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* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her homecoming date who gave her a peck on the lips when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being possibly no stop to her madness.
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* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her homecoming date who gave her a peck on the lips when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being possibly no stop to her madness.madness.
** Grace is also far from the clean, well-rested girl she had been at the start - there are dark circles under her eyes and her teeth are dark with stains.
** Grace is also far from the clean, well-rested girl she had been at the start - there are dark circles under her eyes and her teeth are dark with stains.
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* Ruth's death is somewhat played for laughs, but Max literally tore through her body with her own underwear. The sound effects do ''not'' help.
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* Ruth's death is somewhat played for laughs, but Max literally tore through her body with her own underwear. The sound effects Her cries of pain do ''not'' help.
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** Tinky taunts Pete about holding his entire family. Brr.
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** Tinky taunts Pete about holding his entire family. Brr. In-Universe, it's out of context for Peter, who has no clue that his older brother is trapped in the time loop by a sadistic god.
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* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her homecoming date who went in to kiss her when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being possibly no stop to her madness.
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* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her homecoming date who went in to kiss gave her a peck on the lips when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being possibly no stop to her madness.
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*** There's even a fan theory that suggests that the Lords in Black were behind some of Grace's thoughts/fantasies though that's [[YMMV]]
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*** There's even a fan theory that suggests that the Lords in Black were behind some of Grace's thoughts/fantasies though that's [[YMMV]][[YMMV/NerdyPrudesMustDie YMMV]].
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** Nibbly's mouth is just... slightly [[UncannyValley too wide]].
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** Nibbly's mouth is just... slightly [[UncannyValley too wide]]. He over-accentuates every word, making the listeners hear every clack of his teeth and slurp of saliva.
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*** There's even a fan theory that suggests that the Lords in Black were behind some of Grace's thoughts/fantasies though that's [[YMMV]]
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* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her homecoming date who went in to kiss her when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being no stop to her madness.
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* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her homecoming date who went in to kiss her when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being possibly no stop to her madness.
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* "Nerdy Prudes Must Die" is literally a song about GENOCIDE. Even worse when Max brags that he's the one who decides who's a nerd. Nobody is safe.
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* "Nerdy Prudes Must Die" is literally a song about GENOCIDE. killing every single nerd! Even worse when Max brags that he's the one who decides who's a nerd. Nobody is safe.
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* Ruth's death is somewhat played for laughs, but Max literally split her up her intestines with her own underwear. The sound effects do not help.
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* Ruth's death is somewhat played for laughs, but Max literally split tore through her up her intestines body with her own underwear. The sound effects do not ''not'' help.
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* The poor limo driver's head drops right in front of Mayor Lauter from offstage, paired with a [[EvilHasABadSenseOfHumor horrifying pun]] from Max.
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* The poor limo driver's Poor Miss Tessburger's head drops right in front of Mayor Lauter from offstage, paired with a [[EvilHasABadSenseOfHumor horrifying pun]] from Max.
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* Max suddenly appears in shotgun right next to Detective Shapiro, then slams her head right through the windshield, causing a car crash. Fortunately, she survived, but it was a terrifying situation in the first place.
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* Max suddenly appears in shotgun right next to Detective Shapiro, then slams her head right through the windshield, causing a car crash. Fortunately, she survived, but it was a terrifying situation in the first place.audience doesn't know that until she shows up at homecoming.
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* Ghost Max's look. His face has sunken in, his eyes are wild, and he is covered in his own blood.
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* Ghost Max's look. His face has sunken in, his eyes are wild, and he is covered in his own blood.veins show right through his varsity jacket.
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** There is an unsettling degree of ''synchronicity'' between the Lords in Black in their first appearance together. Previously it had seemed as if they might exist largely apart from each other or even at odds. In NPMD, they seem almost like a HiveMind.
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** To begin with, the choreography. Every other character in every other number has danced in the fluid, too-coordinated motions that we can expect from musicals. The Lords? They less "dance" and more thrash about wildly, jerking through a series of stiff poses and motions like robots or puppets. It's as if [[TheFourthWallWillNotProtectYou they KNOW they're in a musical, and are doing the bare minimum in order to fit in with that medium,]] lest the audience be [[YouCannotGraspTheTrueForm destroyed by the sight of something that does not conform to the rules of reality as we know it.]]
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** To begin with, the choreography. Every other character in every other number has danced in the fluid, too-coordinated motions that we can expect from musicals. The Lords? They less "dance" and more thrash about wildly, jerking through a series of stiff poses and motions like robots or puppets. It's as if [[TheFourthWallWillNotProtectYou they KNOW they're in a musical, and are doing the bare minimum in order to fit in with that medium,]] lest the audience be [[YouCannotGraspTheTrueForm destroyed by the sight of something that does not conform to the rules of reality as we know it.]]]] This is accentuated by their singing, a series of deranged chants hollered in a [[PsychopathicManchild childlike singsong]].
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** And, of course, '''''[[JumpScare WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]'''''
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** And, of course, '''''[[JumpScare WE "WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]'''''PHONE!"]]'''''
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** And, of course, '''[[JumpScare WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]'''
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** And, of course, '''[[JumpScare '''''[[JumpScare WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]'''PHONE!]]'''''
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** And, of course, ''''[[JumpScare WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]''''
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** And, of course, ''''[[JumpScare '''[[JumpScare WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]''''PHONE!]]'''
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** And, of course, '''[[JumpScare WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]'''
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** And, of course, '''[[JumpScare ''''[[JumpScare WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]'''PHONE!]]''''
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** And, of course, '''[[JumpScare WE DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR PHONE!]]'''
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** To begin with, the choreography. Every other character in every other number has danced in the fluid, too-coordinated motions that we can expect from musicals. The Lords? They less "dance" and more thrash about wildly, jerking through a series of stiff poses and motions like robots or puppets. It's as if [[TheFourthWallWillNotProtectYou they KNOW they're in a musical, and are doing the bare minimum in order to fit in with that medium,]] lest the audience be [[YouCannotGraspTheTrueForm destroyed by the sight of something that does not conform to the rules of reality as we know it.]]
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* Ruth's death is somewhat played for laughs, but Max literally split her up her intestines with her own underwear.
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* Ruth's death is somewhat played for laughs, but Max literally split her up her intestines with her own underwear. The sound effects do not help.
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** Pokey informs the terrified teenagers that their [[EldritchAbomination true forms]] would melt their minds
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** Pokey informs the terrified teenagers that their [[EldritchAbomination true forms]] would melt their mindsminds.
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* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her prom date who went in to kiss her when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being no stop to her madness.
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* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her prom homecoming date who went in to kiss her when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being no stop to her madness.
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* Maxwell being dragged into the Black and White. To the audience and the teenagers, he seems to be being pulled and pinned by invisible forces. He looks forward, terrified, yelling "WHAT ARE YOU?!" as he sees the true forms of The Lords in Black. Wiggly's "Oh, what wonders await you here in the black" sounds eerily like [[Film/Hellraiser Pinhead's]] "we have such sights to show you."
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* Maxwell being dragged into the Black and White. To the audience and the teenagers, he seems to be being pulled and pinned by invisible forces. He looks forward, terrified, yelling "WHAT ARE YOU?!" as he sees the true forms of The Lords in Black. Wiggly's "Oh, what wonders await you here in the black" sounds eerily like [[Film/Hellraiser Pinhead's]] Pinhead's "we have such sights to show you."
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* The gore effects have gone up since [[Theater/TheGuyWhoDidntLikeMusicals The Guy Who Didn't Like Musicals]]. The shot of Max with debris stuck right through his chest is nauseating and far more realistic.
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* The gore effects have gone up since [[Theater/TheGuyWhoDidntLikeMusicals [[Theatre/TheGuyWhoDidntLikeMusicals The Guy Who Didn't Like Musicals]]. The shot of Max with debris stuck right through his chest is nauseating and far more realistic.
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* The gore effects have gone up since [[Theater/TheGuyWhoDidn'tLikeMusicals The Guy Who Didn't Like Musicals]]. The shot of Max with debris stuck right through his chest is nauseating and far more realistic.
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* The gore effects have gone up since [[Theater/TheGuyWhoDidn'tLikeMusicals [[Theater/TheGuyWhoDidntLikeMusicals The Guy Who Didn't Like Musicals]]. The shot of Max with debris stuck right through his chest is nauseating and far more realistic.
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* The gore effects have gone up since The Guy Who Didn't Like Musicals. The shot of Max with debris stuck right through his chest is nauseating and far more realistic.
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* The gore effects have gone up since [[Theater/TheGuyWhoDidn'tLikeMusicals The Guy Who Didn't Like Musicals.Musicals]]. The shot of Max with debris stuck right through his chest is nauseating and far more realistic.
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* Richie's death. We don't see it first-hand, but the descriptions of deep gashes in the head and stomach, twisting his nipples off, and drowning him is a horrible way to die. The part we do get to see is his terrified screaming with Max standing right above him with a demented look on his face.
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* Richie's death. We don't see it first-hand, but the descriptions of deep gashes in the head and stomach, twisting his nipples off, and drowning him is a horrible way to die. The part we do get to see later is his terrified screaming with Max standing right above him with a demented look on his face.
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* Maxwell being dragged into the Black and White. To the audience and the teenagers, he seems to be being pulled and pinned by invisible forces. He looks forward, terrified, yelling "WHAT ARE YOU?!" as he sees the true forms of The Lords in Black. Wiggly's "Oh, what wonders await you here in the black" sounds eerily like [[Film/Hellraiser Pinhead's]] "we have such sights to show you."
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* Maxwell being dragged into the Black and White. To the audience and the teenagers, he seems to be being pulled and pinned by invisible forces. He looks forward, terrified, yelling "WHAT ARE YOU?!" as he sees the true forms of The Lords in Black. Wiggly's "Oh, what wonders await you here in the black" sounds eerily like [[Film/Hellraiser Pinhead's]] "we have such sights to show you.""
* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her prom date who went in to kiss her when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being no stop to her madness.
* Grace Chasity using The Lords in Black to cleanse the world of so-called "dirty dudes." Keep in mind, her definition of a "dirty dude" includes her prom date who went in to kiss her when she suggested it. She is truly going mad with power, and the end of the show ends with there being no stop to her madness.
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** Tape him up in plastic– Steph was horrified when she thought Grace meant filming the process
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** Tape him up in plastic– Steph plastic (Steph was horrified when she thought Grace meant filming "tape" as in "filming the processprocess," but this still isn't that much better)
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** Pokey informs the terrified teenagers that their [[EldrichAbomination true forms]] would melt their minds
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** Pokey informs the terrified teenagers that their [[EldrichAbomination [[EldritchAbomination true forms]] would melt their minds
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** Their [[BlueandOrangeMorality exchange for stopping Max? One of the kids has to [[SadisticChoice give up what they cherish most]]. They go right to Stephanie, who treasures Peter the most. They even taunt her with the gun she has in her pocket. "Stephanie has got a gun, tra-la-la-la, how fun!"
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** Their [[BlueandOrangeMorality exchange exchange]] for stopping Max? One of the kids has to [[SadisticChoice give up what they cherish most]]. They go right to Stephanie, who treasures Peter the most. They even taunt her with the gun she has in her pocket. "Stephanie has got a gun, tra-la-la-la, how fun!"
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* The Summoning. After some creepy incantations by Grace, Steph, and Pete, the Lords in Black appear. They take the form of humans, but there is so much just plain wrong about their behavior.
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* The Summoning. After some creepy incantations by Grace, Steph, and Pete, the The Lords in Black appear. They take the form of humans, but there is so much just plain wrong about their behavior.
** Pokey informs the terrified teenagers that their [[EldrichAbomination true forms]] would melt their minds
** Wiggly uses such obnoxiously cute language that it's terrifying. It becomes even worse when he roars "PAY THE PRICE OR FUCK OFF!" at the very end.
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** Their [[BlueandOrangeMorality exchange for stopping Max? One of the kids has to [[SadisticChoice give up what they cherish most]]. They go right to Stephanie, whose treasures Peter the most. They even taunt her with the gun she has in her pocket. "Stephanie has got a gun, tra-la-la-la, how fun!"
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** Their [[BlueandOrangeMorality exchange for stopping Max? One of the kids has to [[SadisticChoice give up what they cherish most]]. They go right to Stephanie, whose who treasures Peter the most. They even taunt her with the gun she has in her pocket. "Stephanie has got a gun, tra-la-la-la, how fun!"fun!"
* Peter's almost-sacrifice. Stephanie almost killed her love to end the nightmare, even pulling the trigger. The only reason Max stopped it was because he was so sadistic that he wanted to hurt Peter himself.
* Maxwell being dragged into the Black and White. To the audience and the teenagers, he seems to be being pulled and pinned by invisible forces. He looks forward, terrified, yelling "WHAT ARE YOU?!" as he sees the true forms of The Lords in Black. Wiggly's "Oh, what wonders await you here in the black" sounds eerily like [[Film/Hellraiser Pinhead's]] "we have such sights to show you."
* Peter's almost-sacrifice. Stephanie almost killed her love to end the nightmare, even pulling the trigger. The only reason Max stopped it was because he was so sadistic that he wanted to hurt Peter himself.
* Maxwell being dragged into the Black and White. To the audience and the teenagers, he seems to be being pulled and pinned by invisible forces. He looks forward, terrified, yelling "WHAT ARE YOU?!" as he sees the true forms of The Lords in Black. Wiggly's "Oh, what wonders await you here in the black" sounds eerily like [[Film/Hellraiser Pinhead's]] "we have such sights to show you."
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* "Nerdy Prudes Must Die" is literally a song about GENOCIDE. Even worse when Max brags that he's the one who decides who's a nerd. Nobody is safe.
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* The [[ParanoiaFuel]] the Mayor incites, leading to the townsfolk turning on each other with no one to trust.
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* The [[ParanoiaFuel]] [[ParanoiaFuel Paranoia Fuel]] the Mayor incites, leading to the townsfolk turning on each other with no one to trust.trust.
* More [[ParanoiaFuel Paranoia Fuel]] when the Mayor describes the sheer range of the Black Altars and the Waylons' influence.
* The poor limo driver's head drops right in front of Mayor Lauter from offstage, paired with a [[EvilHasABadSenseOfHumor horrifying pun]] from Max.
* Max suddenly appears in shotgun right next to Detective Shapiro, then slams her head right through the windshield, causing a car crash. Fortunately, she survived, but it was a terrifying situation in the first place.
* The Summoning. After some creepy incantations by Grace, Steph, and Pete, the Lords in Black appear. They take the form of humans, but there is so much just plain wrong about their behavior.
** Blinky says that they've been [[ParanoiaFuel watching]] Grace, taunting her about the sexual desires she's been trying so hard to repress.
** Nibbly's mouth is just... slightly [[UncannyValley too wide]].
** Tinky taunts Pete about holding his entire family. Brr.
** They are hesitant about ending Maxwell's reign of terror because they think it would be fun to watch.
** Their [[BlueandOrangeMorality exchange for stopping Max? One of the kids has to [[SadisticChoice give up what they cherish most]]. They go right to Stephanie, whose treasures Peter the most. They even taunt her with the gun she has in her pocket. "Stephanie has got a gun, tra-la-la-la, how fun!"
* More [[ParanoiaFuel Paranoia Fuel]] when the Mayor describes the sheer range of the Black Altars and the Waylons' influence.
* The poor limo driver's head drops right in front of Mayor Lauter from offstage, paired with a [[EvilHasABadSenseOfHumor horrifying pun]] from Max.
* Max suddenly appears in shotgun right next to Detective Shapiro, then slams her head right through the windshield, causing a car crash. Fortunately, she survived, but it was a terrifying situation in the first place.
* The Summoning. After some creepy incantations by Grace, Steph, and Pete, the Lords in Black appear. They take the form of humans, but there is so much just plain wrong about their behavior.
** Blinky says that they've been [[ParanoiaFuel watching]] Grace, taunting her about the sexual desires she's been trying so hard to repress.
** Nibbly's mouth is just... slightly [[UncannyValley too wide]].
** Tinky taunts Pete about holding his entire family. Brr.
** They are hesitant about ending Maxwell's reign of terror because they think it would be fun to watch.
** Their [[BlueandOrangeMorality exchange for stopping Max? One of the kids has to [[SadisticChoice give up what they cherish most]]. They go right to Stephanie, whose treasures Peter the most. They even taunt her with the gun she has in her pocket. "Stephanie has got a gun, tra-la-la-la, how fun!"
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It's not called a "Horror" Comedy for no reason.
* The gore effects have gone up since The Guy Who Didn't Like Musicals. The shot of Max with debris stuck right through his chest is nauseating and far more realistic.
* Ghost Max's look. His face has sunken in, his eyes are wild, and he is covered in his own blood.
* Richie's death. We don't see it first-hand, but the descriptions of deep gashes in the head and stomach, twisting his nipples off, and drowning him is a horrible way to die. The part we do get to see is his terrified screaming with Max standing right above him with a demented look on his face.
* Ruth's death is somewhat played for laughs, but Max literally split her up her intestines with her own underwear.
* "Bury the Bully" is morbid because of Grace Chasity's gruesome descriptions on how to dispose of a body:
** Hack all his limbs off with an axe
** Cover the body with bleach (fun fact: this is how Jeffrey Dahmer cleaned his victims)
** Tape him up in plastic– Steph was horrified when she thought Grace meant filming the process
* The [[ParanoiaFuel]] the Mayor incites, leading to the townsfolk turning on each other with no one to trust.
* The gore effects have gone up since The Guy Who Didn't Like Musicals. The shot of Max with debris stuck right through his chest is nauseating and far more realistic.
* Ghost Max's look. His face has sunken in, his eyes are wild, and he is covered in his own blood.
* Richie's death. We don't see it first-hand, but the descriptions of deep gashes in the head and stomach, twisting his nipples off, and drowning him is a horrible way to die. The part we do get to see is his terrified screaming with Max standing right above him with a demented look on his face.
* Ruth's death is somewhat played for laughs, but Max literally split her up her intestines with her own underwear.
* "Bury the Bully" is morbid because of Grace Chasity's gruesome descriptions on how to dispose of a body:
** Hack all his limbs off with an axe
** Cover the body with bleach (fun fact: this is how Jeffrey Dahmer cleaned his victims)
** Tape him up in plastic– Steph was horrified when she thought Grace meant filming the process
* The [[ParanoiaFuel]] the Mayor incites, leading to the townsfolk turning on each other with no one to trust.
