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* MagicallyBindingContract: Everlasting Oaths, originally appearing in "Covention," are expanded on slightly. Breaking one incurs a penalty on the oathbreaker, taking some of their magical power away permanently. Breaking too many of them can render an oahtbreaker utterly powerless. When asked to make one to not share anything they speak about with Darius, Lilith refuses because the terms are too broad, and Darius agrees to amended terms that are less restrictive. Lilith also thinks it was stupid of Amity to make one with Luz; Not having any innate power at all, Luz would not suffer any consequences of breaking it, while Amity would.
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* ManipulativeBitch: Lilith, of course. She only watches after Luz to acquire the portal, keeps her from suspecting anything by going along with her antics, tricks Amity into keeping her secret so she doesn't snoop around, all while maintaining contact with the Emperor's Coven.
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* ManipulativeBitch: Lilith, of course. She Lilith only watches after Luz to acquire the portal, keeps her from suspecting anything by going along with her antics, tricks Amity into keeping her secret so she doesn't snoop around, all while maintaining contact with the Emperor's Coven.Coven.
* MeaningfulEcho: In chapter 21, after a lot of CharacterDevelopment and growing out of her blind obedience to Belos, Lilith jokingly calls Darius a "coven stooge," the same thing Eda used to call her.
* MeaningfulEcho: In chapter 21, after a lot of CharacterDevelopment and growing out of her blind obedience to Belos, Lilith jokingly calls Darius a "coven stooge," the same thing Eda used to call her.
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* LampshadeHanging: Eda's dead, but her ghost appears to be haunting Lilith and neither of them can figure out why.
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* LampshadeHanging: Eda's dead, but her ghost appears to be haunting KillTheParentRaiseTheChild: Lilith kills Eda, albeit unintentionally, and neither of them can figure out why.proceeds to become Luz's caretaker in her place. Initially she's doing it with ulterior motives, but quickly grows to care about Luz like the child she didn't know she wanted.
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* AdaptationalSexuality: By the time Lilith was revealed as aromantic and asexual in the show proper, her former relationship with Odalia had already been established. As such, Lilith is demiromantic and asexual in the fic.
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* AdaptationalSexuality: AdaptationalSexuality:
** By the time Lilith was revealed as aromantic and asexual in the show proper, her former relationship with Odalia had already been established. As such, Lilith is demiromantic and asexual in thefic.fic.
** Alador is also aromantic, while Odalia is either somewhere on the aro spectrum or lesbian.
** By the time Lilith was revealed as aromantic and asexual in the show proper, her former relationship with Odalia had already been established. As such, Lilith is demiromantic and asexual in the
** Alador is also aromantic, while Odalia is either somewhere on the aro spectrum or lesbian.
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* InstantlyProvenWrong: When Lilith offers an apology gift for a recent offense, Luz declares that she's not the kind of girl who can be bribed like that. This resolution lasts all the way until Lilith dumps a scroll in her lap, and all anger is instantly forgotten as Luz squeals in joy.
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* ShownTheirWork: In chapter 20, Luz makes la bandera dominicana, the real life national dish of the Dominican Republic, where her family is from, and she gives Lilith a short history lesson about how the dish is called that because ingredients share a colour with the dominican flag. She also throws in a BilingualBonus by calling it la bandera isla hriviendo, "the Boiling Isles flag."
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* ShownTheirWork: In chapter 20, Luz makes la bandera dominicana, the real life national dish of the Dominican Republic, where her family is from, and she gives Lilith a short history lesson about how the dish is called that because ingredients share a colour with the dominican flag. She also throws in a BilingualBonus by calling it la bandera isla hriviendo, hirviendo, "the Boiling Isles flag."
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* BitchSlap: Amity gives Lilith a ''[[LaserGuidedKarma very]]'' [[LaserGuidedKarma deserving one]] [[spoiler:after hearing about how Lilith stranded Luz back in the Human Realm and stole the portal]].
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* BitchSlap: Amity gives Lilith a ''[[LaserGuidedKarma very]]'' [[LaserGuidedKarma ''very'' deserving one]] one [[spoiler:after hearing about how Lilith stranded Luz back in the Human Realm and stole the portal]].portal]].
* BlackComedy: Viney is fond of this kind of humor, making a few jokes about wanting to harvest Luz's organs. Luz laughs along with her but is a bit worried that she's not joking.
* BlackComedy: Viney is fond of this kind of humor, making a few jokes about wanting to harvest Luz's organs. Luz laughs along with her but is a bit worried that she's not joking.
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* BrickJoke: Midway through chapter 26, Boscha points out a sea serpent spawn native to the Bunion Bay stealing a bag from a tourist. At the end of the chapter, one steals Luz' shoes and knocks her over [[spoiler:just as she was about to ask Amity out]].
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* ConnectedAllAlong: Turns out that Lilith and Odalia were the ones who made Amity's hideout in the library when they were young.
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* ChekhovsGun: Midway through chapter 26, Boscha points out a sea serpent spawn native to the Bunion Bay stealing a bag from a tourist. At the end of the chapter, one steals Luz' shoes and knocks her over [[spoiler:just as she was about to ask Amity out]].
* ConnectedAllAlong: Turns out that Lilith and Odalia were the ones who made Amity's hideout in the library when they were young. She also helped Eda make the room of shortcuts, since the magic in question was a bit too complicated for her alone.
* ConnectedAllAlong: Turns out that Lilith and Odalia were the ones who made Amity's hideout in the library when they were young. She also helped Eda make the room of shortcuts, since the magic in question was a bit too complicated for her alone.
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* ShownTheirWork: In chapter 20, Luz makes la bandera dominicana, the real life national dish of the Dominican Republic, where her family is from, and she gives Lilith a short history lesson about how the dish is called that because ingredients share a colour with the dominican flag. She also throws in a BilingualBonus by calling it la bandera isla hriviendo, "the Boiling Isles flag."
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* SuspiciouslySpecificDenial: When Luz gets dragged into the secret shortcuts room, the narration insists that she didn't yelp in fear, nor did she curl up on the floor afterward.
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* CentralTheme: Redemption, specifically LoveRedeems. Luz expresses a strong belief that everyone, no matter how awful, has the potential to become better and deserves the chance to try. Evident of this, Lilith starts out the fic as, to not put too fine a point on it, a horrible, arrogant, selfish person, but with time and love, especially the maternal love she has for Luz, develops into a caring and protective mother figure for the girl. Both her and Luz's stories also show them reaching a hand out to someone who was an antagonist in the original show, giving them the support and love to become better.
