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* WhatCouldHaveBeen: [[WordOfGod The author has said]] that he originally intended to have a scene where a young Chrysalis (either missed by Celestia's forces or [[WouldntHurtAChild spared for being a child]]) finds Metamorpha's body in Fillydelphia and swears revenge.
** The first fight with Discord would have ended with Celestia delivering a NoHoldsBarredBeatdown on Discord, and later Celestia and Luna would face off against Discord and his army of Changelings with the first of the Legionnaires.
** Also, Cadence was originally Luna's daughter, but this was cut for pacing issues and [[WifeHusbandry potential issues with her relationship with Shining Armor]].
** There were multiple changes made to the Siege of Canterlot -- among other things, the kind priest Celestia met beforehand was supposed to perform a HeroicSacrifice to protect her, and the Loyalist Lunar Knights were supposed to use the crystal caverns underneath the city to attack the Traitor Legions from behind.
** The first fight with Discord would have ended with Celestia delivering a NoHoldsBarredBeatdown on Discord, and later Celestia and Luna would face off against Discord and his army of Changelings with the first of the Legionnaires.
** Also, Cadence was originally Luna's daughter, but this was cut for pacing issues and [[WifeHusbandry potential issues with her relationship with Shining Armor]].
** There were multiple changes made to the Siege of Canterlot -- among other things, the kind priest Celestia met beforehand was supposed to perform a HeroicSacrifice to protect her, and the Loyalist Lunar Knights were supposed to use the crystal caverns underneath the city to attack the Traitor Legions from behind.
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*BrokenAce: Present-Day Celestia is a far cry from the confident warrior queen we saw in the first fic.
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** A ponified version of [[VideoGame/DawnOfWar Gabriel Angelos]] is mentioned in a discussion between Scorpan and a fellow Shadowbolt; apparently, he's [[ShrinkingViolet Fluttersy's]] father
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* ManipulativeBastard: Scorpan is playing his supposed allies in order to advance his own agenda at their expense.
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* ShoutOut: Many of the Traitor Legionnaires are named after G1 villains.
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**A ponified version of [[VideoGame/DawnOfWar Gabriel Angelos]] is mentioned in a discussion between Scorpan and a fellow Shadowbolt; apparently, he's [[ShrinkingViolet Fluttersy's]] father
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**Anlindē is on the receiving end of one when the Seer Council blames her for getting the deer too involved in the conflict between Equestria and the griffons, as her fight with Luna coincided with a griffon assassin trying to kill Celestia.
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* WhatTheHellHero: Luna towards Celestia [[spoiler: when the latter reveals that she disguised herself as Nightmare Moon in order to free Luna]].
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* WhatTheHellHero: Luna towards Celestia [[spoiler: when the latter reveals that she disguised herself as Nightmare Moon in order to free Luna]].Luna]].
*WouldHurtAChild: Scorpan tears through a family of griffons (including children) in order [[BloodMagic to get enough blood to contact his master]]. Worse, he tells his victims that they should thank him for their deaths, as it advances the final victory of Chaos.
*WouldHurtAChild: Scorpan tears through a family of griffons (including children) in order [[BloodMagic to get enough blood to contact his master]]. Worse, he tells his victims that they should thank him for their deaths, as it advances the final victory of Chaos.
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* WolverineClaws: The Crystal Kingdom Shock Troopers (Sombra's EliteMooks) have these as their standard weapon.
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* WolverineClaws: The Crystal Kingdom Shock Troopers (Sombra's EliteMooks) have these as their standard weapon. Several members of the Traitor Legions also adopt them.
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* BadassBoast: Anlindē and Luna trade them in Chapter 4. First, when Luna finds and tries to arrest her for using the Warp:
-->'''Anlindē''': “I will not be treated like some beast! I am Anlindē, Seer of the Clan Elynia, devoted leader of deer, and I will erase you from existence for your intrusion!”
** Then, when Luna {{No Sell}}s her attack and prepares to actually start fighting:
-->'''Luna''': You may be a powerful mage, deer. But I am the Warmistress of Equestria, sister of Celestia, Empress of Ponykind and Forger of Worlds. And I shall make you suffer for threatening my subjects.
-->'''Anlindē''': “I will not be treated like some beast! I am Anlindē, Seer of the Clan Elynia, devoted leader of deer, and I will erase you from existence for your intrusion!”
** Then, when Luna {{No Sell}}s her attack and prepares to actually start fighting:
-->'''Luna''': You may be a powerful mage, deer. But I am the Warmistress of Equestria, sister of Celestia, Empress of Ponykind and Forger of Worlds. And I shall make you suffer for threatening my subjects.
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* CouldHaveAvoidedThisPlot: Lampshaded by the author, who points out that Anlindē and her group could have just ''told'' Luna or Celestia that they're on a mission to save the world, rather than just assume they know best and work alone.
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** The Traitor Legions and their griffon co-conspirators take advantage of this trope as well -- they send a "pony" assassin after the Griffon King and a griffon assassin after Celestia, in order start a war between Equestria and the griffons that the Traitor Legions can take advantage of.
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''[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/62041/the-god-empress-of-ponykind.html The God Empress of Ponykind]]'' is a ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic ''/ ''{{Warhammer 40000}}'' FanFic by iowaforever.
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''[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/62041/the-god-empress-of-ponykind.html The God Empress of Ponykind]]'' is a ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic ''/ ''{{Warhammer 40000}}'' FanFic by iowaforever.
Tropers/{{iowaforever}}.
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* HistoryRepeats: Celestia's Equestrian Legions have traces of the old Space Marine chapters in either tradition or names. The Artic Wolves are reminiscent of the Space Wolves chapter, as one example.
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*TheCameo: The Mane 6 get a brief one in Chapter 3, walking past Anlindē and Galas when the two arrive in Ponyville to identify the Lost.
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* FalseFlagOperation: The deer have apparently done a few of these over the years against the griffons and ponies, in order to keep them busy fighting each other and their attention off of the deer.
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* HandicappedBadass: Justicar Echo, who is heavily implied to be blind, is one of the Night Guard's best snipers.
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* CombatPragmatist: Sleight-Hoof. Luna approves, at least in battle; not so much in sparring.
* HandicappedBadass: Justicar Echo, who isheavily implied to be blind, is also one of the Night Guard's best snipers.
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** She gets a little better over time, learning how to bond with her troops.
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*HandicappedBadass: Justicar Echo, who is heavily implied to be blind, is one of the Night Guard's best snipers.
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*NoSocialSkills: Luna, added on to her FishOutOfWater[=/=]StrangerInAFamiliarLand status; she is incredibly serious and formal in her speech patterns, and she takes several comments as insults until someone explains further.
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* FishOutOfWater: Luna brings this up; she is a general in a time where armies are most likely not needed, and has no idea what she should do.
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*StrangerInAFamiliarLand: Luna; she is a general from a time where Equestria's safety was less than assured, and now that she has returned one thousand years later she is unsure if her skills are still needed.
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* IDidWhatIHadTo: [[spoiler: Celestia disguises herself as Nightmare Moon in order for the Mane 6 to use the Elements of Harmony on her so she could free Luna. [[WhatTheHellHero Luna calls her out on this,]], but Celestia does admit that what she did was wrong and means to make amends]].
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* IDidWhatIHadTo: IDidWhatIHadToDo: [[spoiler: Celestia disguises herself as Nightmare Moon in order for the Mane 6 to use the Elements of Harmony on her so she could free Luna. [[WhatTheHellHero Luna calls her out on this,]], but Celestia does admit that what she did was wrong and means to make amends]].
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!!This Fanfic provides examples of:
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* YourWorstNightmare: Sombra's powers, as per canon. [[spoiler: Luna's hallucinates that Celestia takes absolute power before banishing Luna, while Celestia hallucinates her past self beating Horus to death while denouncing his lack of vision, while Celestia is ForcedToWatch]].
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* YourWorstNightmare: Sombra's powers, as per canon. [[spoiler: Luna's hallucinates that Celestia takes absolute power before banishing Luna, while Celestia hallucinates her past self beating Horus to death while denouncing his lack of vision, while Celestia is ForcedToWatch]].ForcedToWatch]].
!! ''Warmistress of Equestria'' provides examples of:
*FishOutOfWater: Luna brings this up; she is a general in a time where armies are most likely not needed, and has no idea what she should do.
*IDidWhatIHadTo: [[spoiler: Celestia disguises herself as Nightmare Moon in order for the Mane 6 to use the Elements of Harmony on her so she could free Luna. [[WhatTheHellHero Luna calls her out on this,]], but Celestia does admit that what she did was wrong and means to make amends]].
*OurElvesAreBetter: Deer, which appear to be based off of the Eldar in both military naming schemes and haughtiness.
*WhatTheHellHero: Luna towards Celestia [[spoiler: when the latter reveals that she disguised herself as Nightmare Moon in order to free Luna]].
!! ''Warmistress of Equestria'' provides examples of:
*FishOutOfWater: Luna brings this up; she is a general in a time where armies are most likely not needed, and has no idea what she should do.
*IDidWhatIHadTo: [[spoiler: Celestia disguises herself as Nightmare Moon in order for the Mane 6 to use the Elements of Harmony on her so she could free Luna. [[WhatTheHellHero Luna calls her out on this,]], but Celestia does admit that what she did was wrong and means to make amends]].
*OurElvesAreBetter: Deer, which appear to be based off of the Eldar in both military naming schemes and haughtiness.
*WhatTheHellHero: Luna towards Celestia [[spoiler: when the latter reveals that she disguised herself as Nightmare Moon in order to free Luna]].
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A sequel, titled [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131886/the-warmistress-of-equestria ''The Warmistress of Equestria'']], has been published. It deals with Luna's return and her attempts to get accustomed to the changes in Equestrian society since her banishment, and whether or not her skills as a warrior are still needed.
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A sequel, titled [[http://www.''[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131886/the-warmistress-of-equestria ''The The Warmistress of Equestria'']], Equestria]]'', has been published. It deals with Luna's return and her attempts to get accustomed to the changes in Equestrian society since her banishment, and whether or not her skills as a warrior are still needed.
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A sequel, titled '[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131886/the-warmistress-of-equestria ''The Warmistress of Equestria'']], has been published. It deals with Luna's return and her attempts to get accustomed to the changes in Equestrian society since her banishment, and whether or not her skills as a warrior are still needed.
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A sequel, titled '[http://www.[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131886/the-warmistress-of-equestria ''The Warmistress of Equestria'']], has been published. It deals with Luna's return and her attempts to get accustomed to the changes in Equestrian society since her banishment, and whether or not her skills as a warrior are still needed.
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A sequel, titled [http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131886/the-warmistress-of-equestria The Warmistress of Equestria], has been published. It deals with Luna's return and her attempts to get accustomed to the changes in Equestrian society since her banishment, and whether or not her skills as a warrior are still needed.
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A sequel, titled [http://www.'[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131886/the-warmistress-of-equestria The ''The Warmistress of Equestria], Equestria'']], has been published. It deals with Luna's return and her attempts to get accustomed to the changes in Equestrian society since her banishment, and whether or not her skills as a warrior are still needed.
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It is now complete. A sequel, titled ''The Warmistress of Equestria'', has been announced.
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It is now complete. complete.
A sequel, titled''The [http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131886/the-warmistress-of-equestria The Warmistress of Equestria'', Equestria], has been announced.
published. It deals with Luna's return and her attempts to get accustomed to the changes in Equestrian society since her banishment, and whether or not her skills as a warrior are still needed.
A sequel, titled
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*ItsAllMyFault: Celestia feels this way about Luna's fall as well as the HorusHeresy. [[spoiler: Horus forgives her, even taking some of the blame by pointing out that it was his decision to rebel instead of seeking a better alternative.]]
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* AllThereInTheManual: Following the story's completion, the author has started a series of blog postings dedicated to WorldBuilding.
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* BigBad: [[spoiler: The voice corrupting Luna, which turns out to be Tzeentch.]]
* BigGood: [[spoiler: The other voice trying to counter the first one, which turns out to be the redeemed spirit of Horus.]]
* BigGood: [[spoiler: The other voice trying to counter the first one, which turns out to be the redeemed spirit of Horus.]]
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* [[EveryoneCanSeeIt Everypony Can See It]]: Shining Armor and Cadence. Celestia picks up on their crushes right away, and in the last chapter Twilight casually asks them when they're going out.
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* {{Foreshadowing}}: During their first encounter, Discord mentions to Celestia that he saved someone in the Warp. It later turns out [[spoiler: to be Horus]].
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** [[spoiler: Celestia suffers one when Tzeentch nullifies her defensive spells]].
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** [[spoiler: It ultimately turns out to be Tzeentch, who claims he and the other Chaos Gods all ''let'' the Emperor defeat them in order to get rid of him.]]
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* DidYouJustPunchOutCthulhu: The Emperor [[spoiler: kills the Four Gods of Chaos... Maybe]].
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* DidYouJustPunchOutCthulhu: The Emperor [[spoiler: kills the Four Gods of Chaos... Maybe]].until it turns out they let him win in order to fake their deaths, though they're all quite weakened]].
* FakingTheDead: [[spoiler: Tzeentch, at least, who claims the other Chaos Gods are as well.]]
* FightingFromTheInside: [[spoiler: Luna does this during Celestia's fight with Nightmare Moon (with help from the spirit of ''Horus'' of all people), retaking control long enough for Celestia to use the Elements of Harmony on her.]]
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* GenderBender: [[ManipulativeBastard Tzeentch]] does this to The Emperor, combined with BalefulPolymorph, at the end of their fight. The Emperor/ Princess Celestia is pissed off at first, but gets used to it after awhile.
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* GenderBender: [[ManipulativeBastard Tzeentch]] does this to The Emperor, combined with BalefulPolymorph, at the end of their fight. The Emperor/ Princess Emperor/Princess Celestia is pissed off at first, but gets used to it after awhile.
* GoodAngelBadAngel: [[spoiler: As Luna starts listening to TheCorruption (Tzeentch) more and more, another voice tries to speak reason to her, only to get pushed aside. It ultimately turns out to be Horus' spirit, who helps her retake temporary control during the showdown between Celestia and Nightmare Moon.]]
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* InTheBlood: ILetYouWin: [[spoiler: Tzeentch claims he and the other Chaos Gods did this with the Emperor as part of a plan to get rid of him.]]
* ItRunsInTheFamily: Shining Armor mentions how it's tradition that every eldest child in his (and Twilight's) family always joins a Legion. Usually the [[AmazonBrigade Daughters of Manehatten]], but in his case, well...
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* HeroicWillpower: How the Silverlight and the Loyalist Lunar Knights are able to resist Nightmare Moon's corruption.
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** Celestia gets another one during the Siege of Canterlot when fighting the [[EliteMooks Shadowbolts]]:
-->"'''Did you really think that you pathetic wastes of flesh could stand against''' '''''me'''''? '''I forged this world from dust and breathed life into it. I commanded the celestial bodies, and they moved at my words. I defeated the Windigoes and stood in the face of Discord, and you think that your gods will grant you victory over me? Your gods lead you to destruction, and I am more than happy to deliver it.'''"
-->"'''Did you really think that you pathetic wastes of flesh could stand against''' '''''me'''''? '''I forged this world from dust and breathed life into it. I commanded the celestial bodies, and they moved at my words. I defeated the Windigoes and stood in the face of Discord, and you think that your gods will grant you victory over me? Your gods lead you to destruction, and I am more than happy to deliver it.'''"
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-->"Take heart, my Legions! The enemy before us is numerous and strong, but the division of Chaos runs deep and can be broken! Smite the enemy with bolt and sword; show them no mercy, for you shall receive none in return. Do not allow the deception of Chaos to make you weak and cowardly! Fortify yourself, and know that our stand here will see the breaking of Chaos in Equestria, and your children shall see dawn return to this land! Now, my comrades! For Equestria!”
-->"Take heart, my Legions! The enemy before us is numerous and strong, but the division of Chaos runs deep and can be broken! Smite the enemy with bolt and sword; show them no mercy, for you shall receive none in return. Do not allow the deception of Chaos to make you weak and cowardly! Fortify yourself, and know that our stand here will see the breaking of Chaos in Equestria, and your children shall see dawn return to this land! Now, my comrades! For Equestria!”
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*SortingAlgorithmOfEvil: Becomes apparent after Celestia becomes Empress; The Diamond Dogs are disorganized and easily outclassed, the Changelings are better organized but fail to do any lasting damage, [[spoiler: Sombra is defeated, more or less, but pushes Luna further away from Celestia, becomes a Daemon Prince, and pulls the Crystal Kingdom into the Warp]], and [[spoiler: Nightmare Moon butchers two Legions, sacks a major city, and tortures Celestia with an AgonyBeam. All of this happens within her first appearance]].
