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* DiesDifferentlyInAdaptation: A bizarre planetary variant; in canon ''[=40K=]'', the planet of Colchis was semi-accidentally [[EarthShatteringKaboom shattered to pieces]] by the Inquisition following the end of the Horus Heresy. Here, it is first [[spoiler:scoured of virtually all life by Roboute and his Exodite allies after rescuing Aurelia]] and is then later [[spoiler:completely wiped clean of all life by the Emperor using Cyclonic Torpedoes]]. Similarly, the planet of Barbarus was canonically destroyed by [[MultipleChoicePast possibly multiple different forces]] (some sources say that it was destroyed with Virus Bombs by the Imperium following the Horus Heresy, while others claim that the Dark Angels used Cyclonic Torpedoes to destroy it prior to the Siege of Terra). In this fanfic, [[spoiler:it is turned into a Nurglite Daemon World before it is invaded by the Emperor and its daemonic overlord is given a True Death, bathing the entire planet in fire and reducing it to a lifeless wasteland]].
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* DiesDifferentlyInAdaptation: A bizarre planetary variant; in canon ''[=40K=]'', the planet of Colchis was semi-accidentally [[EarthShatteringKaboom shattered to pieces]] by the Inquisition following the end of the Horus Heresy. Here, it is first [[spoiler:scoured of virtually has [[spoiler:virtually all life of its inhabitants massacred by Roboute and his Exodite allies after rescuing Aurelia]] Aurelia]], and is then later [[spoiler:completely wiped clean of all life by the Emperor using Cyclonic Torpedoes]]. Similarly, the planet of Barbarus was canonically destroyed by [[MultipleChoicePast [[ContinuitySnarl possibly multiple different forces]] (some sources say that it was destroyed with Virus Bombs by the Imperium following the Horus Heresy, while others claim that the Dark Angels used Cyclonic Torpedoes to destroy it prior to the Siege of Terra). In this fanfic, [[spoiler:it is turned into a Nurglite Daemon World before it is invaded by the Emperor and its daemonic overlord is given a True Death, bathing the entire planet in fire and reducing it to a lifeless wasteland]].
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* LighterAndSofter: Downplayed; on the one hand, the fanfic is noticeably lighter and more optimistic and hopeful than canon ''[=40K=]'', featuring numerous adorable and/or hilarious scenes of Roboute getting to act silly and bond with his "little sisters". There is also a general focus on helping uplift people out of suffering and emphasizing why and how different groups and factions can work together for the common good along with letting various characters simply kick back, relax and bond (as best shown in the OddFriendship between Asarnil and Roboute) while also going out of the way to help avert various canonical tragedies (most obviously the Horus Heresy). However, this is still fundamentally a ''Warhammer [=40K=]'' fanfic, and thus there are numerous heartbreaking and/or horrifying moments present to make sure the heroes will be kept struggling in trying to help rebuild the galaxy - perhaps best shown in [[spoiler:despite all of Roboute, Asarnil and Morrigan's best efforts, her homeworld of Barbarus is turned into a Nurglite Daemon World and many of its people are either killed or have their souls devoured by daemons before they can be all evacuated. Plus, a scene in the remains of Barbarus reveals that while the Chaos Gods now consider the abduction of the Primarchs to be largely a wasted effort, they still have backup plans]].
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* LighterAndSofter: Downplayed; on the one hand, the fanfic is noticeably lighter and more optimistic and hopeful than canon ''[=40K=]'', featuring numerous adorable and/or hilarious scenes of Roboute getting to act silly and bond with his "little sisters". There is also a general focus on helping uplift people out of suffering and emphasizing why and how different groups and factions can work together for the common good along with letting various characters simply kick back, relax and bond (as best shown in the OddFriendship between Asarnil and Roboute) while also going out of the way to help avert various canonical tragedies (most obviously the Horus Heresy). However, this is still fundamentally a ''Warhammer [=40K=]'' fanfic, and thus there are numerous heartbreaking and/or horrifying moments present to make sure it clear that the heroes will be kept struggling in trying heroes' struggles to help rebuild the galaxy won't be easy in the slightest - perhaps best shown in [[spoiler:despite all of Roboute, Asarnil and Morrigan's best efforts, her homeworld of Barbarus is turned into a Nurglite Daemon World and many of its people are either killed or have their souls devoured by daemons before they can be all evacuated. Plus, a scene in following the remains Emperor scouring Colchis of Barbarus life reveals that while the Chaos Gods now consider the abduction of the Primarchs to be largely a wasted effort, effort and have more or less given up on trying to corrupt them to their side, they still have plenty of backup plans]].
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* OOCIsSeriousBusiness: When Roboute first meets the Exodites, he notes that they are oddly polite to him (which still means "quite condescending," which is admittedly better than 40k's "extremely condescending" standard of Exodite) and haven't heard of humans before, and outright correct him when he refers to his species as "Mon-Keigh." These are clues that he puts together to realize that he's in the past.
** When Conan!Emperor and Roboute finally meet, the first thing Emps does is ask for his sword, filled with his future self's psychic imprint and therefore his memories. The second thing he does is immediately and powerfully embrace the Avenging Son. While there's certainly other evidence of it, this is by far the starkest proof possible that the Emperor has fully taken Roboute's warning to heart, as one of the key thrusts of XIII's letter was that being merely a creator and not a dad to the Primarchs is the biggest reason the Imperium failed. OTL Emps, even this Conan version of him, would absolutely never have hugged his children; him publicly wrapping his arms around Roboute and telling him that he has done well is proof positive that the latter's letter has caused the former to truly alter his mindset.
** When Conan!Emperor and Roboute finally meet, the first thing Emps does is ask for his sword, filled with his future self's psychic imprint and therefore his memories. The second thing he does is immediately and powerfully embrace the Avenging Son. While there's certainly other evidence of it, this is by far the starkest proof possible that the Emperor has fully taken Roboute's warning to heart, as one of the key thrusts of XIII's letter was that being merely a creator and not a dad to the Primarchs is the biggest reason the Imperium failed. OTL Emps, even this Conan version of him, would absolutely never have hugged his children; him publicly wrapping his arms around Roboute and telling him that he has done well is proof positive that the latter's letter has caused the former to truly alter his mindset.
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* OOCIsSeriousBusiness: OOCIsSeriousBusiness:
** When Roboute first meets the Exodites, he notes that they are oddly polite to him (which still means "quite condescending," which is admittedly better than 40k's "extremely condescending" standard of Exodite) and haven't heard of humans before, and outright correct him when he refers to his species as "Mon-Keigh." These are clues that he puts together to realize that he's in the past.
** WhenConan!Emperor the Emperor and Roboute finally meet, the first thing Emps the former does is ask for his sword, filled with his future self's psychic imprint and therefore his memories. The second thing he does is immediately and powerfully embrace the Avenging Son. While there's certainly other evidence of it, this is by far the starkest proof possible that the Emperor has fully taken Roboute's warning to heart, as one of the key thrusts of XIII's letter was that being merely a creator and not a dad father to the Primarchs is the biggest reason the Imperium failed. The OTL version of Emps, even this Conan [[spoiler:Conan version of him, him]], would absolutely never have hugged his children; him publicly wrapping his arms around Roboute and telling him that he has done well is proof positive that the latter's letter has caused the former to truly alter his mindset.mindset.
* TheOneThingIDontHateAboutYou: Roboute reflects on the Imperial Faith in [[https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/the-coffin-of-roboute-and-his-20-sisters-canon-guilliman-peggy-sue-into-female-primarchs-au.1132597/page-499#post-99820973 Chapter 47]], and muses the only aspect of that religion he wholeheartedly appreciated is how the sheer fanaticism and fervor it incited in the Imperium's forces both made them [[BlindObedience obey his orders without question]] and [[DefiantToTheEnd last far longer on the battlefield]] than [[ViolationOfCommonSense reason would normally dictate]]. More specifically, Roboute notes that during the [=OTL=] iteration of the Great Crusade, the mortals he commanded would typically take at minimum one-third of their own forces in casualties thanks to their morale inevitably breaking. In sharp contrast, during his time in the 42nd millennium, morale breaking among even mortal forces was regarded as a statistical anomaly, and entire regiments being slaughtered to a man just to buy time elsewhere was regularly anticipated as part of standard battlefield doctrine.
** When Roboute first meets the Exodites, he notes that they are oddly polite to him (which still means "quite condescending," which is admittedly better than 40k's "extremely condescending" standard of Exodite) and haven't heard of humans before, and outright correct him when he refers to his species as "Mon-Keigh." These are clues that he puts together to realize that he's in the past.
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* TheOneThingIDontHateAboutYou: Roboute reflects on the Imperial Faith in [[https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/the-coffin-of-roboute-and-his-20-sisters-canon-guilliman-peggy-sue-into-female-primarchs-au.1132597/page-499#post-99820973 Chapter 47]], and muses the only aspect of that religion he wholeheartedly appreciated is how the sheer fanaticism and fervor it incited in the Imperium's forces both made them [[BlindObedience obey his orders without question]] and [[DefiantToTheEnd last far longer on the battlefield]] than [[ViolationOfCommonSense reason would normally dictate]]. More specifically, Roboute notes that during the [=OTL=] iteration of the Great Crusade, the mortals he commanded would typically take at minimum one-third of their own forces in casualties thanks to their morale inevitably breaking. In sharp contrast, during his time in the 42nd millennium, morale breaking among even mortal forces was regarded as a statistical anomaly, and entire regiments being slaughtered to a man just to buy time elsewhere was regularly anticipated as part of standard battlefield doctrine.
