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* TheCameo: [[spoiler: [[DreamWalker Luna]] appears when Gilda is in the hospital, prompting her to wake up when Iron visi.
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* ForgottenFallenFriend: {{Inverted}} to great effect to show Gilda's CharacterDevelopment. She watches Officer Sunset, who she considered at best a friendly acquaintence, die from an arrow right in front of the stunned griffin. However, she starts to show SurvivorsGuilt when considering it was ''herself'' who was the intended target, and attends Sunset's funeral for closure.
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* KangarooCourt: The Competency Review Panel that gets [[spoiler: Iron fired, exaggerating his role (or rather his lack of response) in the past month's events. [[FaceHeelTurn Sherry]] sends a [[IShallTauntYou goodbye letter]] that also explains she used all of her remaining favors to ensure Iron would get fired]].
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* MyEyesAreLeaking: Gilda sheds a few tears when visiting [[spoiler: Sunset's grave, a fellow guardsman who was the first fatality in the recent gang war]]. She knows ''why'' she's crying, but it's a sign of her CharacterDevelopment when she can feel sorrow for someone she barely knew.
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* ThereAreNoTherapists: {{Subverted}} when Horatio convinces Iron to get help after the Farrington gang war, who in turn convinces Gilda to visit as well. The sessions actually help them get better, [[ArtisticLicenseMedicine though they only seem to attend at most two sessions each]].
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* WhosLaughingNow: Subdued example. Lieutenant [[Series/CSIMiami Horatio]] has been sore at Iron Bulwark for years for being passed over for promotion to Captain of The Farrington guard, as Horatio had been on the force for a decade longer. [[spoiler: When Iron gets dismissed, ''Captain'' Horatio walks into him packing from Horatio's new office, and notes the irony of the situation]]. However, Horatio admits that Iron is a good officer, [[spoiler: so offers Iron a position as a Sergeant and intends to promote him to Lieutenant as soon as the excitement dies down]].
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* DrowningMySorrows: Sherry does it regularly since she lost her husband, and briefly Iron Bulwark after both Starfall and Gilda abandon him. Iron gets better, Sherry gets worse.
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Sherry, Sherry, Sherry. *tsk tsk tsk*
* IWantMyBelovedToBeHappy: Eventually, this is revealed to be the reason why Sherry worked so hard to get Iron and Gilda together, though it was more of a "mother wanting his son to fall in love" version.
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* TheMafiya: Sherry is revealed to have a few contacts in the [[{[Expy}} Stalliongrad]] Mafia, [[spoiler: and after her FaceHeelTurn, essentially defects to them]].
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* TheMafiya: Sherry is revealed to have a few contacts in the [[{[Expy}} [[{{Expy}} Stalliongrad]] Mafia, [[spoiler: and after her FaceHeelTurn, essentially defects to them]].
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* NeverMyFault: [[spoiler: Starfall challenges Gilda to an illegal duel and gets hospitalized during so. His wife visits him and berates him for almost getting himself killed and not thinking about what would happen if he lost, straining their marriage. Starfall still blames Gilda for this.]]
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* NeverMyFault: NeverMyFault:
** [[spoiler: Starfall challenges Gilda to an illegal duel and gets hospitalized during so. His wife visits him and berates him for almost getting himself killed and not thinking about what would happen if he lost, straining their marriage. Starfall still blames Gilda for this.]]]]
** [[spoiler: When she's about to be arrested for the indirect murder of dozens of her fellow guardsmen, Sherry instead lashes out and escapes to join the Stalliongrad Mafia. And when Iron rightfully gets her onto the Equestrian "Most Wanted" list, Sherry acts as if ''he'' betrayed ''her'', and pulls strings to get him fired]].
** [[spoiler: Starfall challenges Gilda to an illegal duel and gets hospitalized during so. His wife visits him and berates him for almost getting himself killed and not thinking about what would happen if he lost, straining their marriage. Starfall still blames Gilda for this.
** [[spoiler: When she's about to be arrested for the indirect murder of dozens of her fellow guardsmen, Sherry instead lashes out and escapes to join the Stalliongrad Mafia. And when Iron rightfully gets her onto the Equestrian "Most Wanted" list, Sherry acts as if ''he'' betrayed ''her'', and pulls strings to get him fired]].
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* SaltAndPepper: Amusingly, Gilda and Starfall eventually get paired for guard duty. Fortunately, they've gotten to the point where they aren't intentionally hostile to the other.
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* TapOnTheHead: Iron is on the receiving end when [[spoiler: Sherry escapes his custody]]. He assures the two guards (actually one) that he's okay, and is sent all the way to the hospital to confirm that he's okay.
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* TraumaCongaLine: Poor, poor Iron Bulwark. From June to August, he's torn between his griffon girlfriend and best friend who hates griffins, both of whom are guards under his command, and then has to deal with [[spoiler: his best friend attempting to murder his girlfriend and then a violent breakup with said girlfriend]]. He takes to drinking for a few weekings, and then when things are finally looking up after reconciling with both Gilda and Starfall, [[spoiler: his mentor, Sherry, starts a gang war that gets two dozen of his officers killed, and his girlfriend is nearly killed in said gang war. When confronted, Sherry assaults Iron and runs off to join the Mafia, and gets Iron fired through her connections when Iron puts out his arrest warrant, and Iron is remitted to the guard as a mere sergeant]]. Eventually, things get better as he and Gilda grow closer and he comes to enjoy his new position, but that was a ''long'' way to fall.
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** [[spoiler: Potentially, Starfall after his duel with Gilda. Despite several surgeries, it's unclear if he'll be able to fly again]].
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** [[spoiler: Potentially, Briefly, Starfall after his duel with Gilda. Despite After several surgeries, it's unclear if he'll it takes about 5 moths for him to be able to fly again]].again]].
* BrokenPedestal: Sherry was the closest thing to a mother figure Iron had in his early days after joining the guard. [[spoiler: When Iron learns that Sherry was responsible for the Gang War, he's beyond appalled]].
* BrokenPedestal: Sherry was the closest thing to a mother figure Iron had in his early days after joining the guard. [[spoiler: When Iron learns that Sherry was responsible for the Gang War, he's beyond appalled]].
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* JumpingOffTheSlipperySlope: [[spoiler: Sherry's logic for starting the gang war is sound, in a twisted sense, as it eliminated all the major players in the Farrington Crime Circuit. However, she somersaults off the ledge when she's about to be arrested for the indirect murder of dozens of city guards, where she shows little remorse and violently escapes. Sherry made a perfect landing when she pulls all of her connections to get Iron removed from his post and threatens him and his family if he pursues her]].
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* TheMafiya: Sherry is revealed to have a few contacts in the [[{[Expy}} Stalliongrad]] Mafia, [[spoiler: and after her FaceHeelTurn, essentially defects to them]].
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** Red Hooves wants revenge on Gilda for arresting his sister, who was in the middle of robbing a merchant blind.
** [[spoiler: After Sherry's FaceHeelTurn and Iron puts out a country-wide arrest order, [[EvilIsPetty she pulls her connections to get Iron fired]] for daring to try bringing her to justice for all of her fellow Guardsman she got killed]].
** Red Hooves wants revenge on Gilda for arresting his sister, who was in the middle of robbing a merchant blind.
** [[spoiler: After Sherry's FaceHeelTurn and Iron puts out a country-wide arrest order, [[EvilIsPetty she pulls her connections to get Iron fired]] for daring to try bringing her to justice for all of her fellow Guardsman she got killed]].
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* [[HeWhoFightsMonsters She Who Fights Monsters]]: [[spoiler: Sherry eventually turns as bad as the criminals she was hoping to weed out from Farrington, starting by initiating a gang war that gets dozens of her fellows officers killed in an attempt to kill Red Hooves, and ends with threatening to kill Iron and vowing to become the head-honcho of the Salliongrad Mafia]].
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Finally, I get to re-add these tropes! Tropes for the new chapters come later.
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* AccidentalAimingSkills: [[spoiler: Gilda, who has apparently never used a crossbow in her life, picks one up in a desperate effort to take down a fleeing Red Hooves, aiming for his knee. She doesn't hit ''[[GroinAttack that...]]'']]
* ActionGirl: In Chapter Six of ''Evening Flames'', a group of nearly twenty criminals find out the hard way it's not easy to kidnap an angry griffin. Sure, Starfall helped a bit, but Gilda did most of the ass-kicking.
* AdaptationalVillainy: [[spoiler:Sherry]] is much more manipulative and ruthless in therewrite.rewrite, and now is responsible for the Farrington gang war breaking out.
* ActionGirl: In Chapter Six of ''Evening Flames'', a group of nearly twenty criminals find out the hard way it's not easy to kidnap an angry griffin. Sure, Starfall helped a bit, but Gilda did most of the ass-kicking.
* AdaptationalVillainy: [[spoiler:Sherry]] is much more manipulative and ruthless in the
* LighterAndSofter: {{Downplayed}}, but the rewrite resolves some conflicts faster and generally leaves people in a better situation than when they left the same situation in the original version.
* LovedINotHonorMore: Iron Bulwark tries to be impartial [[spoiler:after Starfall attacked Gilda.]] It doesn't go well for the either relationship, as both Starfall and Gilda feel like he's betraying their friendship[=/=]romance, respectively.
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* LovedINotHonorMore: Iron Bulwark tries to be impartial [[spoiler:after Starfall attacked Gilda.]] It doesn't go well for the either relationship, as both Starfall and Gilda feel like he's betraying their friendship[=/=]romance, respectively.
* LovedINotHonorMore: Iron Bulwark tries to be impartial [[spoiler:after Starfall attacked Gilda.]] It doesn't go well for the either relationship, as both Starfall and Gilda feel like he's betraying their friendship[=/=]romance, respectively.
* PreAssKickingOneLiner: Outnumbered and outgunned by a group of kidnappers led by the brother of a perp she arrested, Gilda utters this gem:
--> '''Gilda''': All of you are now under arrest.
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** Red Hooves, a local criminal boss that likely killed Sherry's husband and who considers himself untouchable. Gilda despises him because her first interaction had him simultaneously offering jobs along with a side of racist insults.
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** Red Hooves, a local criminal boss that likely killed Sherry's husband and who considers himself untouchable. Gilda despises him because her first interaction had him simultaneously offering jobs along with a side of racist insults.insults, and finally [[spoiler: arrests him after Red Hooves and his cronies attempt to kidnap her]].
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* HatesBeingTouched: After years of severe physical abuse at the hands of her father and other male griffins, Gilda is uncomfortable with even light touches, especially by those she invites emotionally close. In particular, she responded to a pat on the back by rolling into a combat stance. Losing this aroung Iron and allowing arm-holding, embraces, and nuzzles is an indicator for how she's getting better psychologically.
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* HatesBeingTouched: After years of severe physical abuse at the hands of her father and other male griffins, Gilda is uncomfortable with even light touches, especially by those she invites emotionally close. In particular, she responded to a pat on the back by rolling into a combat stance. Losing this aroung around Iron and allowing arm-holding, embraces, and nuzzles is an indicator for of how she's getting better psychologically.
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* GratuitousGerman: Griffin tribes are based of Germanic tribes, so it makes sense that Gilda slips into her natural tongue occasionally.
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* [[WifeBasherBasher Child-Basher Basher]]: The only time Starfall was ever officially reprimanded for overzealous enforcement was after he had almost beaten a father to death before dragging him in, because the father would abuse his child.
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* [[WifeBasherBasher Child-Basher Basher]]: The only time Starfall was ever officially reprimanded for overzealous enforcement was after he had almost beaten a father to death before dragging him in, because the father would abuse his child. When Starfall learns exactly how cruel Gilda's father was to her, he comes to view her more with pity than hostility.
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* LivingEmotionalCrutch: Gilda is a adolescent with serious psychological problems, and Iron is one of the most stable characters around. Naturally, he provides emotional support, and as their relationship deepens and Gilda opens up more, Iron does his best to help.
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* CoolAndUnusualPunishment: Sherry's punishment for Gilda for [[spoiler: getting into that duel with Starfall]]. The community service part is being required to spend time entertaining [[LittlestCancerPatient terminally-ill foals]] at the hospital, and then apologizing to the officers she ran in to, [[spoiler: including Starfall himself]].
* TheThemeParkVersion: When Gilda's stuck with entertaining children, she starts telling them tales and folklore from her tribe. Except, they're [[WhatDoYouMeanItsNotForKids rather gory, sex-filled, and mature]], so Gilda horribly butchers them by trying to make them kid-friendly. The plot holes and censors are so glaringly obvious that even the kids can see.
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* TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall [[spoiler: attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend]].
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* TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall [[spoiler: attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend]].girlfriend. The next month after calming down, he realizes that he was fired because... he attacked Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. After seeing Starfall change his attitude, Iron invites him back into the guard (albeit at a lower rank)]].
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* WhatsAHenway: Pulled by Sherry, the resident DeadpanSnarker.
--> '''Gilda''': How [would I apologize to Officer Weatherly]?
--> '''Sherry''': Well, you can form words to ask that question, so you know how to talk...
--> '''Gilda''': How [would I apologize to Officer Weatherly]?
--> '''Sherry''': Well, you can form words to ask that question, so you know how to talk...
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* YouCalledMeXItMustBeSerious: After Gilda apologizes to Starfall over [[spoiler: her part in their duel]], Starfall actually refers to her by name for the first time. Gilda is shocked.
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** And also how Sherry confirms that it was Gilda's father who maimed Comet Tail, though the fact that there are only seven males in Gilda's tribe made this less of a wild guess.
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** LighterAndSofter: {{Downplayed}}, but the rewrite resolves some conflicts faster and generally leaves people in a better situation than when they left the same situation in the original version.
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* [[AbsurdlySharpBlade AbsurdlySharpBeak]]: Gilda's beak can cut like a hot knife through butter, and she causes restaurant staff much irritation when she ends up scoring their glassware.
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* [[AbsurdlySharpBlade AbsurdlySharpBeak]]: Absurdly Sharp Beak]]: Gilda's beak can cut like a hot knife through butter, and she causes restaurant staff much irritation when she ends up scoring their glassware.
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* HiddenDepths: Gilda is considered scholarly by her tribe's standards and can read a week's worth of reading material in two half-days, something you wouldn't expect from her only in-show appearance.
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* TheAlcoholic: Implied in the case of Sergeant Sherry, at least while off duty. She lost her husband and fellow guard a few years prior.
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* [[AbsurdlySharpBlade AbsurdlySharpBeak]]: Gilda's beak can cut like a hot knife through butter, and she causes restaurant staff much irritation when she ends up scoring their glassware.
* TheAlcoholic:Implied in the case of Sergeant Sherry, at least while off duty. She lost after losing her husband and fellow guard a few years prior.prior. She takes a few shots even while on duty, and has an entire wardrobe filled with drinks.
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* TheResenter: Starfall to his wife, though he doesn't realize it. He hates how she moved on from her [[BrokenAngel permanent disfigurement]], not acting like a "cripple" and therefore not reinforcing his blind hatred of griffins.
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* TheResenter: Starfall to his wife, though he doesn't realize it. He hates how she moved on from her [[BrokenAngel permanent disfigurement]], not disfigurement]] and "not acting like a "cripple" and cripple." He's envious that she still finds happiness despite her disability therefore not reinforcing his blind hatred of griffins.
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** [[spoiler: Potentially, Starfall after his duel with Gilda. Despite several surgeries, it's unclear if he'll be able to fly again]].
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* PinkIsForSissies: When Starfall is recovering in the hospital [[spoiler: from his duel with Gilda]], he was to focused on seething to care what color his casts were. When he's finally released with only a pink leg-cast, he's very defensive about any mention of its color.
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** Starfall to Gilda, at least in the earlier chapters. He just ''loves'' doing everything he can to inconvenience her.
* StunnedSilence: After Starfall returns home from the hospital in ''Evening Flames'', he and Comet get into an argument about how they'll earn their living that turns to Iron's [[InterspeciesRomance love life]]. When Comet points out how it's unfair to blame an entire race for only her disfigurement while other ponies have done worse, Starfall blurts out that it's not the same because "they didn't leave [you] a broken cripple." They both stare in horror for a few moments, Comet for realizing what her husband really thinks about her and Starfall for realizing he said that out loud, and Starfall storms out when his attempts at defusing the situation fail.
* StunnedSilence: After Starfall returns home from the hospital in ''Evening Flames'', he and Comet get into an argument about how they'll earn their living that turns to Iron's [[InterspeciesRomance love life]]. When Comet points out how it's unfair to blame an entire race for only her disfigurement while other ponies have done worse, Starfall blurts out that it's not the same because "they didn't leave [you] a broken cripple." They both stare in horror for a few moments, Comet for realizing what her husband really thinks about her and Starfall for realizing he said that out loud, and Starfall storms out when his attempts at defusing the situation fail.
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* HeelRealization: Most of ''Evening Flames'' chapter two is this for Starfall. He begins to realize that he's turned into a major asshole, even to those he cares about, and that [[CaptainObvious he's responsible for starting a duel with Gilda]] and almost threw his life away when he still had a family to care for.
* TheResenter: Starfall to his wife, though he doesn't realize it. He hates how she moved on from her [[BrokenAngel permanent disfigurement]], not acting like a "cripple" and therefore not reinforcing his blind hatred of griffins.
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* YourApprovalFillsMeWithShame: A variation. Gilda grimly notes how her [[AbusiveParents Fat]][[{{Jerkass}} her]] would be proud of her [[spoiler: fighting and potentially crippling Starfall by breaking his wings after their duel]].
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* ForeignCussWord: "Hey, [[spoiler: Fotze]]!" Gilda uses this to get the attention of a thief, right in time for her to catch a thrown baton to the face.
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* ForeignCussWord: "Hey, [[spoiler: Fotze]]!" [[CountryMatters Fotze]]]]!" Gilda uses this to get the attention of a thief, right in time for her to catch a thrown baton to the face.
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The story [[AttentionDeficitCreatorDisorder took a]] [[ScheduleSlip year-long break]], but is finally, finally being restarted, updated, and moved to [=FimFiction=], along with its prequel. You can find the first part of the story [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/76123/summer-days here]], and the prequel [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/65059/heart-of-gold-feathers-of-steel here]]. Reading the prequel isn't required, but it definitely explains a few things.
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The story [[AttentionDeficitCreatorDisorder took a]] [[ScheduleSlip year-long break]], but is finally, finally being restarted, updated, and moved to [=FimFiction=], along with its prequel. You can find the first part of the story part, ''Summer Days'' [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/76123/summer-days here]], the second part ''Evening Flames'' [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/96920/evening-flames here]], and the prequel [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/65059/heart-of-gold-feathers-of-steel here]]. Reading the prequel isn't required, but it definitely explains a few things.
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* TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall [[spoiler: attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend. * UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where]] UnequalPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
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* TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall [[spoiler: attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend. girlfriend]].
* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where]] UnequalPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where]] UnequalPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
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* AccidentalAimingSkills: [[spoiler: Gilda, who has apparently never used a crossbow in her life, picks one up in a desperate effort to take down a fleeing Red Hooves, aiming for his knee. She doesn't hit ''[[GroinAttack that...]]'']]
* ActionGirl: In Chapter Ten, a group of nearly twenty would-be criminals find out the hard way it's not easy to kidnap an angry griffin.
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* InterspeciesRomance: Gilda eventually starts dating Iron Bulwark. She's justifiably worried that dating him could make others look down on him.
** And he's seriously concerned about the physical side of things. That Gilda's beak can score glass, and might be a bit tricky to kiss, to be precise.
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him, especially since his best friend is hugely bigoted towards griffins.
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* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: [[spoiler: Starfall puts his racism aside long enough to rescue Gilda from several criminals, freeing her from her bonds and defending her from would-be lethal blows. Although he did kill one (in defense of another), he was still arrested due to "vigilantism" by not being reinstated into the guard yet.]]
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* PreAssKickingOneLiner: Outnumbered and outgunned by a group of kidnappers led by the brother of a perp she arrested, Gilda utters this gem:
--> '''Gilda''': All of you are now under arrest.
* RedOniBlueOni: Starfall and Bulwark, respectively.
--> '''Gilda''': All of you are now under arrest.
* RedOniBlueOni: Starfall and Bulwark, respectively.
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* PreAssKickingOneLiner: Outnumbered and outgunned by a group of kidnappers led by the brother of a perp she arrested, Gilda utters this gem:
--> '''Gilda''': All of you are now under arrest.
* RedOniBlueOni:RedOniBlueOni:
** Starfall and Bulwark,respectively.respectively.
** Bulwark's sister Maxie and Bulwark, as well.
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** Red Hooves, a local criminal boss that likely killed Sherry's husband and who considers himself untouchable. Gilda despises him because her first interaction had him simultaneously offering jobs along with a side of racist insults, and finally [[spoiler: arrests him after Red Hooves and his cronies attempt to kidnap her]].
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** Red Hooves, a local criminal boss that likely killed Sherry's husband and who considers himself untouchable. Gilda despises him because her first interaction had him simultaneously offering jobs along with a side of racist insults, and finally [[spoiler: arrests him after Red Hooves and his cronies attempt to kidnap her]]. insults.
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* TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall [[spoiler: attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend. The next month after calming down, he realizes that he was fired because... he attacked Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. After seeing Starfall change his attitude, Iron invites him back into the guard (albeit at a lower rank).]]
* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where]] UnequalPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where]] UnequalPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
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* TurnInYourBadge: Done by Iron to Starfall after Starfall [[spoiler: attacks Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. This enrages Starfall, as he thinks it's Iron expressing favoritism for his new girlfriend. The next month after calming down, he realizes that he was fired because... he attacked Gilda, a fellow guard, while in uniform. After seeing Starfall change his attitude, Iron invites him back into the guard (albeit at a lower rank).]]
* UnequalPairing: Iron is [[MayDecemberRomance significantly older]], [[MentorShip takes a significant part in teaching her about pony society]], and several ranks higher than Gilda in the Guard. Sergeant Sherry points out [[WifeHusbandry how creepy]] this can be, if Iron honestly considers the matter too severe for a romantic relationship now. Gilda, on the other hand, [[ValuesDissonance comes from a culture where]] UnequalPairing [[ValuesDissonance is commonplace]], and thus has a different set of concerns.
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The story [[AttentionDeficitCreatorDisorder took a]] [[ScheduleSlip year-long break]], but is finally, finally being restarted, updated, and moved to [=FimFiction=], along with its prequel. You can find the story [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/76123/summer-days here]], and the prequel [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/65059/heart-of-gold-feathers-of-steel here]]. Reading the prequel isn't required, but it definitely explains a few things.
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The story [[AttentionDeficitCreatorDisorder took a]] [[ScheduleSlip year-long break]], but is finally, finally being restarted, updated, and moved to [=FimFiction=], along with its prequel. You can find the first part of the story [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/76123/summer-days here]], and the prequel [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/65059/heart-of-gold-feathers-of-steel here]]. Reading the prequel isn't required, but it definitely explains a few things.
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* LovedINotHonorMore: Iron Bulwark tries to be impartial [[spoiler:after Starfall attacked Gilda.]] It doesn't go well for the either relationship, as both Starfall and Gilda feel like he's betraying their friendship[=/=]romance, respectively.
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* WomanScorned: Gilda after her angry break-up with Iron, planning to leave Farrington as soon as she's able to quit the guard without criminal consequences. [[spoiler: Fortunately, she gets better]].
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* AccidentalAimingSkills: [[spoiler: Gilda, who has apparently never used a crossbow in her life, picks one up in a desperate effort to take down a fleeing criminal, aiming for his knee. She doesn't hit ''[[GroinAttack that...]]'']]
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* AccidentalAimingSkills: [[spoiler: Gilda, who has apparently never used a crossbow in her life, picks one up in a desperate effort to take down a fleeing criminal, Red Hooves, aiming for his knee. She doesn't hit ''[[GroinAttack that...]]'']]
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* BadassBoast: "You ''want'' me to fight back? You'll be dead in three hits."
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* BadassBoast: "You Gilda, before [[spoiler: Starfall initiates their duel]].
--> You ''want'' me to fight back? You'll be dead in three hits."
--> You ''want'' me to fight back? You'll be dead in three hits.
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* IAintGotTimeToBleed: In the prologue, Bulwark doesn't register that Starfall stabbed him until he starts giving him judgement.
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* IAintGotTimeToBleed: In the prologue, Bulwark doesn't register that Starfall stabbed him until he starts giving him judgement. Same with Gilda, [[spoiler: after her duel with Starfall]].
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** Sherry throws a pencil at her to scold her.
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* MajorInjuryUnderreaction: Gilda to most injuries that leave her bloody, on account to her harsh upbringing. The crowning moment comes after [[spoiler: her duel with Starfall, where she doesn't notice Starfall's knife sticking ''through'' her palm until Iron points it out, and even then declines going to the doctor]].
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* SmugSnake:
** Red Hooves, a local criminal boss that likely killed Sherry's husband and who considers himself untouchable. Gilda despises him because her first interaction had him simultaneously offering jobs along with a side of racist insults, and finally [[spoiler: arrests him after Red Hooves and his cronies attempt to kidnap her]].
** His sister as well. When Gilda arrests her for thievery, she rants how her family would make Gilda's life hell.
** Red Hooves, a local criminal boss that likely killed Sherry's husband and who considers himself untouchable. Gilda despises him because her first interaction had him simultaneously offering jobs along with a side of racist insults, and finally [[spoiler: arrests him after Red Hooves and his cronies attempt to kidnap her]].
** His sister as well. When Gilda arrests her for thievery, she rants how her family would make Gilda's life hell.
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** A variation is used in [[spoiler: Starfall's duel with Gilda. He throws his sword ''scabbard'', which she mistakes for the sword itself, and Gilda's dodge leaves her in a bad position to deflect Starfall's actual attack.]]
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* TakingAKnifeToAGunFight: [[spoiler: Gilda goes ''unarmed'' to her duel with Starfall... and still wins]].
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* [[BullyingADragon Bullying a Griffon]]: Starfall's treatment of Gilda falls under this. [[spoiler: Their duel shows why this is a very bad idea]].
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* [[BullyingADragon Bullying a Griffon]]: Griffin]]: Starfall's treatment of Gilda falls under this. [[spoiler: Their duel shows why this is a very bad idea]].
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*BadassBoast: "You ''want'' me to fight back? You'll be dead in three hits."
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* [[BullyingADragon Bullying a Griffon]]: Starfall's treatment of Gilda falls under this. [[spoiler: Their duel shows why this is a very bad idea]].
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* CurbStompBattle: [[spoiler: Gilda warns Starfall that their duel will turn into this if she actually starts fighting back. He doesn't listen. It does.]]
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**And earlier, Starfall subjects Gilda to a humiliating "inspection" because she ''asked him for permission to go home for the night''.
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* HotBlooded: Starfall, big time.
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* TakingAKnifeToAGunFight: [[spoiler: Gilda goes ''unarmed'' to her duel with Starfall... and still wins]].
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* TryingToCatchMeFightingDirty: [[spoiler: Starfall does ''not'' fight fair during the duel. Gilda's still a good enough fighter that it doesn't really give him an advantage]].
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How\'d I forget this for several months?
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* HatesBeingTouched: After years of severe physical abuse at the hands of her father and other male griffins, Gilda is uncomfortable with even light touches, especially by those she invites emotionally close. Overcoming this to earn a HugAndComment is a major step forward.
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* HatesBeingTouched: After years of severe physical abuse at the hands of her father and other male griffins, Gilda is uncomfortable with even light touches, especially by those she invites emotionally close. Overcoming In particular, she responded to a pat on the back by rolling into a combat stance. Losing this to earn a HugAndComment aroung Iron and allowing arm-holding, embraces, and nuzzles is a major step forward.an indicator for how she's getting better psychologically.
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* IHaveThisFriend: Gilda is confused about her relationship with Iron, so she writes to her friend Rainbow Dash for advice. Rainbow is just as uneducated in romance as her, so she goes to Applejack, using the classic device to explain Gilda's situation. It's vauge enough that Applejack assumes ''she'' is asking ''her'' about their relationship. HilarityEnsues.
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* IHaveThisFriend: Gilda is confused about her relationship with Iron, so she writes to her friend Rainbow Dash for advice. Rainbow is just as uneducated in romance as her, so she goes to Applejack, using the classic device to explain Gilda's situation. It's vauge vague enough that Applejack assumes ''she'' is asking ''her'' about their relationship. HilarityEnsues.
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* IncrediblyLamePun: When declining a request to cover for another guard:
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* IncrediblyLamePun: IncrediblyLamePun:
** When Gilda's about to be inducted into the Guard, and Starfall's protests are blown off:
-->'''[[ShoutOut Lietuenant Horatio]]''': I don’t know why Starfall rejected you. It’s not every day that we’re griffin a new recruit.”
--> ''[[Series/CSIMiami He put the glasses]] on while I fought to keep from groaning.''
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** When Gilda's about to be inducted into the Guard, and Starfall's protests are blown off:
-->'''[[ShoutOut Lietuenant Horatio]]''': I don’t know why Starfall rejected you. It’s not every day that we’re griffin a new recruit.”
--> ''[[Series/CSIMiami He put the glasses]] on while I fought to keep from groaning.''
** When declining a request to cover for another guard:
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* FantasticRacism: A major theme in the fanfic, along with the repercussions. Gilda's father hated ponies, and took out his anger on her and any ponies that wandered over the border. At the same time, Starfall hates griffins (actually due to Gilda's father) and his hatred of Gilda drives many of the conflicts.
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* FantasticRacism: A major theme in the fanfic, along with the repercussions. Gilda's father hated ponies, and took out his anger on her and any ponies that wandered over the border. At the same time, Starfall hates griffins (actually due to Gilda's father) and his hatred of Gilda drives many of the conflicts.
** Also, Maxie's irrational hatred of griffins (which is based solely on hearsay and rumors, unlike Starfall's) drives a wedge between her and her brother. She hasn't yet found out that Iron and Gilda are dating .
** Also, Maxie's irrational hatred of griffins (which is based solely on hearsay and rumors, unlike Starfall's) drives a wedge between her and her brother. She hasn't yet found out that Iron and Gilda are dating .
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* IAintGotTimeToBleed: In the prologue, Bulwark doesn't register that Starfall stabbed him until he starts giving him judgement
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* IAintGotTimeToBleed: In the prologue, Bulwark doesn't register that Starfall stabbed him until he starts giving him judgementjudgement.
* IncrediblyLamePun: When declining a request to cover for another guard:
-->'''Gilda''': Oh, you know. There’s some homeless hornets near my home, I’m going to teach them how to mind their own bees’ nest.
** Sherry throws a pencil at her to scold her.
* IncrediblyLamePun: When declining a request to cover for another guard:
-->'''Gilda''': Oh, you know. There’s some homeless hornets near my home, I’m going to teach them how to mind their own bees’ nest.
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* YouJustToldMe: How Sherry confirms Gilda and Iron are dating in Chapter 6.
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I swear I can alphabetize.
* AbusiveParents: Gilda's father, big time. Dealing with the lasting effects of his "raising" drives many of Gilda's interactions.
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* AbusiveParents: Gilda's father, big time. Dealing with the lasting effects of his "raising" drives many of Gilda's interactions.
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* RedOniBlueOni: Starfall and Bulwark, respectively
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* RedOniBlueOni: Starfall and Bulwark, respectivelyrespectively.
* RingRingCRUNCH: Gilda's first morning with an alarm clock, since she needs to wake up on schedule now. Justified by her upbringing in the harsh wilds, where punching a loud noise right next to you was often the difference between life and death.
* RingRingCRUNCH: Gilda's first morning with an alarm clock, since she needs to wake up on schedule now. Justified by her upbringing in the harsh wilds, where punching a loud noise right next to you was often the difference between life and death.
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[[caption-width-right:300: Even a Griffin can make a fine Royal Guard]]
[[caption-width-right:300: Even a Griffin can make a fine Royal Guard]]
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* AloofOlderBrother: Iron Bulwark is the Captain of the Farrington Guard and acts as befits his position. His younger sister Maxie is a mail clerk and has a ''interesting'' night life.
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* AloofOlderBrother: Iron Bulwark is the Captain of the Farrington Guard and acts as befits his position. His younger sister Maxie is a mail clerk and has a ''interesting'' ''[[ReallyGetsAround interesting]]'' night life.
