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* MoralDissonance[=/=]ScrewTheRulesIHaveConnections: {{Discussed|Trope}}. A conversation between the nonhuman members of the ''Bajor'' command crew reveals that the Federation law banning Augments from Starfleet or public office (see [=DS9=]: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E16DrBashirIPresume Dr. Bashir, I Presume]]") not only runs counter to Federation values but is actually unconstitutional. However, the humans are terrified of Augments thanks to the Eugenics Wars, and because they have so much political mojo in the Federation nobody's had the balls to mount a legal challenge and get it struck down.
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* ScrewTheRulesIHaveConnections: {{Discussed|Trope}}. A conversation between the nonhuman members of the ''Bajor'' command crew reveals that the Federation law banning Augments from Starfleet or public office (see [=DS9=]: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E16DrBashirIPresume Dr. Bashir, I Presume]]") not only runs counter to Federation values but is actually unconstitutional. However, the humans are terrified of Augments thanks to the Eugenics Wars, and because they have so much political mojo in the Federation nobody's had the balls to mount a legal challenge and get it struck down.
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* MoralDissonance[=/=]ScrewTheRulesIHaveConnections: {{Discussed|Trope}}. A conversation between the nonhuman members of the ''Bajor'' command crew reveals that the Federation law banning Augments from Starfleet or public office (see Series/DS9: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E16DrBashirIPresume Dr. Bashir, I Presume]]") not only runs counter to Federation values but is actually unconstitutional. However, the humans are terrified of Augments thanks to the Eugenics Wars, and because they have so much political mojo in the Federation nobody's had the balls to mount a legal challenge and get it struck down.
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* MoralDissonance[=/=]ScrewTheRulesIHaveConnections: {{Discussed|Trope}}. A conversation between the nonhuman members of the ''Bajor'' command crew reveals that the Federation law banning Augments from Starfleet or public office (see Series/DS9: [=DS9=]: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E16DrBashirIPresume Dr. Bashir, I Presume]]") not only runs counter to Federation values but is actually unconstitutional. However, the humans are terrified of Augments thanks to the Eugenics Wars, and because they have so much political mojo in the Federation nobody's had the balls to mount a legal challenge and get it struck down.
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* CallBack: By the parameters of the literary challenge Lore's head was transported to Facility 4028 after he was killed by the ''Enterprise''-D crew in Series/{{TNG}}: "[[Recap/StarTrekTheNextGenerationS6E24S7E1Descent Descent, Part II]]".
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* CallBack: By the parameters of the literary challenge Lore's head was transported to Facility 4028 after he was killed by the ''Enterprise''-D crew in Series/{{TNG}}: Series/StarTrekTheNextGeneration: "[[Recap/StarTrekTheNextGenerationS6E24S7E1Descent Descent, Part II]]".
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* TheOnlyOne: Played with. The ''Bajor'' is actually the ''second'' starship to respond to the break-in at Facility 4028, but the USS ''Brisbane'' is a much older and less-capable ''Miranda''-class.
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* TheOnlyOne: Played with. The ''Bajor'' is actually the ''second'' starship to respond to the break-in at Facility 4028, but the USS ''Brisbane'' is a much older and less-capable ''Miranda''-class. The ''Bajor'' takes the lead in dealing with the problem due to having capabilities the ''Brisbane'' doesn't.
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* TheOnlyOne: Played with. The ''Bajor'' is actually the ''second'' starship to respond to the break-in at Facility 4028, but the USS ''Brisbane'' is a much older and less-capable ''Miranda''-class.
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* DarkIsNotEvil: According to Dul'krah's religion the god of the night is a watchful guardian deity rather than an evil one.
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* YoureNotMyType: Dul'krah is apparently the only humanoid in known space with no interest in Orion females, if what he says when he rebuffs Columba Motta's seduction attempt is any judge.
--> "And without [your pheromones], your form does not attract me: you have too few horns."
--> "And without [your pheromones], your form does not attract me: you have too few horns."
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* RuggedScars: Commander Imara Stadi is described as having one that starts next to her eye, crosses her mouth, and ends under her chin.
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* RuggedScars: Commander Imara Stadi is described as having one that starts next to her eye, crosses her mouth, and ends under her chin.
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* IgnoreTheFanservice: Thanks to preparing beforehand, Dul'krah is immune to Columba Ungaretti's feminine wiles when she turns them on him. With the pheromones from her Orion half chemically blocked, he doesn't find her attractive because she has "too few horns."
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* NotDistractedByTheSexy: Thanks to preparing beforehand, Dul'krah is immune to Columba Ungaretti's feminine wiles when she turns them on him. With the pheromones from her Orion half chemically blocked, he doesn't find her attractive because she has "too few horns."
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* JackBauerInterrogationTechnique: Averted. Dul'krah extracts the information he wants from Columba Ungaretti by drawing a knife ... then picking his fingernails with it for over half an hour, all the while just ''staring'' at her. The fact that he's nearly seven feet tall and "built like a Cardassian main battle tank" in Eleya's words, and has lidless[[labelnote:*]]his species has nictitating membranes, a second, transparent set of eyelids[[/labelnote]] vertical slit pupils helps, too.
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* JackBauerInterrogationTechnique: Averted.{{Subverted}}. Dul'krah extracts the information he wants from Columba Ungaretti by drawing a knife ... then picking his fingernails with it for over half an hour, all the while just ''staring'' at her. The fact that he's nearly seven feet tall and "built like a Cardassian main battle tank" in Eleya's words, and has lidless[[labelnote:*]]his species has nictitating membranes, a second, transparent set of eyelids[[/labelnote]] vertical slit pupils helps, too.
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** A pair of them directed at the VocalMinority wanting to see ''Constitution''-class and ''Miranda''-class starships playable at endgame in ''STO'', an idea to which the author is vocally opposed on the forums. The fact that the ''Miranda''-class USS ''Brisbane'' is still in one piece despite being over a century old is described as miraculous, while the ''Bajor'' delivers a massive CurbStompBattle to [[spoiler:the USS ''Enterprise''-A]].
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* WeaponOfIntimidation: Dul'krah uses the mere presence of a combat knife as part of his "interrogation by glaring and looking scary" technique.
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''[[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10530286/1/The-Headhunt The Headhunt]]'' is another entry in the growing body of ''VideoGame/StarTrekOnline'' fics by Tropers/StarSword, written for [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?t=1146291 Literary Challenge 65: Myths & Lore]] on the ''STO'' forums.
The USS ''Bajor'' responds to reports of a break-in at [[TheAlcatraz Facility 4028]], and security chief Lieutenant Dul'krah, Clan Korekh is assigned to investigate.
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!!This work provides examples of the following tropes:
* TheAlcatraz: Facility 4028 is ''supposed'' to be this, but Dul'krah remarks that "for a supposedly utterly secure prison, 4028 has had remarkable difficulties of late."
* BioAugmentation: The Mottas have been known to get their soldiers genetically enhanced on independent fringeworlds like Adigeon Prime where such augs are legal. Dul'krah also reveals that his entire species is genetically enhanced to be resistant to disease and radiation and "able to subsist on materials that most would not even consider edible," which they believe dates back to the aftermath of their self-inflicted ApocalypseHow.
* CallBack: By the parameters of the literary challenge Lore's head was transported to Facility 4028 after he was killed by the ''Enterprise''-D crew in Series/{{TNG}}: "[[Recap/StarTrekTheNextGenerationS6E24S7E1Descent Descent, Part II]]".
* CodeName: The files regarding Lore are classified under the code word "ICARIAN BRIGHT GEPPETTO". May qualify as a MeaningfulName, too: "icarian" is an IcarusAllusion, and "Geppetto" was the toymaker in ''[[Literature/TheAdventuresOfPinocchio Pinocchio]]''. Both could be applied to Noonien Soong, the creator of Lore and Data who was murdered by the former.
* CurbStompBattle: Eleya derides the Motta-controlled [[spoiler:USS ''Enterprise''-A]] as a "hundred-twenty-five-year-old museum piece with some newer tech bolted on" before casually catching up to it when it's going flat-out and blasting it out of warp in about three seconds.
* ADayInTheLimelight: Told from the perspective of Dul'krah, Clan Korekh, the ''Bajor''[='s=] security chief, rather than Eleya, and highlights his psychology. Among other things his internal monologue refers to himself and the other command crew members of the ''Bajor'' as "elders" and Captain Kanril as the "great elder".
* GenericEthnicCrimeGang: There's a mention that the Ver Eshalakh have had encounters with ''le Milieu'', a.k.a. Corsican mafia. It didn't go well for ''le Milieu''.
* HalfHumanHybrid: Columba Ungaretti is half-Italian, half-Orion.
* {{Homage}}: The scene where the ''Bajor'' casually catches up to the [[spoiler:''Enterprise''-A]] and blows it out of warp was directly based on the similar scene in ''Film/StarTrekIntoDarkness'', with the ''Bajor'' standing in for the USS ''Vengeance''.
--> '''Author's Note:''' Say what you will about the writing and [[SciFiWritersHaveNoSenseOfScale scale issues]], but [Creator/JJAbrams has] the imagery ''cold''.
* IAmXSonOfY: Dul'krah introduces himself as "Dul’krah, son of Var’takh, Home-Clan Korekh, Blood-Clan Rustra, Ship-Clan Bajor."
* InertialDampening: An inertial damper failure on the [[spoiler:''Enterprise''-A]] reduces the entire crew to a reddish goo.
* JackBauerInterrogationTechnique: Averted. Dul'krah extracts the information he wants from Columba Ungaretti by drawing a knife ... then picking his fingernails with it for over half an hour, all the while just ''staring'' at her. The fact that he's nearly seven feet tall and "built like a Cardassian main battle tank" in Eleya's words, and has lidless[[labelnote:*]]his species has nictitating membranes, a second, transparent set of eyelids[[/labelnote]] vertical slit pupils helps, too.
* LudicrousGibs: The logical result of a PhlebotinumBreakdown in a starship's InertialDampening systems.
--> '''Lieutenant Kate [=McMillan=]:''' Where the hell is the crew? And what the hell is ''this'' shit?\\
'''Nameless security guy:''' L.T., this shit ''is'' the crew.\\
'''[=McMillan=]:''' ''([[VomitingCop throws up]])''
* TheMafia: The break-in at Facility 4028 was orchestrated by the (fictional) Famiglia Motta, a member of La Cosa Nostra that branched out into space after humanity went FTL. They've reportedly formed alliances with alien organized crime such as the Orion Syndicate, and seemed to have dropped the male domination used in present day settings (Dul'krah interrogates a female capo).
* MeaningfulName:
** In their own tongue, the name of Dul'krah's species, "Pe'khdar", means "the last Clans", which is what they were reduced to after they nuked themselves into oblivion.
** The USS ''Brisbane'' is first on the scene at Facility 4028. Brisbane, Australia was one of the places convicts SentencedToDownUnder were shipped.
* MoralDissonance[=/=]ScrewTheRulesIHaveConnections: {{Discussed|Trope}}. A conversation between the nonhuman members of the ''Bajor'' command crew reveals that the Federation law banning Augments from Starfleet or public office (see Series/DS9: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E16DrBashirIPresume Dr. Bashir, I Presume]]") not only runs counter to Federation values but is actually unconstitutional. However, the humans are terrified of Augments thanks to the Eugenics Wars, and because they have so much political mojo in the Federation nobody's had the balls to mount a legal challenge and get it struck down.
* NarrativeProfanityFilter: [[spoiler:Lore's head]] has just enough time to say "something uncomplimentary" before Eleya turns him off.
* NoodleIncident:
** Dul'krah mentions a prior break-in at Facility 4028 carried out by a rogue Starfleet group with a Section 31 obsession.
** The Ver Eshalakh's prior encounters with ''[[GenericEthnicCrimeGang le Milieu]]''.
** Tess Phohl mentions a "clusterfrak at Torgo VII a few years back" involving the Motta family.
* NotDistractedByTheSexy: Thanks to preparing beforehand, Dul'krah is immune to Columba Ungaretti's feminine wiles when she turns them on him. With the pheromones from her Orion half chemically blocked, he doesn't find her attractive because she has "too few horns."
* SelfFulfillingProphecy: {{Discussed|Trope}}. Tess Phohl notes that a good part of the reason so many Augments turn bad is because the Federation treats them like crap, whereas "folks like the Mottas actually appreciate them."
* ShoutOut:
** There's a reference to a NoodleIncident where some rogue Starfleet officers with a Section 31 obsession broke into Facility 4028 to extract an ally. This is a reference to the Foundry series ''[[Recap/StarTrekOnlineFoundryStarTrekAllegiance Star Trek: Allegiance]]''.
** The C.O. of the USS ''Brisbane'' is named Sumati Chennapragada, the viewpoint character of a ''Franchise/StarTrek'' {{lemon}} titled "A Bad Day for Shore Leave" (which we won't link due to it being massively {{NSFW}}).
* SpacePolice: Dul'krah used to be part of the Ver Eshalakh, his species' military police.
* TakeThat:
** Eleya is overheard ranting at somebody who wants to have the ''Bajor'' be used as the set for a movie, meant to poke fun at one of the other prompts for the LC.
** A pair of them directed at the VocalMinority wanting to see ''Constitution''-class and ''Miranda''-class starships playable at endgame in ''STO'', an idea to which the author is vocally opposed on the forums. The fact that the ''Miranda''-class USS ''Brisbane'' is still in one piece despite being over a century old is described as miraculous, while the ''Bajor'' delivers a massive CurbStompBattle to [[spoiler:the USS ''Enterprise''-A]].
* VomitingCop: Kate [=McMillan=] upchucks upon finding out that the gunk coating the inside of the [[spoiler:''Enterprise''-A's]] bridge [[LudicrousGibs is the crew]], after an InertialDampening failure.
* WeaponOfIntimidation: Dul'krah uses the mere presence of a combat knife as part of his "interrogation by glaring and looking scary" technique.
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The USS ''Bajor'' responds to reports of a break-in at [[TheAlcatraz Facility 4028]], and security chief Lieutenant Dul'krah, Clan Korekh is assigned to investigate.
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!!This work provides examples of the following tropes:
* TheAlcatraz: Facility 4028 is ''supposed'' to be this, but Dul'krah remarks that "for a supposedly utterly secure prison, 4028 has had remarkable difficulties of late."
* BioAugmentation: The Mottas have been known to get their soldiers genetically enhanced on independent fringeworlds like Adigeon Prime where such augs are legal. Dul'krah also reveals that his entire species is genetically enhanced to be resistant to disease and radiation and "able to subsist on materials that most would not even consider edible," which they believe dates back to the aftermath of their self-inflicted ApocalypseHow.
* CallBack: By the parameters of the literary challenge Lore's head was transported to Facility 4028 after he was killed by the ''Enterprise''-D crew in Series/{{TNG}}: "[[Recap/StarTrekTheNextGenerationS6E24S7E1Descent Descent, Part II]]".
* CodeName: The files regarding Lore are classified under the code word "ICARIAN BRIGHT GEPPETTO". May qualify as a MeaningfulName, too: "icarian" is an IcarusAllusion, and "Geppetto" was the toymaker in ''[[Literature/TheAdventuresOfPinocchio Pinocchio]]''. Both could be applied to Noonien Soong, the creator of Lore and Data who was murdered by the former.
* CurbStompBattle: Eleya derides the Motta-controlled [[spoiler:USS ''Enterprise''-A]] as a "hundred-twenty-five-year-old museum piece with some newer tech bolted on" before casually catching up to it when it's going flat-out and blasting it out of warp in about three seconds.
* ADayInTheLimelight: Told from the perspective of Dul'krah, Clan Korekh, the ''Bajor''[='s=] security chief, rather than Eleya, and highlights his psychology. Among other things his internal monologue refers to himself and the other command crew members of the ''Bajor'' as "elders" and Captain Kanril as the "great elder".
* GenericEthnicCrimeGang: There's a mention that the Ver Eshalakh have had encounters with ''le Milieu'', a.k.a. Corsican mafia. It didn't go well for ''le Milieu''.
* HalfHumanHybrid: Columba Ungaretti is half-Italian, half-Orion.
* {{Homage}}: The scene where the ''Bajor'' casually catches up to the [[spoiler:''Enterprise''-A]] and blows it out of warp was directly based on the similar scene in ''Film/StarTrekIntoDarkness'', with the ''Bajor'' standing in for the USS ''Vengeance''.
--> '''Author's Note:''' Say what you will about the writing and [[SciFiWritersHaveNoSenseOfScale scale issues]], but [Creator/JJAbrams has] the imagery ''cold''.
* IAmXSonOfY: Dul'krah introduces himself as "Dul’krah, son of Var’takh, Home-Clan Korekh, Blood-Clan Rustra, Ship-Clan Bajor."
* InertialDampening: An inertial damper failure on the [[spoiler:''Enterprise''-A]] reduces the entire crew to a reddish goo.
* JackBauerInterrogationTechnique: Averted. Dul'krah extracts the information he wants from Columba Ungaretti by drawing a knife ... then picking his fingernails with it for over half an hour, all the while just ''staring'' at her. The fact that he's nearly seven feet tall and "built like a Cardassian main battle tank" in Eleya's words, and has lidless[[labelnote:*]]his species has nictitating membranes, a second, transparent set of eyelids[[/labelnote]] vertical slit pupils helps, too.
* LudicrousGibs: The logical result of a PhlebotinumBreakdown in a starship's InertialDampening systems.
--> '''Lieutenant Kate [=McMillan=]:''' Where the hell is the crew? And what the hell is ''this'' shit?\\
'''Nameless security guy:''' L.T., this shit ''is'' the crew.\\
'''[=McMillan=]:''' ''([[VomitingCop throws up]])''
* TheMafia: The break-in at Facility 4028 was orchestrated by the (fictional) Famiglia Motta, a member of La Cosa Nostra that branched out into space after humanity went FTL. They've reportedly formed alliances with alien organized crime such as the Orion Syndicate, and seemed to have dropped the male domination used in present day settings (Dul'krah interrogates a female capo).
* MeaningfulName:
** In their own tongue, the name of Dul'krah's species, "Pe'khdar", means "the last Clans", which is what they were reduced to after they nuked themselves into oblivion.
** The USS ''Brisbane'' is first on the scene at Facility 4028. Brisbane, Australia was one of the places convicts SentencedToDownUnder were shipped.
* MoralDissonance[=/=]ScrewTheRulesIHaveConnections: {{Discussed|Trope}}. A conversation between the nonhuman members of the ''Bajor'' command crew reveals that the Federation law banning Augments from Starfleet or public office (see Series/DS9: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E16DrBashirIPresume Dr. Bashir, I Presume]]") not only runs counter to Federation values but is actually unconstitutional. However, the humans are terrified of Augments thanks to the Eugenics Wars, and because they have so much political mojo in the Federation nobody's had the balls to mount a legal challenge and get it struck down.
* NarrativeProfanityFilter: [[spoiler:Lore's head]] has just enough time to say "something uncomplimentary" before Eleya turns him off.
* NoodleIncident:
** Dul'krah mentions a prior break-in at Facility 4028 carried out by a rogue Starfleet group with a Section 31 obsession.
** The Ver Eshalakh's prior encounters with ''[[GenericEthnicCrimeGang le Milieu]]''.
** Tess Phohl mentions a "clusterfrak at Torgo VII a few years back" involving the Motta family.
* NotDistractedByTheSexy: Thanks to preparing beforehand, Dul'krah is immune to Columba Ungaretti's feminine wiles when she turns them on him. With the pheromones from her Orion half chemically blocked, he doesn't find her attractive because she has "too few horns."
* SelfFulfillingProphecy: {{Discussed|Trope}}. Tess Phohl notes that a good part of the reason so many Augments turn bad is because the Federation treats them like crap, whereas "folks like the Mottas actually appreciate them."
* ShoutOut:
** There's a reference to a NoodleIncident where some rogue Starfleet officers with a Section 31 obsession broke into Facility 4028 to extract an ally. This is a reference to the Foundry series ''[[Recap/StarTrekOnlineFoundryStarTrekAllegiance Star Trek: Allegiance]]''.
** The C.O. of the USS ''Brisbane'' is named Sumati Chennapragada, the viewpoint character of a ''Franchise/StarTrek'' {{lemon}} titled "A Bad Day for Shore Leave" (which we won't link due to it being massively {{NSFW}}).
* SpacePolice: Dul'krah used to be part of the Ver Eshalakh, his species' military police.
* TakeThat:
** Eleya is overheard ranting at somebody who wants to have the ''Bajor'' be used as the set for a movie, meant to poke fun at one of the other prompts for the LC.
** A pair of them directed at the VocalMinority wanting to see ''Constitution''-class and ''Miranda''-class starships playable at endgame in ''STO'', an idea to which the author is vocally opposed on the forums. The fact that the ''Miranda''-class USS ''Brisbane'' is still in one piece despite being over a century old is described as miraculous, while the ''Bajor'' delivers a massive CurbStompBattle to [[spoiler:the USS ''Enterprise''-A]].
* VomitingCop: Kate [=McMillan=] upchucks upon finding out that the gunk coating the inside of the [[spoiler:''Enterprise''-A's]] bridge [[LudicrousGibs is the crew]], after an InertialDampening failure.
* WeaponOfIntimidation: Dul'krah uses the mere presence of a combat knife as part of his "interrogation by glaring and looking scary" technique.
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