's own wand to become more powerful]].\\
'''Or:''' Voldemort to be a little more creative in his spell usage. The man is one of the most talented wizards alive and has demonstrated several spells that would not require him to use a direct magical attack. In his fight with Dumbledore alone in the film, he conjures a giant flaming snake and turns a room full of glass into a deadly FlechetteStorm.\\
'''Instead:''' Voldemort insists [[TheOnlyOneAllowedToKillYou HE must kill Harry]] and keeps trying the Killing Curse to no effect. He wastes time on futile schemes to find a loophole, such as using another servant's wand or searching for [[ArtifactOfDoom the Elder Wand]]. So Harry survives. Again. And again. And again.
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'''Or even:''' They could find out where she lives, which couldn't possibly be as secure as the Ministry of Freakin' Magic, and either waylay her outside her house or wait for her to go to sleep, break in, and take the dratted thing.\\
'''Instead:''' Harry and co. plan their method of entering the Ministry… and that's the extent of their preparation. They don't think about anything else, and it bites them in the ass twice; Hermione and Ron are sidelined for the duration of the mission when their disguises lead the two of them to be mistaken for Ministry employees and given jobs to do, and the trio's hiding place is compromised during their escape attempt.\\
'''Instead:''' Harry and co. plan their method of entering the Ministry… and that's the extent of their preparation. They don't think about anything else, and it bites them in the ass twice; Hermione and Ron are sidelined for the duration of the mission when their disguises lead the two of them to be mistaken for Ministry employees and given jobs to do, and the trio's hiding place is compromised during their escape attempt.\\
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'''Or even:''' Even:''' They could find out where she lives, which couldn't possibly be as secure as the Ministry of Freakin' Magic, and either waylay her outside her house or wait for her to go to sleep, break in, and take the dratted thing.thing. In fact, this should have been her first option given that they have no reason to think Umbridges carries the valuable locket with her to work.\\
'''Instead:''' Harry and co. plan their method of entering theMinistry… Ministry... and that's the extent of their preparation. They It turns out Umbridge did have the locket with her, but they don't think about anything else, and it bites them in the ass twice; Hermione and Ron are sidelined for the duration of the mission when their disguises lead the two of them to be mistaken for Ministry employees and given jobs to do, and the trio's hiding place is compromised during their escape attempt.\\
'''Instead:''' Harry and co. plan their method of entering the
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* Harry accidentally summons a load of bad guys by [[SpeakOfTheDevil saying Voldemort's name]], [[IdiotBall despite having been previously warned that it had been jinxed and shouldn't be spoken out loud]] [[TooDumbToLive and having even been reminded of it right before he said it]]. The bad guys appear, and aim their wands at the heroes' tent.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Their first reaction to be grabbing the bag and side-along apparating away from the tent and the bad guys, as they've got the hang of it by now and they've used it to get out of a number of similar situations. Once done, they could then either sneak up on the bad guys and stun them, or just abandoning the thing altogether, continue their travel and get another tent (if necessary, a simple Expansion Charm could be used on a Muggle tent to make it comfortable).\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Their first reaction to be grabbing the bag and side-along apparating away from the tent and the bad guys, as they've got the hang of it by now and they've used it to get out of a number of similar situations. Once done, they could then either sneak up on the bad guys and stun them, or just abandoning the thing altogether, continue their travel and get another tent (if necessary, a simple Expansion Charm could be used on a Muggle tent to make it comfortable).\\
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* Harry accidentally summons a load of bad guys by [[SpeakOfTheDevil saying Voldemort's name]], [[IdiotBall despite having been previously warned that it had been jinxed and shouldn't be spoken out loud]] [[TooDumbToLive and having even been reminded of it right before he said it]]. The bad guys Snatchers appear, and aim their wands at the heroes' tent.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Their first reaction to be grabbing the bag and side-along apparating away from the tent and the bad guys, as they've got the hang of it by now and they've used it to get out of a number of similar situations. The enemies should have not had enough time to cast an anti-apparating field spell or anything similar, and even if they did, it is still worth a try. Once done, they could then either sneak up on the bad guys and stun them, or just abandoning the thing altogether, continue their travel and get another tent (if necessary, a simple Expansion Charm could be used on a Muggle tent to make it comfortable).\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Their first reaction to be grabbing the bag and side-along apparating away from the tent and the bad guys, as they've got the hang of it by now and they've used it to get out of a number of similar situations. The enemies should have not had enough time to cast an anti-apparating field spell or anything similar, and even if they did, it is still worth a try. Once done, they could then either sneak up on the bad guys and stun them, or just abandoning the thing altogether, continue their travel and get another tent (if necessary, a simple Expansion Charm could be used on a Muggle tent to make it comfortable).\\
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'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to realise that something's not right. His two assumptions about ownership of the wand are mutually exclusive. Dumbledore took possession of the wand ''without'' killing its previous owner, Gellert Grindelwald, who previously stole the wand from Mykew Gregorovitch without killing him either, and Voldemort should know this, because he personally killed both of them. Therefore, if Dumbledore is the owner, then killing the previous owner shouldn't be a necessity, or if the kill ''is'' required, then Dumbledore shouldn't have owned the wand in the first place, and Voldemort should own it now on the assumption Gregorovitch was its last true owner.\\
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'''You'd Expect:''' Voldemort to realise that something's not right. His two assumptions about ownership of the wand are mutually exclusive. Dumbledore took possession of the wand ''without'' killing its previous owner, Gellert Grindelwald, who previously stole the wand from Mykew Gregorovitch without killing him either, and Voldemort should know all of this, because he personally killed both of them. Therefore, if Dumbledore is the owner, then killing the previous owner shouldn't be a necessity, or if the kill ''is'' required, then Dumbledore shouldn't have owned the wand in the first place, and Voldemort should own it now on the assumption Gregorovitch was its last true owner.\\
