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* The gryphons, being something no Valdemaran has ever seen, cause minor commotion wherever they go (and scare the hell out of the Heralds who first meet Elspeth and her party). When someone suggests trying to 'hide' the gryphons so they are less conspicuous, Elspeth is flummoxed at the very suggestion
-->''As what? Statuary?''
-->''As what? Statuary?''
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* In Jonaton's first proper scene in "Valdemar" is quite a riot:
** He's officially the prime suspect for one out of twenty discrepancies in the budding kingdom's inventory.
** He's officially the prime suspect for one out of twenty discrepancies in the budding kingdom's inventory.
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* In Jonaton's first proper scene in "Valdemar" is quite a riot:
** He's officially the prime suspect for about one out of twenty discrepancies in the budding kingdom's inventory.
** He's officially the prime suspect for about one out of twenty discrepancies in the budding kingdom's inventory.
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** He's supposed to have apprentices. When Kordas why he's carrying books for him instead of said apprentices, he replies that they have all been sent out to steal things for him. Kordas knows all too well that the chances he's joking are much lower than they should be.
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** He's supposed to have apprentices. When Kordas asks why he's carrying books for him instead of said apprentices, he replies that they have all been sent out to steal things for him. Kordas knows all too well that the chances he's joking are much lower than they should be.
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** He's officially the prime suspect for one out of twenty discrepancies in the budding kingdom's inventory.
** While discussing what Kordas could do about the above issue, he suggests sending Hakkon to enforce it, because the two of them have been having trouble finding time to spend together.
** He's supposed to have apprentices. When Kordas why he's carrying books for him instead of said apprentices, he replies that they have all been sent out to steal things for him. Kordas knows all too well that the chances he's joking are much lower than they should be.
** After stopping short of seemingly forgetting that Kordas is now a king during most of the scene, he justifies his theft of the latest draft of the duchy-wide map by its obsolescence: said map still has the royal palace labeled as a manor.
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[[AC: Anthologies]]Anthologies and Other]]
* ''The Valdemar Companion'' includes a travelogue set after the Owl books, featuring a few places that haven't been seen in a ''long'' time, including a town where a [[HornyDevils demon]] had constructed a temple of lust before Tarma and Kethry took him out.
--> Now Delton has turned into a tourist trap—whether this is an improvement or a tragedy depends on your point of view. Little souvenir “Need” swords and Tarma and Kethry dolls of the very lewdest quality are for sale at the temple where the demon was destroyed.
* ''The Valdemar Companion'' includes a travelogue set after the Owl books, featuring a few places that haven't been seen in a ''long'' time, including a town where a [[HornyDevils demon]] had constructed a temple of lust before Tarma and Kethry took him out.
--> Now Delton has turned into a tourist trap—whether this is an improvement or a tragedy depends on your point of view. Little souvenir “Need” swords and Tarma and Kethry dolls of the very lewdest quality are for sale at the temple where the demon was destroyed.
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* The anthology ''Sword of Ice'' has Vanyel and Guardsman Jonne in the short story ''Chance'', by Mark Shepherd. It starts with some yearning and the action makes for an ExcusePlot to make Vanyel need some tending, altogether it's very much a HurtComfortFic. Van's clothes are cut off him by lightning. Jonne gives him a full-body massage as part of the AfterActionPatchup. Bathing together in a hot spring is involved. It's adorably self indulgent and includes this line.
--> Fortunately, Vanyel's injuries were bad only above the waist.
--> Fortunately, Vanyel's injuries were bad only above the waist.
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* For those in the know, the early scenes where Talia thinks she's returning a "lost Companion" to Haven are very cute and gently amusing, especially when she starts hoping that she could find work at the palace and... maybe, possibly... even get to visit Rolan sometimes. Everyone she meets knows that her life has just been turned upside-down (in a good way), but she herself is clueless.
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* Offscreen, Vanyel and Stefan have a song competition where they sing and play the worst songs they can think of. The only one that's mentioned or described is one Vanyel sings, about being trapped in a Mage-circle for seventeen years. Savil, having a serious discussion elsewhere, knows it and sarcastically says it takes seventeen years to sing.
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* All the snipes at Heraldic Whites and the impracticality of an all-white uniform, if not for being conspicuous, at least for being hard to keep clean.
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* One of the few funny moments in ''Arrow's Fall'' is when Queen's Own Herald Talia is trying to adjust to her new workload. She asks Rolan what he thinks of the boring royal audience sessions she has to attend, and is delighted when he drops his head and does a convincing imitation of a human snore.
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* One of the few funny moments in ''Arrow's Fall'' is when now-official Queen's Own Herald Talia is trying to adjust to her new workload. She asks Rolan what he thinks of the boring royal audience sessions she has to attend, and is delighted when he drops his head and does a convincing imitation of a human snore.
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* Herald Eldan, who falls deeply in love with Kerowyn, attempts to get her to come to him in Valdemar by requiring her to go to Haven to collect his ransom. When she finally needs to collect it in order to help outfit her newly gained Mercenary company, she instead sends a proxy via the Mercenary Guild. When they reunite years later, Eldan describes the proxy as such
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* Herald Eldan, who falls deeply in love with Kerowyn, attempts to get her to come to him in Valdemar by requiring her to go to Haven to collect his ransom. When she finally needs to collect it in order to help outfit her newly gained Mercenary company, she instead sends a proxy via the Mercenary Guild. When they reunite years later, Eldan describes the proxy as suchencounter:
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* In ''Storm Warning'', Karal and his mentor Ulrich meet a Herald and his Companion who are their assigned escorts to Haven. Karal sizes up the Companion in purely horsey terms -- graceful and clearly trained as a kind of service animal, but those blue eyes probably mean deafness, the silver hooves are paint or something and will probably cause problems in the long run, and how on earth is an intact stallion so well behaved? When he realizes he and his master have been traveling with a White Demon and his Hellhorse all this time, he's so shocked he nearly goes into a HeroicBSOD.
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* In ''Storm Warning'', Karal and his mentor Ulrich meet a Herald and his Companion who are their assigned escorts to Haven. Karal sizes up the Companion in purely horsey terms -- graceful and clearly trained as a kind of service animal, but those blue eyes probably mean deafness, the silver hooves are paint painted or something and something, which will probably cause problems in the long run, and how on earth is an intact stallion so well behaved? When he realizes he and his master have been traveling with a White Demon and his Hellhorse all this time, he's so shocked he nearly goes into a HeroicBSOD.
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* The running gag of Firesong being bad at basic housekeeping. At one point Karal hears him singing and supposes he must be mending something -- singing keeps him from just swearing outright.
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* ''Sword of Ice'' has ''Chance'', which is an official HurtComfortFic expanding on an anecdote in ''Magic's Promise''. A gay soldier performs an AfterActionPatchUp on Vanyel after Van's clothes are cut off by lightning and makes an observation that is critical for the SexyDiscretionShot.
--> Fortunately, Vanyel's injuries were bad only above the waist.
--> Fortunately, Vanyel's injuries were bad only above the waist.
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* One of the few funny moments in ''Arrow's Fall'' is when Queen's Own Herald Talia is trying to adjust to her new workload. She asks Rolan what he thinks of the boring royal audience sessions she has to attend, and is delighted when he drops his head and does a convincing imitation of a human snore.
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* ''Seasons'' has ''A Midnight Clear''. The village of Kettleford's giant talking {{Friendly Neighborhood Spider}}s, which are sweet, childlike, cuddly, and wear sweaters and booties the villagers knitted for them, respond to a bandit attack by leaping on and envenomating the bandits, killing them horribly, and then [[ToServeMan consuming their liquefied insides]]. The KillerRabbit aspect is a little funny - before the bandits show up, the short story really works on portraying the lamb-sized spiders Rhapsody and Harmony as adorable and fully integrated into village life - but it's also darkly funny that poor [[Literature/LastHeraldMageTrilogy Vanyel Ashkevron]] sees this and goes "Wait, isn't that fucked up?" but the villagers and his Healer friend wave off his concerns and are even a little condescending to him for being bothered.
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** Naturally, when Kerowyn has earned Whites, she won't wear them, calling it the "just shoot me now" uniform.
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* Just the fact that when Kero had sex with Eldan for the first time, they were on top of Need, who was tucked under the bedroll. That seems... uncomfortable.
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* Just the fact that when Kero had sex with Eldan for the first time, they were on top of Need, who was tucked under the bedroll. That seems... uncomfortable. (At least the narrative tells us it was 'well padded to avoid making a lump').
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* How often Van's volunteered to be a ChosenConceptionPartner - he's sired ''four'' children! One can get the impression that his ChronicHeroSyndrome and belief that every time he ''can'' use whatever he has to help extends to his fertility and his pretty Gifted genes.
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* How often Van's volunteered to be a ChosenConceptionPartner - he's sired ''four'' children! One can get the impression that his ChronicHeroSyndrome and belief that every time he ''can'' use whatever he has to help extends to his fertility and his pretty Gifted genes. At one point he asks Yfandes if he should charge stud fees.
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* Elspeth's LongList of what the ''hertasi'' can and can't add to her Heraldic wardrobe, concluding with 'nothing sparkly or shiny to catch the light and give us away.' The one she is talking to promptly snarks about how inconspicuous a big white target in green field is.
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* Elspeth's LongList of what the ''hertasi'' can and can't add to her Heraldic wardrobe, concluding with 'nothing sparkly or shiny to catch the light and give us away.' The one she is talking to [[ServileSnarker promptly snarks snarks]] about how inconspicuous a big "big white target in green field field" is.
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** When he's finally been instated as King, there's one last bit of physical humor at his expense -- his chair of state is a prop throne from a theatre production, carved down to hide the Imperial motifs. This has made the wood rather thin in places, so he has to sit down ''very'' carefully so it doesn't collapse under him. (Though by this time he's unbent enough that he finds it funny too).
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* The short story ''Spring Planting at Fort Reach'' reveals that the awful, [[HorsingAround temperamental gray stud]] that Mekeal bought back in Vanyel's day was indeed bred to other lines, as Van had advised... but instead of keeping the stud's size without passing down his temperament, ''all'' that horse's descendants, several hundred years later, are as madly aggressive and difficult to work with as the original gray stud. The stables are full of violent horses that are with great difficulty and many injuries dragged out to work the fields in spring. Just as Companions stepped in to bully that original stud into behaving, now Tarma directs [[CoolHorse battlesteeds]] to help her teach a screaming, kicking horse to settle down.
* The short story ''Spring Planting at Fort Reach'' reveals that the awful, [[HorsingAround temperamental gray stud]] that Mekeal bought back in Vanyel's day was indeed bred to other lines, as Van had advised... but instead of keeping the stud's size without passing down his temperament, ''all'' that horse's descendants, several hundred years later, are as madly aggressive and difficult to work with as the original gray stud. The stables are full of violent horses that are with great difficulty and many injuries dragged out to work the fields in spring. Just as Companions stepped in to bully that original stud into behaving, now Tarma directs [[CoolHorse battlesteeds]] to help her teach a screaming, kicking horse to settle down.
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* In the aftermath of Talia's near-drowning in a half-frozen river, Sherrill gives her swimming lessons. Her 'final exam' is to be dumped into the river in winter (again), which she passes "with flying colors and chattering teeth."
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* Seized with the idea that the still-powerful ghost of Vanyel Ashkevron would be invaluable in preventing the second Cataclysm, Karal's approval is required before they can go about fetching him. To Karal Vanyel is [[TheDreaded a terrifying figure out of myth]] and a boogeyman used to scare children into behaving, so for all that he's learned to like and trust Heralds and Companions this gives him pause. Cue Florian, Altra, Firesong, and Need (sharing Firesong's senses) giving him essentially puppy-dog eyes.
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* Elspeth's LongList of what the ''hertasi'' can and can't add to her Heraldic wardrobe, concluding with 'nothing sparkly or shiny to catch the light and give us away.' The one she is talking to promptly snarks about how inconspicuous a big white target in green field is.
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* In Magic's Pawn Vanyel has an angst session after his first encounter with a [[OurDragonsAreDifferent colddrake]], thinking that he was cowardly for gaping in shock instead of immediately attacking it.
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* In Magic's Pawn Vanyel has an angst session after his first encounter with a [[OurDragonsAreDifferent colddrake]], thinking that he was cowardly for gaping in shock instead of immediately seeing a giant dragon for the first time and ''immediately attacking it.it''.
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* In Magic's Pawn Vanyel has an angst session after his first encounter with a [[OurDragonsAreDifferent colddrake]], thinking that he was cowardly for gaping in shock instead of immediately attacking it.
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* The light-hearted beginning of ''Arrow's Flight'', where farmgirl Herald Talia realizes she's got to memorize essentially the entire Valdemar Book of Peerage in a week or so because Princess Elspeth's investiture ceremony requires her to act as, well, herald. During the ceremony itself, Dirk and Kris, acting ThoseTwoGuys, start slipping information to Elspeth about the nobles so she can give them a personalized greeting -- it eventually becomes a contest, which Kris wins.
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* The light-hearted beginning of ''Arrow's Flight'', where farmgirl Herald Talia realizes she's got to memorize essentially the entire Valdemar Valdemaran Book of Peerage in a week or so because Princess Elspeth's investiture ceremony requires her the Queen's Own Herald to act as, well, herald. herald. During the ceremony itself, Heralds Dirk and Kris, acting as ThoseTwoGuys, start slipping information to Elspeth about the nobles so she can give them a personalized greeting -- it eventually becomes a contest, which Kris wins.
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-->'''Dirk''': You wouldn't have if I'd thought of the sheep first.
