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* BigBrotherInstinct: Harry, taken up to [[{{Twilight}} Edwardian]] levels of frightening in his reactions.
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* BigBrotherInstinct: Harry, taken up to [[{{Twilight}} [[Literature/{{Twilight}} Edwardian]] levels of frightening in his reactions.
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** Also, Ariana is supposedly the top in all her classes (she cites it as a reason for maria to hate her), but we ''rarely'' see her doing any sort of schoolwork and have no indication of her being smart.
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** Also, Ariana is supposedly the top in all her classes (she cites it as a reason for maria Maria to hate her), but we ''rarely'' see her doing any sort of schoolwork and have no indication of her being smart.
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** Also, Ariana is supposedly the top in all her classes (she cites it as a reason for maria to hate her), but we ''rarely'' see her doing any sort of schoolwork and have no indication of her being smart.
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* TheyJustDidntCare: At one point in the second story, Ariana outright admits she thinks she's better at everything than Maria, and that's the cause of Maria's jealousy. And yet the Author tries to claim she's not a MarrySue...
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* TheyJustDidntCare: At one point in the second story, Ariana outright admits she thinks she's better at everything than Maria, and that's the cause of Maria's jealousy. And yet the Author tries to claim she's not a MarrySue...MarySue...
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* TooDumbToLive: Ariana receives a fake letter from Sirius, telling her to meet him in Hogsmeade near an alley, alone--she ''believes it and does so.'' And then when Sirius himself never shows, Ariana wonders what's taking so long, right before getting kidnapped.
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* TooDumbToLive: Ariana receives a fake (fake) letter from Sirius, telling her to meet him in Hogsmeade near an alley, alone--she ''believes it and does so.'' And then when Sirius himself never shows, Ariana wonders what's taking so long, right before getting kidnapped.
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* WantonCrueltyToTheCommonComma: HilarityEnsues if you take everything written at face value, as the above sporkers regularly point out.out.
* WriteWhoYouKnow: One of Ariana's friends, Reginald, is supposedly based on a friend of the author's who, she claims has a crush on her. Reginald also forces himself onto Ariana several times despite her saying she doesn't want to, which [[UnfortunateImplications speaks very, very badly for the real-life person...]]
* WriteWhoYouKnow: One of Ariana's friends, Reginald, is supposedly based on a friend of the author's who, she claims has a crush on her. Reginald also forces himself onto Ariana several times despite her saying she doesn't want to, which [[UnfortunateImplications speaks very, very badly for the real-life person...]]
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** Draco attempts to ''rape'' Ariana ''twice'' early on. Dumbledore only threatens to expel him.
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** Draco attempts to ''rape'' Ariana ''twice'' early on. Dumbledore only threatens to expel him. Yes, you read that right--Draco only gets the ''threat'' of expulsion for ''attempting to rape an eleven-year-old.''
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* BigBrotherInstict: Harry, taken up to [[{{Twilight}} Edwardian]] levels of frightening in his reactions.
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* DemonicPosession: A rather short-lived example.
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* DemonicPosession: DemonicPossession: A rather short-lived example.
* DrivenToSuicide: ''Multiple times.''
* ItsAllAboutMe: The universe revolves around Ariana.
* JerkWithAHeartOfGold: Filch, evidently.
** Draco attempts to ''rape'' Ariana ''twice'' early on. Dumbledore only threatens to expel him.
* TheyJustDidntCare: At one point in the second story, Ariana outright admits she thinks she's better at everything than Maria, and that's the cause of Maria's jealousy. And yet the Author tries to claim she's not a MarrySue...
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* TooDumbToLive: Ariana receives a fake letter from Sirius, telling her to meet him in Hogsmeade near an alley, alone--she she ''believes it and does so.'' And then when Sirius himself never shows, Ariana wonders what's taking so long, right before getting kidnapped.
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* DemonicPosession: A rather short-lived example.
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* RougeAnglesOfSatin: The cause of a "[[TheSlug Slug Malfoy]]" in part 1, "[[TookALevelInJerkass Hell Malfoy]]" in part 2, and Dumbledore evidently not being Headmaster yet. And that's just the start.
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* {{Wangst}}: ''Dear lord'', '''''yes''''''!
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* {{Wangst}}: ''Dear lord'', '''''yes''''''!'''''yes'''''!
* WantonCrueltyToTheCommonComma: HilarityEnsues if you take everything written at face value, as the above sporkers regularly point out.
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* {{Wangst}}: ''Dear lord'', '''''yes''''''!
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* BodyHorror: At one point, Neville's nose [[{{Squick}} evidently ends up smeared across his face.]]
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* CrowningMomentOfFunny: As the above-mentioned sporker points out, a bit of bad wording in an early fight scene indicates that [[FaceHeelTurn Neville attacked]] ''[[FaceHeelTurn Ron]]'' [[FaceHeelTurn rather than Crabbe and Goyle, for some reason.]]
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* RonTheDeathEater: Ron himself is a bit dumber, but mostly spared. No, Draco gets hit with this worst, being turned from a relatively ineffectual jerk who eventually realized he wasn't cut out for the big leagues, to a pedophilic near-rapist.
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* RonTheDeathEater: Ron himself is a bit dumber, but mostly spared. No, Draco gets hit with this worst, being turned from a relatively ineffectual jerk who eventually realized he wasn't cut out for the big leagues, to a pedophilic near-rapist.
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* RonTheDeathEater: Ron himself is a bit dumber, but mostly spared. No, Draco gets hit with this worst, being turned from a relatively ineffectual jerk who eventually realized he wasn't cut out for the big leagues, to a pedophilic near-rapist.
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* MoralDissonance: Whatever Ariana does is good, right, and heroic. If Maria does the same thing, she's ''baaaad!'' (See also Maria thinking it gross that Ariana is dating her professor--due to the age gap, she's underage for quite a while--but when she calls Ariana out it, she gets yelled at.)
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* MoralDissonance: Whatever Ariana does is good, right, and heroic. If Anything and everything Maria does the same thing, she's ''baaaad!'' (See also Maria thinking it gross that Ariana is dating ''bad'' and sign of her professor--due to the age gap, she's underage for quite a while--but when bitchiness...yes, even leaving class as she calls Ariana out it, she gets yelled at.)was told to, instead of standing around and worrying over Ariana.
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* ShoutOut: To Disney's Film/TheLittleMermaid, as Ron and Hermione dance to "Part of Your World" at their wedding.
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* ShoutOut: To Disney's Film/TheLittleMermaid, TheLittleMermaid, as Ron and Hermione dance to "Part of Your World" at their wedding.
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** FixerSue: Sirius Black is proven innocent, with her help.
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** FixerSue: Sirius Black is proven innocent, innocent with her help.help, and she convinces both Ron and Harry to tell Hermione and Ginny, respectively, that they love them. ''Later'' she flat-out tells Harry to propose to Ginny, and he does.
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* BackFromTheDead: [[spoiler:Ariana]]
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* DisneyDeath: [[spoiler:Ariana]].Ariana drowns and is ''dead'' for at least five or seven minutes. No spells attempted work in reviving her, but CPR ''does.'' The sporkers have pointed out in their MST that this is just not possible.
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* FreudianExcuse: The seventh story gave Maria one--apparently she hates Ariana because Ariana has an adopted family who loves her, while Maria's rich parents don't give her the time of day.
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* LoopholeAbuse: In one of the stories, Voldemort curses Ariana so she no longer has her Empath powers, saying that "the curse will be on you til the day you die." [[DisneyDeath Guess what.]]
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* DisneyDeath: [[spoiler:Ariana]] has a huge WallBanger of one.[[spoiler:Ariana]].
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* TitleDrop: Many chapter titles come from lines of dialogue in said chapter...[[WallBanger and 99 percent of the time, the chapter title doesn't actually fit the chapter's content.]]
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* TitleDrop: Many chapter titles come from lines of dialogue in said chapter...[[WallBanger and 99 percent of the time, the chapter title doesn't actually fit the chapter's content.]]
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* WallBanger
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** PuritySue: Wise beyond her years, stunningly beautiful at age twelve, has super-rare powers, everyone she meets either loves her (the good guys/people the author likes) or wants to rape her (villains/people the author doesn't like).
** RelationshipSue: For Neville.
** RelationshipSue: For Neville.
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* {{Lolicon}}: Both Neville and Draco were attracted to Ariana when she was ''eleven!'' They were fifteen.
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* {{Lolicon}}: Both Not only were Neville and Draco attracted to eleven-year-old Ariana when they were fifteen, but seventeen-year-old Dudley is attracted to Ariana when she was ''eleven!'' They the next year, and Neville's Uncle Algie comments that he would steal Ariana from Neville if only he were fifteen.younger--at the time, Ariana is ''twelve.'' '''[[{{Squick}} Ew!]]'''
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* MST: The only format the fic exists in anymore.
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* MST: {{MST}}: The only format the fic exists in anymore.
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* FixerSue: Sirius Black is proven innocent, with her help.
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* CharacterDerailment
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* CharacterDerailmentCharacterDerailment: Where to start? Harry, Ron, and Hermione all act like children instead of the adults they're supposed to be by the end of the fic, Sirius and Remus are man-children who still get into prank wars, Snape is a walking ball of {{Wangst}} who considers a fricking ''teenaged girl'' to be his closest friend, Neville is a [[TastesLikeDiabetes "romantic"]] prince, and Voldemort...well, see VillainDecay below.
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* {{Narm}}: Quite a bit.
* {{Narm}}: Quite a bit.
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* VillainDecay: Voldemort has gone from actually being a terrible threat in canon to the equivalent of an over-the-top moustache-twirler in this fic.
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* VillainDecay: Voldemort has gone from actually being a terrible threat in canon to the equivalent of an over-the-top moustache-twirler mustache-twirler in this fic.
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* DetracterNickname: Started by the sporkers and now adopted by the readers of said spork, Ariana is frequently referred to as "Airhead."
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* DetracterNickname: DetractorNickname: Started by the sporkers and now adopted by the readers of said spork, Ariana is frequently referred to as "Airhead."
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* DetracterNickname: Started by the sporkers and now adopted by the readers of said spork, Ariana is frequently referred to as "Airhead."
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* FanNickname: Started by the sporkers and now adopted by the readers of said spork, Ariana is frequently referred to as "Airhead."
* JerkAssHasAPoint: Some of the things Maria says actually make a lot more sense than what Ariana does--for instance, that it's wrong for Ariana to date her professor.
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* StrawmanHasAPoint: Some of the things Maria says actually make a lot more sense than what Ariana does--for instance, that it's wrong for Ariana to date her professor.
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** SympatheticSue: God, whine, whine, whine...
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* VillainDecay: Voldemort has gone from actually being a terrible threat in canon to the equivalent of an over-the-top moustache-twirler in this fic.
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* VillainDecay: Voldemort has gone from actually being a terrible threat in canon to the equivalent of an over-the-top moustache-twirler in this fic.fic.
* WallBanger
* WallBanger
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** JerkSue: Has shades of this, especially concerning her rival, Maria. Ariana claims Maria hates her guts, she's a bitch, etc., and yes, Maria does hate her, but [[FridgeLogic most of their conflicts are either started or made worse by Ariana herself.]] (Also, Maria's abuse is mostly verbal, whereas Ariana constantly threatens to attack Maria with her powers. Which she ''knows'' could kill someone.]]
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** JerkSue: Has shades of this, especially concerning her rival, Maria. Ariana claims Maria hates her guts, she's a bitch, etc., and yes, Maria does hate her, but [[FridgeLogic most of their conflicts are either started or made worse by Ariana herself.]] (Also, Maria's abuse is mostly verbal, whereas Ariana constantly threatens to attack Maria with her powers. Which she ''knows'' could kill someone.]])
