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* At the beginning, Arceus reveals to Ash that Cyrus used him to test his [[RealityWarper reality manipulation abilities]] by screwing with his intelligence and skill levels. But what if the reason Arceus was able to save Ash was only because Cyrus ''deliberately'' left him for last before destroying the entire reality, as one final "Screw you", so to speak? Just goes to show what kind of man he was, devoid of any shred of humanity or empathy whatsoever.
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* Has Iris killed before? She grew up in the wild, and didn't seem to have much problem with the thought of killing Misty.
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* Has Iris killed before? She grew up in the wild, and didn't seem to have much problem with the thought of killing Misty.
Misty. While that might have been just her being overwhelmed by her emotions at the time, she grew up in the wilderness, and since NatureIsNotNice in this timeline...
** Moreover, if she did kill, how old was she at the time it happened?
** Moreover, if she did kill, how old was she at the time it happened?
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* Has Iris killed before? She grew up in the wild, and didn't seem to have much problem with the thought of killing Misty.
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** There's also another possible reason: Ash has memories of a timeliene in which he didn't have any powers, yet he managed to score plenty of victories, while Red doesn't have such memories. And thus, Red is merely using something he always had, yet Ash sees it as switching to "easy mode".
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** There's also another possible reason: Ash has memories of a timeliene timeline in which he didn't have any powers, yet he managed to score plenty of victories, while Red doesn't have such memories. And thus, Red is merely using something he always had, yet Ash sees it as switching to "easy mode".
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** There's also another possible reason: Ash has memories of a timeliene in which he didn't have any powers, yet he managed to score plenty of victories, while Red doesn't have such memories. And thus, Red is merely using something he always had, yet Ash sees it as switching to "easy mode".
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* The Bloodliner War seen in Chapter 26's possible future is filled with this, notably the fact that on the Bloodliner King's side appeared to be many possible [[spoiler: Ash siblings]]. This has two possible, unpleasant possibilities: first is that the Bloodliner King and allies are making them fight on their side with hostages and the like. The second is that Ash has enough legitimately [[spoiler:evil siblings]] to fill ''an entire army''. Neither's a pleasant thought.
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* The Bloodlines shown in fic correlate surprisingly well with the Devil Fruit Types of ''Franchise/OnePiece'' fame: Species Bloodlines are Zoans, Type/Hearts are Logia, and Technique are Paramecia. Dominion is a bit trickier, but it has some similarities to a similarly regarded power that is (probably) not related: Haki.
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* The Bloodlines shown in fic correlate surprisingly well with the Devil Fruit Types of ''Franchise/OnePiece'' fame: Species Bloodlines are Zoans, Type/Hearts are Logia, and Technique are Paramecia. Dominion is a bit trickier, but it has some similarities to a similarly regarded power that is (probably) not related: Conqueror's Haki. Conqueror's Haki only appears in one in a million people, which matches how Dominion class Bloodliners are supposed to be the rarest. Observation Haki and Armament Haki can be compared to Mega Evolution & Z-Moves since while anyone could use them, you generally have to put in some effort to get it working.
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* While among the Japanese based regions Johto seems to be the default backwards and problematic one (being mentioned to have issues with LGBT rights and Pokemon rights among others), Ula'ula Island is hinted to be the equivalent in Alola, being the origin point of not only Kamehameha and the overthrow of King Kahele, but also the island of origin for many Team Skull members. This seems a bit odd, though one has to remember that the main city on Ula'ula, Malie City, is heavily based on Johto. Though it does raise the question of if the author sees Johto as the Slytherin of the Pokemon world...
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*** Even so, it's pretty disquieting that she's so confused by human kindness. What kind of people did know growing up?
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*** Even so, it's pretty disquieting that she's so confused by human kindness. What kind of people did she know growing up?
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** To further the comparison, One Piece has Mythical Zoans, which would match well with a theoretical Legendary Species Bloodliner.
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* During Ash's dream sequence in chapter 24, he briefly dreams himself as Clovis la Britannia [[spoiler: with John Archer as Lelouch]]. This actually has more relevance than first appears: [[spoiler: The Britannian royals are half siblings like Ash and his growing possible family are hinted at being, and many, but not all of them share purple eyes just like many of Ash's siblings have red ones. They also tend to be tall (TeensAreShort in play aside), with Lelouch at 5 foot 10, Euphie at 5 foot 7, Cornelia around Lelouch's height or nearly 6 feet, Schneizel at 6 foot 7, and all of them shorter than the Emperor), with many of them having abilities that manifest in glowing eyes, which Ash's siblings have shown to have multiple times.]] Once can only hope these similarities don't extend to the part about murder and betrayal.
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* During Ash's dream sequence in chapter 24, he briefly dreams himself as [[Anime/CodeGeass Clovis la Britannia Britannia]] [[spoiler: with John Archer as Lelouch]]. This actually has more relevance than first appears: [[spoiler: The Britannian royals are half siblings like Ash and his growing possible family are hinted at being, and many, but not all of them share purple eyes just like many of Ash's siblings have red ones. They also tend to be tall (TeensAreShort in play aside), with Lelouch at 5 foot 10, Euphie at 5 foot 7, Cornelia around Lelouch's height or nearly 6 feet, Schneizel at 6 foot 7, and all of them shorter than the Emperor), with many of them having abilities that manifest in glowing eyes, which Ash's siblings have shown to have multiple times.]] Once can only hope these similarities don't extend to the part about murder and betrayal.
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* During Ash's dream sequence in chapter 24, he briefly dreams himself as Clovis la Britannia [[spoiler: with John Archer as Lelouch]]. This actually has more relevance than first appears: [[spoiler: The Britannian royals are half siblings like Ash and his growing possible family are hinted at being, and many, but not all of them share purple eyes just like many of Ash's siblings have red ones. They also tend to be tall (TeensAreShort in play aside), with Lelouch at 5 foot 10, Euphie at 5 foot 7, Cornelia around Lelouch's height or nearly 6 feet, Schneizel at 6 foot 7, and all of them shorter than the Emperor), with many of them having abilities that manifest in glowing eyes, which Ash's siblings have shown to have multiple times.]] Once can only hope these similarities don't extend to the part about murder and betrayal.
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* Kiawe mentions that Velvet is only 'among' the tallest girls at school when she first arrives, even if she does get taller later to take the height throne. That seems like a odd point to make, until you remember who one of his classmates is. Lillie. Given how tall her mother is in game, and that this Lillie is older, and that game Lillie is taller than both the player and her older brother, it's likely that Reset!Lillie was who Kiawe was thinking of.
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** And even if she does get the ''right'' person, she might not even stop to know the full story. Paul might be a {{Jerkass}}, but even he doesn't deserve to be horribly murdered (not to mention that he had ''no way'' to know that Ash would be affected by what he did with Primeape).
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* While it might seem like the Cipher Peons were dropping the Idiot Ball in assuming that Guzma is a Kahuna, given that he hardly looks the part. However the actual Kahuna of Ula' Ula Island is Nanu. Both look rather unprofessional, have white hair, wide eyes, are paler than other Alolans, are emotionally odd compared to regular people, can perform Z-Moves, are slobs, and wear dark cloths with arm accessories. Add in that Nanu uses Dark Types, which are traditionally used by Evil Team Leaders, and lives near the Team Skull H.Q, and it's not so odd that they could mistake the two for each other.
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* While At first, it might seem like the Cipher Peons were dropping grabbing the Idiot Ball IdiotBall in assuming that Guzma is a Kahuna, given that he hardly looks the part. However the actual Kahuna of Ula' Ula Island is Nanu. Both look rather unprofessional, have white hair, wide eyes, are paler than other Alolans, are emotionally odd compared to regular people, can perform Z-Moves, are slobs, and wear dark cloths clothes with arm accessories. Add in that Nanu uses Dark Types, which are traditionally used by Evil Team Leaders, and lives near the Team Skull H.Q, and it's not so odd that they could mistake the two for each other.
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* While it might seem like the Cipher Peons were dropping the Idiot Ball in assuming that Guzma is a Kahuna, given that he hardly looks the part. However the actual Kahuna of Ula' Ula Island is Nanu. Both look rather unprofessional, have white hair, wide eyes, are paler than other Alolans, are emotionally odd compared to regular people, can perform Z-Moves, are slobs, and wear dark cloths with arm accessories. Add in that Nanu uses Dark Types, which are traditionally used by Evil Team Leaders, and lives near the Team Skull H.Q, and it's not so odd that they could mistake the two for each other.
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* After finding out Ash knows the pain she's experienced, Belladonna resolves to hunt down the one responsible and make them suffer. But since she has no idea what happened, she could very easily draw the wrong conclusion, and thus go after somebody completely innocent.
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* [[spoiler:Anabel]] seems to have gotten into the Gringy City power plant pretty easily. When you consider she's a Psychic Bloodliner, and most of the Pokémon occupying it were Poison-types, it makes sense that they didn't present much of a challenge.
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* Ash specifically doesn't use his Bloodline ability to enhance the power of his Pokemon often and sees it as cheating. This initially was built as a comparison to Red, who has his own abilities and doesn't see it that way (arguing that it's his natural ability and compared not using it to Super-effective moves not being used), but with the Summer Camp Gaiden it opens another reason: He saw what cheating gets you there, and the person who did the cheating was someone Ash really, really did not like. No wonder he doesn't want to be associated with the behavior at all.
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* Cynthia comments that she dropped a cool crown she found. Given that this was in the [[WesternAnimation/AdventureTime Tomb of the Ice King]], it was probably a good thing she did not keep the thing.
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** To further the comparison, One Piece has Mythical Zoans, which would match well with a theoretical Legendary Species Bloodliner.
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* Misty is constantly surprised at Ash doing nice things for other people and not expecting anything in return, at one point even suspecting that this might stem from suffering a head injury. Just ''what the hell'' was her past like that such altruism is complangetely foreign to her?
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* Misty is constantly surprised at Ash doing nice things for other people and not expecting anything in return, at one point even suspecting that this might stem from suffering a head injury. Just ''what the hell'' was her past like that such altruism is complangetely completely foreign to her?
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* Belladonna and her lovers all have Bloodlines related to their [[DarkAndTroubledPast dark and troubled pasts]]:
** Belladonna grew up in the Old Cesspit neighborhood of Gringy City back when said city was still heavily polluted. Her mother was a hoarder, and her childhood home was filled with enough trash to attract Grimer. She's a Poison Heart Bloodliner.
** Aurora was disowned when her father's heart turned cold after her bloodline started to manifest. Said Bloodline? Ice Beam technique.
** Evanna's adopted father was beaten to death by an angry mob. The fact that she's a Power-Up Punch technique Bloodliner means that she could easily do the same to somebody else single-handedly.
** While we don't know the specifics of Vedia's past at the moment, she does mention she was all but ignored by her family. With this in mind, her Shadow Sneak bloodline, centered around a move that relies on going undetected, is very appropriate.
** Belladonna grew up in the Old Cesspit neighborhood of Gringy City back when said city was still heavily polluted. Her mother was a hoarder, and her childhood home was filled with enough trash to attract Grimer. She's a Poison Heart Bloodliner.
** Aurora was disowned when her father's heart turned cold after her bloodline started to manifest. Said Bloodline? Ice Beam technique.
** Evanna's adopted father was beaten to death by an angry mob. The fact that she's a Power-Up Punch technique Bloodliner means that she could easily do the same to somebody else single-handedly.
** While we don't know the specifics of Vedia's past at the moment, she does mention she was all but ignored by her family. With this in mind, her Shadow Sneak bloodline, centered around a move that relies on going undetected, is very appropriate.
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* Misty is constantly surprised at Ash doing nice things for other people and not expecting anything in return, at one point even suspecting that this might stem from suffering a head injury. Just ''what the hell'' was her past like that such altruism is completely complangetely foreign to her?
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* Despite coming from a rural area of Alola and being old, Hapu's grandmother does not have any issues with Hapu's sexuality. This is a bit odd, given that the writer has a slight hint of disdain for the rural Johto and implied it's a bit homophobic, though there might be a case of deliberate values dissonance going on. Alola appears to be it's own country, or at least not part of Unova, and has a really distinct culture. Real life Hawaiian culture was actually fairly open to homosexuality. Rural Alola probably does not have the same biases that rural Johto has.
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** Anyone who's been in the US Army will tell you that a Sergeant Major is an extremely experienced and knowledgeable soldier.
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*** Even so, it's pretty disquieting that she's so confused by human kindness. What kind of people did know growing up?
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** Being the victim of child neglect to the point that people wouldn't have been surprised if her parents had outright abandoned her. Said abandonment only being prevented because of the bad publicity it would have generated.
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* The Bloodlines shown in fic correlate surprisingly well with the Devil Fruit Types of Franchise/OnePiece ''Franchise/OnePiece'' fame: Species Bloodlines are Zoans, Type/Hearts are Logia, and Technique are Paramecia. Dominion is a bit trickier, but it has some similarities to a similarly regarded power that is (probably) not related: Haki.
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* The Bloodlines shown in fic correlate surprisingly well with the Devil Fruit Types of OnePiece Franchise/OnePiece fame: Species Bloodlines are Zoans, Type/Hearts are Logia, and Technique are Paramecia. Dominion is a bit trickier, but it has some similarities to a similarly regarded power that is (probably) not related: Haki.
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!! FridgeBrilliance
* The Bloodlines shown in fic correlate surprisingly well with the Devil Fruit Types of OnePiece fame: Species Bloodlines are Zoans, Type/Hearts are Logia, and Technique are Paramecia. Dominion is a bit trickier, but it has some similarities to a similarly regarded power that is (probably) not related: Haki.
* A minor one: rather than nicknames, Lt. Surge is fond of giving his Pokemon army ranks based on their power, yet his most powerful Raichu is just Sergeant Major, which would make somebody wonder why didn't he choose cooler ranks like Captain, Commander, Colonel or General. Well, given that Surge is a ''Lieutenant'', it wouldn't make much sense to give his Pokemon, which are technically his subordinates, bigger ranks than his.
* While it may seem odd that Whitney has so many Miltank, it is actually a case of RealityIsUnrealistic. U.S Dairy Farms average [[http://www.ansc.purdue.edu/faen/dairy%20facts.html 135 Cows per farm]] and she is from farm stock.
* Serena's apparent [[spoiler:shapeshifting abilities]] make sense once you remember the Generation VI protagonists were the first customizable ones in the series.
!! FridgeHorror
* Misty is constantly surprised at Ash doing nice things for other people and not expecting anything in return, at one point even suspecting that this might stem from suffering a head injury. Just ''what the hell'' was her past like that such altruism is completely foreign to her?
* Just how Pokemonish are Bloodliners? Could a Bloodliner be affected by Attract or the Shuckle Juice or the Crystal Bells being damaged? Hell, could a Bloodliner with Attract affect humans with it?!
* Dexter says that Vileplume releasing toxic pollen is a reflexive defense mechanism, not a deliberate action. This raises some disturbing questions. What if a wild Vileplume accidentally poisons one of its friends or relatives? What if a trained Vileplume accidentally poisons its trainer or one of its teammates?
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!! FridgeBrilliance
* The Bloodlines shown in fic correlate surprisingly well with the Devil Fruit Types of OnePiece fame: Species Bloodlines are Zoans, Type/Hearts are Logia, and Technique are Paramecia. Dominion is a bit trickier, but it has some similarities to a similarly regarded power that is (probably) not related: Haki.
* A minor one: rather than nicknames, Lt. Surge is fond of giving his Pokemon army ranks based on their power, yet his most powerful Raichu is just Sergeant Major, which would make somebody wonder why didn't he choose cooler ranks like Captain, Commander, Colonel or General. Well, given that Surge is a ''Lieutenant'', it wouldn't make much sense to give his Pokemon, which are technically his subordinates, bigger ranks than his.
* While it may seem odd that Whitney has so many Miltank, it is actually a case of RealityIsUnrealistic. U.S Dairy Farms average [[http://www.ansc.purdue.edu/faen/dairy%20facts.html 135 Cows per farm]] and she is from farm stock.
* Serena's apparent [[spoiler:shapeshifting abilities]] make sense once you remember the Generation VI protagonists were the first customizable ones in the series.
!! FridgeHorror
* Misty is constantly surprised at Ash doing nice things for other people and not expecting anything in return, at one point even suspecting that this might stem from suffering a head injury. Just ''what the hell'' was her past like that such altruism is completely foreign to her?
* Just how Pokemonish are Bloodliners? Could a Bloodliner be affected by Attract or the Shuckle Juice or the Crystal Bells being damaged? Hell, could a Bloodliner with Attract affect humans with it?!
* Dexter says that Vileplume releasing toxic pollen is a reflexive defense mechanism, not a deliberate action. This raises some disturbing questions. What if a wild Vileplume accidentally poisons one of its friends or relatives? What if a trained Vileplume accidentally poisons its trainer or one of its teammates?
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