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[[YouAreNotAlone You are not alone,]] [[CrowningMomentOfHeartwarming and you are not strange.]] [[IAmWhatIam You are you,]] [[HumansAreFlawed and everyone has damage.]] [[RousseauWasRight Be the better person.]]''
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->'''Hisao:''' [[spoiler: I know that there's a girl so determined to take care of a total stranger that she'd steal his food at a festival. I know that there's a girl so determined to help me with my own problems that she'd draw up a complete diatery and exercise plan, and that she'd not only draw up the plans but she'd follow them with me even when she couldn't run. Determined enough to keep me at arms length that she'd put herself through emotional pain if she thought it was the right thing to do. Although, there's one thing this determined girl didn't quite plan for, which was that I might feel the same kind of determination to keep her from being hurt. I fell in love with you and I refuse to let that be thrown away because you're afraid of losing me.]]
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->'''Hisao:''' [[spoiler: I know that there's a girl so determined to take care of a total stranger that she'd steal his food at a festival. I know that there's a girl so determined to help me with my own problems that she'd draw up a complete diatery dietary and exercise plan, and that she'd not only draw up the plans but she'd follow them with me even when she couldn't run. Determined enough to keep me at arms length that she'd put herself through emotional pain if she thought it was the right thing to do. Although, there's one thing this determined girl didn't quite plan for, which was that I might feel the same kind of determination to keep her from being hurt. I fell in love with you and I refuse to let that be thrown away because you're afraid of losing me.]]
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->'''Hisao''': [[spoiler:Our pasts may be scattered and at times overshadowed by sadness, but they're also an irrevocable part of our lives and personalities. Even if I could change a single thing, I wouldn't, because my past is what led me here. That's why, even with all that's happened to us before, and all that may well befall us... together, we'll keep walking forwards. Forwards... towards the future. Our future.]]
-->During [[spoiler:Lilly's Good ending]]
-->During [[spoiler:Lilly's Good ending]]
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->'''Hisao''': [[spoiler:Our pasts may be scattered and at times overshadowed by sadness, but they're also an irrevocable part of our lives and personalities. Even if I could change a single thing, I wouldn't, because my past is what led me here. That's why, even with all that's happened to us before, and all that may well befall us... together, we'll keep walking forwards. Forwards... towards the future. Our future.]]
-->During [[spoiler:Lilly's Good ending]]
-->During [[spoiler:Lilly's Good ending]]
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->'''Hisao''': [[spoiler:Our pasts may be scattered and at times overshadowed by sadness, but they're also an irrevocable part of our lives and personalities. Even if I could change a single thing, I wouldn't, because my past is what led me here. That's why, even with all that's happened to us before, and all that may well befall us... together, we'll keep walking forwards. Forwards... towards the future. Our future.]]
-->During [[spoiler:Lilly's Good ending]]
-->During [[spoiler:Lilly's Good ending]]
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->'''Hisao''' [[spoiler: The wall between us is going away, even if it hurts so badly to bring it down.]]
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!!![[SpiritedCompetitor Shizune]] & Misha
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!!![[SpiritedCompetitor Shizune]] & Misha
[[GenkiGirl Misha]]
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-->Rin's [[Good Ending, where she finally decides to be who she is, not what others want her to be.]]
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-->Rin's [[Good [[spoiler:Good Ending, where she finally decides to be who she is, not what others want her to be.]]
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->'''Rin''': [[spoiler:Hisao? What's the word for when it feels inside your heart that everything in the world is all right?]]
-->Rin's [[Good Ending, where she finally decides to be who she is, not what others want her to be.]]
-->Rin's [[Good Ending, where she finally decides to be who she is, not what others want her to be.]]
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->'''Rin''': Underpants are the soul of a girl. You shouldn't peek at someone else's soul. Even if you are not a girl.
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->'''Rin''': I think I should say sorry. [[spoiler:I'm really bad with people.]] Some things are hard to understand - like jellyfish. Do you understand jellyfish?
->'''Hisao''': I... I guess not.
->'''Rin''': [[spoiler:People are like jellyfish to me. I don't understand.]]
->'''Hisao''': I... I guess not.
->'''Rin''': [[spoiler:People are like jellyfish to me. I don't understand.]]
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->'''Rin''': [[spoiler:I can't hug anyone, Hisao. I'm a bad person like that.]]
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->'''Rin''': [[spoiler:I can't hug anyone, Hisao. [[TearJerker/KatawaShoujo I'm a bad person like that.]]]]]]
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->'''Rin''': [[spoiler:I can't hug anyone, Hisao. I'm a bad person like that.]]
-->''"The World Only You Can See"'', Rin's [[spoiler:second Bad Ending]].
-->''"The World Only You Can See"'', Rin's [[spoiler:second Bad Ending]].
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->'''Hanako: '''"This is me... all of me."
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--> During The final line of Hanako's good ending
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->'''Kenji:''' Hey man, what's... Whoa dude, you look awful, I think. You okay?
->'''Hisao:''' I... don't really want to go into it. It's late.\\
'''Kenji:''' Okay, that's cool. If you ever want to talk about it, I'm, you know, here.\\
'''Hisao:''' Thanks, Kenji.\\
'''Kenji:''' Hey, it's cool. [[JerkWithAHeartOfGold That's what friends are for, right?]]
->'''Hisao:''' I... don't really want to go into it. It's late.\\
'''Kenji:''' Okay, that's cool. If you ever want to talk about it, I'm, you know, here.\\
'''Hisao:''' Thanks, Kenji.\\
'''Kenji:''' Hey, it's cool. [[JerkWithAHeartOfGold That's what friends are for, right?]]
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->'''Kenji:''' Hey man, what's... Whoa [[spoiler:Whoa dude, you look awful, I think. You okay?
->'''Hisao:''' I...okay?]]\\
'''Hisao:''' [[spoiler:I... don't really want to go into it. It's late.\\
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'''Kenji:'''Okay, [[spoiler:Okay, that's cool. If you ever want to talk about it, I'm, you know, here.\\
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'''Hisao:'''Thanks, [[spoiler:Thanks, Kenji.\\
]]\\
'''Kenji:'''Hey, [[spoiler:Hey, it's cool. [[JerkWithAHeartOfGold That's what friends are for, right?]]
right?]]]]
-->"A Faraway Future", Act 3 of Lilly's route[[note]]After [[spoiler:Hisao has learned that Lilly plans to leave the country]][[/note]].
->'''Hisao:''' I...
'''Hisao:''' [[spoiler:I... don't really want to go into it. It's late.
'''Kenji:'''
'''Hisao:'''
'''Kenji:'''
-->"A Faraway Future", Act 3 of Lilly's route[[note]]After [[spoiler:Hisao has learned that Lilly plans to leave the country]][[/note]].
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->'''Lilly''': I didn't become your friend because I pitied you, Hanako. I became your friend because I knew you were not just hiding from me, but from everyone. Your ambitions, personality, interests, tastes... I didn't know any of them and neither did anybody else. As you showed yourself to me, though, I began to realize the person that you were, and became sure that our meeting was a very special moment.\\
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->'''Lilly''': Hanako, remember when we first met? When you entered my room for the first time after overhearing my consoling of a friend, you didn't say a single word for the entire night. Even as I poured you tea and talked, you just sat silently and simply listened to what I said. It took many quiet meetings like that before you began to open up to me, but as you began to, I felt some of the happiest moments I've ever felt. I didn't become your friend because I pitied you, Hanako. I became your friend because I knew you were hiding not just hiding from me, but from everyone. Your ambitions, personality, interests, tastes... I didn't know any of them them, and neither did anybody else. As you showed yourself to me, though, I began to realize the person that you were, and became sure that our meeting was a very special moment.\\
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'''Lilly''': I believe you are a very beautiful person, Hanako, and I am certain you will become a strong and confident woman. You are a very dear friend, and someone whom I love very much. Just like Hisao, I will never forget you for as long as I live. [[spoiler:I may be leaving, but you have your own life here to lead. Just as I do, you have your own friends and hobbies, and your own hopes after graduation. I want you to devote yourself to them, even after I'm not around anymore]]. That is why I think you will be okay. Because you are your own self, with your own life. You yourself proved that to me.\\
'''Hanako''': I...I understand. I know [[spoiler:I have to say goodbye... I know you have to go your own way...]] But... thank you, Lilly. For everything.\\
'''Lilly''': Thank you, Hanako. Will you be okay?\\
'''Hanako''': I will.
'''Hanako''': I...I understand. I know [[spoiler:I have to say goodbye... I know you have to go your own way...]] But... thank you, Lilly. For everything.\\
'''Lilly''': Thank you, Hanako. Will you be okay?\\
'''Hanako''': I will.
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''Lilly cuts her words short as she [[spoiler:brings her hand to Hanako's head and brushes her bangs to the side, gently pressing her lips to Hanako's forehead. As she pulls back, leaving Hanako all but speechless and her eyes moist]], Lilly beams a wide smile.''\\
'''Lilly''': I believe you are a very beautiful person, Hanako, and I am certain you will become a strong and confident woman. You are a very dear friend, and someone whom I love very much. Just like Hisao, I will never forget you for as long as I live. [[spoiler:I may be leaving, but you have your own life here to lead. Just as I do, you have your own friends and hobbies, and your own hopes after graduation. I want you to devote yourself to them, even after I'm not aroundanymore]]. anymore.]] That is why I think you will be okay. Because you are your own self, with your own life. You yourself proved that to me.\\
''Hanako lowers her head in embarrassment, but nods as she does so.''\\
'''Hanako''': I...I understand.I know [[spoiler:I know I have to say goodbye... I know you have to go your own way...]] But... thank you, Lilly. For everything.\\
]]\\
'''Lilly''': Thank you, Hanako. Willyou [[spoiler:you be okay?\\
okay]]?\\
''There are a few seconds of silence before the answer comes.''\\
'''Hanako''': Iwill.will.
-->"[[spoiler:Farewell]]", Act 4 of Lilly's route
'''Lilly''': I believe you are a very beautiful person, Hanako, and I am certain you will become a strong and confident woman. You are a very dear friend, and someone whom I love very much. Just like Hisao, I will never forget you for as long as I live. [[spoiler:I may be leaving, but you have your own life here to lead. Just as I do, you have your own friends and hobbies, and your own hopes after graduation. I want you to devote yourself to them, even after I'm not around
''Hanako lowers her head in embarrassment, but nods as she does so.''\\
'''Hanako''': I...I understand.
'''Lilly''': Thank you, Hanako. Will
''There are a few seconds of silence before the answer comes.''\\
'''Hanako''': I
-->"[[spoiler:Farewell]]", Act 4 of Lilly's route
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->'''Hisao''': (hearing that Lilly anticipated and welcomed the possibility of having sex in the bath) I knew it. You're just as dirty-minded as I am.\\
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->'''Hisao''': (hearing that Lilly [[spoiler:[[CovertPervert anticipated and welcomed the possibility of having sex in the bath) bath]]]]) I knew it. You're [[spoiler:You're just as dirty-minded as I am.\\]]\\
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'''Lilly''': I merely have a healthy adolescent sex drive.\\
'''Hisao''': So in other words, dirty-minded.\\
'''Hisao''': So in other words, dirty-minded.\\
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'''Lilly''': I [[spoiler:I merely have a healthy adolescent sex drive.]]\\
'''Hisao''': So in other words, [[spoiler:dirty-minded]].\\
'''Hisao''': So in other words, dirty-minded.\\
'''Hisao''': So in other words, [[spoiler:dirty-minded]].\\
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-> ''Just a little bit.''
-> ''Just a little bit.''
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''Steady on, old lad. Don't go down that road.''\\
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''Steady on, old lad. Don't go down [[GirlOnGirlIsHot that road.road]].''\\
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\"The problem must be in your pants!\"
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->'''Rin''': The problem is in your pants!
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->'''Rin''': The problem is must be in your pants!
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->'''Rin:''' No. What? You can't talk to trees. [[CloudCuckoolander What do you think I am,]] [[HypocriticalHumor crazy?]]
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->'''Rin:''' No. What? You can't talk to trees. [[CloudCuckoolander [[{{Cloudcuckoolander}} What do you think I am,]] [[HypocriticalHumor crazy?]]
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->'''Lilly:''' We're a couple of broken young fools, aren't we?\\
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Hisao: [[spoiler: You idiot.]]
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->''We come to love not by finding a perfect person, but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly.''
-->'''Sam Keen'''
-->'''Sam Keen'''
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'''Hisao''': So in other words, dirty-minded.\\
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'''Hanako''': I will.\\
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'''Hanako''': I will.\\
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I\'ll be here all week.
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->'''Hisao:''' Try as I might to picture this mystery sister, all I can think of is Lilly in a suit. And I can't imagine that not being attractive. Not at all.
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Like I said. Also, BRACKETS!
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->'''Shizune:''' We are going to play for it.\\
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->'''Shizune:''' We [We are going to play for it.\\]\\
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'''Shizune:''' The oldest game known to man, upon which the fate of nations has been known to rest: Rock, Paper, Scissors.
->'''Shizune''': I forgot that the whole time, [[spoiler: Misha was there, opening up to me, and giving a hundred percent everyday. I missed what I was looking for, because it was in plain sight.]]
->'''Shizune''': I forgot that the whole time, [[spoiler: Misha was there, opening up to me, and giving a hundred percent everyday. I missed what I was looking for, because it was in plain sight.]]
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'''Shizune:''' The [The oldest game known to man, upon which the fate of nations has been known to rest: Rock, Paper, Scissors.
Scissors.]
->'''Hisao:''' [(Learning sign language) is actually not that easy. It's actually hard as hell. Like trying to pick up broken glass. But I guess in some ways it's interesting, as well. Like an adventure. Well, no...]
->'''Shizune:''' [Picking up broken glass is not an adventure.]
->'''Hisao:''' [Sure it is. It's just as challenging.]
->'''Shizune:''' [If you use a dustpan and a broom it's not.]
-> ''I feel frustrated and sad.''
->'''Shizune''':I [I forgot that the whole time, [[spoiler: Misha was there, opening up to me, and giving a hundred percent everyday. I missed what I was looking for, because it was in plain sight.]]
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->'''Hisao:''' [(Learning sign language) is actually not that easy. It's actually hard as hell. Like trying to pick up broken glass. But I guess in some ways it's interesting, as well. Like an adventure. Well, no...]
->'''Shizune:''' [Picking up broken glass is not an adventure.]
->'''Hisao:''' [Sure it is. It's just as challenging.]
->'''Shizune:''' [If you use a dustpan and a broom it's not.]
-> ''I feel frustrated and sad.''
->'''Shizune''':
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-> '''Kenji:''' What the hell? What do you mean there's a girl who does the same thing? You mean she touches her glasses? I do that, that's my thing. Who is this bitch? Why are bitches all up in my business, stealing what I do?!"
-> '''Kenji:''' What the hell? What do you mean there's a girl who does the same thing? You mean she touches her glasses? I do that, that's my thing. Who is this bitch? Why are bitches all up in my business, stealing what I do?!"
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->'''Hisao:''' Moving forward feels good.