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** To a lesser extent, many of the other campers who were previous just minor one-offs whose character faults were played more for being gags are given supporting character status, with Frazie helping some of them through their issues by entering their minds.
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** To a lesser extent, many of the other campers who were previous just comedic minor one-offs whose character faults were played more for being gags characters are given supporting character status, fleshed out significantly, with Frazie helping some of them through to resolve their issues faults by entering their minds.
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* AscendedExtra: Dogen is a side character in ''Psychonauts'' and the first victim of Oleander's world-domination plot. Since ForWantOfANail is in full effect, Dogen not only avoids getting kidnapped, but he accompanies Frazie to Thorney Towers and becomes one of her party members.
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* AscendedExtra: AscendedExtra:
** Dogen is a side character in ''Psychonauts'' and the first victim of Oleander's world-domination plot. Since ForWantOfANail is in full effect, Dogen not only avoids getting kidnapped, but he accompanies Frazie to Thorney Towers and becomes one of her partymembers.members.
** To a lesser extent, many of the other campers who were previous just minor one-offs whose character faults were played more for being gags are given supporting character status, with Frazie helping some of them through their issues by entering their minds.
** Dogen is a side character in ''Psychonauts'' and the first victim of Oleander's world-domination plot. Since ForWantOfANail is in full effect, Dogen not only avoids getting kidnapped, but he accompanies Frazie to Thorney Towers and becomes one of her party
** To a lesser extent, many of the other campers who were previous just minor one-offs whose character faults were played more for being gags are given supporting character status, with Frazie helping some of them through their issues by entering their minds.
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** The monster bear in Norville's mind [[UpToEleven kicks this trope into overdrive]] by straight-up ignoring Frazie's ''entire arsenal'', even after getting set aflame. The only thing that finally stops it is getting completely obliterated by a bunch of Nightmare bombs.
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** The monster bear in Norville's mind [[UpToEleven kicks this trope into overdrive]] overdrive by straight-up ignoring Frazie's ''entire arsenal'', even after getting set aflame. The only thing that finally stops it is getting completely obliterated by a bunch of Nightmare bombs.
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* BewareTheNiceOnes: Dogen. Both of his proposed "plans" to stop Oleander involve politely asking him to not be evil anymore. But after Frazie helps him with his issues, he’s more confident in the use of his powers, allowing him to chase off [[spoiler:Linda]] twice by almost making her head explode.
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* BewareTheNiceOnes: BewareTheNiceOnes:
** Dogen. Both of his proposed "plans" to stop Oleander involve politely asking him to not be evil anymore. But after Frazie helps him with his issues, he’s more confident in the use of his powers, allowing him to chase off [[spoiler:Linda]] twice by almost making her headexplode.explode.
** More 'Beware the Cowardly Ones' than anything, but Norville wouldn't hurt a fly - most likely because he'd be scared of it instead. Yet when he finally takes a stand, he quickly cripples the monster that'd been haunting him and teams up with Frazie to deal the final crushing blow.
** Dogen. Both of his proposed "plans" to stop Oleander involve politely asking him to not be evil anymore. But after Frazie helps him with his issues, he’s more confident in the use of his powers, allowing him to chase off [[spoiler:Linda]] twice by almost making her head
** More 'Beware the Cowardly Ones' than anything, but Norville wouldn't hurt a fly - most likely because he'd be scared of it instead. Yet when he finally takes a stand, he quickly cripples the monster that'd been haunting him and teams up with Frazie to deal the final crushing blow.
* FaceYourFears: Or beat the crap out of them, rather, as Norville demonstrates.
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* IronicName: Jakob Winkle's last name is a reference to ''Literature/RipVanWinkle''. But while Rip Van Winkle slept for years and years, Jakob is an insomniac.
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* IronicName: IronicName:
** Jakob Winkle's last name is a reference to ''Literature/RipVanWinkle''. But while Rip Van Winkle slept for years and years, Jakob is aninsomniac.insomniac.
** Object Permanence is a person's ability to remain aware of something even after it leaves their line of sight. Its personified in the story as devastating brutes that immediately lose track of you if you leave their beam of light.
** Jakob Winkle's last name is a reference to ''Literature/RipVanWinkle''. But while Rip Van Winkle slept for years and years, Jakob is an
** Object Permanence is a person's ability to remain aware of something even after it leaves their line of sight. Its personified in the story as devastating brutes that immediately lose track of you if you leave their beam of light.
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* PowerIncontinence: The Memory Vault "Phoebe’s First Recital" shows Phoebe playing her drums so hard that she unknowingly sets the sticks on fire, leading to a chain reaction that accidentally sets her school's music hall on fire. This leads to Phoebe discovering her psychic powers for the first time.
* PrecociousCrush: Benny seems to develop one on Frazie after she praises him for his assistance in Dogen’s mind. She shuts down his advances for obvious reasons, but does admit that he’d be a pretty good kid if he didn’t hang out with Bobby.
* PrecociousCrush: Benny seems to develop one on Frazie after she praises him for his assistance in Dogen’s mind. She shuts down his advances for obvious reasons, but does admit that he’d be a pretty good kid if he didn’t hang out with Bobby.
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* PowerIncontinence: The Memory Vault "Phoebe’s First Recital" shows Phoebe playing her drums so hard that she unknowingly sets the sticks on fire, leading to a chain reaction that accidentally sets her school's music hall on fire. This leads to Phoebe discovering her psychic powers for the first time.
* PrecociousCrush: Benny seems to develop one on Frazie after she praises him for his assistance in Dogen’s mind. She shuts down his advances for obvious reasons, but does admit that he’d be a pretty good kid if he didn’t hang out with Bobby.
* PrecociousCrush: Benny seems to develop one on Frazie after she praises him for his assistance in Dogen’s mind. She shuts down his advances for obvious reasons, but does admit that he’d be a pretty good kid if he didn’t hang out with Bobby.
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* PrecociousCrush: Benny seems to develop one on Frazie after she praises him for his assistance in Dogen’s mind. She shuts down his advances for obvious reasons, but does admit that he’d be a pretty good kid if he didn’t hang out with Bobby.
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** On Frazie's way into the graveyard in Norville's mind, a little cardboard cut-out springs up with a cute green slime creature as a shout-out to ''VideoGame/SpookysJumpScareMansion''. It also doubles as foreshadowing; she's unimpressed and pushes it aside... though unseen to her, when it swings back into place, it’s transformed into something ghastly. Just like how it lulls players into a false sense of security in its origin game, here, it also hints that things are going to get a lot more horrifying than they first appear.
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* BigShutUp: Delivered by Frazie to the [[MotorMouth Drag-on]].
** Norville [[spoiler: comes to realize his own strength and learns that bravery isn't fearlessness, it's being scared and carrying on regardless. With that in mind, he finally stands up to the horrific visions that plague his thoughts. He's still pretty cowardly, and has a long way to go, but what matters is he actually tries to face his phobias and step out of his comfort zone rather than shut down entirely.]]
* CurbStompBattle: When Linda finally appears in person and attacks, she targets Dogen... without [[PowerLimiter his tinfoil hat]]. He easily brings her to her knees and even shorts out her brain implant with Lili and Frazie’s added power. Also applies to Dingo Inflagrante and Jasper, whom he [[StoryBreakerPower completely crushes in seconds so the group can skip their battles entirely]].
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* {{Foreshadowing}}: Jakob initially mistakes Frazie for someone named Dita, who apparently tried to sing him lullabies sometimes. No one resembling this appears in either his mind or his memories, so it can be presumed this person is another asylum inmate that still remains to be seen.
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* {{Foreshadowing}}: {{Foreshadowing}}:
** Subtle, but in chapter 27, the monitors in Ford's Sanctuary that show important news broadcasts display a picture of a man in a bathrobe. This seems to be setting up Truman Zanatto and the events of ''VideoGame/Psychonauts2''.
** Jakob initially mistakes Frazie for someone named Dita, who apparently tried to sing him lullabies sometimes. No one resembling this appears in either his mind or his memories, so it can be presumed this person is another asylum inmate that still remains to be seen.
** Subtle, but in chapter 27, the monitors in Ford's Sanctuary that show important news broadcasts display a picture of a man in a bathrobe. This seems to be setting up Truman Zanatto and the events of ''VideoGame/Psychonauts2''.
** Jakob initially mistakes Frazie for someone named Dita, who apparently tried to sing him lullabies sometimes. No one resembling this appears in either his mind or his memories, so it can be presumed this person is another asylum inmate that still remains to be seen.
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* HalloweenEpisode: Chapter 36, released on October 22, features the beginning of "Norville's Nightmare", which delves into the mind of a man who's afraid of ''everything.'' The mental world opens on a {{Halloweentown}} style plaza full of friendly and well-mannered Halloween monsters, and the narration remarks on how kid-friendly and cutesy the "scary" decorations are (and how disproportionate Norville's fear response is).
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* HalloweenEpisode: Chapter 36, released on October 22, features the beginning of "Norville's Nightmare", which delves into the mind of a man who's afraid of ''everything.'' The mental world opens on a {{Halloweentown}} style plaza full of friendly and well-mannered Halloween monsters, and the narration remarks on how kid-friendly and cutesy the "scary" decorations are (and how disproportionate Norville's fear response is). [[NightmareFuel It's soon revealed his fears aren't entirely unjustified after she delves deeper into his mind and things get genuinely horrifying]].
* KillerTeddyBear: Norville Burton has a particularly nasty one lurking in his mind that hunts Frazie relentlessly and [[NoSell shrugs off]] all her attacks.
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* MetaphoricallyTrue: Jakob's doctor told him there was one last thing they could try when all his sleep medications stopped working and the man got desperate and aggressive. [[spoiler: That thing was getting him sent to Thorney Towers.]]
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* MetaphoricallyTrue: Jakob's doctor told him there was one last thing they could try when all his sleep medications stopped working and the man got desperate and aggressive. [[spoiler: That thing was getting having him sent to Thorney Towers.]]
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* NighInvulnerability: The representation of Mikhail in Maloof's mind is a bulky brute that completely brushes off all attacks. It takes a severe electrocution to stop him, and even then it only briefly knocks him out. It's explained that since everyone at camp (and Maloof by extension) sees Mikhail as untouchable, he actually is [[MadeofIron almost unstoppable]] in his mind.
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** The representation of Mikhail in Maloof's mind is a bulky brute that completely brushes off all attacks. It takes a severe electrocution to stop him, and even then it only briefly knocks him out. It's explained that since everyone at camp (and Maloof by extension) sees Mikhail as untouchable, he actually is [[MadeofIron almost unstoppable]] in hismind.mind.
** While she's never actually attacked one, it's implied Object Permanences are invincible as well. They're listed among one of the few entities powerful enough to hurt Frazie through her shield power.
** The monster bear in Norville's mind [[UpToEleven kicks this trope into overdrive]] by straight-up ignoring Frazie's ''entire arsenal'', even after getting set aflame. The only thing that finally stops it is getting completely obliterated by a bunch of Nightmare bombs.
** The representation of Mikhail in Maloof's mind is a bulky brute that completely brushes off all attacks. It takes a severe electrocution to stop him, and even then it only briefly knocks him out. It's explained that since everyone at camp (and Maloof by extension) sees Mikhail as untouchable, he actually is [[MadeofIron almost unstoppable]] in his
** While she's never actually attacked one, it's implied Object Permanences are invincible as well. They're listed among one of the few entities powerful enough to hurt Frazie through her shield power.
** The monster bear in Norville's mind [[UpToEleven kicks this trope into overdrive]] by straight-up ignoring Frazie's ''entire arsenal'', even after getting set aflame. The only thing that finally stops it is getting completely obliterated by a bunch of Nightmare bombs.
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* PaintingTheMedium: When Frazie accidentally gets hit with one of her own Confusion Grenades in chapter 24, the story's formatting goes all wonky, part of a sentence being printed vertically, then backwards.
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* PaintingTheMedium: PaintingTheMedium:
** When Frazie accidentally gets hit with one of her own Confusion Grenades in chapter 24, the story's formatting goes all wonky, part of a sentence being printed vertically, thenbackwards.backwards.
** When the [[EldritchAbomination Phobiamalgamation]] speaks, its words come out in [[BlackSpeech garbled Zalgo text]].
** When Frazie accidentally gets hit with one of her own Confusion Grenades in chapter 24, the story's formatting goes all wonky, part of a sentence being printed vertically, then
** When the [[EldritchAbomination Phobiamalgamation]] speaks, its words come out in [[BlackSpeech garbled Zalgo text]].
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-->'''Jasper:''' You... you can't just skip the boss fight, you heathens! It's the grand culmination of the conflict! The final dramatic confrontation! ''You hacks can't even stick to the script!''
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-->'''Jasper:''' You... [[BreakingTheFourthWall you can't just skip the boss fight, fight]], you heathens! It's the grand culmination of the conflict! The final dramatic confrontation! ''You hacks can't even stick to the script!''
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* SuperDrowningSkills: Frazie, naturally, just like the rest of her family. She seems to handle the water worse than her brother, though. [[spoiler: It’s even weaponized against her in the fight against Freezie - when her clone realizes Frazie’s afraid of the hole in the icy lake, she tries to force her into it.]]
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* SuperDrowningSkills: SuperDrowningSkills:
** Frazie, naturally, just like the rest of her family. She seems to handle the water worse than her brother, though. [[spoiler: It’s even weaponized against her in the fight against Freezie - when her clone realizes Frazie’s afraid of the hole in the icy lake, she tries to force her into it.]]]]
** Also weaponized against her while fighting the Phobiamalgamation, because Hydrophobia is a thing and its entire moveset revolves around fears.
** Frazie, naturally, just like the rest of her family. She seems to handle the water worse than her brother, though. [[spoiler: It’s even weaponized against her in the fight against Freezie - when her clone realizes Frazie’s afraid of the hole in the icy lake, she tries to force her into it.
** Also weaponized against her while fighting the Phobiamalgamation, because Hydrophobia is a thing and its entire moveset revolves around fears.
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** The BlackSpeech of the [[EldritchAbomination Phobiamalgamation]] tormenting Norville's mind is taken almost word for word from Yogg-Saron in the {{VideoGame/WorldofWarcraft}}.
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** The BlackSpeech of the [[EldritchAbomination Phobiamalgamation]] tormenting Norville's mind is taken almost word for word from Yogg-Saron in the {{VideoGame/WorldofWarcraft}}.[[VideoGame/WorldofWarcraft World of Warcraft]].
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** The [[EldritchAbomination Phobiamalgamation]] that is tormenting Norville's BlackSpeech is taken almost word for word from Yogg-Saron in the VideoGame/WorldofWarcraft.
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** The BlackSpeech of the [[EldritchAbomination Phobiamalgamation]] that is tormenting Norville's BlackSpeech mind is taken almost word for word from Yogg-Saron in the VideoGame/WorldofWarcraft.{{VideoGame/WorldofWarcraft}}.
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** The [[EldritchAbomination Phobiamalgamation]] that is tormenting Norville's BlackSpeech is taken almost word for word from Yogg-Saron in the VideoGame/WorldofWarcraft.
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** The cowardly Norville's name is a reference to Norville "Shaggy" Rogers from ''Franchise/ScoobyDoo''.
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** The cowardly Norville's Norville Burton's name is a reference to Norville "Shaggy" Rogers from ''Franchise/ScoobyDoo''.''Franchise/ScoobyDoo'' and Creator/TimBurton, creator of such macabre films as ''Film/{{Beetlejuice}}'' and ''Film/EdwardScissorhands''.
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** Pepper's Production is a giant version of a rustic toymaker's shop that represents Pepper's passion for making puppets and dolls, transformed into a constantly running production line as a marker of Pepper trying to use her work and her puppet Sally to distract herself from [[spoiler:her grief over her daughter's death]]. The living toys in Pepper's mind are mental versions of the dolls she's made over the course of her life, and their positions as factory workers with no rights are an analogue for her neglecting those toys in favor of Salty Sally.
** Winkle's Dreamy Domain is a version of Jakob Winkle's mind twisted by his insomnia; because of his chronic inability to sleep, his mental world has been blurring the line between dreams and reality, and his thoughts are constantly on trying to get a good night's rest, so his mental landscape has become focused on representations of sleep, dreams and comfort, with pillowy soft clouds, moon-shaped lamps, bounding sheep for the mind's owner to count, and a giant quilt-covered bed that the mental version of Jakob is trying to catch his forty winks in. As Frazie investigates, she discovers that mental Jakob can't sleep because of a massive cluster of storm clouds that represent [[spoiler:Jakob's guilt-induced nightmares and traumatic memories]], which light up with deafening thunder and lightning to disturb him from sleeping. We also get a glimpse into what dreams look like in a segment where Frazie travels through several dreams Jakob hasn't had a chance to experience.
** Winkle's Dreamy Domain is a version of Jakob Winkle's mind twisted by his insomnia; because of his chronic inability to sleep, his mental world has been blurring the line between dreams and reality, and his thoughts are constantly on trying to get a good night's rest, so his mental landscape has become focused on representations of sleep, dreams and comfort, with pillowy soft clouds, moon-shaped lamps, bounding sheep for the mind's owner to count, and a giant quilt-covered bed that the mental version of Jakob is trying to catch his forty winks in. As Frazie investigates, she discovers that mental Jakob can't sleep because of a massive cluster of storm clouds that represent [[spoiler:Jakob's guilt-induced nightmares and traumatic memories]], which light up with deafening thunder and lightning to disturb him from sleeping. We also get a glimpse into what dreams look like in a segment where Frazie travels through several dreams Jakob hasn't had a chance to experience.
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** The Night-Mare in Jakob Winkle's mind is [[spoiler:an upgraded version of the Nightmares from the Psychonauts games; this one both represents Jakob's constant nightmares and his guilt over the Highway Stallion cars he used to sell, which had defects that injured and endangered the people who bought them. Unlike the destruction of Sally for Pepper, Frazie simply ''can't'' destroy the Night-Mare, and to cure Jakob's insomnia, has to tame it and bring it back to Jakob's mental self to let him reconcile with his guilt.]]
** Jakob [[spoiler:conquers his trauma-induced insomnia with a talking-to from Frazie, and recognizes that the car dealership that had him sell defective cars was the real culprit in the chain of injuries and accidents that traumatized him. With his guilt assuaged, his insomnia disappears and he's able to get a good night's rest.]]
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** Phoebe's mind -- "[[LethalLavaLand Phoebe's Fire Mix Tape]]" -- starts out as a volcanic world surrounding a lively dance-club. After Frazie accidentally sets the whole place on fire and gets kicked out, Frazie returns to find everything frozen over, having been turned into a "[[SlippySlideyIceWorld Phoebe's Frosty Funk]]".
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** Phoebe's mind -- "[[LethalLavaLand Phoebe's Fire Mix Tape]]" -- starts out as a volcanic world surrounding a lively dance-club. After Frazie accidentally sets the whole place on fire and gets kicked out, Frazie returns to find everything frozen over, having been turned into a "[[SlippySlideyIceWorld Phoebe's Frosty Funk]]".
* HalloweenEpisode: Chapter 36, released on October 22, features the beginning of "Norville's Nightmare", which delves into the mind of a man who's afraid of ''everything.'' The mental world opens on a {{Halloweentown}} style plaza full of friendly and well-mannered Halloween monsters, and the narration remarks on how kid-friendly and cutesy the "scary" decorations are (and how disproportionate Norville's fear response is).
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* ManiacMonkeys: In Clem's mind Frazie encounters Intrusive Thoughts, aggressive monkey-like mental creatures with sharp claws, barbed tails, and jack-o'-lantern-like faces that spew hateful insults. Their leader is a KillerGorilla-like monster representing [[AbusiveParents Clem's abusive dad]].
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* ManiacMonkeys: In Clem's mind Frazie encounters Intrusive Thoughts, aggressive monkey-like mental creatures with sharp claws, barbed tails, and jack-o'-lantern-like faces that spew hateful insults. Their leader is a KillerGorilla-like monster representing [[AbusiveParents Clem's abusive dad]]. The Intrusive Thoughts reappear later, in the mind of Norville Burton, where their words are primed to fray Norville's nerves even further.
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* NervousWreck: Norville Burton, the third patient Frazie meets on the upper level of Thorney Towers, is afraid of everything despite his massive size, and he seems to even frighten himself just by mentioning some of the things he's scared of.
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** The cowardly Norville's name is a reference to Norville "Shaggy" Rogers from ''Franchise/ScoobyDoo''.
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* DancingPants: The mental figures in Maloof's Mafia Metropolis are mob goons represented by disembodied suits of clothing.
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** Pepper [[spoiler: finally accepts her daughter's passing instead of pretending it never happened, and thanks to Frazie's consoling, focuses on the good times they had together instead of the tragic loss. While she's still troubled, she at least gives up her [[ReplacementGoldfish puppet]] and promises to never try and replace Sally again.]]
* ChekhovsGunman: Near the story's start, Frazie helps Dogen overcome his fears and get a better hold on his immense psychic abilities. Not only does this power boost help keep him from getting kidnapped by Linda later, it also enables him to help Frazie and Lili scare the mutant lungfish off back to Thorney Towers [[spoiler: and eventually overload her mind control implant entirely.]]
* ConfusionFu: Literally. When Frazie goes up against a boss that can predict her every move, she uses Confusion on herself so it (and herself) have no way of knowing what she’ll do. This does leave her in a daze... but she only needs to hold out until she can start confusing the boss himself.
* CoolAndUnusualPunishment: Frazie promises to braid the Night-Mare’s mane if it tries to torment Jakob again. Given its mane is made out of [[BodyHorror assorted arms and limbs]], it’s a surprisingly painful and effective threat.
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* SelfFulfillingProphecy: [[spoiler:Elka has a vision of Linda coming to the cabin to catch them, so she runs away to avoid getting captured... and gets captured when she steps out of the cabin.]]
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* SelfFulfillingProphecy: [[spoiler:Elka has a vision of Linda coming to the cabin to catch them, so she runs away to avoid getting captured... and gets captured nabbed when she steps out of the cabin.]]
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* Foreshadowing: Jakob initially mistakes Frazie for someone named Dita, who apparently tried to sing him lullabies sometimes. No one resembling this appears in either his mind or his memories, so it can be presumed this person is another asylum inmate that still remains to be seen.
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* Foreshadowing: Jakob initially mistakes Frazie for someone named Dita, who apparently tried to sing him lullabies sometimes. No one resembling this appears in either his mind or his memories, so it can be presumed this person is another asylum inmate that still remains to be seen.
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* DoubleMeaning: Phoebe's second mindscape — "Phoebe's Frosty Funk" — could be referencing Funk music to fit with the girl's musical theme, but it could also stand for the [[PowerLossDepression funk]] she's in after [[NiceJobBreakingItHero Frazie accidentally robs her of her rhythm.]]
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* MeaningfulBackgroundEvent: Crystal and Clem are offhandedly mentioned in certain parts of the story to be standing by the loudspeakers and on top of the roof, the two places in the game where they tried to attempt suicide. When they tell Frazie they've already attempted suicide twice, Frazie remembers seeing them on the roof and on top of the loudspeakers.
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* MeaningfulBackgroundEvent: Crystal and Clem are offhandedly mentioned in certain parts of the story to be standing by the loudspeakers and on top of the roof, the two places in the game where they tried to attempt suicide. When they tell Frazie they've already attempted suicide twice, Frazie remembers seeing them on at the roof and on top of the loudspeakers.aforementioned locations.
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* PastExperienceNightmare: [[spoiler:Once Jakob discovers he's indirectly responsible for a lot of deaths/injuries that came from [[TheAllegedCar selling people faulty automobiles]], the guilt haunts him for years in the form of the Night-Mare.]]
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* PastExperienceNightmare: [[spoiler:Once Jakob discovers he's indirectly responsible for a lot of deaths/injuries deaths and injuries that came from [[TheAllegedCar selling people faulty automobiles]], the guilt haunts him for years in the form of the Night-Mare.]]
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Hit enter early AGAIN... basically his boss is definitely a hate sink, but seemed more pleased with the money he made than actually enjoying their suffering. Additionally, hundreds seems like a bit of a stretch, but dozens is possible. Left a vague description for them in case. Lastly, he's been in Thorney Towers for decades if he's like the other patients, so more than just several years
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** Jakob Winkle's cruel and greedy boss who [[spoiler:deliberately sold people faulty cars, taking ''glee'' at the fact that the people who owned them got into car accidents, not caring about them because he managed to squeeze profit from their suffering.]] He eventually got arrested, but not for that cruel act-- [[JusticeByOtherLegalMeans he got arrested for tax evasion.]]
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** Jakob Winkle's cruel and greedy boss who [[spoiler:deliberately sold people faulty cars, taking ''glee'' at the fact that the people who owned them got into car accidents, not caring about them the accidents this lead to because he managed to squeeze profit from their suffering.]] He eventually got arrested, but not for that cruel act-- [[JusticeByOtherLegalMeans he got arrested for tax evasion.]]
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* MyGreatestFailure: [[spoiler:Jakob Winkle is haunted by the memories of selling people faulty cars that caused hundreds of deaths and injuries.]]
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* MyGreatestFailure: [[spoiler:Jakob Winkle is haunted by the memories of selling people faulty cars that caused hundreds a number of deaths and injuries.]]
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* PastExperienceNightmare: [[spoiler:Once Jakob discovers he's indirectly responsible for hundreds a lot of deaths/injuries that came from [[TheAllegedCar selling people faulty automobiles]], the guilt haunts him for several years in the form of the Night-Mare.]]
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I'd say, at the least, this one fits the criteria if the others don't
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*SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome: When Pepper finally takes Sally off her hand in Chapter 31, she isn't able to move it. It turns out keeping your hand locked in a certain position inside a hunk of wood for a few years isn't exactly healthy for its bone structure.
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This or these examples of Surprisingly Realistic Outcome seem to violate at least one of these rules, which disqualifies them: No character reactions (characters get angry, don't forgive, don't change their personality instantly, etc.); Too fantastical (depends on the properties of magic, powers, sci-fi tech, monsters, etc.); Not surprising (a character was warned about the outcome, it's used to provide Karma or An Aesop, or it simply follows normal conventions for this genre or medium); Plot happens (the example only describes an event, but not why audiences would expect a different, unrealistic outcome); Not an outcome (a character just explains why something wouldn't work as expected); More of a Deconstruction (the event has major, lasting effects on the plot, make something more realistic, but not completely realistic, or a parody/fanwork applies realistic consequences to the events of a different work); or fits better under a different trope. See the trope's definition for more details. If you believe a removal was a mistake, please bring it up in the cleanup thread
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* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome:
** There are laws that limit certain ways that psychic technology can be used. The Young Minds Protection Act in particular was designed to keep anyone from using Psycho-Portals on children, current Psycho-Portals built in with a safeguard so that they can't be used on anyone under 18. Frazie ends up "borrowing" a modified one to get into the minds of her fellow campers.
** While Clem and Crystal's suicide attempts are [[SuicideAsComedy played for dark laughs as usual]], Frazie actually notices what they're up to and [[InterruptedSuicide stages an ad-hoc intervention for them]] (in the form of jumping into Clem's mind and taking Crystal along with her).
** When Pepper finally takes Sally off her hand in Chapter 31, she isn't able to move it. It turns out keeping your hand locked in a certain position inside a hunk of wood for a few years isn't exactly healthy for its bone structure.
** There are laws that limit certain ways that psychic technology can be used. The Young Minds Protection Act in particular was designed to keep anyone from using Psycho-Portals on children, current Psycho-Portals built in with a safeguard so that they can't be used on anyone under 18. Frazie ends up "borrowing" a modified one to get into the minds of her fellow campers.
** While Clem and Crystal's suicide attempts are [[SuicideAsComedy played for dark laughs as usual]], Frazie actually notices what they're up to and [[InterruptedSuicide stages an ad-hoc intervention for them]] (in the form of jumping into Clem's mind and taking Crystal along with her).
** When Pepper finally takes Sally off her hand in Chapter 31, she isn't able to move it. It turns out keeping your hand locked in a certain position inside a hunk of wood for a few years isn't exactly healthy for its bone structure.
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** Jakob Winkle's cruel and greedy boss who [[spoiler:deliberately sold people faulty cars, taking ''glee'' at the fact that the people who owned them got into car accidents, not caring about them because he managed to squeeze profit from their suffering.]] He eventually got arrested, but not for that cruel act-- he got arrested for tax evasion.
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** Jakob Winkle's cruel and greedy boss who [[spoiler:deliberately sold people faulty cars, taking ''glee'' at the fact that the people who owned them got into car accidents, not caring about them because he managed to squeeze profit from their suffering.]] He eventually got arrested, but not for that cruel act-- [[JusticeByOtherLegalMeans he got arrested for tax evasion.]]
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* HateSink:
** Clem's abusive father, who has virtually no positive characteristics and is the definite reason behind why the poor kid's so messed up.
** Jakob Winkle's cruel and greedy boss who [[spoiler:deliberately sold people faulty cars, taking ''glee'' at the fact that the people who owned them got into car accidents, not caring about them because he managed to squeeze profit from their suffering.]] He eventually got arrested, but not for that cruel act-- he got arrested for tax evasion.
** Clem's abusive father, who has virtually no positive characteristics and is the definite reason behind why the poor kid's so messed up.
** Jakob Winkle's cruel and greedy boss who [[spoiler:deliberately sold people faulty cars, taking ''glee'' at the fact that the people who owned them got into car accidents, not caring about them because he managed to squeeze profit from their suffering.]] He eventually got arrested, but not for that cruel act-- he got arrested for tax evasion.
