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* Kor's [[DarkAndTroubledPast backstory]]. A member of a team in the past, during a mission to defend a small village, Kor was [[EyeScream blinded]] by a [[WarElephants Goliath]], and [[FromBadToWorse it all went downhill from there]]. One member had their back broken, another [[AnArmAndALeg lost an arm]], and [[HeroicSacrifice the final member was killed to make sure the others got out alive]]. Then when Kor wakes up, the leader goes [[UnstoppableRage absolutely apeshit on him]], [[NoHoldsBarredBeatdown strangling him]], and using him as a HumanShield against security. Kor tries to gain the upper hand, but the leader quickly takes the advantage back, and begins perforating Kor's chest before [[DrivenToSuicide cutting his]] [[SlashedThroat own throat.]]
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* Kor's [[DarkAndTroubledPast backstory]]. A member of a team in the past, during a mission to defend a small village, Kor was [[EyeScream blinded]] by a [[WarElephants Goliath]], and [[FromBadToWorse it all went downhill from there]]. One member had their back broken, another [[AnArmAndALeg lost an arm]], arm, and [[HeroicSacrifice the final member was killed to make sure the others got out alive]]. Then when Kor wakes up, the leader goes [[UnstoppableRage absolutely apeshit on him]], [[NoHoldsBarredBeatdown strangling him]], and using him as a HumanShield against security. Kor tries to gain the upper hand, but the leader quickly takes the advantage back, and begins perforating Kor's chest before [[DrivenToSuicide cutting his]] [[SlashedThroat own throat.]]
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* Kor's backstory. A member of a team in the past, during a mission to defend a small village, Kor was blinded by a Goliath, and it all went downhill from there. One member had their back broken, another lost an arm, and the final member was killed to make sure the others got out alive. Then when Kor wakes up, the leader goes absolutely apeshit on him, strangling him, and using him as a human shield against security. Kor tries to gain the upper hand, but the leader quickly takes the advantage back, and begins perforating Kor's chest before cutting his own throat.
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* Kor's backstory. [[DarkAndTroubledPast backstory]]. A member of a team in the past, during a mission to defend a small village, Kor was blinded [[EyeScream blinded]] by a Goliath, [[WarElephants Goliath]], and [[FromBadToWorse it all went downhill from there. there]]. One member had their back broken, another [[AnArmAndALeg lost an arm, arm]], and [[HeroicSacrifice the final member was killed to make sure the others got out alive. alive]]. Then when Kor wakes up, the leader goes [[UnstoppableRage absolutely apeshit on him, him]], [[NoHoldsBarredBeatdown strangling him, him]], and using him as a human shield HumanShield against security. Kor tries to gain the upper hand, but the leader quickly takes the advantage back, and begins perforating Kor's chest before [[DrivenToSuicide cutting his his]] [[SlashedThroat own throat.]]
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* Kor's backstory. A member of a team in the past, during a mission to defend a small village, Kor was blinded by a Goliath, and it all went downhill from there. One member had their back broken, another lost an arm, and the final member was killed to make sure the others got out alive. Then when Kor wakes up, the leader goes absolutely apeshit on him, strangling him, and using him as a human shield against security. Kor tries to gain the upper hand, but the leader quickly takes the advantage back, and begins perforating Kor's chest before cutting his own throat.
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* Darrel's nightmares in [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9983180/7/RWBY-Reckoning Chapter 7]] and [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9983180/26/RWBY-Reckoning Chapter 26]]. [[note]]Though the author has said that depending on what is shown at [[Creator/RoosterTeeth RTX]], it may or may not be canon.[[/note]]
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* Darrel's nightmares in [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9983180/7/RWBY-Reckoning Chapter 7]] and [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9983180/26/RWBY-Reckoning Chapter 26]]. [[note]]Though the author has said that depending on what is shown at [[Creator/RoosterTeeth RTX]], it may or may not be canon.[[/note]]
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* Darrel's nightmares in [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9983180/7/RWBY-Reckoning Chapter 7]] and [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9983180/26/RWBY-Reckoning Chapter 26]]. [[note]]Though the author has said that depending on what is shown at [[Creator/RoosterTeeth RTX]], it may or may not be canon.[[/note]]
* Cardin Winchester. Where he was just a fickle [[TheBully bully]] in the original, the author makes an effort to portray him as much more of a jackass. In order:
** He forced Yang to break Darrel's heart, otherwise he would kill him, and go after Ruby.
** Yang is "persuaded" to be his team's personal maid, which she says was "unbearable".
*** To elaborate: she said that he made her do stuff that one would expect at a nightclub. [[IHaveYouNowMyPretty Take from that what you will.]]
* Cardin Winchester. Where he was just a fickle [[TheBully bully]] in the original, the author makes an effort to portray him as much more of a jackass. In order:
** He forced Yang to break Darrel's heart, otherwise he would kill him, and go after Ruby.
** Yang is "persuaded" to be his team's personal maid, which she says was "unbearable".
*** To elaborate: she said that he made her do stuff that one would expect at a nightclub. [[IHaveYouNowMyPretty Take from that what you will.]]
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* Darrel's nightmare in chapter 7.
* Darrel ends up discovering that he was injured during his fight against the Nevermore. How injured?
--->''Half my jacket had been mangled, and the clothing underneath had been ripped to shreds. Underneath, the wound appeared to be severe: Most of my abdomen was covered in deep scratches, and part of my side had been mauled so badly, I could literally feel the shredded muscle and broken bone heaving beneath my fingers. Blood was pouring down my legs, pooling at my feet. If an ambulance had seen me, they would have just skipped the hospital and sent me straight to the morgue.''
* Darrel ends up discovering that he was injured during his fight against the Nevermore. How injured?
--->''Half my jacket had been mangled, and the clothing underneath had been ripped to shreds. Underneath, the wound appeared to be severe: Most of my abdomen was covered in deep scratches, and part of my side had been mauled so badly, I could literally feel the shredded muscle and broken bone heaving beneath my fingers. Blood was pouring down my legs, pooling at my feet. If an ambulance had seen me, they would have just skipped the hospital and sent me straight to the morgue.''
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* Darrel's nightmare in chapter 7.
* Darrel ends up discovering that he was injured during his fight against the Nevermore. How injured?
--->''Half my jacket had been mangled, and the clothing underneath had been ripped to shreds. Underneath, the wound appeared to be severe: Most of my abdomen was covered in deep scratches, and part of my side had been mauled so badly, I could literally feel the shredded muscle and broken bone heaving beneath my fingers. Blood was pouring down my legs, pooling at my feet. If an ambulance had seen me, they would have just skipped the hospital and sent me straight to the morgue.''
* Darrel ends up discovering that he was injured during his fight against the Nevermore. How injured?
--->''Half my jacket had been mangled, and the clothing underneath had been ripped to shreds. Underneath, the wound appeared to be severe: Most of my abdomen was covered in deep scratches, and part of my side had been mauled so badly, I could literally feel the shredded muscle and broken bone heaving beneath my fingers. Blood was pouring down my legs, pooling at my feet. If an ambulance had seen me, they would have just skipped the hospital and sent me straight to the morgue.''
