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* Kurogane's reaction when Syaoran impulsively kisses him the first time. He gets so angry that he flats out attacks Syaoran and would have done worse if Syaoran hadn't run to his room in time. Just the image of Kurogane banging down the door so hard that he nearly breaks it while Syaoran hides in a corner and prays for him to not get in, establishes that Syaoran is not even safe from his own friends.
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* Kurogane's reaction when Syaoran impulsively kisses him the first time. He gets so angry that he flats out attacks Syaoran and would have done worse if Syaoran hadn't run to fled into his room in time. room. Just the image of Kurogane banging down on the door so hard that he nearly breaks it while Syaoran hides in a corner and prays for him to not get in, cowers on the other side establishes that Syaoran is not safe even safe from his own friends.
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* When Syaoran get kidnapped while on outing with Fai. Turns out those gang members that attacked him earlier in the story? Their leaders are {{Serial Killer}}s, who picked Syaoran as their next victim.
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* When Syaoran get kidnapped while on an outing with Fai. Turns out those gang members that attacked him earlier in the story? Their leaders are {{Serial Killer}}s, who picked Syaoran as their next victim.
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* When Fai's curse activates: Sakura is mortally wounded and the other two are desperately trying to not get hit or hurt Fai. Especially according to Yuuko.
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* When Fai's curse activates: Sakura is mortally wounded and the other two are desperately trying to not get hit or hurt Fai. Especially according to Yuuko.Yuuko, it could have been far worse.
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* Syaraon's time in the gang's TortureCellar. He tortured for ''sixteen hours'' barely hanging on the hope that Kurogane will rescue him.
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* Syaraon's time in the gang's TortureCellar. He tortured for ''sixteen hours'' barely hanging on the hope that Kurogane will rescue him.him.
* When Fai's curse activates: Sakura is mortally wounded and the other two are desperately trying to not get hit or hurt Fai. Especially according to Yuuko.
* The "townspeople" of Clow are repetitive and weirdly happy like NPCS. [[spoiler: Not to mention that they ''melt'' when they break routine.]]
* When Fai's curse activates: Sakura is mortally wounded and the other two are desperately trying to not get hit or hurt Fai. Especially according to Yuuko.
* The "townspeople" of Clow are repetitive and weirdly happy like NPCS. [[spoiler: Not to mention that they ''melt'' when they break routine.]]
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* Kurogane's reaction when Syaoran impulsively kisses him the first time. He gets so angry that flats out attacks Syaoran and would have done worse if Syaoran hadn't run to his room in time. Just the image of Kurogane banging down the door so hard that he nearly breaks it while Syaoran hid in a corner and prayed for him to not get in, establishes that Syaoran is not even safe from his own friends.
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* Kurogane's reaction when Syaoran impulsively kisses him the first time. He gets so angry that he flats out attacks Syaoran and would have done worse if Syaoran hadn't run to his room in time. Just the image of Kurogane banging down the door so hard that he nearly breaks it while Syaoran hid hides in a corner and prayed prays for him to not get in, establishes that Syaoran is not even safe from his own friends.
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* When Syaoran get kidnapped while on outing with Fai. Turns out those gang members that attacked him earlier in the story? [[spoiler: Their leaders are [[SerialKiller]]s, who picked Syaoran as their next victim.]]
* Syaraon's time in the gang's TortureCellar.
* Syaraon's time in the gang's TortureCellar.
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* When Fai realizes that Syaoran has disappeared during their outing to bookstore after Fai tries to make amends. He frantically searches for him to no avail and how he finds Syaoran's blood in a back alley.
* When Syaoran get kidnapped while on outing with Fai. Turns out those gang members that attacked him earlier in the story?[[spoiler: Their leaders are [[SerialKiller]]s, {{Serial Killer}}s, who picked Syaoran as their next victim.]]
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* Syaraon's time in the gang's TortureCellar. He tortured for ''sixteen hours'' barely hanging on the hope that Kurogane will rescue him.
* When Syaoran get kidnapped while on outing with Fai. Turns out those gang members that attacked him earlier in the story?
* Syaraon's time in the gang's TortureCellar. He tortured for ''sixteen hours'' barely hanging on the hope that Kurogane will rescue him.
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* Kurogane's reaction when Syaoran impulsively kisses him the first time. He gets so angry that flats out attacks Syaoran and would have done worse if Syaoran hadn't run to his room in time. Just the image of Kurogane banging down the door so hard that he nearly breaks it while Syaoran hid in a corner and prayed for him to not get in, establishes that Syaoran is not even safe from his own friends.
* When Syaoran get kidnapped while on outing with Fai. Turns out those gang members that attacked him earlier in the story? [[spoiler: Their leaders are [[SerialKiller]]s, who picked Syaoran as their next victim.]]
* Syaraon's time in the gang's TortureCellar.
* When Syaoran get kidnapped while on outing with Fai. Turns out those gang members that attacked him earlier in the story? [[spoiler: Their leaders are [[SerialKiller]]s, who picked Syaoran as their next victim.]]
* Syaraon's time in the gang's TortureCellar.
